Fyora Cartagan's posted comments

  1. On The Following Takes Place Between 9:00 PM and 10:00 PM:

    posted 2 days ago

    This is such a fun series!

  2. On The Following Ficlet Takes Place Between 6:11 and 6:18 PM:

    posted 11 days ago

    OMG, what is it really? Surely they couldn’t get actual truth serum!?

    ...I’m really feeling overdramatic today. Great job!

  3. On The Following Ficlet Takes Place Between 5:30 PM and 6:11 PM:

    posted 11 days ago

    Whoa whoa whoa…It’s like deja vu or something. What happened?

    This is fun to follow though.

  4. On The Following Ficlet Takes Place Between 5:30 PM and 6:11 PM:

    posted 11 days ago

    Dude, this is really fun to follow.
    And it makes me wonder how badly things could go wrong if someone actually tried anything similar to this.

  5. On The Following Ficlet Takes Place Between 2:00 PM and 3:00 PM:

    posted 12 days ago

    I love this.

    But…what are you going to do when they all go to sleep?

  6. On Sky Cow:

    posted 14 days ago

    Note: According to the internet: In Canada, milk comes in bags.

    My apologies to any Canadians offended by this.

  7. On A Series of Unlikely Events:

    posted 20 days ago

    Or a very good day, depending on what was done with it.

  8. On THX 0477 No Fear [challenge]:

    posted 21 days ago

    Haha! That’s great.
    It made me giggle, even though I’m trying to pretend I’m working.

  9. On It Was Completely Our Fault (One More Word Challenge):

    posted 21 days ago

    It definitely had that “I’ve spent ages thinking about this” feel to it, which is great. :D

  10. On The Meeting in the Sun:

    posted 21 days ago

    Nevermind, I figured it out. :D Missed that cafe part.

    And I decided to contribute anyway. :D

  11. On The Meeting in the Sun:

    posted 21 days ago

    ...What are they ordering?

    I’m looking forward to seeing this continue…

    I might pop in, though not just yet I think.

  12. On Quarrel:

    posted 21 days ago

    A solid continuation.

    Thanks for adding something new to work with. :)

  13. On 'Appiness:

    posted 21 days ago

    I don’t have time to contextualize this, guys, just fyi.

  14. On שָׂטָן:

    posted 24 days ago

    This….is an amazing description.

    I am in awe of the vision you have inspired in my mind.

    Stars cannot express my awe and admiration.

  15. On Fyora's Orphanage 1 (Caution: Mostly Teenagers):

    posted 25 days ago

    Note: If you sequel any of my orphans, please drop me a note.

  16. On Gone, Wandered Away:

    posted 25 days ago

    I found this series looking up the tag “orphan”
    This was a fun little series, so far. (Great writing, as always.)
    Where does the girl come in?

  17. On Vicious Attack:

    posted 25 days ago

    You got a smile out of me, which is honestly rare.
    Chihuahuas, that’s great. The little dogs can be the most vicious…

  18. On Writer's Curse:

    posted 25 days ago

    I’ve had that problem.
    I have so totally been there.
    Very very detailed. Great job.

  19. On On Sea or On Land:

    posted 25 days ago

    Looks good, looking forward to the continuation. :D
    She still seems dazed and confused, which is consistent with a head injury.

  20. On flute faerie's 1000th Comment Challenge, The Nice Things Challenge! :

    posted 26 days ago

    I think I’ve been gone too long…I don’t even know a lot of these people.
    Great idea for a challenge though.

  21. On Into the Depths:

    posted 27 days ago

    I’m looking forward to seeing where this is going.

  22. On Night of the Tentacle:

    posted 27 days ago

    You’re not going to…are you?

    Very well done, though.

  23. On When Life Gives You Lemons Squirt the Juice in Your Enemies Eyes!:

    posted 27 days ago

    Needs more organization? It would make it a lot easier to read if you separated it into miniature paragraphs with a full line of space.

    Decent story, overall, though. It’s one everyone can identify with.

  24. On Begging for Inspiration:

    posted 27 days ago

    Update: Apparently one of my friends is a Carmex addict.

  25. On BARomero's Orphanage of Ficlet Series (2):

    posted 27 days ago

    I love what you’re doing here. I’m in a dry spell, myself, so I can’t help, but I want to use this to show off my own “orphans” soon… I have far too many.

  26. On King In Hell:

    posted 29 days ago

    It will go on…
    I suggest to whoever adds next that they focus on someone other than Simon. Just an idea that might help someone think of something.
    I myself am blank.

  27. On Begging for Inspiration:

    posted about 1 month ago

    URL to where I went to learn about carmex: http://www.kevdo.com/lipbalm/carmex.html

  28. On The Devil Wears a Simon Suit:

    posted about 1 month ago

    I’ll assume Tarzan has a plan here, and keep watching from the sidelines.

    I like how you brought things together quickly. :)

  29. On A Rapture Of Raptors:

    posted about 1 month ago

    I’m completely uninspired, which is sad. But I’m very glad to see you back, especially working on this series.

  30. On A Rapture Of Raptors:

    posted about 1 month ago

    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
    I love it!!
    It’s just absolutely perfect. I love “Billy Christ” and I laughed at the “There was a Simon” line.

  31. On Blake's Discomfort:

    posted about 1 month ago

    Thank you for continuing it! I just…drew a blank as to what to happen after that, so I’m glad someone finally did something.

  32. On Ressurec-Ted:

    posted 2 months ago

    lol, his wife is immortal too?
    I liked that Ted is reading his own eulogy.

  33. On Stump the Stovo! Answers #3:

    posted 2 months ago

    I loled at #1.

  34. On Minutes Before 2/15:

    posted 2 months ago

    I agree with butterfly

  35. On Challenge of a Challenge [Or: A Mockery of a Travesty of a Sham of a Travesty of a Mockery...]:

    posted 2 months ago

    lol, won’t you be my neighbor?

  36. On To a Beautiful Boy (Six Word Memoir Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    I have a lot of things like this. I usually write about one in particular. He was on here for a few days, then his computer broke. And it likely won’t be fixed until we’ve both forgotten about this site completely.

  37. On Confessions of a Ficlet Megalomaniac:

    posted 2 months ago

    Don’t feel too bad about putting Grand Awesome Marshall on your resume, I’ve put “Honorary Nerd” on some of mine before. (for scholarships)

    At my high school, there was a club called “Nerds R Us” and I became an honorary member. I would’ve been a full member (even though it was an all male club, but they had to let me in because I got better test scores than the president) but I changed schools.

  38. On Call me...[Six Word Memoirs CHALLENGE]:

    posted 3 months ago

    ...This makes me think of a song. I believe it’s called “Call Me Dr. Worm”. It’s by They Might Be Giants.

    Also, Dr. Awesome sounds like a super hero… And not in a good way.

  39. On Return of the Son of An Open Letter to stylorouge:

    posted 3 months ago

    I totally agree with Alexa.
    This is hilarious.

  40. On Golden Throat Again:

    posted 3 months ago

    Mmm…I want more!

  41. On Baalzebul:

    posted 3 months ago

    Nice complexity with the title and what’s going on!
    “Lord of the Flies” (And you mean Beelzebub? or Beelzebul? I’ve never seen it spelled as you spell it.)
    Just curious what you see them feeding on…

  42. On High Tide:

    posted 3 months ago

    As to the tides, it could be opposite the moon, like I mentioned, as well. And the sun plays a role too.
    Observe: http://www.mesa.edu.au/friends/seashores/images/tides.gif

  43. On High Tide:

    posted 3 months ago

    Asteroid: any of the small rocky celestial bodies found especially between the orbits of Mars and Jupiter
    Meteor: any of the small particles of matter in the solar system that are directly observable only by their incandescence from frictional heating on entry into the atmosphere
    Meteoroid: a meteor in orbit around the sun
    Meteorite: a meteor that reaches the surface of the earth without being completely vaporized

    It really doesn’t fit any of these…

  44. On Don't forget the Shuriken:

    posted 3 months ago

    This is great, cute, and very amusing. :)
    It makes me wonder if my future husband will want the groomsmen to dress like pirates…

  45. On An Open Letter to stylorouge:

    posted 3 months ago

    Syphilis can also apparently cause Parkinson’s-like shaking. (Or so I’ve heard)
    Hitler had that.

  46. On Female Enhancement:

    posted 3 months ago

    You’re right! Oh well. I missed that detail in Hobo Beard Bob’s sequel.

  47. On An Open Letter to stylorouge:

    posted 3 months ago

    ...Is this a fight? o.O

  48. On Thrones and Dominions:

    posted 3 months ago

    Definitely needs sequels, and I’m looking forward to them.
    Agreed that it has very little action, but I love the detail.

  49. On 4:

    posted 3 months ago

    Where is this “Code Green” from?

  50. On That Day:

    posted 3 months ago

    I intended to make that part of a longer poem, but since it just worked so well by itself, I just left it.

  51. On Voyage on the High Seas of Awesomeness:

    posted 3 months ago

    I loved this. :D

  52. On The Great Imperial Caterpillar Death Match (LoA Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I was reminded of Roman? Gladiators, personally.
    This was great. :)

  53. On Terrible Fanfiction Generator: "A Knight Rider in King Arthur's Court":

    posted 3 months ago

    Yeah, you’re right about the Robot Chicken thing… I watch that show occasionally.
    If it makes you feel any better, chances are my eyesight is worse than yours.
    Proof of eyesight problems: I can’t read the giant E at the top of the charts. Without glasses, the whole paper is just a light gray.

  54. On Of Pirates,Gangstas,and Transdimensional Rifts{Fanfiction Generator}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ha. Amusing, at least.

  55. On Papa's Funeral:

    posted 3 months ago

    You’re really on a roll today, eh?
    This looks like a good start to something.

  56. On Voting Machine (part two):

    posted 3 months ago

    It may, for all we know, be a virus that makes him vote that way…?

  57. On Voting Machine (part two):

    posted 3 months ago

    ...Wow.
    That robot knows exactly how I feel about the current election.

  58. On Golden Kiss:

    posted 3 months ago

    Haha! Glad to see you’re back!

  59. On Caesar and His Box of Light:

    posted 3 months ago

    http://seventhsanctum.com/generate.php?Genname=whatif

    “What if…Caesar was responsible for television?”

  60. On 3:

    posted 3 months ago

    Fascinating…

  61. On Terrible Fanfiction Generator: "A Knight Rider in King Arthur's Court":

    posted 3 months ago

    OMG. I just saw an ad for a new Knight Rider on NBC. How coincidental!

  62. On Terrible Fanfiction Generator: "A Knight Rider in King Arthur's Court":

    posted 3 months ago

    I know vaguely of The A-Team because I’ve frequently been on the receiving end of jokes regarding my presence on the “Academic Team” (abbreviated A-Team)

    ...I wasn’t even alive in 1986 though. :/
    After observing the youtube video, I’ve seen that car in a lot of shows I’ve seen, now I know where it came from! Yay!

  63. On Terrible Fanfiction Generator: "A Knight Rider in King Arthur's Court":

    posted 3 months ago

    ...What’s this based off of?
    Apparently I have no understanding of your knowledge of pop culture.
    It was interesting though.

  64. On It has begun:

    posted 3 months ago

    This is great! Sorry I had missed it until now, I might try to continue this from where you’ve taken it…It’ll take some time though, I have a lot of other ideas in my head right now.

  65. On An Awesome Dream [LoA Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Note: Too bad I wasn’t alive when this would’ve taken place!

  66. On An Awesome Dream [LoA Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I’m not in the League, but might I suggest “Awesome-ble” to be put in the rally cry somewhere?
    I don’t know about anyone else, but that sounds like it would be hilarious to me. :D
    I can’t wait to see where this goes, too. There’s a lot of things you can work with.

  67. On Mr. Nefarious and Sonny Schore:

    posted 3 months ago

    LOI, I’d love to see this continue as well.
    A name like Mr. Nefarious needs more air time than just one ficlet. :D

  68. On Indecent Intent 4 (Melia and Tad Winslow's Collaboration):

    posted 3 months ago

    Oh my god!
    I don’t often say that, so I’m awestruck here. I can feel the woman’s distaste/hatred/malcontent.
    Keep going!

  69. On The Betrayer Speaks:

    posted 3 months ago

    That really does fit the picture, and gives it some GREAT back story for someone else (or yourself) to work with.

  70. On Time for a Story of Returning:

    posted 3 months ago

    Oh my! A vampire? An angel? Something else?
    This really catches a reader’s curiosity.

  71. On My Stargirl:

    posted 3 months ago

    I don’t know what to say.
    That’s beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

  72. On Indecent Intent 3 (Melia and Tad Winslow's Collaboration):

    posted 3 months ago

    ...This…is…amazing…
    I love it.
    Please continue.

  73. On 5 More Awkward Things To Do or Say Right Before The Lights Go Out:

    posted 3 months ago

    2 is my favorite. :D

  74. On And the winners is... (Part 2, Ficlet Quadrathilon):

    posted 3 months ago

    Also, if anyone still wants to contribute to the challenges, you won’t get an award, but I’d love to read it. :) You may just have to inform me that you did so.

  75. On Echolocation, Country Style:

    posted 4 months ago

    I remember these guys!
    This is great!!

  76. On Doing Time:

    posted 4 months ago

    You are very good at suspenseful endings, sir. It’s almost frustrating.

  77. On Imprisonment:

    posted 4 months ago

    Well, this is perplexing! What’s going to happen next?

  78. On Read Me:

    posted 4 months ago

    Wow.
    I admit it took me a bit to grasp the concept of this, but now that I’ve got it, it blows my mind.
    I’m not sure that makes sense, but it’s a good thing nonetheless.

  79. On Rap II: The Rappening:

    posted 4 months ago

    Well, you made me laugh at least. :)

  80. On An Employment Opportunity:

    posted 4 months ago

    I agree with Elsha.

  81. On United Flight 93:

    posted 4 months ago

    How interesting!!
    I’d like an explanation of this whole thing, though it seems to be nearly to it’s end?
    [I’d be interested to see it continue though]

  82. On Aaarg, sir: Profile Picture Challenge:

    posted 4 months ago

    I was wondering about your icon!
    Now I know!

  83. On Golden Amnesia:

    posted 4 months ago

    You have a point, but you might catch more readers if some of it’s not. More people are reading mature ficlets now though.

  84. On Something Smells Like Fish In Rome (6 men I'd do):

    posted 4 months ago

    I think I’ve heard similar about Adam, after I finished this, I realized how many I missed.

  85. On Golden Amnesia:

    posted 4 months ago

    Oh my! How interesting!
    This didn’t really need to be mature though.

  86. On A Game of Quotations:

    posted 4 months ago

    Sequeled.
    I got a bit of Dogma out of it, myself. Hope you like my sequel. Nothing really happens, but I was okay with it.

  87. On A Game of Quotations:

    posted 4 months ago

    I really wish I knew what this was from in order that I could continue it, but I am lost. This is not Sparta. (inside joke)

    Very enjoyable though.

  88. On Something Smells Like Fish In Rome (6 men I'd do):

    posted 4 months ago

    ‘Twas rather the point of that one. :D
    The Marquis would probably kill me as well…

    I’m not sure which way I meant, though.

  89. On 5 Women I'd Like to Pork: It's a Coffee-Table Book (Historical Edition):

    posted 4 months ago

    Haha!

    I love the “sleeping with a saint appeals to my blasphemous nature.”

    I think I’m like that about monks, I watched the Martin Luther movie and Mmmm…

    You’re great, sir.

  90. On Golden Penthouse:

    posted 4 months ago

    Ooo!! I must know what happens next!

  91. On Stress Relief Tablet :

    posted 4 months ago

    Wow, you rather remind me of myself. Except I’m a girl.

    I LOVE how you switched to a sci-fi war scene, that touch itself says something about you.

  92. On Something Extra [Minimum Length Ficlet Challenge]:

    posted 4 months ago

    Just awesome.
    The funniest part, for me: My boyfriend’s name is Steven.
    Even though it’s a fairly common name, the fact that you picked that name particularly adds a touch of personal hilarity.

  93. On The Angry Comic:

    posted 4 months ago

    I love the grouchy dudes, I think I remember who you’re referencing there. And they’re awesome. :D Surprised nobody commented about them.

  94. On Don't Call When You're On Painkillers And Booze:

    posted 4 months ago

    I love that you brought up Dionysus as a reference in there. Highly uncommon, I liked that little bit.

  95. On Golden Ruminations:

    posted 4 months ago

    Yes, I want to know what stopped her as well!
    [Also, I love the “And they give me gas.” part as for why she doesn’t like eating children. It’s like the comedian who said one of his reasons for not eating babies is “I don’t have time.”]

  96. On Bad Girls Go Deep:

    posted 4 months ago

    Ooo!! Like I’ve asked before, I’d love to see a description of how it feels.

  97. On Jesus, I Am Your Father:

    posted 4 months ago

    Raptor Jesus: He went extinct for your sins.

    Another note: This came to me while sitting in church for the final advent service. I’m not sure if that means it was blasphemy, or if God has a great sense of humor.

  98. On A Disturbing Sequel to WENDYS BACONATOR hahahhahahaah:

    posted 4 months ago

    What was your wish? :-P
    Very good.

  99. On Nymist...all natural psychosis enhancement {What a Twist Challenge}:

    posted 4 months ago

    I suppose that’s one of those rare side effects that nobody listens to. Haha!

  100. On The Convention {Vampire Challenge}:

    posted 4 months ago

    I like the two competing factions idea too. :)

  101. On The Chase:

    posted 4 months ago

    Very fun. :) I can’t wait to see what happens when they catch her!

  102. On A Practical Guide to Vampirism: How To (1-A):

    posted 4 months ago

    I love the footnote.

  103. On Bad Girls Go Back for Seconds:

    posted 4 months ago

    I love the last few lines, and look forward to seeing how she eats Chet. :D

  104. On Golden Digestion:

    posted 4 months ago

    Mmm…I love the description at the beginning.

  105. On [The Gassy Challenge] ...For A Breath Of Fresh Air:

    posted 4 months ago

    ...Who?
    I do like how you used the quote in one piece. I hadn’t thought of that application, either.
    Kudos, sir!

  106. On Five Things I'll Deny If You Ask:

    posted 4 months ago

    1 really resonates with me right now. I’m thinking that same thing. (I’m only 17, and at the Associate’s level of getting my PhD in Psychology)

  107. On 80th COMMENT FICLET CHALLENGE:

    posted 4 months ago

    I wish I thought I was up to it. But I read uselessness’s ficlet before I read this, and I cannot hope to compete with that.
    Lovely idea for a challenge though.

  108. On Rising From Ruins:

    posted 4 months ago

    That is absolutely amazing, awesome, and awe-inspiring.
    Beautiful, even.

  109. On Stiff:

    posted 4 months ago

    Oh shoot! I actually don’t think I saw that coming.

  110. On Example? [Worst Ficlet Challenge]:

    posted 4 months ago

    Of course, I have left myself a loophole in case someone decides to make a great ficlet for this and it comes out beautifully, in which case I will at least mention that fact at some point.

  111. On Example? [Worst Ficlet Challenge]:

    posted 4 months ago

    Apparently I really don’t know the meaning of fricative, it’s just a fun word to say.
    Does it matter that I don’t even know a way to find the definition of fricative? Not for this ficlet!
    All you need to do is FEEL what fricative is supposed to mean.
    Anyway, this is an example, I’d rather it be prequeled if you feel like messing with it, but neither it nor its affiliated attachments will likely be part of the official contest.

  112. On Bad Girls Eat Quickly:

    posted 4 months ago

    I love the last line. :D

  113. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 4 months ago

    I know, and I realized that after I posted my comment.
    Like uselessness said, it’s all in the eye of the beholder.

  114. On A Dream of Dirty Water:

    posted 4 months ago

    Sounds like a zoo?

  115. On 80 ficlet challenge:

    posted 4 months ago

    I’m afraid to do the description challenge itself, but I’ll surely try to do the comments!

  116. On 5 Things I Hate Talking About:

    posted 4 months ago

    2, 3, and 4.
    As for 5, most people think I’m shy, but I’m afraid I’m too open. There’s nothing I’ve never told anyone, except other people’s secrets.

  117. On 5 things I've Never Told Anyone:

    posted 4 months ago

    Agreed on Number one, and I’m not even old enough to have kids yet.

  118. On 5 things I've never told anyone:

    posted 4 months ago

    Agreed on 4 and 5.

  119. On 5 things I have never told anyone:

    posted 4 months ago

    Agreed on 3 and 4.
    (I’m doing this so people don’t feel alone. :) )

  120. On Five Things I've Never Told:

    posted 4 months ago

    Agreed on 2, 3, and 5.

  121. On A New & Improved 5 things I've Never Told Anyone, with a few touch-ups:

    posted 4 months ago

    Mine’s here:
    http://ficlets.com/stories/16083
    I thought we were sequeling in a line, not just sequeling one ficlet.

  122. On 5 Things I've Never Told Anyone Online:

    posted 4 months ago

    ...I’m assuming those aren’t right? (at least most aren’t, hopefully?)

  123. On [Worst Ficlet Challenge] No One Ever Feels Sorry For Me:

    posted 4 months ago

    Maybe I’m out of my mind, but I’d like to see this continue…

  124. On [Worst Ficlet Challenge] No One Ever Feels Sorry For Me:

    posted 4 months ago

    Wow…You guys make a GREAT team. (but I think we all knew that already)

    I’m STILL laughing. (Hopefully you think that’s an appropriate response.)

  125. On WENDYS BACONATER hahahhahahaah:

    posted 4 months ago

    That made me laugh :D

  126. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 4 months ago

    Ah…I’m not quite sure exactly. I think my definition of bad leaned toward “unreadable”
    If you look up “Smiley-sun and the Nazi, A Retelling” in my ficlets, then look at what I wrote it from, that combination is pretty much what I’m going for.
    Or look at the “Blocked” & “Blocked from my heart” things, they do basically the same thing.

  127. On Golden Tummy:

    posted 4 months ago

    I want to know more about how she feels with him inside her. Does he wiggle? Does that feel good?
    I like a lot of descriptions, especially when it comes to new ideas like this.

  128. On And Then You Had Dinner:

    posted 4 months ago

    I’m really looking forward to what you have planned to shock the narrator the next morning.
    I’ve just realized though, that I don’t know the gender of the narrator?
    So far, that’s my only complaint. :)

  129. On Bad Girls' Hors d'Oeuvres Choose Them:

    posted 4 months ago

    I’m looking forward to what happens next. :P

  130. On ScapeGoat [Worst Ficlet Challenge]:

    posted 4 months ago

    ...That’s really not that bad.
    It didn’t say much, but it’s not that bad.

  131. On Bad Girls Make an Entrance:

    posted 4 months ago

    Yay! I’m glad you continued this!

  132. On In High Places:

    posted 4 months ago

    ZOMG!! I suppose I will have to continue it myself…It’ll have to be a bit later though. I think I have just the thing too!

  133. On Blown Out of Proportion, Again:

    posted 4 months ago

    Oh no! Poor woman! I can’t wait for you to continue!

  134. On Prostitute Party Prep:

    posted 4 months ago

    Ooo! Ooo! Ooo!
    Keep going! Keep going!
    [Glad to see you’re back, by the way. :)]

  135. On The King of Mars Dead End Challenge:

    posted 4 months ago

    http://ficlets.com/stories/15959
    “Morning” (couldn’t think of a better title)
    Sequel to: “Up All Night, Part 2”

  136. On The King of Mars Dead End Challenge:

    posted 4 months ago

    I think I remember Up All Night…If it’s the one I think it is, I’ll sequel it when I finish my online test (or possibly sequel someone’s sequel, if they get to it first.)
    Yes, it was the one I thought it was. :D It shall be done!

  137. On The Mind Of The Enemy:

    posted 4 months ago

    Haha, incompetence and genius at the same time…Brilliant!

  138. On The Horrors Of War (pt. 3):

    posted 4 months ago

    OMG. They killed him with a gorram CAT PROJECTILE.
    ...Wow.

  139. On Let In [twist challenge]:

    posted 4 months ago

    Wow…I would’ve never thought that could come from what I wrote.

  140. On The Researcher's Friend:

    posted 4 months ago

    Haha! That’s great!!

  141. On Out of Gas [gassy challenge]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Very good. :)

  142. On Random Outbursts of Songs feat. Cheese [[Worst Ficlet Challenge]]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh wow…
    Good luck to whoever rewrites this.

  143. On [Mode For Love Challenge] Build Your Own Bride:

    posted 5 months ago

    Thing is, I am filled out in all the right places, at least according to my boyfriend, so, assuming he’s the one making me, it works. :D

  144. On Butcher's Blues{ What a Twist Challenge}:

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha! That’s lovely!
    Very, very nice :D

  145. On [Mode For Love Challenge] Build Your Own Bride:

    posted 5 months ago

    Here’s an interesting tidbit for you all: I actually visualized that I was the one being made. And that’s the motivation for the last line. :P

  146. On If At First, Etc.:

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha! Nice one, Howie!
    Where are the other archangels, though?

  147. On FyoraCartagan's Rhyming...Musical Thing?:

    posted 5 months ago

    I don’t think it’s really a rap but it came out better than I’d hoped, though it doesn’t have my name in it because…I just don’t like using it.

  148. On [YodaOnCrack's Rap Challenge] An Unexceptional Nom de Plume:

    posted 5 months ago

    You know you can change your name on here, right?

  149. On Turtles All The Way Down:

    posted 5 months ago

    That’ll technically make 3 Lucifers…The question is, what will be different about this one?

  150. On [Mode For Love Challenge] Flowers For Sara (pt. 2):

    posted 5 months ago

    Aww! Poor Billy. :( He may be a robot, but that doesn’t mean his A.I. can’t generate feelings!!

  151. On Purging:

    posted 5 months ago

    Very lovely continuation, I have a feeling that you know more about 40k than I do.
    But you missed a detail: There’s a Tyranid in the closet. :D
    I’d love to see you continue this, since you know a bit more than I do.

  152. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 5 months ago

    I’d rather you didn’t, personally. Especially since you know what you were trying to write.

  153. On Warlord (King of Mars) lyrics:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hmmm…I’m not good at raps, myself. But this makes me want to write one about myself. I’m not sure much rhymes with “Cartagan” though, other than sweaters.
    Great job :D

  154. On From A to Z:

    posted 5 months ago

    Wow…
    That sucks.
    Please continue.

  155. On Learning Curve:

    posted 5 months ago

    Ooh!! Where is he going?

  156. On Slave Girl (Part 4):

    posted 5 months ago

    haha, cliffhanger.
    I have a few things I must say though:
    1: Her name is Katherine, the boot camp man said it.
    2: It is written in 1st person, from Alana’s Point of View.
    The point of view change kinda messed with my head.

  157. On Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    Yes, I agree with Phosphate11.

  158. On Battleship:

    posted 5 months ago

    Dude, that’s awesome!!!

  159. On Brothers Grim And Greek:

    posted 5 months ago

    2 things about this jumped out at me:
    1: Barbara is my name o:
    2: I’m reminded of Shaun of the Dead? Shaun’s mom is named Barbara…
    Not your best…Realistic though.

  160. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 5 months ago

    The points will be secret until the end <.< >.> {or shortly before the end}

  161. On Library Boy:

    posted 5 months ago

    Aww! That’s cute! That’s just like the guy I wrote it about too!
    Not quite me, but you were writing as a girl, and you nailed him!

  162. On The indian:

    posted 5 months ago

    Out of curiosity, which kind of Indian? I think that vital detail is missing from this story. (You’d be surprised how vital it is, because you don’t know what sort of accents to imagine he has, or what his facial structure would be like.)
    Other than that little problem, I enjoyed the real-life-ness of this story. I’d like to see it continue. :D

  163. On Body Builder Heartbreak:

    posted 5 months ago

    ...I never thought I’d see the day where I saw “supraventricular tachycardia” in a poem. O.O

    Your poem is fascinating. I know nothing about the world of Body Building, and to see it in a poem is just really unusual. But it’s very well done!

  164. On [Cinema Challenge] Confrontation:

    posted 5 months ago

    Mostly A Clockwork Orange quotes, because I’ve actually read the book, and loved it.

    I have one rather pointless Barbarella quote because I felt I had to.

    This is actually based off of how much I hate my ex…

  165. On 150 Ficlets!!! Miss Bardot's Campy and Kitschy Cinema Challenge!:

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh dear, oh dear, oh dear…I have a feeling that my college years are going to be horrible with them re-making Barbarella for 2009. (Though I have no idea what it is really about)
    (My name is Barbara, in case none of you have figured it out.)

  166. On A Practical Guide to Vampirism: Myths and Misconceptions (4):

    posted 5 months ago

    It’s interesting how this basically throws everything you know about vampires out the window. XD
    I’m loving it.

  167. On G4591 Version 7.5: Griffin the Impossible {I;m in the MOde for Love Challenge}:

    posted 5 months ago

    Do you work in tech support?
    That was amusing, I’d like more detail though.

  168. On [CHALLENGE] I'M IN THE MODE FOR LOVE:

    posted 5 months ago

    Strange that I had planned something like this previously, but never had the courage to have it pan out…
    I suppose this gives me an excuse to try it…It will take some time though.

  169. On WWDD?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Not all vampires were sexual deviants? (Okay, that last one was mildly disappointing, somehow)
    ~
    That line amuses me immensely. Please keep going!

  170. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 5 months ago

    Coordinated, uncoordinated, it doesn’t matter, just someone HAS to make sure that the better ficlet is written. (And a “couple” will be credited with the win) Also, they can then switch roles and enter again.

  171. On The Ficlet Quadrathilon (Fyora's 100th ficlet challenge(s) ):

    posted 5 months ago

    I’m thinking I’ll probably end the contest on January 7th, that’s when I go back to school.

  172. On The Butcher:

    posted 5 months ago

    This is for the butcher who made eye contact with me at Winn-Dixie.

  173. On A Practical Guide to Vampirism: Myths and Misconceptions (2-B):

    posted 5 months ago

    If only we had such a picture…
    This is still greatly entertaining without it, though.

  174. On Simon the Not-So-Intelligent Designer:

    posted 5 months ago

    @Lady Scapegrace:
    I think I now know how William Golding felt.

  175. On Levitation:

    posted 5 months ago

    I’m enjoying this story, so far. :D But may I request that you put more spacing into your ficlets, rather than just between paragraphs? It helps people read it more easily.

  176. On A Practical Guide to Vampirism: Myths and Misconceptions (1-B):

    posted 5 months ago

    Yes, this is highly enjoyable, please go on. :D

  177. On Leather pants:

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha! I just LIKE this story. Not sure what it is, exactly, but I like it. :D

  178. On Fallen Star:

    posted 5 months ago

    Very simple, and short, but it’s good like that. I would’ve liked it to be longer, but you don’t push poetry in that respect.

    I would love more detail on this, I think.

  179. On Livy Witnessed Her Fathers Death:

    posted 5 months ago

    I would’ve liked to see that spaced out a bit, but the lack of space does add to a sense of urgency/danger.
    I do like the “engine roared like the devil’s laugh” line, but in general, I think you need more description.
    Very good otherwise though. :D

  180. On And the World comes tumbling Down:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hmm…What are the words, I wonder?
    I think it needs a bit more poetry in it to be organized that way, but I’m not sure how to help you with that.

  181. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    I almost forgot…

    Simon has apparently created a world full of velociraptors…

    In the true image of their creator, maybe?

  182. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    But he smote/smited the dinosaurs, including velociraptors, right? Then again, God has smitten/smote/smited humanity many times and we survived, and some of us still follow him.
    Hm…Veloci-Noah?

  183. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    This story is on its way to being a banned substance.


    I certainly agree with you there!

  184. On uselessness's DESPERATE MONOLOGUES Challenge!:

    posted 5 months ago

    I’d love to this, but sadly I’m not too good at first-person. Anything longer than two sentences and I’m into third person, usually.

  185. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Alright, but I’m not doing it.
    ...The proverbial “Not It!”

  186. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh dear, oh dear…
    Mmm…Do you know anything about Stargate SG-1 and Ascension? (If not, wiki it) I think that might be a good course of action, as opposed to suicide, considering the amount of time that would take.

  187. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yes, yes, but I wanted him to be a good guy…(at least secretly, like a double agent) And I wanted to see him obsess over Simon henceforward, but you see it how you see it. :D
    I just don’t know how Simon’s going to get out of this.

  188. On Why Do You Think They Call Him The Adversary?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh no!!
    I never would’ve expected that of Luc!!! Absolutely beautiful though, the idea of it. It just makes me sad that you made Luc secretly evil. :(
    That figures though, of course.

  189. On Vampire Fruit?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hahahaha!!
    Vampire Apple, that’s a great idea.

  190. On Goin' Out, Goin' Out Tonight:

    posted 5 months ago

    Y’know, this vaguely reminds me of On the Road, except I actually liked this. (I’m currently doing a report on the book, so I hate it right now.)

  191. On Why Pole Dancing Isn't Funny:

    posted 5 months ago

    ::giggle:: I find that vastly amusing, however un-PC it is.

  192. On [Abstinence] The Abstinence Challenge!:

    posted 5 months ago

    I offer this as inspiration:
    Janie cried out in passion “Ohh, God!!! You hit it!!!! You did it!!!! You sunk my battleship!”

    Steve looked at his board and muttered. “Who would’ve thought G….”

  193. On Needles:

    posted 5 months ago

    That was jaw-dropping. It took me a bit after I finished reading to realize what had actually happened, and my mouth actually hung open for a bit.
    In my opinion, at least for this subject, that makes it REALLY good writing.

  194. On Biography of a Captive:

    posted 5 months ago

    THE* experiment in Point of Views.

    My mistake. :D

  195. On Biography of a Captive:

    posted 5 months ago

    I love how you continued your experiment in Point-of-Views. This sounds like it was told from the POV of the village gossip, and that’s perfect after seeing it from “the gods’ ” perspective.
    Thank you for the sequel. :D

  196. On Acrylic Bars:

    posted 5 months ago

    I think it’s cool, but things like this ALWAYS need a sequel. And, in my experience, only godlike beings speak in this tense.
    Very good though. :D And an interesting idea, especially because how he feels about painting is how I feel, usually, about writing and academics in general.

  197. On The Girl Across the Ballroom:

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh oh! Do go on!
    I very much like the tone of this, and I love the idea of this, please go on.

  198. On A Bowl of Fruit:

    posted 5 months ago

    Absolutely lovely. I’m not usually a fan of vampire stories, but this is definitely a great exception.

    I’d love to see you write more, in this or other things.

  199. On The Cold:

    posted 5 months ago

    Wow…I’m not quite sure what this is describing (Death maybe?) but it’s certainly great.

  200. On To Serve Droid:

    posted 5 months ago

    I love the detail in this. My only wonder is why no police or neighbors have come to remove the body?

  201. On Hell is other people... in chatrooms!:

    posted 5 months ago

    Based on a true story?

  202. On Black Art:

    posted 5 months ago

    I can’t wait to see where this goes next, it’s very intriguing.

  203. On Gorilla Matriarch:

    posted 5 months ago

    ...and what does that have to do with a gorilla?
    Well written, I’m just curious about that?

  204. On Backless Chaps:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hahahahahahahaha. Oh dear… You really tickled my funny bone with this. I loved it.
    I’m hoping it wasn’t based on a true story, though?

  205. On Luc the Happy Lightbringer:

    posted 5 months ago

    First, I think it was a while back in the Simon & Blake series that we had Lucifer previously, and all of them made Ficlet Nirvana? Well, this one did too.

    Second, I based Luc, loosely, off of Stephen Lynch’s portrayal of him in his song “Beelz”

    Third, I realized today why normal devil portrayals look like they do. They were actually portraying Pan. Lucifer/Satan should actually look like an angel, except maybe missing wings, after he fell. Though of course he can change shape.

  206. On Morbid Sense of Humor:

    posted 5 months ago

    This was great. :D I must inform you that the chasing the dragon thing nearly amused me, though. Especially since the first time I’d heard of it was on South Park, under the guise of “Heroin Hero” where the object of the game is to catch the dragon, but you can’t ever do it.

  207. On The Pleading Gaunt:

    posted 5 months ago

    Also, just so everyone knows, a “Gaunt” is an abbreviation of “Hormagaunt”, it’s a sub-specie of Tyranid. Which, now that I actually see one, looks exactly like I imagined it did, the exception is the length of the claws, and that the picture appears to have no feet.
    http://kofler.dot.at/40k/tyranid.html < Use Ctrl+F to find “Hormagaunt”

  208. On Loved that Losing Feeling:

    posted 5 months ago

    Aww! How sweet!

  209. On Sweatin' Bullets:

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha, that’s great!
    I love the “I just passed out from the pain, like a real man.” line.
    Sir, you are great.

  210. On Crab Creature on Steroids:

    posted 5 months ago

    I think this was a very good idea, but it needs some technical work? The change from past tense to present tense really threw me off in some sentences.
    I hate for that to be what I’m picky about, though, because I’ve been picked at about it all my life.

  211. On A City Swarmed:

    posted 5 months ago

    I’m liking this series, especially since something similar to this actually happens on some island somewhere. Google it, and I’m sure you can find a picture of a street running red/orange with crabs.
    Please go on!

  212. On Jenunique's 50th (actually 51st) Ficlet Challenge:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yay, first one in!

  213. On The Pleading Gaunt:

    posted 5 months ago

    What I saw: A monster pleading with a human attacker not to kill him because he’s actually a friend/relative/boyfriend of hers. I
    made it a Tyranid because that’s relevant to my own boyfriend, even though the picture really doesn’t look like my understanding of a Tyranid.

  214. On Plan B:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yay! Awesome, as always!

  215. On Pop Bottle Pete Loves Big Ida {Shocking Dialogue Challenge}:

    posted 5 months ago

    This is awesome. :D I loved it. There’s no describing its greatness more than that.

  216. On Sizzler Steakhouse Story (Tad Winslow's 80th Comment Ficlet Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    That makes my tongue want to jump out of my mouth and run off to join Riverdance.
    ...That probably makes no sense at all, but that’s how it feels.
    Highly amusing though, I just want to know why he needs money and a stack of steaks.

  217. On The fall:

    posted 5 months ago

    I’m loving this story, please continue!

  218. On I Love Him (Prequel to I Love Her):

    posted 5 months ago

    Just pure awesomeness.

  219. On I Love Her (Sequel to I Love Him):

    posted 5 months ago

    These are awesome. Beautiful.

  220. On To Serve Man:

    posted 5 months ago

    I disagree. It has been done before, but it was well written.
    Rather sad, though. But it’s coldly written, as the tale of a robot should be.

  221. On The Taste of Midnight:

    posted 5 months ago

    Huh, who, wha?
    I don’t know what’s going on, but so far I like it that way because it makes sense. His animal-ness is evident in the way this flows, it just goes and doesn’t explain anything an animal wouldn’t know. Very, very good.

  222. On Battologizzze:

    posted 5 months ago

    Inspired by the t.A.T.u. & Rammstein mix called “Battologizzze”

  223. On Lovers Worry(Shocking Dialouge Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    Dude…
    That’s really great. I wish there was more leading up to it though.
    (This kind of thing happened to my boyfriend, his first girlfriend died…)

  224. On Molly, Robin Hood of Mars Episode V: Radiation Day (Part 2):

    posted 5 months ago

    Hey, why haven’t you continued this?
    Just curious, I remember seeing this when I was back a while ago, and I was captivated by it.
    I just thought you should know. :D

  225. On [Abstinence] Hot Dog (You Knew It Was Coming):

    posted 5 months ago

    Do what? You’re stalking me and have a video tape of me eating a hot dog!? O_O
    Haha, that sounds like a GREAT idea for a story, you stalking me and all…

  226. On [Abstinence] Setting The Table:

    posted 5 months ago

    It might just be that when I set the table, I concentrate on placement of things, and things have to go exactly right. {Fork on the left, spoon & knife on the right, and I never know in what order…And I don’t understand WHY the fork is on the left.}
    Things like sex just go as they go though, unlike setting the table. I think that difference just bothers me…

  227. On [Shocking Dialogue] The Prophet:

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha! That’s GREAT!!!

  228. On Spoiler Alert (Uselessness' Shocking Dialogue Challenge, and maybe you shouldn't read this...):

    posted 5 months ago

    I got the War of the Worlds, and that was the ONLY one I got.
    Despite that, it was enjoyable. :)

  229. On [Abstinence] Delicious Milkshakes:

    posted 5 months ago

    Out of the guidelines or not, I liked it and it made me giggle. :D

  230. On Abduction [Shocking Dialogue Challenge]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Strangely, I actually think I knew that was coming?
    It’s still twisted though, and I like it.

  231. On [Abstinence] The Abstinence Challenge!:

    posted 5 months ago

    I think I may submit two? I’m not sure yet, but I already posted one…

  232. On [Abstinence] Hot Dog (You Knew It Was Coming):

    posted 5 months ago

    The amusing thing about this story is that I just recently wrote a ficlet series about a hot dog…

  233. On [Abstinence] Setting The Table:

    posted 5 months ago

    I think it needs a bit more sex…Not sure exactly what’s missing, though… I just think it needs more words with naughty connotations than just very detailed description. Very enjoyable though. :D

  234. On [Abstinence] Size Seven Boots:

    posted 5 months ago

    Very good :D And to think I was just trying on boots the other day…

  235. On [Abstinence] The Tweezers & The Petri Dish:

    posted