blueyedwonder's posted comments

  1. On Hollywood Heroin 2:

    posted 7 months ago

    err…who would believe a comedic series on an online website?

  2. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 8 months ago

    wahh i missed the contest!! stupid father blocking ficlets…]’:

  3. On Lady Liberty Marries Sorrow:

    posted 8 months ago

    the tres basic simple sentences at the end really added something. nice.

    and now youve got me wondering what adrien’s possible death has to do with the story…

  4. On Heartbreak Hospital:

    posted 8 months ago

    wha? why is vicky so madified at adrien? confuzzlified…

  5. On Disaster in Room 121:

    posted 8 months ago

    i liked the story but the comments were better, no ‘fense…you are twisted, THX. “Wheeeeee…”

  6. On Adrien and Mrs. St. Paul:

    posted 8 months ago

    heeheehee. i know whats gonna happen next…cuz im readin this thing backwards…

    seriously though, nice job.

  7. On Coffee:

    posted 8 months ago

    haha a MONTH later lemme sequel here…

  8. On It's Just A Crush...:

    posted 8 months ago

    grammatical and spelling errors but i feel your pain. :]

  9. On Unbeknownst Love, Pt.1:

    posted 8 months ago

    ...too short for my taste, though ilike the last sentence…

  10. On Flash of Light - ficlet challenge:

    posted 8 months ago

    picky, picky…it’s bolded!

  11. On Twisted One Liners ( Ficlet Challenge ):

    posted 8 months ago

    goood challenge!!!!

  12. On A Lost Love's Story:

    posted 8 months ago

    btw, i clicked on the URL…what is “lost”?

  13. On A Lost Love's Story:

    posted 8 months ago

    again, good writing but vague plotline.

  14. On Final Words of Love:

    posted 8 months ago

    intriguing…mistress elsha hawk was a little harsh, the writing is very nice thought the plotline vague…

  15. On The Deviant and the Victim {Stoner's challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    well, i had to get the quarter on the ground somehow...;]

  16. On Pain {lyric challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    thats…depressed…

  17. On Break Free:

    posted 8 months ago

    haha.

  18. On Hollywood Heroin 2:

    posted 8 months ago

    yes, i have to agree…this was just a little, blah im bored type of thing. but thanks to kermitgorf!

  19. On Chili Peppers {a poem}:

    posted 8 months ago

    haunting. beautiful.

  20. On What not to be in an airlock:

    posted 8 months ago

    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.

  21. On What's On My List: {Llamas' Ipod Song Challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    oh…alt+numpad 3 is the heart. ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

    did i already say i love four seasons? (i play violin). nice.

  22. On Reach Out and Touch Faith (Lyric Challenge):

    posted 8 months ago

    haha. nice last line. and the cabbage patch doll simile.

  23. On Hollywood Heroin:

    posted 8 months ago

    ...okay…we’ll go with shiny...

    nice job. i liiiiiiike it!

  24. On Dear Gossip Girl: I'm Failing Every Subject:

    posted 8 months ago

    erm. haha.

    for science, (biology, at least) just remember this:

    DNA IS RNA AND RNA IS PROTEINS.

    the end.

    and for geometry,

    THEREFORE DNA IS PROTEINS.

    haha lol. nice job. :]

  25. On Dear Gossip Girl: Hi.:

    posted 8 months ago

    wtf? nah i like it :)

  26. On Erika's Song:

    posted 8 months ago

    i love it!

    ♥

    as an afterthought, however, isn’t the first line of because of you ‘i will not make the same mistakes that you did’?

  27. On A Modern-day Bonnie & Clyde. Chapter 2: The Get-away:

    posted 8 months ago

    MWAHAHAHA! GO BONNIE!

  28. On A Modern-day Bonnie & Clyde. Chapter 1: The Plan:

    posted 8 months ago

    hehehe. i like the last line.

  29. On Lover's Thoughts {Ana Cristina's Challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    ooh haha this is from bubbly by colbie caillat.

  30. On Reality:

    posted 8 months ago

    ok nvm i fixed it :)

  31. On Wow, 50 ficlets! Must mean a challenge is in your future... (Lyric Challenge):

    posted 8 months ago

    very nice! i like it! and blossom ruoqen, make it a sequel so it’s easy to find :)

  32. On Fiction Challenge :

    posted 8 months ago

    ...? don’t we all write anyway? how is it a challenge on ficlets? and who decides the best? that is very vague and perhaps a little lacking in something?

  33. On Reality:

    posted 8 months ago

    i know the = sign is a little bit awkward in a story, but i didn’t have enough characters!!!! :$:$:$

  34. On Sarah's Life Before Simon {Blue's Second Challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    nice! this is exactly the sort of thing. and very nice implications at the end, leaves us dreading the inevitable and questioning the possibility of a different outcome :)
    ♥
    oh and yeah, PLEASE everyone vote!!!!!

  35. On Insecurity=Plastic Surgery:

    posted 8 months ago

    haahaahaa.

  36. On Welcome to the Biggest Mental Institution ever(earth):

    posted 8 months ago

    i don’t think it really fits the challenge, but the ficlet itself makes a very good point…especially love the last paragraph :]

  37. On Limited Edition Rock & Republic!:

    posted 8 months ago

    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. typical preppy loser gaywad.

  38. On High School Musical -- Barbie Style:

    posted 8 months ago

    hate both of those, love the ficlet. hilarious!!!

  39. On What Happens When a Bored Kid Named After a Twisted Version of His Name and a Hobo Meets Music? Just About THE ULTIMATE PLAYLIST EVER...Well, Maybe Not (But the Longest Title for a Ficlet Ever, Definitely):

    posted 8 months ago

    w8 so what’s your name…steven? stevy? stove?

    btw, love death cab for cutie

  40. On The Return of the Crocs:

    posted 8 months ago

    i detest crocs. but nice ficlet.

  41. On My iHeart! (randomized!):

    posted 8 months ago

    love half the list!!

  42. On Don't Hate Cuz Rap's Better Den Yo Crap! [take tht kermitgorf] PikaPikaPikaPikaPikaPOW Word.:

    posted 8 months ago

    OHMYGOSH i LOVE all those SONGS!!!! you have FABULOUS taste in music, daaaaaaaahling!

  43. On Phobias, Phobias, Everywhere:

    posted 8 months ago

    the point was sort of to look them up. :$ im assuming it didn’t work?

  44. On Phobias, Phobias, Everywhere:

    posted 8 months ago

    ...not my best…-

  45. On blue's songs (don't laugh, it'll make me feel better):

    posted 8 months ago

    actually there’s a broadway production of it too. :D

  46. On blue's songs (don't laugh, it'll make me feel better):

    posted 8 months ago

    um, well, broadway musicals, a mormon band (that is really just funny), barrage is a canadian fiddling group (i play violin), kristin chenoweth is a broadway/christian/most everything but the kitchen sink singer, and beethoven is…beethoven. oh and all-region choir was for choir. lol.

  47. On She Never Got Along With Her Kindergarten Teacher (7):

    posted 8 months ago

    nice, but getting increasingly awkward with each ficlet. don’t force it out, let it flow. don’t rush it, just wait for inspiration to strike. and the report cards say about the same things every time. but please don’t take this the wrong way, it’s still a great ficlet.

  48. On What's On My List: {Llamas' Ipod Song Challenge}:

    posted 8 months ago

    hey there delilah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  49. On Song List per a Challenge:

    posted 8 months ago

    LOVE lifestyles of the rich & famous.

  50. On YouTube Shoes.:

    posted 8 months ago

    haha meant f*ck!ng

  51. On YouTube Shoes.:

    posted 8 months ago

    haha i LOVE that movie. ‘these shoes are 300 dollars. these shoes are 300 dollars. these shoes are three hundred fc*ig dollars.’

  52. On Xaviers Pants Free Day in the Park:

    posted 8 months ago

    nice, but i’m agreeing with mistress elsha hawk—how did he get naked? :$

  53. On When Happiness Walks Out:

    posted 8 months ago

    this is gorgeous and beautiful and amazing. i love the personification of abstracts.

  54. On Those Of Us Who Think People Care To Know Where Our Pen Names Came From... A Mischievous Plot Begun By That Squirt, Stovohobo... A Story of Yeah Write And How She Came To Be Yeah Write... A Ficlet of Epic Proportions:

    posted 8 months ago

    hey, same here, only me rents haven’t found the myspace…actually, i forgot the link. (about not having myspace, facebook, etc.). very nice, i really liked the melodramatic tone!

  55. On Dear Gossip Girl: Good Advice for those who need it:

    posted 8 months ago

    i agree with stovohobo, there are nice things (really, i enjoyed it) but i think in stovohobo’s, it was about…i don’t know, preps and airheads and people like that? you know those losers? whereas yours was about…us…who AREN’T nerds or wannabe writers…hehehe [;

  56. On Dear Gossip Girl: I Wanna Be Generally Unhealthy:

    posted 8 months ago

    HA HA HA HA HA!!!!!!

  57. On MALCOM!:

    posted 8 months ago

    inspiration? i’m a little confused here…might wanna consider trying a take 2, buddy…PLEASE don’t pull a llammaluvsmenotu!

  58. On Where On Earth Did the Name Stovohobo Come From?:

    posted 8 months ago

    this was amusing, to say the least…but darn it, you got my hopes up, i thought i was gonna get a little explanation here!

    and yes, alexa, you’re right, i do have blue eyes…gee, how DID you figure THAT one out??!! :]

  59. On The Interstate:

    posted 8 months ago

    a depressed stovohobo? never thought i’d see the day…huh… (:] jk)
    new style for you? very nice job!

  60. On Leda:

    posted 8 months ago

    mmk thx. :]

  61. On Blueyedwonder's nEw Challenge from...not hell! (Sorry, YodaOnCrack, couldn't resist). And this is Sorta-Halfway-Kinda Dedicated to Howie Amourscow for Unintentionally giving me the Idea :D:

    posted 8 months ago

    yeah, i know, very similar to the ficlets chain i think…alexa started it, right? i like how no one’s sequeled. haha. anyway, sorry for not getting on for a billion and a half years—me padre blocked ficlets, doesn’t like this site…now i just play crappy online games, because THAT’s better that writing…anyway, (since im definitely not venting here) thanks to howie for clearing that up and all the compliments. yay!

  62. On Hello Fire:

    posted 9 months ago

    you smoke my eyes? ehhh? rest is good, though.

  63. On Leda:

    posted 9 months ago

    no, no…sorry, should probably revise this…but acantheus loves leda, and since acantheus is a landowner, the god(dess) he respects most is demeter, goddess of the grain.

  64. On Desperation in the Key of E Minor:

    posted 9 months ago

    sigh...too tired to make up my own comment; but i agree with everyone else. nice job. (and that is the extent of my current commenting abilities).

  65. On Tast-E-Freeze Duplicity:

    posted 9 months ago

    haahaahaa. nice series.

  66. On "HeadOn! Apply Directly to the Forehead! HeadOn! Apply Directly to the Freaking Forehead! HeadOn!":

    posted 9 months ago

    i despise that commercial.

  67. On Worse Things Than Murder:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice…and weird pic :$ but in a good way.

  68. On The One I Couldn't Control:

    posted 9 months ago

    eeka, veeeeery descriptive!! i liked the pills-confetti simile.

  69. On Those Red High-Heels:

    posted 9 months ago

    i ‘specially liked the ‘collecting their magic’ part. and i agree with horrorfan, i can definitely relate to it!

  70. On Waves of Dreaming:

    posted 9 months ago

    niceeee!! as always, great talent and emotion displayed. :)

  71. On Rememberance:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha, funnily enough i haven’t…im just going off the crappy way zeus treats all the women he…ahem...gets ‘involved’ with. they usually end up dying or being exiled. :$

  72. On Writing Notes In the Air:

    posted 9 months ago

    ohhhh, reminds me of tying my shoes…okay, i get it now…haha. VERY nice job; love it!

  73. On Green Man:

    posted 9 months ago

    agree with everyone, sadly…maybe the sequel holds some answers?

  74. On Stained Air:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha of course you worked it into your writing; why should i be surprised? nice job.

  75. On Tortilla Gets a Life:

    posted 9 months ago

    hehehe. love these—theyre freakin hysterical.

  76. On Remember Karen in Wartime:

    posted 9 months ago

    he…a cow.

  77. On Zombie Mowdown: I wrote this!! I was on Stovohobo's Account On Accident!!MUST READ!!:

    posted 9 months ago

    ...okay. ill criticize you instead :) lol jk.
    it does sound like something you would write…no ‘fense :)

  78. On The Red Sox Suck:

    posted 9 months ago

    sad, but often true…very nice rueful, regretful tone.

  79. On Zombie Mowdown:

    posted 9 months ago

    eww…graphic much? this guy has issues!
    “i killed them, I would kill them all”

    but now that i think about it, how can you kill already-dead things?

  80. On Twisted Fairy Tales:Modern Day Romeo and Juliet:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice! agree with musicxhearted and kermitgorf and probly everyone else…very nice!

  81. On You read it, You name it.(little more):

    posted 9 months ago

    ...nice imagery here.

  82. On Broken :

    posted 9 months ago

    ...nice. tendril, not tendril. nice descriptions, but lacking…something. not sure what =/ i sry.

  83. On Statue:

    posted 9 months ago

    ...ehhh…better when it was 126 characters over =/

  84. On Gone Under:

    posted 9 months ago

    verrrrrrrrry nice! impressed! especially enjoyed the ‘lungs shriveling’ line. very…easy to visualize…=$

  85. On Janet Willoughby:

    posted 9 months ago

    lol this possible start of a new collection of stories was vurry nice. and don’t worry—i don’t think it’s humanly possible to become bored with your stories…

  86. On Threats:

    posted 9 months ago

    nicce…but what a b!!!

  87. On It Means "Mortal Danger", Apparently:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice ending.

  88. On {Pop Culture Challenge}The Global News and Information Network:

    posted 9 months ago

    haahaahaa.

  89. On Vanilla Ice: A Semi-Original Spoof by BARomero:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh, and fyi, it made it big because it’s about racism…’chocolate rain’ is black people…look up the lyrics. but i think it was dumb to make such a weighty, serious song sound so…dumb…

  90. On He said that.:

    posted 9 months ago

    beautiful writing, anyway…this breaks my heart though…how come this can’t happen to me!!!

  91. On The (Boring) View from My Window:

    posted 9 months ago

    ....interessant…

  92. On Beneath:

    posted 9 months ago

    beautiful, exactly how i feel…really, really beautiful. GREAT job!

  93. On Inconceivable!:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahaha…gotta love princess bride…i wonder if this warden has little man syndrome/superiority complex like the guy from princess bride?

  94. On Ali G Interviews YodaOnCrack:

    posted 9 months ago

    hehehehe…now that’s some funny stuff…though I have to admit, Leroy Jenkins was better in the Star Wars sense…

  95. On Theme Song of the Stupid:

    posted 9 months ago

    Okay, I’m sorry to everyone who likes Feist but…no. I don’t. Her outfits and songs all suck!

  96. On Vanilla Ice: A Semi-Original Spoof by BARomero:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha…has anybody seen ‘vanilla snow’ on youtube? the link is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nTQOpibv_OA&mode=related&search=

    seriously, it’s hilarious…especially if you’ve seen chocolate rain

  97. On You Know It's a Good Party When...:

    posted 9 months ago

    i lOVED the sea/whales metaphor!!!!! and the crass comments line! however, didn’t really understand what the meaning of him being dead means.

  98. On Leeroy Jenkins vs. The Death Star:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahaha once you’ve watched the video that’s pretty funny…ha. ha. ha. i can’t stop laughing now…

  99. On You're Nobody in Hollywood Till Your 1st DUI:

    posted 9 months ago

    HEHEHEHE. that is freaking hilarious. i loved it!

  100. On Finally...a chance to make fun of the Clique books!:

    posted 9 months ago

    ha this sounds EXACTLY like the clique books! hilarious, love it!

  101. On I Am Rage:

    posted 9 months ago

    Amazing writing…especially love the colors paragraphs…the simple sentences add a really powerful tone to it. I love it, especially the ‘bring forth the red’ line.

  102. On The Decision:

    posted 9 months ago

    i agree…for some reason the first three paragraphs remind me of the Holocaust…

  103. On Hidden Destruction:

    posted 9 months ago

    love the last three lines…and the finished-ness of it, like the narrator can’t control it…he just is a ghost, a shell, a destroyer, and there’s nothing he can do about it. VERY nice!

  104. On A Bloody Thread of Life:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice…very ominous mood of things to come, i like it!...and the imagery of the blood. and the symbolism of the thread. it IS symbolism right? :/

  105. On Far from Wow!(Assonance):

    posted 9 months ago

    should write one on chiasmus then! no clue what that is…:D thats good

  106. On Janet Willoughby:

    posted 9 months ago

    ya have to feel sorry for the kid…still though, nice introduction to sigh yet another series. naw im just givin you a hard time im sure it will be as amazing as all your others.

  107. On Biological Warfare: The Shocking Story of the Dawson Family:

    posted 9 months ago

    i know, i had to cut out a bunch of official jargon and the switch to wang’s actions. maybe i hsould have extended it to two ficlets…

  108. On The Evil Principal:

    posted 9 months ago

    then somebody feel free to, I honestly have no clue where this came from…

  109. On New Study: The Effects of Imminent Death on the Female Adolescent Mind:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice.

  110. On A reapperence:

    posted 9 months ago

    ...rape would be bad…

  111. On Plaster Rain:

    posted 9 months ago

    eeka! i wouldn’t stay friends with such a creep!

  112. On Mrs. St. Paul:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha, consider me told, alexa. nice job.

  113. On Biological Warfare: The Shocking Story of the Dawson Family:

    posted 9 months ago

    ackkkkk stupid strikethrough.

  114. On Biological Warfare: The Shocking Story of the Dawson Family:

    posted 9 months ago

    I know, this doesn’t really fit horror…

    Just so you know, i’m not sick and disgusting…all those things have been on NCIS episodes, except for the bound feet, that’s from english class because we’re studying The Good Earth-also, hence the name Wang Lung. And I have long believed that sooner or later, the government will become corrupt due to some sick reason-like publicity, for instance. So that’s my excuse for not writing traditional horror.

    :D

  115. On Drifting Melodies:

    posted 9 months ago

    mhm…nice, nice…but what i really want to say…do you guys have RADIOS on the bus?? not fair, man, not fair.

  116. On The Song of the Pitchforked Children:

    posted 9 months ago

    i agree with everybody. very nice job!!!

  117. On FICLET THE 26th! LONE WRITER'S 1st CONTEST:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice combination of previous challenges.

  118. On The Killer, the Main Characters, and Running Through A Dark House:

    posted 9 months ago

    hehehe. that amuses me.

  119. On My Special Place:

    posted 9 months ago

    moi aussi, im afraid.

  120. On I've Done These Ficlets Before:

    posted 9 months ago

    i’m pretty sure we all feel that way. don’t worry, i haven’t made one up there either…actually one got up that was in another language from google translator, for pete’s sake…not my writing. so i feel your pain.

  121. On Dead is Relative:

    posted 9 months ago

    HAHAHAHAHA. typical bureaucrats. I must agree with Kermitgorf, the dialogue was especially comical.

  122. On Say Goodbye to Linz and Ty:

    posted 9 months ago

    ha meant grammar.

  123. On Say Goodbye to Linz and Ty:

    posted 9 months ago

    HA. that is hilarious. especially like the “Through the run-on sentences, the bad frammar, and the insipid melodrama, I just want you to know…” part.

  124. On Dead Man Walking:

    posted 9 months ago

    hehehe…that would hurt…

  125. On Someday,Someway{Another Lame attempt at Poetry/Songwriting}:

    posted 9 months ago

    eh, eh…not as good as your first…but not bad, per say. just…idk…short, maybe? something’s not right, but I can’t tell what exactly…

  126. On I Let Her Break My Heart{A Lame attempt at poetry/song writing}:

    posted 9 months ago

    ha better than any of my attempts at poetry. nice job.

  127. On Photograph:

    posted 9 months ago

    It’s nice and deep, but the character’s attributes are conflicting—she’s giggling and happy, then 5 seconds later she’s talking about cutting herself? A little vague, too much of a change in mood…

  128. On "I Don't Know How to Pray.":

    posted 9 months ago

    vurry nice. i like it.

  129. On She Had Just Moved In:

    posted 9 months ago

    ha.

  130. On I was smiling.:

    posted 9 months ago

    i like the repetition.

  131. On Remember Karen in Wartime:

    posted 9 months ago

    HAHAHAHAHAHAHA. i love that. and congrats on first place!!

  132. On Woohoo! 2nd Place... These Titles Are Longer than Emo Song Titles! Haha!:

    posted 9 months ago

    je ne comprends pas. what are we supposed to guess? or is this an inside joke?

  133. On Finally! 50th Ficlet! Brought to You By: Yeah Write!:

    posted 9 months ago

    Definitely stovohobo-worthy titles…especially the one officially got…

  134. On Explanation:

    posted 9 months ago

    thats wat i meant…this is where sleep deprivation comes into play :P

  135. On Pockets:

    posted 9 months ago

    very…nice? and odd?

  136. On What Jerry Wants:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice, very nice…like it!

  137. On Its not over :

    posted 9 months ago

    CREEP!

    ps where did you get the inspiration for this??!!!

  138. On Creep, Sicko....:

    posted 9 months ago

    mean danny…loser brooke…love this series!

  139. On I know where you live:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahaha. “oh, and don’t be surprised…”...I STALK YOU!!!

  140. On I hurt... He hurts...what to do?:

    posted 9 months ago

    plus, come ON guys, they’re 13!! I think people keep forgetting that.

  141. On I hurt... He hurts...what to do?:

    posted 9 months ago

    im so, hopelessly confused…is there a reason soccer can’t keep writing this series?

  142. On The Turn:

    posted 9 months ago

    well, using anybody like that, whether you know them or not, is low. man, that’s just low.

  143. On Now:

    posted 9 months ago

    i agree with alexa, but it is still well written, you have to admit.

  144. On She's Got It, I Don't:

    posted 9 months ago

    yeah…you skipped around a lot; i thought she liked ty?

  145. On Destroyed:

    posted 9 months ago

    :) lol

  146. On Destroyed:

    posted 9 months ago

    same as mouthwash girl.

  147. On truth;;revealed!:

    posted 9 months ago

    yes…the age makes it positively ridiculous.

  148. On the cold hard truth:

    posted 9 months ago

    no! no! no! too cliche!

  149. On I hurt... He hurts...what to do?:

    posted 9 months ago

    no. too much of a change of mood—from soap opera to deep and depressing? not liking it.

  150. On Glayelle:

    posted 9 months ago

    well thank you! lol

  151. On Transformation:

    posted 9 months ago

    What I was going for here is that mermyds aren’t happy and pretty and preppy airheads like arielle from the little mermaid, but they’re…sorta powerful, and dangerous, and they could be evil if they wanted to, but they have enough charisma that they’re not. If that made sense at all.

  152. On The Creature and the Monster:

    posted 9 months ago

    the monster couldn’t finish because lauri came to battle him. yeah.
    :D lol

  153. On Glayelle:

    posted 9 months ago

    All right, sorry to all those who liked the spiel, as I cut it out, but I was getting critiqued about that, so I edited it.

    Kermit—It was supposed to convey reading one another’s conscious thoughts. Did it work, or should I do some more editing?

  154. On Light:

    posted 9 months ago

    horns of a truck…wow…i like the surprise ending.

  155. On Nothing to Hold On To :

    posted 9 months ago

    WOWWWW!!!! sorry, a lil hyper right now, but veeeeeeeeeery nice! impressive!

  156. On Prelude to extinction:

    posted 9 months ago

    dinos!!! ahhhhh!

  157. On Maybe Ghost Story's Aren't the Best Bedtime Story's:

    posted 9 months ago

    add quotations, please, to make it easier to understand what’s going on.

  158. On The Black, Black Room:

    posted 9 months ago

    ooh, scary! like it!

  159. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 9 months ago

    yay! zombies!

    uselessness: ask YodaOnCrack. i would like to know that too. but probably, if you can write more than one, it will be judged as a whole. just my guess.

  160. On Prepare the Masses:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha, very nice!

  161. On Room 121:

    posted 9 months ago

    mine too!!

  162. On Cat Mind:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha. nice.

  163. On Car Crash part2:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice job, but link your prequels to your sequels.

  164. On By Her Side:

    posted 9 months ago

    ehh…he grabbed her heart with a knife? personification not making sense…also the non-chronological order of things, the skipping back and revising parts. please clarify!!!

  165. On Suzie of the Broken Hearts:

    posted 9 months ago

    very creative, i love the personification here!

  166. On One Day of Creation:

    posted 9 months ago

    i like this…and playing devil’s advocate definitely makes for great writing, this is proof of that.

  167. On First Day of Autumn:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice, very nice…i definitely agree with you, though im pretty religious so…you can see where i’m going with this.

  168. On Battle:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha crap just rated my own story…reflex, I guess, after posting a billion and a half comments :D

  169. On Battle:

    posted 9 months ago

    yeah, sorta…no clue what’s gonna happen now though…I guess I’ll just have to wait for inspiration to strike.

  170. On Wished it was Back:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha…SEQUEL NOW. :D hehehe. but i MUST know what HAPPENS, dahling!

  171. On Arm around Me:

    posted 9 months ago

    cute day! lovely. i h8 horror movies too.

  172. On Exits and Entrances:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice!

  173. On Birthdays:

    posted 9 months ago

    brooke is realllllly creepy…

  174. On Wishing on a Star:

    posted 9 months ago

    i would love to see more on this! beautiful writing.

  175. On Lovingly Yours:

    posted 9 months ago

    yikes!bold SCARY move!

  176. On Asthma:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…not sure what happened there at the end…a little murky, but it might be supposed to be like that…

  177. On Feel Like Recanting the Hippocratic Oath?:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahaha. thats funny.

  178. On Attempted Patricide:

    posted 9 months ago

    have to agree with THX…though a little scatterbrained…

  179. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 9 months ago

    ...may i ask why like, every single entry is about vampires? can’t anybody think of anything scary besides vampires?

  180. On Fortunes Best Left Untold:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahaha…you’re right, more comedic than horror, as the horror was only introduced in the last line, but this is a great ficlet. love the dialogue.

  181. On God Save Me[yoda's challenge]:

    posted 9 months ago

    okay, hold on…fill me in here…is this a sequel to Batak’s entry, or another entry that should be connected to YodaOnCrack’s challenge?

  182. On When You Gaze Into the Abyss:

    posted 9 months ago

    eeka eeka! doppelganger indeed! and lovely descriptive language, by the way.

  183. On Fix Your Mind on a Crystal Day:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice job, nice turn from the uncontrollable terror in the previous ones.

  184. On It Ain't Ever Gonna' Stop:

    posted 9 months ago

    okay this is definitely more horror; liked the ‘landscape peeled away in a cascade of leaping flames’ line.

  185. On Papa and Gregor Bury The Mysterious Chest:

    posted 9 months ago

    very nice, thx is right, history and potential.

  186. On Dead Men Don't Bite:

    posted 9 months ago

    i like the latin in this. nice touch.

  187. On And I'm Goin' Down, All the Way Down:

    posted 9 months ago

    interesting. not quite my idea of horror-a song that won’t turn off? so i’m not sure if it quite fits the challenge, but very nice ficlet as a stand-alone. if you could explain to me how it’s horror (as I’m probably just not getting something), please do via note.

  188. On Mock Pop Culture {Ficlet Challenge}:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice challenge! very nice idea. what was that about pop culture?

  189. On The Thing in Lydia's Room:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice…especiallly like the second to last clause:
    ‘feeding on her innocence’

  190. On The Key to the Journey:

    posted 9 months ago

    lovely, lovely…can’t wait for the sequel. also, love the name izzie. haha wasnt ms frizzle’s iguana named izzie or something?

  191. On Trapped:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh, nice. i like it.

  192. On Tessa Goes Home:

    posted 9 months ago

    interesting change from the other line…3 boyfriends and a girlfriend, wow.

  193. On What Tammy Wants:

    posted 9 months ago

    nice!!! i like the idea of the aunt…and i’ve done that on the phone b4…owchh…still, nice. like you said, a litte abbreviated, but still really nice.

  194. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha nvm…

  195. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 9 months ago

    oohhhhhh yayy!!!!
    so can i still enter? im cool with either…jw if i should start thinkin up a good horror plot.

  196. On Stokholm Syndrome:

    posted 9 months ago

    stockholm is where you form an emotional bond with a captor right?

    nice ficlet. nice portrayal of emotions :)

  197. On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

    posted 9 months ago

    ooh i’d love to be a judge…MWAHAHAHA POWER…jkjkjk…but does that mean i can’t enter? that would be a minus…

    and does it mean we have to count out 2,000 words? or do you mean exactly 2,000 characters?

    please answer!!!

  198. On A Ficlets Attack:

    posted 9 months ago

    hehehehe…is this based on a real experience for you? cuz i can definitely relate…gawrsh parents are so demanding these days… :D lol

  199. On What Jenny Wants:

    posted 9 months ago

    ohhh crap sorry meant josiah was tessa’s current bf. ahhhh!!

    but if you want i can leave it like that…idk…

  200. On Yeah, I'm Laughing At You:

    posted 9 months ago

    ahhh!! very suspenseful…dream harvesters, huh…

  201. On Beautiful Disaster:

    posted 9 months ago

    lovely, lovely. i can’t wait to see what happens.

  202. On (Genre: Sci-Fi) The Gemini Experiment:

    posted 9 months ago

    verrrry intriguing…nice sci-fi for your first attempt…i’m very impressed.

  203. On Turn about's fair play Mycroft:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahahahahahaha!

  204. On my first night:

    posted 9 months ago

    definitely needs editing, can’t understand it…

  205. On The Purple Lady:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…interesting idea, but definitely rushed.

  206. On A Prelude:

    posted 9 months ago

    i like this…i really want to see the sequel to it!!!

    haha lol :) nice job.

  207. On The Return of the Highwayman:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahaha. i hope you’re planning on sequeling this. it’s great.
    i love the creepy-mystery feeling throughout, then the sudden change of mood in the last line.

  208. On The castle:

    posted 9 months ago

    beautful. i loved it.

  209. On They're My Characters Now, Mate:

    posted 9 months ago

    this is hilarious. Zombie dinosaurs. heehee.

  210. On A breach of ficlet etiquette:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha.

  211. On The Savages:

    posted 9 months ago

    aaw, dassad. haha unintentional palindrome. ANYWAY, nice. i like the surprise ending. even tho it is sad. :) lol

  212. On Emergency Room Emergency:

    posted 9 months ago

    aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! noooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! what happensssssssss??????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    you irritate me. in a good way. :)

  213. On A Heart of Gold...The Other, Not So Much:

    posted 9 months ago

    aaaackk.

  214. On Damien and Jakob: City Streets:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…interesting, leaves me wanting to know more…

  215. On Bowling for Excuses:

    posted 9 months ago

    if this is a series, you need to link them together.

  216. On What Josiah Wants:

    posted 9 months ago

    wow this is really great…like kermitgorf said, seamless between the ficlets. i can’t wait to see what the sequel is!!! but, like most ficlets, i won’t sequel because i would kill it and everyone would give me like one star and say “thx for killing it loser”. and i would be sad. :)

  217. On What Tessa Wants:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…sounds interesting.

  218. On Human Connection:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha my sis can’t smile either. it looks like a scowl when she tries. i love this ficlet…the intrigue at the end leaves me wanting a sequel. also very good descriptions. very nice!

  219. On *o* Allelujah! Allelujah! My 100th Ficlet! My 100th Ficlet! Allelujah!!:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh…haha. end date. right. okay, how’s october 13th for y’all? (excuse me; all of you). does that work?

  220. On Capgras' for Lunch:

    posted 9 months ago

    hahahahahahahahaha…weird syndrome. but hilarious. i loved it! especially the last line.

  221. On Loss for words...:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha. writer’s block should definitely be a disorder. very creative, outside-the-box thinking.

  222. On Reading Aprehension:

    posted 9 months ago

    i LOVE synthesia…that would be so cool!!!! has anybody read a mango-shaped space? amazing book about a…synthetic? synthestic? anyway, nice ficlet. i like it. :)

  223. On The Cat is Playing Hopscotch:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh crap i accidentally rated it. sorry. :) im not an egocentric conceited jerk, promise.

  224. On The Cat is Playing Hopscotch:

    posted 9 months ago

    made it up. sorry i know its weird, but i saw the pic and i was like, wtf.

  225. On The Tube:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha. like it. well, i know im claustrophobic. but this is very nice.

  226. On *o* Allelujah! Allelujah! My 100th Ficlet! My 100th Ficlet! Allelujah!!:

    posted 9 months ago

    yeah…i know theres a lot of sex-freakos out there, but if you could try to keep it clean ( a good rule of thumb: I probably won’t read mature stories) i would like it very much. again, please vote!!!

  227. On Inamorata:

    posted 9 months ago

    hee hee work.

  228. On Inamorata:

    posted 9 months ago

    bonus points for sanguine, taken away for overuse :) sorry. but bonus points for a really good ficlet, and inamorata, and the opposite point of view. nice wok.

  229. On Nine-Eleven, In The Eyes Of A First Grader: Now We Know:

    posted 9 months ago

    awwwwww. this is so sad.

  230. On Hand-Me-Down Reputation:

    posted 9 months ago

    i LOVE the feeling here! andi know exactly what you mean…=(

  231. On The Size of a Mouse:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…interesting…id like to see where you go with this…

  232. On Owww:

    posted 9 months ago

    whiplashy. haha.

  233. On I'm going to eat youuuu!!! Part 2.:

    posted 9 months ago

    okay this is funnier. haha.

  234. On I'm going to eat youuuu!!!:

    posted 9 months ago

    ehh?? random much? possibly a sequel/prequel is needed to understand it…

  235. On My Man:

    posted 9 months ago

    ickkk i have that too. internet time i mean. this one’s more of a transitioner than a punch line, if you know what i mean…but hey, all jokes have to have a wind-up. i hope you get to finish it!!

  236. On Deadly Thornbearing Vegetation:

    posted 9 months ago

    ha…? needs a little work, but still amusing, probably because of its randomness. gotta love randomness!!!

  237. On When Death Comes Knocking, Don't Answer:

    posted 9 months ago

    that is frickin hilarious. how do you come up with these?

  238. On Jolie et Beau:

    posted 9 months ago

    how interesting…i love their names :). im interested in seeing where you take this.

  239. On The Waiting Room Woman:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm… a little bit sidetracked…but maybe it has something to do with the story, I can never tell with you…

  240. On Writer's Block.... :

    posted 9 months ago

    oh wow somebody really is on crack…but really, i liked this. it was amusing, about something we all get far too often for our tastes. good job.

  241. On Remember the White?:

    posted 9 months ago

    lovely and creative, as usual…

  242. On The Mermaid and Me:

    posted 9 months ago

    ah, here i was thinking it was a rendition of the little mermaid, but then you threw in coast guard. now i’m intrigued!

  243. On Gabija stalks Brother Nikolai:

    posted 9 months ago

    in my opinion, there are far too many vampire ficlets on this website…but don’t worry, this one is good.
    :)

  244. On Brother Nikolai:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh, i like this. very nice. and good portrayal of father superior constantine. :)

  245. On In the White Room:

    posted 9 months ago

    oooh, i love the mystique here!! i’m intrigued!! i would love the see a sequel or prequel! lovely job.

  246. On Who's The More Foolish?:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm, this sound sort of like a cinderella type thing. but i love the phrase ‘subtlety of a plow horse,’ and all her hidden gibes in this one.

  247. On Making Polonius Proud:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha…dumb loser. but a lovable one, don’t worry. i love this series!

  248. On A Clever Ruse Under the Guise of Darkness:

    posted 9 months ago

    i love the descriptions here!! i definitely agree with kermitgorf. lovely job.

  249. On Spells and Lies at Night:

    posted 9 months ago

    haha…nice. i like it.

  250. On Absolutetly No Drugs Or Nuclear Weapons (Part 2):

    posted 9 months ago

    no, no, it was good. not as nicely woven as the first, you’re right, but still very good. i would like to see where this goes, if you don’t mind…;)

  251. On Absolutely No Drugs or Nuclear Weapons:

    posted 9 months ago

    hmm…realistic, amusing, with a hint of the supernatural and some suspense at the end…nicely done, nicely done.

  252. On In The Name Of SCIENCE!:

    posted 9 months ago

    that is so funny! lol. i enjoyed it :) good job.

  253. On A Day in the Life of Stovohobo:

    posted 9 months ago

    oh, i know. that was just for comedic relief. a hyperbole, of sorts.

  254. On Lake Side:

    posted 9 months ago