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On Not Again:

posted 8 months ago

nice, like the ending and the pace. I like this line Walk off into the sunset like a good post-apocalyptic gunslinger.
On Delight, Disruption, and Disappointment:

posted 9 months ago

funny…..
On Dancing...:

posted 10 months ago

randomness.
On Saving Sam:

posted about 1 year ago

ufo…I wasn’t expecting that. good one.
On The Distant Soldier:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done, captures the emotion.
On The Voice of Insanity:

posted about 1 year ago

cool! haven’t read the other stories in the series, but i didn’t need to, this was good.
On Searcy Will Pay:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, like the randomness.
On Orange Blossoms, Lava Rivers, and Balloons:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done. i really like the ending.
On Pondering Death:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, like it!
On You are Beautiful:

posted about 1 year ago

this was good!
On Prison, maybe.:

posted about 1 year ago

it wasn’t that bad. i liked it.
On In the Heat of Battle:

posted about 1 year ago

very powerful, like it!
On Temporary People:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting, i liked how you talked about the snapshot.
On Chinese Condensed Milk:

posted about 1 year ago

i love condensed milk!
On Picnic Tables:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, insightful.
On Monkey See, Monkey Do:

posted about 1 year ago

nice setup.
On Peace in the Fog:

posted about 1 year ago

this is good, like it.
On Why Don't You Fly?:

posted about 1 year ago

Ever since they told you you couldn’t fly. I would write this as, “Ever since they told that you couldn’t fly”, too may yous. otherwise I like it, nice one.
On Crying Over Spilt Ovaltine:

posted about 1 year ago

amusing…
On Escape :

posted about 1 year ago

nice. like it.
On My 100th Ficlet and a Message: Your Choice:

posted about 1 year ago

congrats! miles to go before you sleep…
On Open Up and say, "SHARK ATTACK!!!!":

posted about 1 year ago

ha! ha! $1,000,000 ? bit pricey, but as you said, worth it. good one.
On Show Me How Deep Your Hurt Is:

posted about 1 year ago

this is good, i like the second para. i think in the first para, you could use some metaphors rather than saying it directly.
On Apocalypse: Twelve Gauge:

posted about 1 year ago

nice job with the ending, like it.
On No Survivors: Apocalypse :

posted about 1 year ago

nice, very descriptive.
On Van Mantra's Trial :

posted about 1 year ago

i like how you ended it. the opening could be improved.
On Instructions on How to Kill a Poet:

posted about 1 year ago

This is the style of the Argentine writer Julio Cortázar.
On 50 Doors:

posted about 1 year ago

I like it. i haven’t read the other ones, but as a standalone ficlet, this is good. nice description of the area.
On Jars of Nothing:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting.
On The house on the hill:

posted about 1 year ago

nice and short.
On Miss Direction:

posted about 1 year ago

good work in taking the story into different places. like it.
On Black Gowns:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, like it.
On The worst story ever.... or is it?:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting concept, but little predictible. i kind of like the informal tone, but could be improved.
On Right back for more:

posted about 1 year ago

nice rhythm.
On Hot Summer Night:

posted about 1 year ago

yup, nicely done, well placed. me too on the ending
On A different Way of Thinking:

posted about 1 year ago

beautiful! i like the shift in the last paragraph.
On John Cage: A Biography in 4' 33":

posted about 1 year ago

i got it! this is funny.
On A Midnight Snack.:

posted about 1 year ago

lovely, nicely paced and well written. more?
On You Know Me:

posted about 1 year ago

ooh, haunting! I like where this is going.
On Phantasmagoria:

posted about 1 year ago

nice. i like how you used the rose.
On Hall of influence.:

posted about 1 year ago

interesing. the arch actually looks line a “n”.
On Inside the Labyrinth:

posted about 1 year ago

good one. i like the imagery in the second para.
On Mother lied.:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely written.
On scars of life:

posted about 1 year ago

it started well, but i think the last stanza didn’t do it for me.
On Loopback:

posted about 1 year ago

the last could be written better. maybe I wasn’t parsing it right. this is good, like it.
On The Ground Was Her Shoe:

posted about 1 year ago

nice one!
On Diary of a collapsing star:

posted about 1 year ago

i like the concept.
On One kiss:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, like it. short and simple.
On One iPhone to Rule Them All…:

posted about 1 year ago

nice
On Requiem:

posted about 1 year ago

nice description.
On The Corporation, Inc.:

posted about 1 year ago

this is good. like the ending.
On Suicide in the Rainy City:

posted about 1 year ago

nice ending.
On River's Touch:

posted about 1 year ago

i like the haunting sound of this one.
On Surveillance :

posted about 1 year ago

interesting ending…
On Divide By One:

posted about 1 year ago

congrats on the 100!
On Punked Out Pixies:

posted about 1 year ago

nice picture of the character.
On Sweet Bliss :

posted about 1 year ago

nice….!
On Daydreaming :

posted about 1 year ago

i like it.
On Statue:

posted about 1 year ago

short and sweet.
On The Red Sox Suck:

posted about 1 year ago

I don’t understand baseball, but this is good.
On Subsistence:

posted about 1 year ago

nice.
spams are great inspiration for ficlets
On Roger's Last Day Part 6:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done, i like the build up.
On Train of thoughts:

posted about 1 year ago

ya, that’s what I was alluding to i guess.
On you never told me:

posted about 1 year ago

cool. The beginning reminded me of Nancy Sinatra’s Bang Bang
On Stevie Is Not A Murderer:

posted about 1 year ago

cool, great one.
On Dinner died a long time ago:

posted about 1 year ago

nice!
On A Real Bargain:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting concept, like it.
On Human Element :

posted about 1 year ago

good one. i liked the sombre tone it started with. nice.
On Sybil Unafraid:

posted about 1 year ago

intense! I liked how it started but felt detached at the end.
On Why Cant I learn:

posted about 1 year ago

good start, i think she has potential to turn into a complex charecter. good job.
On The Assasination:

posted about 1 year ago

oooh, nice!
On Truck Stop:

posted about 1 year ago

i once knew a guy named ryan lambert. another good one.
On 2 A.M., Purgatory Diner:

posted about 1 year ago

nice…!
On Insomniac's Eyes:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting.
On Can He Catch You?:

posted about 1 year ago

yup, nice description. enjoyed it.
On All About the Red Stilettos:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done. like it.
On Behind Red-Shuttered Windows:

posted about 1 year ago

good.
On A desk:

posted about 1 year ago

nice detail
On Supressed Urges:

posted about 1 year ago

yes, kill the bunny!!! good one.
On The Cow Did What?!?!?!?:

posted about 1 year ago

disturbing, but funny.
On Writer's Block:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting setup. I like how you started it.
On Corner Cafe:

posted about 1 year ago

yup. I concur. this is good.
On 2 Man Show:

posted about 1 year ago

good setup
On Home at Last:

posted about 1 year ago

The salty breeze caressed my bare legs and tossed my turquoise skirt around my knees coyly
I like this line. another good one. keep it up.
On The Fall of an Infamous Pirate:

posted about 1 year ago

gripping…
On The Gig:

posted about 1 year ago

nice. like it.
On Forgetting The Rule:

posted about 1 year ago

beautiful
On A Voice like a River:

posted about 1 year ago

oh ya, haven’t we all been there…nice.
On Ignorance is Bliss for the Ignorant:

posted about 1 year ago

there is a nice beat to it. me likey.
On ZZZ:

posted about 1 year ago

nice!
On Mini Creation:

posted about 1 year ago

yup, good one.
On When The Cows Came Home:

posted about 1 year ago

moo! nice one. have you seen this,
http://www.cowswithguns.com/
I liked most of it, except the last part.
On Black Ink:

posted about 1 year ago

late night randomness….
On The beginning of the pic:

posted about 1 year ago

ha! ha!, cute.
On Self Knows Self:

posted about 1 year ago

good one, like it except the big words. I think you can do without those.
On Eight Dollars in Cuba:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, well written.
On I am a skeleton:

posted about 1 year ago

Thanks!
On A story :

posted about 1 year ago

wow, nice. good one.
On summer:

posted about 1 year ago

yay! i love pink lemonade!
On Flat Hicks disappeared for a day:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, good one.
On Words Unspoken: Quiet Suffering:

posted about 1 year ago

nice…!
On On Childhood:

posted about 1 year ago

nice usage of the theme. like it.
On water faults:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, you are taking it in a interesting direction.
On Presence:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I liked the opening setting, good narration I am not a big fan dialogs. good work, wasn’t wordy at all.
On Drenched in the rain:

posted about 1 year ago

I guess i went for the happy ending.
On Tears in my dream:

posted about 1 year ago

thanks for the comments, I am glad you liked it.
On The Mystery of the Missing Father:

posted about 1 year ago

nice start. like it.
On The Butler's Secret:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, yes love the ending.
On The Great Fairwell:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done. i like it.
On Hate me:

posted about 1 year ago

agree with yoda. nice one.
On Layover in coffee heaven:

posted about 1 year ago

i love the title!
On The arches form my memories of you:

posted about 1 year ago

I was lost in the last few lines, bit confused, but liked the poetic feel that it had in the begining. nice.
On Pills:

posted about 1 year ago

nice rhyme.
On Random God Blurb:

posted about 1 year ago

I love Rumi!
On Searching for a plot in a plotless story 2:

posted about 1 year ago

very ranmod, but nicely done. like it.
On The day the sun stood still:

posted about 1 year ago

nice imagery in the first paragrahph, Yes, very random, but I liked it.
On Pomp and Circumstance:

posted about 1 year ago

I didn’t know what jejune meant. nice one.
On A question of scale:

posted about 1 year ago

nice. you should send this as a spam. :)
On Driving through the City:

posted about 1 year ago

It started well, but the last few lines seem out of place. well written though.
On Devil Dead or Young?:

posted about 1 year ago

interesting. different style than mine, but I like it. nice job carrying on with the musty smell.
On I can't go yet:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I like the ending.
On Spare The Humiliation:

posted about 1 year ago

hmmm…interesting, what is she doing?
On Words are Not to Be Taken for Granted:

posted about 1 year ago

yes, touching.
On I'm Coming:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, good set up.
On Meet You At The Swingset:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I like the phrase Meet you at the swingset.
On Tick, Tock:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done. I like it.
On Irrational? Phobias.:

posted about 1 year ago

this reminded of the joke:
A man who believes he is a piece of grain and, subsequently, fears the chicken that could eat him. Eventually, the delusional man goes to therapy; where, ultimately, he becomes convinced he is not a piece of grain; however, the man still feels anxious about the chicken. Bewildered, the therapist asks, “Why are you still afraid of the chicken? You know you’re not a piece of grain!” To which the man replies, “Yes, I know I’m not a piece of grain, but does the chicken know I’m not?”
On Bubble Girl (Cont.):

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I like how it is developing.
On The Return of Mahatma:

posted about 1 year ago

nice theme. I like it.
On My Multi-lingual Spider Robot from Walmart:

posted about 1 year ago

walmart is evil. but i like this.
On Pizza and mud don't mix:

posted about 1 year ago

ummm, pizza
On Conflict:

posted about 1 year ago

nice. I like the choice of names.
On His eyes.:

posted about 1 year ago

Yet somehow, the faults made his eyes beautiful I like this line.
On The Requiem of Earth:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, this can turn into something. I like the mention of the solar system in the begining.
On The Healer:

posted about 1 year ago

nice start.
On A great day:

posted about 1 year ago

Thanks. I am glad you liked it. I enjoy the challenge of brevity that ficlets impose. It makes one use words wisely.
On Asbestos:

posted about 1 year ago

ha! ha!, funny.
On Invisible Wars:

posted about 1 year ago

nicely done. short but still catches a lot of stuff.
On Telescope:

posted about 1 year ago

ya, i like the opening too. nice image.
On Bike Thief Vigilante:

posted about 1 year ago

nice and short.
On I will have the usual:

posted about 1 year ago

Thanks for the comments.
On The Call Back.:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I like where it is going.
On One day... :

posted about 1 year ago

interesting.
On Last Wish:

posted about 1 year ago

hmm, i don’t like the ending. too quick. but it is 1024 char, ficlet nirvana!
On My Gods name is not Frank:

posted about 1 year ago

nice, I like it. well written. It could go anywhere from here.
On Shell Shocked:

posted about 1 year ago

wow, nice. write more, write a sequel.
On Symmetric Tech Newsletter :: New Team Members:

posted about 1 year ago

hmm. interesting start. In 2011, we will have neural virtualization?
On Blank Solus:

posted about 1 year ago

I like the ending. nice work.
On Stone that moves:

posted about 1 year ago

Nice. I like the setup.
On Passengers:

posted about 1 year ago

hunting knives? no airport security?
On A Bible for the Outcasts:

posted about 1 year ago

is God your DJ?
On Christmas Stranger:

posted about 1 year ago

what thing????I want to know.
On I always wanted to be a priest:

posted about 1 year ago

Thanks. I am glad you liked it. Ya, I might write a sequel.
On NIrvana in a Rainstorm:

posted about 1 year ago

good one. very touching.
On Neighbor:

posted about 1 year ago

ya, it was bit sloppy. Thanks for the comments.
On He couldn't look in her eyes:

posted about 1 year ago

I like the first line.
On Life Abridged:

posted about 1 year ago

simple, yet profound. I like it.
On What's Normal?:

posted about 1 year ago

hmm. scary. sudden. hasty.
On Pencil Unsharpener:

posted about 1 year ago

I like it. Yes, pencil sharpeners are evil.
On Reflections from the viewpoint of a lowly bud.:

posted about 1 year ago

nice! I like the ending.
On Two Definitions:

posted about 1 year ago

yay! for the smoking ban.
On A Girl Called Jack:

posted about 1 year ago

nice! yes great opening and also nice ending.
On I will have the usual:

posted about 1 year ago

“obviously introspective and possibly obsessive” hmm..interesting. I haven’t thought on that line. Thanks for the comment.
On The Book Of i:

posted about 1 year ago

Nice. Saint_i I really like the idea. Have you read “WE” by Yevgeny Zamyatin? This piece reminded me of this “This woman was just as irritating to me as irrational number that accidently creeps into your equation and can’t be factored out.”
On Bad Neighbors:

posted about 1 year ago

nice work. I like how to used the theme.

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On Not Again:

On Delight, Disruption, and Disappointment:

On Dancing...:

On Saving Sam:

On The Distant Soldier:

On The Voice of Insanity:

On Searcy Will Pay:

On Orange Blossoms, Lava Rivers, and Balloons:

On Pondering Death:

On You are Beautiful:

On Prison, maybe.:

On In the Heat of Battle:

On Temporary People:

On Chinese Condensed Milk:

On Picnic Tables:

On Monkey See, Monkey Do:

On Peace in the Fog:

On Why Don't You Fly?:

On Crying Over Spilt Ovaltine:

On Escape :

On My 100th Ficlet and a Message: Your Choice:

On Open Up and say, "SHARK ATTACK!!!!":

On Show Me How Deep Your Hurt Is:

On Apocalypse: Twelve Gauge:

On No Survivors: Apocalypse :

On Van Mantra's Trial :

On Instructions on How to Kill a Poet:

On 50 Doors:

On Jars of Nothing:

On The house on the hill:

On Miss Direction:

On Black Gowns:

On The worst story ever.... or is it?:

On Right back for more:

On Hot Summer Night:

On A different Way of Thinking:

On John Cage: A Biography in 4' 33":

On A Midnight Snack.:

On You Know Me:

On Phantasmagoria:

On Hall of influence.:

On Inside the Labyrinth:

On Mother lied.:

On scars of life:

On Loopback:

On The Ground Was Her Shoe:

On Diary of a collapsing star:

On One kiss:

On One iPhone to Rule Them All…:

On Requiem:

On The Corporation, Inc.:

On Suicide in the Rainy City:

On River's Touch:

On Surveillance :

On Divide By One:

On Punked Out Pixies:

On Sweet Bliss :

On Daydreaming :

On Statue:

On The Red Sox Suck:

On Subsistence:

On Roger's Last Day Part 6:

On Train of thoughts:

On you never told me:

On Stevie Is Not A Murderer:

On Dinner died a long time ago:

On A Real Bargain:

On Human Element :

On Sybil Unafraid:

On Why Cant I learn:

On The Assasination:

On Truck Stop:

On 2 A.M., Purgatory Diner:

On Insomniac's Eyes:

On Can He Catch You?:

On All About the Red Stilettos:

On Behind Red-Shuttered Windows:

On A desk: