Ficlets

On Part 5:

posted 3 days ago

Im the first to say but why dont you not pick any of them and go after someone new?
Someone that you want to go after not someone you are trying to chose.

On The News Part 1:

posted 25 days ago

The last line really ties it together in a neat little bow! You could take this piece somewhere, maybe your first series?
Oh and giving each dialouge piece its own line might help with the flow!

On Shootout in the Rodeo Barn:

posted 25 days ago

Reminds me of the type of banter from the book Of Mice and Men.
Very good descriptions and word choice!
5 stars

On Get Your Facts Straight:

posted 25 days ago

This is such a cute storyy.
Chloe NEEDS to date Alex.
Guys like Alex need to come backk from wherever they are.
5stars

On Us:

posted 25 days ago

Such a cute romantic talee!
5 stars
Sequel please!

On The Impossibly Introverted Zadie Ocean:

posted about 1 month ago

haha i love her reaction!
it almost seems like shes siking herself out by saying”Out of all the hundreds of people to apply for this job, only ten were chosen. I was one of them.”
5 stars

sorry ive been absent lately schools been eating me alive

On Cutter. :

posted about 1 month ago

Full of emotion, with a sad touch.
Great descriptions too!

On He's all I think about:

posted about 1 month ago

Haha I love how she is talking to herself!
That always makes a good read.

Sequel awayy!

On WEIRDEST DREAM CHALLENGE!!!! (ENTER OR PERISH):

posted about 1 month ago

Haha very creative challenge!
Count me in.

On A Whole New Chase [Olympic Exercise]:

posted about 1 month ago

Haha great twist at the end! Abd you drew the reader in very well!
Thank you for entering!!

On Trot Your Way to Glory [100th Ficlet Writing Exercise]:

posted about 1 month ago

Unique sport, and great descriptions! I really like this.
Thank you for entering!

On I'm in the Olympics, Baby! [100th Ficlet Writing Exercise]:

posted about 1 month ago

Haha I can already smell the chlorine.
Great description and thank you for entering!

On Pushing For Gold (100th Ficlet Writing Exercise: Olympics):

posted about 1 month ago

I love the detail!!
You described the drive of people in the olympics so brilliantly amazing.
5stars

On The Juju Bracelet (2):

posted about 1 month ago

the person who found the bracelet is named Audrey.

On The Juju Bracelet (3):

posted about 1 month ago

The person who found the bracelet is named Audrey.

On The Juju Bracelet (2):

posted about 1 month ago

The names got a little mixed up :[
Elise is the one borrowing it and I actually didnt name the girl who found it.

On The Juju Bracelet (3):

posted about 1 month ago

Haha I love this but the character names got messed up. Elise is the friend borrowing the bracelet and I didnt really name the person who found the bracelet :[

Besides this the writing is brilliant!

On Starbucks Girl: Inner Thoughts:

posted about 1 month ago

Haha love the last line!
And hahaha I love how she is already having a love hate thing with Mocha Guy!

On Mark the Total Player Extraordinaire:

posted about 1 month ago

Haha I love the continuation!
Hes such a playerr!
My favorite line is this one: “He took out a sharpie and started writing Jedda’s name underneath the last sixteen girls he had gone out with.”
Definitely 5stars

On HOW DO I GET TO HOLD HER HAND!!!! I need both teen guy and girl advice!!!!!!!!:

posted about 1 month ago

turn to smile at her first that way your hand grabbing hers isnt a total random action.
then just hold her hand if she makes an uneasy face just let go, you dont want to pressure her into holding her hand.

On Im a major loser saying this. plus, im too young:

posted about 1 month ago

Hahahaha
The beginning is brilliantly witty
and the advice is good.

On The Juju Bracelet (2):

posted about 1 month ago

Very nice sequel!
:]

On Summertime Love:

posted about 1 month ago

Truly and utterly amazing Freedom.
You should write a second series onto this.
But then again some things are better left alone. I would love to read more of this though.
5stars.

On The Red Button:

posted about 1 month ago

I love the banter between them and how she is so mysterious yet so open with him.
The characters you created fit the setting really well.
5stars.

On Monday Morning :

posted about 1 month ago

I read all of the prequels a few days ago!
I really like the setting and characters you created.

On Tango 'Til They're Sore:

posted about 1 month ago

I love how the girls personalitys are so differant yet the click so well!
I’ve read every prequel haha!
5stars

On Scissors Are My Weapon of Choice:

posted about 1 month ago

Amazing. It went from subject to subject without breaking the flow. This is really good, it should be the featured ficlet.
5Stars.

On The Starbucks Girl: Awkward Introductions:

posted about 1 month ago

Sequel?
i check back everyday haha

On Relieving the Stress of Black Friday (starbucks challenge):

posted 2 months ago

I love that this showed the crazy side of some shoppers. And the descriptions really do paint a complex story!
If only there could be a gift shop in Starbucks, half my time would probably be spent there. Im kind of a nick knack junky.
5 stars.

On Relieving the Stress of Black Friday (starbucks challenge):

posted 2 months ago

I love that this showed the crazy side of some shoppers. And the descriptions really do paint a complex story!
If only there could be a gift shop in Starbucks, half my time would probably be spent there. Im kind of a nick knack junky.
5 stars.

On The Starbucks Girl: Awkward Introductions:

posted 2 months ago

Haha she finally officially meets Mocha Guy! I love that he finds her crawling.
This is by far my favorite series!
5 stars.

On The Starbucks Girl: Hiding:

posted 2 months ago

Haha this is a great series. I love the wittiness of it all.
Sequel?

On This One's For You:

posted 2 months ago

This is probably my favorite ficlet.
Words do hurt, maybe not physically but it can damage you mentally. Words hurt because no one can take back what they said. And if words keep getting thrown at you it can break you down.
5 stars
:]

On Boxers (starts with,ends with challenge):

posted 2 months ago

Haha
this has a mix of comedy and a serious touch that it would be hard to classify in a genre.
Which to me means that this is a unique piece of writing. Not many people can write like this anymore. So many people bend to a certain genre but never take the time nor thoughts to make up their own.
5 stars

On The Note (starts with ends with challenge):

posted 2 months ago

I love how this story is explaining everything to you but yet there’s still a hint of mystery. Like who HE is. And the last to sentences really tie this together. Hope to read more :]
5 stars

On Kicked: I Remember This...(Pt 24):

posted 4 months ago

No one deserves to go through what you did.
That guy was a jerkk. I know I cant fully understand what you went through, but I can tell you that what he did was fully wrong. You should tell someone. He is still in your mind because you still have this whole situation on your chest. It will hurt but it will get better. Win this once and for all, and grow from it. Tell someone and stand up for yourself in this situation.
I hope everything is going well for you.
♥
LivingInWonderLand

On A Loaded Gun in the Mailbox:

posted 5 months ago

Haha this has a sense of hidden humor and the end is such a cliff hanger. It one of those things hat is so wrong yet its so right.
5stars

On Falling and Catching:

posted 5 months ago

This series is so sweet it it unreal. The sense of romance is something that every girl yearns for inevitably. I can relate so much to this girl, with everything you write about her. Keep this going.
5stars.

On Names and A Little Bit Deeper:

posted 5 months ago

The sense of romance helps relate even more and helps create a more immense amount of curiosity. The fact that he is concerned about her and just met her paints a small fantasy picture that is in the back of every girls mind.
5stars

On The End:

posted 5 months ago

I read all of the prequels.
This is sad and what makes it even worse is that this could be a life of a child out there somewhere.

On Home:

posted 5 months ago

The descriptions are so real.
Good writing!

On Life:

posted 5 months ago

This should be a quote.
I love this.
5stars

On Look Up At The Sky:

posted 5 months ago

Simple and sweet are few of the many adjectives to fit to this short ficlet.
5stars

On First Morning:

posted 5 months ago

I have read all the prequels and I must say there amazing. You can relate to it in a sense that it somewhat unreal. The stories all have great descriptions that illustrate a moving picture in your mind. I think this is the most complex review I have written. I really think you should sequel this.
5stars

On Missed Opportunities:

posted 5 months ago

Cute idea and is very well written.

On Show You My Heart:

posted 5 months ago

Raw, heartbreaking, and amazing!
5 stars

On Just A Little Fluttering:

posted 5 months ago

Love the suspense

On Lighthouse on the Hill:

posted 5 months ago

This has a sweetness of its own.
A sweetness and calmness that makes the reader feel as if they were sitting in that very lighthouse.
5 stars.

On On Sea or On Land:

posted 6 months ago

This is around the best series I have ever read.
The characters are so real, and the discriptions bounce off the screen.
Im excited for the continuation.

On Reply to fake crayon words:

posted 6 months ago

I agree with THX 0477, I didnt follow that one.
It is nice to see people share their opinion :]

On Via I-M (17):

posted 6 months ago

Ouchh
This heats up fastt.
Sequel?

On You're All I Ever Want:

posted 6 months ago

I love the discriptions.
and omgg if the ending happened to me…. omg

On BFFs....?:

posted 6 months ago

This is crazy amazing.
You are such a good writer.
I cant even put into words how great this is

On History In The Making:

posted 6 months ago

You are so right.
I love the simplicity of this.
5 stars.

On the believer {64k challenge):

posted 6 months ago

Even though its so short, you depicted a lot. It hard to put into words,but I do know that I love this piece.

On Growing Statistics:

posted 6 months ago

These are real statistics :[

On Dream, or Nightmare?:

posted 7 months ago

Haha very nice, the story made me smile. Continue and I hope once more with 5 stars

On A Kiss Can Save A Life:

posted 7 months ago

Its a very choppy piece, but I love the plot setup.

On FORGET ♥ I hate you.:

posted 7 months ago

This is really good. The rhythm is perfect and the vibe it gives you as you read from line to line
5stars

On Life Can Now Begin:

posted 8 months ago

Congratulations!
It’s a featured ficlet!

Great story. Its moving, powerful, sad, heartbreaking and most of all about one of the best featured ficlets!

Congrats once again.

On All Over A Boy!:

posted 8 months ago

cute,one star though????
3 stars :]

On Hit Once, Hit Again :

posted 8 months ago

So sad, 5stars

LOVE IS NO ABUSE ♥

On Just Married:

posted 8 months ago

This is such a sweet story. Lovely, heartbreaking, and heartmending.

On The Carpenter and the Tower:

posted 8 months ago

Sounds like a bible scripture until you reach the end. I like it a lot :] It’s a good twist and great story.
Definitely deserves over five stars 5++

On I Had the Dream Again Last Night:

posted 8 months ago

I love this story a lot. Its very descriptive and flows perfectly.
10 stars

On Falling Down :

posted 8 months ago

haha ya poor linz that would suck.

On After Happily Ever After :

posted 8 months ago

Haha very clever. Have you ever heard the song Fairytale by Sara Bareilles? Haha this reminds me of it. Really good details, plot and twist. Definatly deserves five stars.

On The movies:

posted 8 months ago

Sorry only put four stars but ment 5

On The movies:

posted 8 months ago

Love the way you started it out that you didnt just throw the reader into the story. Details were very specific which is really good in my opinion.
5stars

On Message:

posted 8 months ago

this is such a sad series i love it though. its written like a script which i also like, it makes it easy to read and follow.

On I Love You:

posted 8 months ago

awww sooooo cute love this series
sequal!

On Feeding Papa:

posted 8 months ago

wow very haunting, I wrote a series like this called Perfect, its about a mother and her daughters though.
I love your descriptions and the modd this story gives off.
5stars all the way

On Mixed Signals:

posted 8 months ago

thank you, ya that must of been kind of confusing I changed it though and hope that helps!

On A Baseball Summer(LoA Challenge):

posted 8 months ago

I agreee, great continuation :)

On Night Swim:

posted 8 months ago

Omg very haunting and descriptive, it made me feel like I was there. now you have me gasping for air.

On Beauty Incarnate:

posted 8 months ago

Beautiful and concieted
It portrays that glitzy thing that almost every girl dreams of.
I like this story a lot. :]
5 stars

On Appearances:

posted 8 months ago

very very confusing
no one doseant need a dash inbetween. I hate when I make spelling errors so just thought I’d let you know.

On Why Love:

posted 8 months ago

I think its good :]
haha ive posted one story like 20 times before and that was cuz my computer froze too.

On Pay Day!:

posted 8 months ago

im not confused :]
sequal please

On A Creeper? No A Creepster!:

posted 8 months ago

sequal!
5stars

On Doll Maker:

posted 8 months ago

oOo Very haunting
the picture scares me though
5stars

On hardtoexplainmyownfeeling's kiss challenge (part 2):

posted 8 months ago

I can relate soo much to this
very cute and sweet story and it shows some of the complications of love like when you wonder if you really are making a mistake.
5stars

On Cliche Night:

posted 8 months ago

very cliche :]

On The Letter "H" & What the Meaning of Love Can Never Be:

posted 8 months ago

I love that you sequeled it! So good, this good be such a good series if you keep sequaling. I love the prayer, so sad but so beautiully written.

On The Letter "H":

posted 8 months ago

I love this story and its message of how things just sometimes happen and that you cant control it. Really good details through story especially when you started it off.
5stars

On Equal Harmony:

posted 8 months ago

ya im still trying to figure out some channges :] it is kinda of a choppy piece of writing

On Hate [kiss challenge]:

posted 8 months ago

Your a great writer. I love you set up the story. Love the last to lines especially :]
5stars

On Equal Harmony:

posted 8 months ago

Do you guys get the message?

On Equal Harmony:

posted 8 months ago

Do you giys get the message?

On End: I Remember This...(Pt 20):

posted 8 months ago

Im so happy for you, yes your ending the series :[, but your recovering and I just want to say that I wish you the best of everything.
♥
LivingInWonderLand

On Blindly In Love:

posted 8 months ago

I wrote this to show how bad it is to be in an abusive relationship, i havent experienced this but i can only imagine the pain.
Love is not abuse.

On love is blind:

posted 8 months ago

Wow, I have been thinking about how love is blind and is seen not through a persons eyes but through there mind and then i find this story. I love it so much
5stars

On My Stargirl:

posted 9 months ago

Very very beatuiful and captivating. I can almost cry when i read the second line. I would say this is my favorite ficlet that any one has ever written. I love this story so much!

On Rest, finally:

posted 9 months ago

love it!

On Brushing the bully:

posted 9 months ago

I love the story line and its a great follow up but it’s a little hard to keep up with who is talking. Great potenial and plot in this series though you should keep writing.

On Tidbits of wisdom:

posted 9 months ago

Hahaha I love number six!!!
I bet theres a great story behind that one lol.

On Silver Dream 11:

posted 9 months ago

Very good. Love your wording and details!
5stars
:]

On Avoiding Class:

posted 9 months ago

haha love the ending, i agree keep writing!

On When the Warmth is Gone:

posted 9 months ago

I like this a lot. I especially love the discriptions here! Your a good writer :]

On Viva:

posted 9 months ago

Kinda harsh whit hat. I thought it was nice to read, it reminds you what your supposed to do in life: live. Keep up the good work.
Oh and I didnt see anything wrong with your formatting.

wordcommaspacewordcommaspace,
Maria :]

On Snowfall:

posted 9 months ago

Really good. The details and that world created unfolds to the reader with each word.
5stars

On Delight, Disruption, and Disappointment:

posted 9 months ago

Hahahahahahahahahahahaha!
Nice
5 stars

On Me: I Remember This (Pt 17):

posted 9 months ago

It will be okay, I wish I could help you, I wish that never happened to you. Every thing will get better dont worry.

On Do You?:

posted 9 months ago

ahhh sequal??...........please?

very good writing skills =}

On You're In My Seat:

posted 9 months ago

ahh sequal, you so should of said YES!!!!!!

On An Unspoken Agreement :

posted 9 months ago

wow Linz is funny but sometimes shes a little blonde but hey we all have those moments. Sequal!

On The Sun and the Universe:

posted 9 months ago

I love this poem. It brings back some memories for me.
5stars

On Passionate Kisses :

posted 9 months ago

Your a really good writer. I love this series its almost as if you can feel yourself in their home and smell the coffe and hear cats meowing suspicously.
5stars

On 3rd Hour Band:

posted 9 months ago

I agree with OTOC to much repetitve Lindsay said/Chels said try changing it up with she. Very good though :]

On She's Knows:

posted 9 months ago

i like this a lot, its probably the first poem ive ever read that had drama in it. 5stars!

On The Killer Instinct 4 {I'm Watching}:

posted 9 months ago

Verry good omg!

On Do You?:

posted 9 months ago

sequal…..please?

On Still Perfect :

posted 9 months ago

Ahh love this series can u keep writing lol?

On Oreos and Milk:

posted 9 months ago

hahaha very nice twist

On First Dance [Desperate Monologue]:

posted 9 months ago

Love this

On Could, Want, Wish:

posted 9 months ago

I like this story a lot its really sad though but I really like it.
5stars
P.S Your dreams have yet to come ture

On Sam & Friends: The Distinguished Guest: A Tribute to Kermit The Frog:

posted 9 months ago

I agree its very clever and very well written. 5stars

On Whisk me away:

posted 9 months ago

Its only a sentance and yet it holds so much emotion. Great job!

On Letting Loose:

posted 9 months ago

I love the first sentance. Its a very well written story.
5 stars

On Watered Down:

posted 9 months ago

Very good detail, very sad but very good. 5stars

On Emma Jo_234: A Philosophical Exploration of the Pen Name that Should have Been a Little More Creative:

posted 9 months ago

So you think your pen name isnt very creative well i must say you explaining of it was well very creative. :]

On Lyrical Break-Up (flute_faerie7's lyrics challenge):

posted 9 months ago

i love the detail and your lyrics rhym without the chessy add to it. 20 stars

On Funny Christmas Songs:

posted 9 months ago

Very good, nice descripitions. Love it, very cute.
5stars

On Worlds Unseen [Minimum Length Challenge]:

posted 9 months ago

Wow, love it makes you think of the possibilites.
5stars

On He Killed Her (Excact Minium Length Ficlet Challenge):

posted 9 months ago

Would of liked to have seen more description, but the suspense shows when you read it. Great idea by the way. :]

On Guess who's back:

posted 9 months ago

love it um SEQUAL PLEASE!

On Carefull:

posted 9 months ago

I love how you made the piece flow. I hard to make storys with a lot of dialouge not clunky but you did an excellent job. I need to work on me clunky-ness. 5 stars

On CPAD (disease challenge):

posted 9 months ago

Hahahaha ahhh love this, I am a victim of this disorder.

On The Stud :

posted 9 months ago

Haha I will admit im getting very close to obsessed with this series and you are probably guessing what Im gonna say:
SEQUAL PLEASE!

On The Flirt :

posted 9 months ago

Love it, I wish she would of flirted back it could of made Eric and Evan jealous. Its great anyways though! 5stars.

Is this based on your life? Been meaning to ask that.

On Initiation :

posted 9 months ago

ok seriously SEQUAL! LOVE this series

On Not Who I Thought He Was:

posted 9 months ago

Wow great, cant believe he cheat on her

On Friday Night Lights Part 5:

posted 9 months ago

I think linz is gonna start going for Evan

On Paper Cuts:

posted 9 months ago

i love this story very very nice detail.

On Back to Band:

posted 9 months ago

wow ok daammmmnnnn love this now im gonna keep reading all the sequals haha you get like a billion stars

On NEW! Ipod....TOTAL CONTROL:

posted 9 months ago

hahahahahaha i love the ending!!!!!

On Shadow(Minimum Length):

posted 9 months ago

hm makes you think, i like it

On this is me:

posted 10 months ago

I know how you feel, Im the same age as you. Im confident yes, but I still cry way to much, I make a lot of misakes, and ya I pretend to be happy a lot too when really thats not the case. Things will hopefully look up.

On do it if you want to in honor of my birthday short story:

posted 10 months ago

happy belated birthday by a day!

On Ode to Oie:

posted 10 months ago

woops ment 5 stars

On Ode to Oie:

posted 10 months ago

very beautiful writing

On In Loving Memory (My Sister in My Heart):

posted 10 months ago

I am so sorry. It hard to see a loved one go. Wishing you comforting and peaceful days. Happy holidays
-Maria

On I can go farther than you:

posted 10 months ago

wow i read all the sequals and there needs i repeats needs 2 be another 1!!!
1000stars

On 5 Things I've Never Told Anyone:

posted 10 months ago

thank you every one you’ve brightened my day!

On five things ive never told anyone but wish i could:

posted 10 months ago

I can relate. Mostly to number 2. Im the same age as you too. But look on the bright side. Just becasue your present life doseant seem so bright doseant mean your future wont be.

On Snow in the City:

posted 10 months ago

i agree, great visual details its almost as if you can feel yourself there

On Thanks:

posted 10 months ago

love this story, i cant imagine how many people can probably relate to it

On CHALLENGE COLORS:

posted 10 months ago

I’ll give this challenge a shot.
Love Sarah Dessen books by the way.

On The Long Kiss goodbye :

posted 10 months ago

Love the story line, but its a bit bland and sterile. I love the plot though.
:]

On My Sister and My All Time Best Friend. I Love You.:

posted 10 months ago

Love how you started the story
!

On What Her Hands Did( The Sequal from Mind Games):

posted 10 months ago

im writing a sequal!

On What Her Hands Did( The Sequal from Mind Games):

posted 10 months ago

Hope this is good

On Mind Games ( The Sequal from Through Veronicas Eyes):

posted 10 months ago

Haha ok I’ll write a sequal

On Through Veronicas Eyes (A sequal to Perfect):

posted 10 months ago

Its a bit confusing but im trying to make it that way so it gets people to sort of wonder. I think I’ll write a sequal. :]

On Through Veronicas Eyes (A sequal to Perfect):

posted 10 months ago

Veronica is a young girl around 13 in my mind.
If its a dream or not is for you to decide it makes our mind kind of wonder kind of like a hidden cliff hanger. If i write another sequal youll figure out though lol

On Perfect:

posted 10 months ago

ya, she was stabbed in the back by her mother.
be sure to read the sequal :]

On Perfect:

posted 10 months ago

ya, ill write a sequal :)

On Raining... (leave me a note's challenge):

posted 10 months ago

Love this story and ya Jen is gonna get one pretty good voicemail.

On Just For You [[Leave Me A Note's Challenge]]:

posted 10 months ago

love it, i love how the emotion changes about her brother and the descripition helped show that

On The Box:

posted 10 months ago

5 stars!

On The Box:

posted 10 months ago

Wow love it a lot!!

On In My Dreams{Maybe_Miseryx's challenge}:

posted 10 months ago

RYAN SHECKLER!!!!! YOU GOTTA LOVE RYAN SHECKLER!!!!!!!

On Professions in Study Hall:

posted 10 months ago

looovvveee this! you should write a sequal

On Murdered Love:

posted 10 months ago

very suspenseful and haunting. I like this one.

On Dear Diary 2:

posted 10 months ago

Isn’t that just lovely?
I dnt know why but I love that sentcance lol.

On One day in the bathroom.:

posted 10 months ago

hahaha nice, love the way you worded the ending

On Mock Pop Culture {Ficlet Challenge}:

posted 10 months ago

i like all the things above and i can gaurntee you that other people probably do to. And mock? Im sorry but in my book its just considered low.

[No offense to anyone]