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On Sequel to My First Kiss:

posted about 1 month ago

its a seamless fit..
On A Prayer for the Sleepless:

posted 2 months ago

lol @ thx. Beautifully written.. And the photo you have chosen matches flawlessly. Bravo!
On Epilogue: Breaking Dawn:

posted 2 months ago

beautifully written.. don’t know much about vampires and things of that sort. The descriptions you wrote with were absolutely beautiful.. This story has a haunting quality to it.. just by the way you wrote and illustrated the story.. very cool photo to match.. Bravo!!
On The Tempting Of Heath Ledger. (Part 1 of The 4 part mini series):

posted 2 months ago

wow you really get a sense for his frustration in the monologue.. Very good. I like how you described the setting of LA.. good word choices
On The Long Road Away From Home [Make Someone’s Day Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. i like what you did here.. you pulled the namesake of my character and did delightful things with it. I like how you threw in the Alanis reference.. it tied in well with the story.. I like this a lot. I couldn’t have written it better myself.
On Scout's Honor:

posted 3 months ago

As always wondering what is up her sleeve.. shes a mysterous one!
On A Revisionist History:

posted 3 months ago

wow..thats crazy.. who would suspect that they were in co hootz with eachother.. I liked your descriptions here, of his feelings and internal thoughts. Very well written. As always, a joy to read.
On Is the World Ready for Tummy Buddies?:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. having an understanding of the whole “tummy buddies” thing.. and still this story didn’t make much sense to me.. held together with some interesting dialouge, but the gist of the thing is still a lil unknown.. Ah but perhaps i should go backwards a bit and see if I can’t figgure it out.. none the less it was a wonderful story.. very well written.
On A Machiavellian Wrinkle:

posted 3 months ago

ha ha ..Sassy is out to prove her loyalty to Becca.. since it was recently brought into question. she figgures, if she can get Jameson to realize that she still has feelings for him. noble gesture.. the ending has proved to be a eyebrow raiser. Makes you question what she has up her sleeve. Nice work on this one.. i love how this story is developing.
On Petition To Have John Perkins Legally Declared Awesome. Sign It Or Your Cat Will Get Fleas.:

posted 3 months ago

John Perkins is one of the kindest most helpful people on here. I have noted him at length about various topics. He reminds me of one of those popular teachers at school. And they are popular for the right reasons. Like, Kindness,patience, and a deep passion for helping others. He is that type of person. He flat out rocks! I owe him a debt of gratitude, for all his help. Hes the best!
On Becca Turns the Tables:

posted 3 months ago

ohhh the truth finally comes out.. she has feelings for Jameson still, I had a feeling she did.. excellent sequel!
On A Dog In The Night:

posted 3 months ago

this is the shortest Vampire Story I have ever read.. its rich in detail. Which is good for such a short story.
On The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

no way.. the ending really takes you by surprise.. the first half is written really well. And the ending is the opposite of what your expecting.
On .357 - Remorse:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. this story grabs your attention, and it
makes you wonder why hes got a gun to his head. The child’s voice really makes the ending come together.. its a breathtaking finale.. please by all means, proceed
On League Of Awesomeness 2075 Or Beyond Challenge.:

posted 3 months ago

upon entering LOA i have not seen the use of the word “Awesome” so frequently. Good idea for a challenge.. there are so many as of late, one struggles to keep up .
On Here I am stuck in the middle with jews:

posted 3 months ago

as a female the whole rental property sort of irked me.. but none the less.. it was a very colorful written story.
On Motorcycle Accident:

posted 3 months ago

holy stripes batman! This story rendered a ton of comments. I echo what has already been said. I like the internal thoughts, and the shift therein. I totally got the spelling errors to illustrate the slow movement.. Very cool idea. You really get a sense of this story. It almost plays out in the back of your head.
On The Willy Wonka Challenge:

posted 3 months ago

Now this is what I call challenging! congrats on the first 50. This will require some thought.. Good idea tho.
On Toby intimate:

posted 3 months ago

woah..
On Dirty Days:

posted 3 months ago

i think the word shes looking for is bestiality.. Wow.. not sure I read something this graphic on here before. your definitely taking risks.
On The Sassy Ultimatum:

posted 3 months ago

lol @kruitar.. this story is cool, you get to see another side to ms sassy.
On Like a Charm:

posted 3 months ago

ha ha sassy sense.. thats just too funny! Name the cop already.. he cant be an enigma for too much longer!
On This Is The Fun Part!:

posted 3 months ago

lol whats a college kid doing w/ viagra? Thats too funny.
On Protocol:

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha this was a funny story..Sassy gets weirder and weirder.
On Probable Cause:

posted 3 months ago

wow..all I can say is wow..
On Pleasure Principle:

posted 3 months ago

ohh no..
On Your Worst Nightmare:

posted 3 months ago

nice.. like the ending..
On F*** the wall:

posted 3 months ago

omg.. this story is emotionally packed. i could almost see you pounding your fist into a wall. Or the person in the story rather. Excellent descriptions. ha ha im number 14.. thats cool. Thank you!
On My Best Friend's Bf:

posted 3 months ago

gasp! Scandalous!! Sequel this please..
On The Annorexic Child:

posted 3 months ago

omg! sequel you must.. this story is gripping. you tell it with such suspense! Eating disorders, what a controversial topic.
On A Bitter Pill:

posted 3 months ago

Wow.. this is my favorite story in this series. I like how Becca laid it out on the line. She really let Sassy know the truth. Honesty is a difficult tricky thing. Sometimes you don’t want to be honest because it can potentally be painful. Good work with this story.. The face off was realistic and believable. Plus Karl was there for comedic effect. he was like the counter balance.. he gave the story some humor.. Bravo!!
On Peripheral Evil Part 4.5 (Not Just OK Wonderful):

posted 3 months ago

lol @ Perkins.. i think hes right
On My Mom Told Me I'd Die Alone.:

posted 3 months ago

I fail to see the connection you make with the picture.. but the story is good independent of the picture. It was a fun read.
On Luxurious cocoon:

posted 3 months ago

the shower was well described. It was very real and lifelike. The voices were a bit creepy.. but It made for a good ending. Good stuff!
On Further Along The road :

posted 3 months ago

omg i totally forgot about this story.. I wrote it while i was bored..
On My life if it were a Bookshelf:

posted 3 months ago

Fractals provide a constant sense of wonder.. its like how a child views the world, with innocence and wonder.. They are amazing perplexing pieces of art. You could seriously look at them for hours and never get bored
On Sentries (bookshelf challenge):

posted 3 months ago

amazing.. you brought your bookshelves to life with your colorful descriptions. The non book items, you gave a persona to, and you used that as you illustrated an interaction going on here from the two. Simply incredible.. how through your descriptions, it became so much more than an ordinary bookshelf.
On I Passed 270 Ficlets! So ... This Calls For a Challenge!:

posted 3 months ago

this is a cool idea for a challenge.. there are so many things you can do with it. Its a pretty open challenge, with lots of possibilities. Must give it some thought.
On These Are a Few of My Favorite Things... [bookshelf challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

I had a feeling you would appreciate and rather enjoy the Jane Austen novels.. It must be something in some of your stories, that remind me of hers. Sort of like where you perhaps found your inspiration.. That is quite an eclectic collection of books.. The swan was a nice touch.. I could almost picture it in my head.
On Great Romances of the 20th Century:

posted 3 months ago

I read the other two stories on either side of this one.. for some reason I didn’t catch this one.. It’s consistent with the ones that follow it.
On A Sunset Moment [Perfect Moment Ruined Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Wow! that ending really was a buzz kill. I love the Flatulent Fricative .. very funny bit there.. You had us enchanted by a west coast sunset.. and then poor Jason has that lovely lil moment.. Good job! Funny ending! Fits the challenge perfectly!
On What did you just say? [Perfect Moment Ruined Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

omg thats a burn!! Poor guy. Love how you set up the story. The imagery is perfect. I like the details you gave like the rose petals and the music.. the brightly feathered birds was a nice touch. Bravo!!
On Bring On The Theme Music:

posted 3 months ago

Funny ending. Like the comment about the 8track player and the getaway theme song. Dude you rock!
On Disturbed Youth's Useless Encyclopedia:

posted 3 months ago

interesting..
On Cross My Heart:

posted 3 months ago

ugh double dates.. how awkward.
On Missing Him:

posted 3 months ago

aww.. I can totally relate.
On Memories Take Me Back:

posted 3 months ago

awesome story.. I could almost picture the place on the roof. I totally related to the party, they usually suck. Lots of fake people there. They get together to show off.
On The Everlasting Moment [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Beautiful story.. I could almost see the snowfall and feel the cold air. Incredible!
On If shes everything you've ever wanted: Part 37:

posted 3 months ago

omg! thats so tragic!
On Alexis's beach trip lover:

posted 3 months ago

lobster red huh..her friend needs to introduce her to sunscreen.
On Two In The Morning:

posted 3 months ago

omg.. I can totally and completely relate! Ive experienced this exact sentiment the other night.
On Two In The Morning:

posted 3 months ago

omg.. I can totally and completely relate! Ive experienced this exact sentiment the other night.
On White Flag:

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha Paul broke his nose. I like how you made him sound. It sorta reminds me of that movie,Me,myself and Irene. Where, Jim Carrey
s character gets his nose broken..
On Please read this message.. [cont]:

posted 3 months ago

love is a very universal topic. anyone can relate to it.
On Please read this message..:

posted 3 months ago

aww.. this is Beautiful! Congrats!
On The Funeral Boy [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Wow.. this story is really stunning! I like the ending.. how it all caught up to him. He wasn’t as immune to death as he thought. I like the element you added with the candles, and the metaphor behind it. Well done!
On Who Knew(Hauntingly Beautiful Challange):

posted 3 months ago

wow.. I could picture the house in my mind. I saw an elegant Victorian..Amazing..
On Young Girl (Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Wow.. this story is breathtakingly beautiful! It fits the challenge perfectly.. You enchant your readers with your words. This story is pure literary magic!
On Second Chances [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge!]:

posted 3 months ago

I am awestruck..I could almost see this story unfold before me.. In my mind I could almost hear the angel speak.. Awesome story.. very gripping, and true to form.. hauntingly beautiful.
On The Crowd (Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

This story is simply adorable. The ending is sweet with its metaphoric ending.. Good job!
On The Girl in the Photograph [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

beautiful story.. love how you presented the scene and how you introduced the characters. The twist really gets you at the end.. it makes for a good ending.. Good job!!
On Broken Dream:

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha ha … The name was supposed to be Megan.. Lil type-o there.
On Aftermath {Summer vacation Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha! thats awesome! Great ending.. This story made me think of the movie the Ring.. with the blurred out photos.. Good stuff.. Excellent entry! And also thank you for entering in my challenge!!!
On Metting Robert. {Summer Vacation Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

ohhh spooky.. For some reason, this Robert doll in my mind looks like Chucky.. I don’t know why but he does.. Cool story.. I like the ending how shes all freaked out cuz she cant take his pic.. that adds a nice touch.
On To go in, or Not to go in! {Summer Vacation Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

I sorta picked up on that myself.. So far so good.. this is a great opening story.. You really set the tone and the scene.. Good stuff!
On The Mail-Order Bride:

posted 3 months ago

Woah.. Whats with the money.. Is he pretending to get married to show off to his brother.. this story is a bit confusing.
On True love..:

posted 3 months ago

AWWW.. Heres to all the people who fall for their best friends!!! Good stuff. Heartfelt, heart warming.. Honest.. Wonderfully written..
On My boyfriend caught me...:

posted 3 months ago

i think its kind of cool this story.. you really have people believe, that she was cheating on him.. and as it turns out.. shes not. Its a humorous ironic twist.. Nothing to be ashamed of.. Forget the typos, we all make mistakes.. Nobody on here writes a perfect story without any errors of any kind.. Flaws are a good thing!
On You Can't Judge A Hipster By His KnightRider Tee Shirt.:

posted 3 months ago

crap my bobble heads.. are all shaking thier heads.. they dont aproove.. Siskel and Ebert both sitting in the corner both give it a thumbs down.. meanwhile Simon Cowell on the left.. said its completely dreadful.. But im gonna go with Randy on this one.. Its Boring.. too many insults.. weak analogies.. and yeah youve done better.. this story feels angry..
On A Place To Rest :

posted 3 months ago

ha ha i seldom reach nirvana.. sorry to dissapoint
On Unseen Beauty [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

This story is amazing.. If heart strings were tangible they would be a violin. And this story is like someone taking that violin and playing a beautiful classical piece of music.. This story is gripping and emotionally packed. You are a master at the art of story telling. You use words in an enchanting way.. this one is going in the clippings. Honestly, this should be featured.
On Acknowledgment is the First Step:

posted 3 months ago

another amazing story .. always a pleasure to read your writing.. there is such beauty and finesse to your words, as always. I like how you carried the theme in this one. Excellent work.
On Addiction :

posted 3 months ago

I agree with everyone that this is an excellent story.. I also agree with the Box metaphor. Since there are several, each one could represent different things. .This story makes an emotional connection with the reader. It is a universal topic that everyone can relate to.. Bravo!!
On Rise of the fifth world (Aliens From Within part 4):

posted 3 months ago

Interesting story.. I like the line about the rocks being rocks.. but for some unexplained reason they looked different to him.. then further along he wonders if he was drinking.. ha ha he would know!! there is no mistaking it!
On Bow Tie Lips(Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

ha ha a drag queen administering a swirly thats hilarious.. like the metaphor to a Amish baptism. Good stuff. the ending was quite poetic as well.. So I do have to agree with the others on that one.. there is an exotic beauty in your choice of words, and how you chose to use them.
On Plenty Of Attention:

posted 3 months ago

ha ha ha love the ending.. the man whore comment is classic! It reminds me of Deuce Bigalow..Another great story in this series!!
On The King's Audience (sing song challenge):

posted 3 months ago

ha ha ha ha nice reference to the movie Joe dirt.. And, another thing.. your not supposed to give away the title of the song in the story.. your supposed to leave clues, so the reader will be able to guess.. thats the beauty of the challenge.
On Real Killers Do Real Things.(The Murder Of Jonathon Butcha Chapter 2):

posted 3 months ago

cool story.. sorry i don’t have any bobble heads to confer with.
On Mushroom-cloud Monday Morning (escape challenge):

posted 3 months ago

wow.. how sad.. he overdosed
On Extreme Times Create Extreme Nerds.(Summer Vacation Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

sounds like an ideal summer pastime, if you like video games.
On Bemused and Amused:

posted 3 months ago

Aww.. what a sweet ending to that date.. these two are MFEO (made for each other)
On Clever Girl:

posted 3 months ago

I have been on the edge of my seat wondering what was going to happen with these two.. Way to go keeping us in suspense! Mark of a well written story.. when the readers are left begging for more.. Smart Girl that Prandi. Knows how to work it with the cops I see.
On Skinny Dipping :

posted 3 months ago

Love the story.. suits the picture perfectly.. which is beautiful in its own right. Nice job!
On My Talent feeds my Darker side (Sing-Song Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

love the band Cake.. my favorite song is Short Skirt, Long Jacket.. Their songs are so poetic! even some of their earlier songs.. Like Never There and The Distance.. good band! awesome story. Not familiar with this particular song, so I don’t know how it suits the story. But none the less.. great entry
On The Sound of My Death:

posted 3 months ago

how embarrassing .. Like the name Tisdale..very different.
On Daddy's First Night (Escape Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

wow.. beautifully written.. I know exactly what you mean.. when you savor a moment and you wish you could remember it always. I can almost see this story unfold..
On Damn the Frozen Nuclear Torpedoes! [Scavenger Hunt Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

I think I got em all except for pet and song.. Good story.. very entertaining to read.. Hats off to Ana for creating such an ingenious challenge.
On An Exciting Turn of Events:

posted 3 months ago

wanted to quote you here “He did have time, however, to watch the slow motion ballet of two cop cars diverting around the Galaxie’s hood ” that is my favorite line.. the slow motion ballet thing.. thats just so awesome, how you described that.. It puts your reader right there in the foreground.. watching all this happen.
On Siren Song:

posted 3 months ago

love the last line.. very comical and perfectly timed. Shes about to go down for GTA and yet shes worried about getting busted for not wearing a seatbelt. Too cool
On Finish the Job (Scavenger Hunt Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

awesome story.. I like how you incorporated all the clues into a neat lil story.. for some reason mine came out too random..
On Morning After :

posted 3 months ago

I still haven’t learned to not write when I am tired.. I guess I never know when to say no..
On On A Quest for colored Glass (The Scavenger Hunt Challenge) :

posted 3 months ago

This is the most random story ive ever written.. hope yall enjoy.!
On A Dream Come True (Scavenger Hunt Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Deadliest Catch is addicting.. this is a very cool challenge.
On I Hate You And I'm Glad About It:

posted 3 months ago

the moment will be short lived. Once the adrenaline rush subsides, your brain will be scrambling to adjust to reality. And you will wonder What happened. Possibly will wish that things took to a different outcome.
On Goki StepsOut:

posted 3 months ago

Goki is a funny name.. fun little read.. I think I should have read the one before this, so I could familiarize myself with the subject matter. As usual excellent dialog versus inner monolog. With a dash of narrative.
On Life Without You (Sing Song Challenge) :

posted 3 months ago

This song is difficult to directly quote.. while incorporating a story into the lyrics. The song lyrics are there.. scattered throughout the story. The end holds the most lyrical content..
On Eleanor Rigby (Sing-Song Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha! I had a sinking feeling this story was going to be on a Beatles song.. Without even looking at your tags.. I saw the title, and I thought to myself this must be a Beatles reference.
On The Crane Wife [Sing-Song Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

i agree with Jenique on this one.. Lovely story. Never heard of the song or band. But the story is beautiful. Amazing how a simple act of compassion can spark a romance. Good stuff!
On Exotic Creature Inspiration [Sing-Song Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Ahh yes this song resurrects fond memories from childhood.. mostly about Halloween.. Love the dialog.. And the use of colloquial.
On Inside the limo:

posted 3 months ago

The celebrity reference was to provide some mental picture assistance.. You have your descriptive sentence, then an example of that description.
On {The Dead Tell Tales Challenge} Dead Men Tell Tales:

posted 3 months ago

awesome pic.. perfect for the challenge.
On The GummiGeist.(The Dead Tell Tales Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Yeahh uhhh how does this translate to a story about the dead. its supposed to be a ghost story.
On Midnight Ride Interrupted{Twisted History Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

wonderful illustration of the Revolutionary War..
On It's the Getting There that Counts [Summer Vacation Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Agreed.. The journey is a lot more memorable and enjoyable than the destination.. My siblings and i were trapped in the back seat.. During a road trip from New Mexico.. to Maryland. And this was the late 80s before gameboys and Nintendo ds. We had elbow fights. If we werent fighting we took turns sleeping.
On License and Registration:

posted 3 months ago

i echo my fellow ficleteers about the ending. Very nice touch. awesome story
On A Letter From a Grieving Father to his Son:

posted 3 months ago

omg.. this story is gut wrenching.. Its beautifully written. However, the subject matter is very intense and sad. I don’t think I have read a ficlet that held me that close to tears.. You really feel for the father in this story. he lost both his son and his wife. Wonderful, how you illustrated this very real emotion. Your story has a very honest and life like feel.
On Road Trip (Summer Vacation Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Wow.. this story is really funny. The beginning made me laugh. I love the bit about the stench.. Nice lil detail. It really “made” the story. Im a lil confused at the end, did the cop spit at the guy?
On A Visit with History (Summer Vacation Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

omg I love this story.. It warms my heart that you chose to write about it. I will forever remember that day.. And treasure it forever in my heart. I still have those photos.. Thank you so much for writing this story. You immortalized this day. And I am glad that it was as special to you, as it was for me. :)
On Two Shakes Of A Lamb's Tail:

posted 3 months ago

cool story. I think there is potential for them.. I like how you ended with a cliffhanger.. making the reader beg for more.. Just your style..
On At Grandma's (summer vacation challenge):

posted 3 months ago

thanks for entering my challenge.. I almost forgot!
On At Grandma's (summer vacation challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Aww such a cute story.. It made me miss my grandma horribly.. Summers from childhood were the best! This story was so sweet!
On The Typewriter:

posted 3 months ago

Very well done, indeed magical.
On We Aren't In Kansas Anymore:

posted 3 months ago

aww.. I love the way you wrote his own thoughts in his head.. Very good. Your showing he has some real believable emotions. Very real to life. This story is so cute. I like how you described Prandi too..
On All The Right Moves:

posted 3 months ago

I love how Karl is ever so eager to explore magic with her.. its so funny..
On Dead To Rights:

posted 3 months ago

Wow shes trying to make him drunk.. carbombs are fun. never did them with Jameson.. just the baileys and the Guiness. But ok. kewl story..
On Double-Take:

posted 3 months ago

lol good description of becca and his reaction to her .. awesome how she slithered on to the bar stool.
On At the Houdini Bar:

posted 3 months ago

snake tattoo ..scary How does she know whats going on? I bet she has seen it all before.
On A Date With Destiny:

posted 3 months ago

wow what a douche he cant tell the difference between Hispanic and Indian.. wow! he really is a dimwit.
On Mysterious Creatures:

posted 3 months ago

omg poor guy women are evil when were angry
On The Sound of A Heart Breaking:

posted 3 months ago

Oh lord Sassy.. She didn’t hear enough of the conversation . So she embellishes to becca to make her angry.. evil.
On Tossing and Turning:

posted 3 months ago

Man Sassy is really enjoying the fact that she has dirt on this guy. She wants to see Becca upset.. Thats her plan.. Evil evil plan
On The Beast:

posted 3 months ago

lol “gross its furry looking” thats such a guy thing to say.. nicely done..
On A Lasting Impression:

posted 3 months ago

Yeah it was a lil confusing.. You see becca talking and then a line below it in quotes.. Who’s to say if that was Becca or Sassy.. Its kewl tho..

I like the part where she is wondering who this person was standing beside her. Almost like she is ashamed to know her, due to all the crazy things shes been saying.
On The Power of Revenge Compels You!:

posted 3 months ago

Its amazing these two have been friends since childhood? Was Sassy always this crazy.. or is it a recent development?
On So Here's My Plan:

posted 3 months ago

Sassy is out for revenge.. and she will take an unwitting Becca along for the ride.. shes out for blood..
On Hey Jealousy:

posted 3 months ago

I can see becca becoming scared of Sassy.. Love the story title.. Good song from the 90s. The joining forces part is funny.. Wonder what crazy scheme is brewing in her head.
On Collateral:

posted 3 months ago

I like how you compared Prandi to an owl.. thats pretty cool.. Very inventive. Good banter here. Good work!
On Only In America:

posted 3 months ago

omg who stabs frogs that are already dead… he ha that wouldnt scare anyone.. and over a cell phone.. thats like the Kardashian sisters fighting over a Bentley
On Watch Me Turn Medieval :

posted 3 months ago

love the ending.. those words .. perfection!
On A Score To Settle:

posted 3 months ago

sassy is bossy. no doubt about it!
On A Fish Called Jameson:

posted 3 months ago

awesome… love how you use catch phrases to tie in important parts of the story
On Promises Are Made To Be Broken:

posted 3 months ago

ohh no going behind sassy’s back.. that cant be good.
On The Condition:

posted 3 months ago

lol wow hes playing for keeps now.. ha ha that pink razr better be covered in crystals..
On Mixed Signals Lead To Desperate Measures:

posted 3 months ago

better make that tequila 1800 .. i remember this story.. this is when it sorta got under way..
On A Promise Is A Promise...Right?:

posted 3 months ago

wow. I don’t know what else to say.. this is one crazy conversation.. why is sassy so controlling?
On More Pressing Matters:

posted 3 months ago

love the last line..so typical jameson
On So Freaking Close:

posted 3 months ago

don’t recall song.. nothing about it not even the movie.. It reminds me of something on the wedding singer. Ha Ha Paul is finally realizing that he knows sassy.. thats rich
On Spit It Out:

posted 3 months ago

getting sick over a boy.. man how drunk was she?
On Two Girls in the Bathroom = Trouble:

posted 3 months ago

No way.. what does she have to say.. i cant believe shes getting jealous!
On "I've had the time of my life...":

posted 3 months ago

Ha ha great story.. love the imagery and the reference to one of the greatest movies of all time!
On The Life of the Party:

posted 3 months ago

freakin love that song! I don’t care if its old.. Usher and Ludacris its just classic!
On Too Forward:

posted 3 months ago

hey nothing wrong with Marc Ruffalo.. hes smokin hot! But i agree the interaction was life like and realistic.
On The Game Is In Full Swing:

posted 3 months ago

wow smooth talking she talked herself into a ride to Cleveland.. quick question.. where do they live in relation to Cleveland?
On The Upper Hand:

posted 3 months ago

agree with hunting beauty.. such a cliche line but thats cool it works for him.
On Okay, But It's Gonna Cost You:

posted 3 months ago

holy cow frat-boys arguing and betting over a paper, for a girl… wow.. amazing.. Could they be any more misogynist I like the developing characters here.. good work you guys!
On What Guys Want, The Other Point of View:

posted 3 months ago

nice too meet you sassy.. wow name suits her well.. this is starting to get interesting.
On Be Cool, Man, Be Cool.:

posted 3 months ago

ha ha it pays to be a friend of the “Big man on campus” It’s good that your displaying Jameson’s vulnerability. It shows hes a normal guy..
On Tongue-Tied:

posted 3 months ago

Good depiction of a dude at a frat party.. I had to start at the beginning.. And see how this all started.. I like how you did his inner monologue. nice touch..
On Crushed:

posted 3 months ago

love this story.. this series looks very intriguing. I have caught it in the middle so I will need to catch up..
On Samantha's Restlessness:

posted 3 months ago

i agree with thx.. the end reveals the true reason why she is not able to rest.
On At the Chestertons' Ball:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. this is one exquisite story! Its so rich in detail. Immediately it made me think of a Jane Austin novel or a scene from the movie Marie Antoinette. You truly have a way with words.
On Front Porch Conversations--Five:

posted 3 months ago

omg this rocks its hilarious! its so simple and yet it totoally works! pure genius! I agree with My name is ..
On An Outline of a Plan:

posted 3 months ago

my favorite names Emily and Chris
On Strawberry Fields Forever:

posted 3 months ago

nice pun uselessness.. wow that sounds cool catching up on this while comfortably seated in a bean bag chair.. not a bad place to be. This series will go down in history.. you two work so well off eachother. I wish kevin stuck around long enough to see this. He would gleam with pride. this story rocks btw
On Another One Bites The Dust:

posted 3 months ago

NFW what did she do? For some reason Ol bess reminds me of the house keeper in 2 and a half men.. idk why
On Your Royal Steed Awaits:

posted 3 months ago

ha ha tbs.. ohh laser show.. that sounds cool! those planitariums are so cool!
On How Does It Feel:

posted 3 months ago

aww cute lil heart to heart.. I could hear them talk in my head. very believable dialouge you got going there.. I agree with the 80s music.. What a great decade!
On One Sick Puppy:

posted 3 months ago

steve buscemi huh thats an interesting thought.. love the story.. another good edition
On Charles In Trouble:

posted 3 months ago

i agree with my name is.. When you mentioned european accent, for some reason the person talking spoke in a British accent.
On One Sick Puppy:

posted 3 months ago

Omg.. thats crazy.. I think Karl feels bad for Becca.. Maybe she didnt really want to be with Paul. And he sensed that. Maybe hes destracting her.. Keep it going.. This series Rocks!!
On Do You Believe In Magic?:

posted 3 months ago

oh no.. thier gonna fight.. ha ha thats pretty cool. I like how they totally play on eachothers emotions. Good stuff
On The Great Karl:

posted 3 months ago

Pure comic.. This one is some funny stuff.. Beckie weckie is funny itself then you pull out the Great Karl.. good stuff.. Fun read
On Simply Irresistible:

posted 3 months ago

Beautifully written sequel.. It shows some definate promise for these too. Hope Becca is ok with it.
On Bold as Brass:

posted 3 months ago

I like how you did a back story piece about Prandi. It’s like we get a feel for who she is as a person. and not some person in the bar. Great story. Excellent development of her character.
On Nobody Puts Sassy In A Corner:

posted 3 months ago

woaah those are fighting words. I like how you built this up.. ha ha you called her old mess thats funny!
On Hear Ye, Hear Ye: Winners of the Out-of-Order Challenge (Part 1):

posted 3 months ago

congrats to the winners!
On Just A Poem :

posted 3 months ago

I totally forgotten about that one.. yeah its pretty good I guess.
On Bad Day(Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

wow no way! Didn’t see that coming.
On Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

wow thats what it comes down to huh, he realizes what he would be missing if he took someone’s life.
On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

posted 3 months ago

Congrats on your rising achievements in the realm of ficlets!
On White Patent Shoes [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

no way her moms a ghost, I didn’t expect that!
On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

posted 3 months ago

my what an excellent concept. I like the challenges that are straight forward and have a universal concept. This is one that anyone can work with.
On WonderEmily:

posted 3 months ago

mistaken identity
On Hey Me, It's You: Part 7:

posted 3 months ago

ahh the perils of text messaging.. why does everyone do it? wouldn’t it be easier to call?
On Loving:

posted 3 months ago

very true statements you have made. If only everyone operated on these beliefs.
On Your Outlet For Pain:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. what a powerful piece. The person in this story has strong conviction. The story really grabs your attention, you feel for the character.
On Healing Paul{The Great Supporting Character Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

the characters seem real. You could picture these two talking. Their banter is lifelike. You present a very believable story here.
On PeterPan My Life:

posted 3 months ago

nice job. I like how you gave us an inside look into your “obsession” But its a good one to have.
On Do Not Commit Sucicide:

posted 3 months ago

wow such a powerful story/message. Coupled by an equally impressive photo. It’s hard to believe that such a dark story came from such a photo. But I do see the connection between the two.
On Friendship in the Making:

posted 3 months ago

she seems nice
On Remembering Losing my Temper:

posted 3 months ago

wow.. i can totally relate.. the shock and the horror of losing ones temper but there is a bitter sweet feeling that overcomes you. Sometimes when you lose your temper you feel justified and at the time it seems right. But then when that moment elapses you feel guilty and you wish that you had approached the situation differently. Great story.
On {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge} Zen Master Biffbong and His Pearls of Wisdom:

posted 3 months ago

I love it! This guy is preying upon the gullible who believe those are his words.. he is zen master, Con artist all in one.. What next he should say is ….”What’s in youurrr wallet?”
On Flashbacks:

posted 3 months ago

Karl.. he must be a nam vet.. or just really wierd. I agree with THX, this seems to be a lot that takes place in one night. Maybe she just took a lil nap. Never the less this story is consistently interesting,
On Girl Interrupted:

posted 3 months ago

wow..that wasn’t expected.. looks like he’s already moved on to Prandi.
On The Crane Wife 2 [Sing-Song Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

lovely story.. was not aware it was inspired by a song.. imho it doesnt have to this story stands solid on its own.
On Establishing a base:

posted 3 months ago

smart dogs..hope thier of the nice non biting persuasion
On These Stilettos Aren't Made For Walking:

posted 3 months ago

what a twist.. Wonder where Sassy ended up?
On That Butterfly in Chaos Theory:

posted 3 months ago

another exellent edition to this series
On my mood: i am alone:

posted 3 months ago

its amazing how weather can affect your mood. When I get depressed, I watch movies, They are a great distraction. You get sucked into the movie and you forget about what was bothering you before hand.
On Anti Crying:

posted 4 months ago

took the previous ficlet as a topic of debate mine is the counter argument.
On You Got Served!:

posted 4 months ago

ha ha a dance off.. too funny. Prandi competing aginst Sassy. Too cool. For some reason Karl reminds me of the barfly from the simpsons… just a thought :) love what youve done with this series
On What's In A Name?:

posted 4 months ago

ha ha thats what he gets for being a fool. How could he forget her name, shes rather ..uh unforgetable. Nice build up. You did well transitioning from the dream to the awake state.. how mortifyingly awkward.
On Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}:

posted 4 months ago

wow.. kicking a dog.. not cool. Whats making pops so grouchy?? was fathers gift hand made?
On A Dose Of Her Own Medicine:

posted 4 months ago

Im still shocked that shes in love with Sassy.. Awesome story. I absolutely love this series.
On Friggatriskaidekaphobia:

posted 4 months ago

love the picture that you chose.. Its so arty and different. The story is cute too. I love how the innocence of the child resonates throughout the story.
On Becca's Dream:

posted 4 months ago

omg I’ve had a dream similar to that. Thats crazy weird. Hope she doesn’t wake up Paul.
On Sweet Oblivion:

posted 4 months ago

what a cozy moment
On Unconventional Zen Master Challenge:

posted 4 months ago

dont quite understand the jist of the challenge.. I have to be honest I really dont understand what an unconventional zen master is.. but once I see some examples, I am sure to chip in. :) Welcome to ficlets (yes this is rather late..sorry) Congrats on your achievements. You should be so proud!
On Daddy's Home Part IV:

posted 4 months ago

Wow.. not expecting the guy to die. Thats such a moving story. This really caught your attention from the start. I like how you can get the person who reads this, sucked into the story. The characters and the situation really draw you in
On Daddy's Home Part III:

posted 4 months ago

wow.. hope the mother is ok..
On Daddy's Home Part II:

posted 4 months ago

omg!! how scary..
On Bennett's Gift:

posted 4 months ago

wow i found this one.. man this was written ages ago! I forgot how cute this story was.. we shold pick up on this story and breathe some new life into it.
On Penny for Your Thoughts:

posted 4 months ago

aww they finally kiss.. good for them. Im starting to like them even more. I kinda figgured they would end up together, it was just a matter of time.
On Some Intangible Connection:

posted 4 months ago

My guess is Sassy is drunk.. Think about it, shes chilling with a bar tender with the hots for her. Do you think she wont ply her with liquor?
On Fools in Love:

posted 4 months ago

Wonder what G&R Song was playing in the background… could it be Paradise City..or Sweet Child of mine. Glad you decided to keep it going.. I became rather attached to this series. I have been following it for weeks now.
On Hell of an Apartment:

posted 4 months ago

tenth floor good lord. Thats an insane amount of steps!
On Can You Write Enough?:

posted 4 months ago

wow its so honest and so raw.. Your not hiding behind a thought out planned out story. This is like-it-is-so-deal-with-it kind of writing.
On Ethan Jr.'s Night Out.:

posted 4 months ago

in all the ficlets I have read, none have made me laugh from begining to end. This was hilarious! Man Ethan is such a lightweight.. Hes slurring after a couple of drinks!? Come on, hes high class he shouldnt be a rookie!
On Ethan Jr.'s Night Out.:

posted 4 months ago

in all the ficlets I have read, none have made me laugh from begining to end. This was hilarious! Man Ethan is such a lightweight.. Hes slurring after a couple of drinks!? Come on, hes high class he shouldnt be a rookie!
On Dennis Yunker and His Senior Moment:

posted 4 months ago

very suspenseful.. Excellent wording.. One of your best! :)
On End of the Nightmare:

posted 4 months ago

hes gotta do what hes gotta do.
On Cigarettes Will Kill You:

posted 4 months ago

schweet!
On Stupefied:

posted 4 months ago

Who would have thought that Sassy and Old Bess would end up together.. I thought Old Bess was joking.

I have had a sinking suspicion about Prandi and Jameson this whole time.. I could sort of tell that they were playing Becca, or was it vice versa
On Ooh-Oh, That Magic Feeling:

posted 4 months ago

wow way to come out of left field with such an awesome story. I think you should participate more often. Im sure between and Ana wouldn’t mind.
On One Crazy Country:

posted 4 months ago

omg.. thats so bizzare.. Is Old Bess trying to prove something?
On Peeping Tom:

posted 4 months ago

Scary scenario.. great use of my favorite word.. bedraggled, 5 stars.
On The Demented Donkey on Healthy Hill:

posted 4 months ago

Demented donkey, what an original idea, clever and funny.
On Braces [OM's challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

Donkey teeth.. funny arguement, great job.
On So Random, It had to be a Dream {OM's Word Challenge}:

posted 4 months ago

Glad it was a dream, very trippy esperience.great use of all the words.
On The Appartment:

posted 4 months ago

On the run thye are.. seedy appartment, great story
On Southbound on the Bakerloo:

posted 4 months ago

She has an interest in the mystery man. intriguing.
On Coyote Ugly:

posted 4 months ago

Confirming my suspicions about Prandi and Jameson.. Sassy is probably drunk, and therefore confrontational. Im dying to know what she said to him while she was “unloading” on him. Good stuff.
On Not So Fast:

posted 4 months ago

Cool twist… gotta love the wonderball
On Gibson Inc:

posted 4 months ago

Thanx John fixed the his to him.
On Two For One Special:

posted 4 months ago

wow thats a slick move.. Jameson is moving on to Prandi? I thought they were best friends?
On Flash of Memories:

posted 4 months ago

no way hes a vampyre.. I thought he was just a zombie.. I like how you described the sensations of her blood and her life at diffrent stages.. you described this story very well.
On Meditations On An Astronomical Bar Tab:

posted 4 months ago

aww poor baby got stuck with the check. Sonds like this is the end of a drama filled night. But a very interesting one at that.
On In Complete and Utter Shock:

posted 4 months ago

yay you used the Porcelain god line.. thats so cool. im kinda confused who was she talking about Jameson or the other dude.
On Friend Request:

posted 4 months ago

i can totally relate to this story.. ive been in a situation similar to this.
On FICLETS FUTURE VISION CHALLENGE:

posted 4 months ago

Video game would be cool. Using some of the awesome characters created by ficlet authors.
On Ficlets of Change:

posted 4 months ago

No Pooftahs!!! Great suggestions.
On Bagman: A Little Less Red:

posted 4 months ago

Emotional ending.
On Ficlets of the Future:

posted 4 months ago

looks like hes sucking up to melia ha ha jk Thats a very amusing story there kermy.. What year do you propose this occours in?
On The Look of Love:

posted 4 months ago

I echo my fellow ficleteers on this one love the story love the details and the personifications. Phew thats a big word. I think its funny how thier all getting sick.. What exaclty was in those fajitias? Oh wait thier drunk nm. Prandi better go check on Becca.. Shes probably praying to the porcilian god.
On Another Unsettling Realization:

posted 4 months ago

omg Old Bess a lesbian… no way.. I kinda figured tho, based on the mental pic of her i have in my head.. Exellent story.
On If shes everything you've ever wanted: Part 20:

posted 4 months ago

wow thats very insightful. Interesting story. What a very grounded individual.
On Permits Are Just Too Easy To Get:

posted 4 months ago

but wait .. wouldnt she want a qoi pond? that way the monkies would drown.. muahahaha.
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