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  1. On Into the looking glass:

    posted 6 days ago

    Interesting. I actually was going to move my original story towards the mirror, so great job Muse. Then again, I don’t think I ever imagined my protagonist having bunny slippers!

  2. On The Reality engineer, with a heart:

    posted 18 days ago

    A pretty cool idea. Almost Matrix-esque, but without the robot element. I would say it needs to be developed further, but then again I’m well aware of how challenging it is to squish a detailed/constructed story into 1024 characters.

  3. On Boogeyman:

    posted 18 days ago

    Cool story! The first paragraph made me think it would go in an entirely different direction.

  4. On To Dream in the Cabaret of the Undead:

    posted 26 days ago

    THX – descriptive and well structured. I think a lot of people can identify having recurring dreams, and this feels like it could be an actual one, whether fictional or not. Too bad we don’t get to find out what’s behind the curtain.

  5. On Package for Mr. Intaglio:

    posted 26 days ago

    In retrospect, this is probably the worst Ficlet I have written. I’d delete it if I could. In it’s original size, this was 2.5 times too big for Ficlets, but I kept chopping and chopping until the form above appeared. Seriously unhappy with it.

  6. On Bodies:

    posted 3 months ago

    @RainDance – I promise I’ll write another chapter to this, I think it’s a really interesting game (I actually spent some time drawing it out / thinking about the rules, etc…). So, expect some answers once I’m able to find some free time : )

  7. On Ask the Wonderball:

    posted 3 months ago

    Very cool Eckhouse, loved that last line, especially in terms of a question not being directed at the ball itself.

  8. On Alex in Wonderland - Part 2:

    posted 4 months ago

    I like the idea (being a child of the 80s myself … aaand my name’s Alex), but it seems like the story loses a bit of focus at the end. That last sentence, the “and men’s restroom” part, doesn’t quite work.

    Other than that, can’t wait to find out how Alex got transported back!

  9. On Drex Underground:

    posted 5 months ago

    Interesting story. Perhaps the start of a series? I’d be interested to see why Drex is locked up and what sort of society is doing the locking.

  10. On Substandard Seating:

    posted 5 months ago

    Good story, but try and add some variety as to how you initiate paragraphs. In order: Daniel/Even/He/He/He/He/His/Hey. That big block in the middle could use a quick blending, but overall, much better than average : )

  11. On 'Til Kingdom Come:

    posted 6 months ago

    This character seems like a mix between a hells angel and Dexter. Very cool!

  12. On Doomed Montague:

    posted 6 months ago

    @OrangeOreos – you got it, a straight-shooting Romeo/Juliet reference. Remember, this zombie is intelligent (and somewhat of a romantic)!

  13. On Victims of Innocence:

    posted 6 months ago

    Hah. awesome, and it would work everytime. This almost starts me thinking, should we have a ‘Best Weapon’ story competition?

  14. On Intelligently Undead:

    posted 6 months ago

    Wow. Came back to the computer and refreshed Ficlets, now I’m featured : ) Thanks so much for the comments everyone and I’m very glad you enjoyed the story.

  15. On The Time Capsule (2):

    posted 6 months ago

    Great 2 part series (so far)! Love the mix-up at the end, very rewarding and an interesting jumping off point for further sequels.

    Maybe the future doesn’t have such great technology after all?

  16. On The One Word That Won't Make You Dead:

    posted 6 months ago

    Agreed on the second person narrative, very unique among Ficlets. If only there was more room to set the scene after the torture philosophy : )

  17. On Cape of Perception:

    posted 6 months ago

    Very cool, the title is what makes the story.

  18. On Passage for One:

    posted 6 months ago

    Very cool. Will we ever find out why Florida is sinking into the ocean?!

  19. On Benji the drunkin Bastard:

    posted 6 months ago

    This story does not make me want to “get krunk.”

  20. On Soka. Tapin. Yu. L'tal. Gural.:

    posted 6 months ago

    And now it shows up, of course….

  21. On Soka. Tapin. Yu. L'tal. Gural.:

    posted 6 months ago

    Hmm, I tried to rate this 5 stars but Ficlets isn’t currently cooperating with Safari : (

  22. On Soka. Tapin. Yu. L'tal. Gural.:

    posted 6 months ago

    Excellent. It seems like music is a constant in your stand alone shorts. In this, it provides the characters with a way to both connect and disagree at the same time, very cool!

  23. On These are my ten.:

    posted 6 months ago

    With all the crazies on the road these days, #5 is going to be especially hard to accomplish : )

    Let’s see if my little HTML line break above works.

    If it did, might I also say that we share the goal of traveling to Japan. Good luck!

  24. On The Tattoo:

    posted 6 months ago

    Great. Puts you right into the scene and has playful overtones. Very well written indeed.

  25. On Three Pulses to Down:

    posted 6 months ago

    One of the better Ficlets I’ve read so far! Great descriptions of the shockwaves, you can almost picture them hitting the protagonist’s body.

  26. On CeeJay the Resplendent:

    posted 6 months ago

    Sorry everyone, when editing the final version of this story, it somehow created a non-finished duplicate.

    The final can be found here: http://ficlets.com/stories/24678

  27. On Sexual Harrasement or Not:

    posted 6 months ago

    Hmm, I can’t tell if this is a real instance or not. My ex is dealing with some workplace sexual harassment that involves inappropriate text messages.

    I’d say this is borderline, but worth bringing up with the appropriate HR people if the first threat doesn’t put the fear of God in him…

  28. On On the wall:

    posted 6 months ago

    Pretty sure it’s not a haiku : )

  29. On A Time For Rest:

    posted 6 months ago

    I like the descriptiveness in this story, you can almost feel what Ion looks like.

    I would suggest a bit of structure in what you write, adding a line break or two, so that the reader doesn’t have to look at one large block of text.

    Otherwise, great!

  30. On The Long U-Turn:

    posted 6 months ago

    Thanks much for the comments, they are appreciated.

    This is my first Ficlet, so I hope to improve. My goal is to write one a day, we’ll see how it all turns out : )

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