Wow. This definitely pulled on my heart strings, haha. I really love the second to last paragraph: I think the tragedy is particularly captured in that moment. Beautiful.
I’m really impressed with how you were able to fit such a deep story in only a few sentences. And I LOVE this line: “Her glance peeled him like an orange, revealing the bruised and ugly fruit underneath.” Great job, really. LoA
You used so many great phrases in here… “slick and crimson”, “summer twilight”. They really enhance the mood. Great job! It was most definitely “hauntingly beautiful”. LoA
By the way, thanks for reading and commenting my entry!
You used so many great phrases in here… “slick and crimson”, “summer twilight”. They really enhance the mood. Great job! It was most definitely “hauntingly beautiful”. LoA
By the way, thanks for reading and commenting my entry!
The last paragraph is particularly my favorite- it gave me goosebumps. You really captured the mood of wonder and infatuation in this one. Great job! -LoA
It’s interesting how Katherine is the exact foil of Julie… and how, through her disinterest, she is immediately OF interest to us. Nice job! I’m intrigued. LoA
I agree with this in some sense- however, I think it is more about how the nonsensical is handled.
Nonsense can be brilliant, when used in the right way- the problem is that typing meaningless letters and words to be “abstract” or “random” is not literature. LoA
I completely agree with this. Ficlets is an awesome outlet for writers, and should not be tainted by those who can’t think of anything more creative than an obscene title/ficlet/whatever. LoA
Haha, thanks for reading. To be honest, I’m not a big fan of it myself.
I started off writing something in Word which I was quite pleased with- but it was around 900 characters too long. I think the editing is what made the beginning awkward. Thanks again!
Thanks for your comments, haha. F or “Stone Cold”, I definitely know how you feel… I can’t help lording it over everyone when I guess right. And I’m glad you like “Exits and Entrances”.
Love how the picture ties in with this… it definitely fits “Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds”, haha. I like your writing style a lot with this one; very natural.
By the way, thanks for your comment on “Silence is Golden”! And honestly, I just picked a picture that inspired me, not necessarily one that fit with the story. Thanks again, I appreciate it.
I’m a music lover. I’m overly dramatic at times. I can be emotional. I’m passionate. I love my friends. I take things too personally. I’m a RENThead. I love New York City. I’m a thespian. I’m a writer. I’m a tragedian. I’m a sucker for villains. I’m flawed.
Writing, music and theater keep me alive. I consider these things a way for me to be more than a disgruntled teenager trapped in Suburbia; until I can break free, I’ll dive into the arts.
I think everything that I write is a fleeting shot at self-reflection. Even when I use characters, a piece of me is in there. But what are any of us trying to do but find ourselves?
Music keeps my heart beating.
Am I alone? It feels like it sometimes. I’m trying, really. I’m not sure what to do with myself. This world is crazy. I think that it’s very, very easy to get lost, and maybe never to be found.
I’m a member of the League of Awesomeness, which is, indeed, Superawesome. The initiation was pretty hardcore.
I christen myself the Mistress of Relentless Musings.
Feel free to sequel/prequel any of my ficlets! Seriously.
(Formerly known as musicxhearted)
Favorite author
Stephenie Meyer, Scott Westerfeld, Tamora Pierce, Alice Sebold, Kate Constable, more that should be mentioned but won’t be as for the moment…
Favorite book
Twilight, The Singer of All Songs Series, The Lovely Bones,and many more
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