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On Just a Saying, Poorly Timed:

posted 4 months ago

Ha. Rather unexpected compared to the other entries. It got a laugh out of me.
On Letters to Amberly: Rescue Me:

posted 4 months ago

I really like these. I can’t wait to see where their relationship goes from letter to letter. A very nice job.
On Puppy Dog Eyes:

posted 5 months ago

Ha. That goes really rather perfectly with the photo. And of course it works. I don’t think there’s anyone in the world that doesn’t respond to puppy dog eyes.
On White Square on the Black Counter:

posted 5 months ago

Sorry I haven’t updated it in forever. But I was gone on vacation and haven’t had internet access for two weeks.
Good news: writer’s block is gone.
On A New Ending Challenge (50 FICLETS CHALLENGE!):

posted 6 months ago

Wow. This one’s going to be really tricky, I think. I’ll have to think quite a bit before I try this one out. Good idea, though.
On Mother, Where Did You Go?:

posted 6 months ago

It’s very interesting, in this story, how you’ve moved backwards through time, prequeling as opposed to sequeling. It gives you a different insight than most stories do.
On A Fun But Insane Quiz From Insert Pen Name Here's Very Insane Mind (Hopefully this really really long title will grab your attention: CLICK ON MEEE!!!):

posted 6 months ago

Fun questions, I thought. And it’s better than any challenge I’ve done considering, well…I’ve yet to do a challenge, even though I’m past 100 ficlets.
On A Fun But Insane Quiz From Insert Pen Name Here's Very Insane Mind And the Title DID indeed catch my attention so here is my reply to Insert pen name's quizzy-poo ;) :

posted 6 months ago

Oh wow. I should have done this. But I don’t think I will, because I’m too lazy. Good job, anyway!
On View from Above:

posted 6 months ago

That’s a sweet story. I didn’t think he was dead in the beginning, but when I found out it didn’t seem so much of a shock, it just seemed almost natural that he would be. I liked it a lot. Good job.
On Anne and Charles [2]:

posted 6 months ago

These are beautiful, I think. All of them. Good job!
On Day at the Office:

posted 6 months ago

I like the subtle and detailed descriptions that you have in it, for example, the fact that you put that the coke was luke-warm. It moves a bit quickly, so I don’t know if it completely drew me in has-me-begging-for-a-sequel, but I am certainly interested in where you take it, and I’ll watch for one.
On Who is Him?:

posted 6 months ago

Well I’d kind of like to let the original author of the series, Celestic23, go from here, so I don’t take the story somewhere she doesn’t want it to go. If she’s ok with it, though, I’ll continue.
On Three AM:

posted 6 months ago

There isn’t really anything going on, plot-wise, at least, in this ficlet, but it still adds to the story. Which I’m enjoying quite a bit.
On The Bathrooms :

posted 6 months ago

“Hey thats a great place for the toilet” made me laugh. But still, it’s lovely writing.
On The Lease :

posted 6 months ago

It’s a bit odd, I think, how almost…business-like their decision to become a couple is, though.
On Him: Time.:

posted 6 months ago

Sorry about that. I put in it italics. It is, in fact, a memory, which is why the line “It was months ago that they’d moved in.” is in there. But it was a bit confusing, sorry.
On Swim Away From The Crowd.:

posted 6 months ago

It begins with an almost simple, dare I say it: overused, idea, a person ranting against the uniformity of life, though you still can’t help but like the speaker. And then the rest, especially the last sentance, shatter up that, and make it a lot bigger than just that.
On Woods Inn:

posted 6 months ago

Quite a bit to take from the picture, and it really draws you in. Good job, it’s lovely.
On RedShoes:

posted 6 months ago

I would like it quite a bit better if you had new paragraphs for each quote, considering it’s hard to tell who is speaking all of the time. Still, entertaining.
On Tom and Jayke: Part 2:

posted 6 months ago

Wow. Turned out rather different than you would expect between them. Especially considering that she actually married his brother. That’s a bit cold, I think, but as long as they ended up happy. If they ended up happy…
On the imperfection of perfection:

posted 7 months ago

Slightly sad in it’s truth. Still, good job, that was a lot to take out of the image.
On The Not-So-Great Detective {Minimum Length Challenge}:

posted 7 months ago

It has a note of finality to it, which I like. Quite a few in the challenge do, but some are missing that. It leaves a whole story open, but it’s still somehow enough.
On Just End It:

posted 7 months ago

Ha ha ha ha. Thanks for letting us know that. Good job, though. Snifty way of using 1 as opposed to “one” to save characters.
On Confession (minimum length challenge):

posted 7 months ago

Unexpected and intense. Good job.
On Something Extra [Minimum Length Ficlet Challenge]:

posted 7 months ago

I didn’t know if it were possible to have that much humor in so little space. That actually made me smile “out loud” and that doesn’t happen often. Good job.
On Cause of Death: Unconfirmed:

posted 7 months ago

Ha, lovely twist on that one. Really changes my ficlet quite a bit, and all in 64 characters.
On The Bastard:

posted 7 months ago

It leaves you wondering about what lead up to what’s here. But what 64 character story wouldn’t leave you wondering? I suppose it’s to be expected in your own challenge, but still, good job.
On Exact minimum length ficlet [And the winner is . .]:

posted 7 months ago

A brilliant idea. I don’t think I would have ever thought about it, I more think of the maximum number of characters than the minimum. It was quite a challenge.
On Fritz and Zooey: In Which Reid and Zooey Meet Elizabeth Taylor:

posted 7 months ago

Beautiful, as always.
On Seperation from reality and life:

posted 7 months ago

Wow. Good begining, I’m interested to see where it goes, and what happens next. Looks like you have the makings of a good story.
On Middle of a Story [phosphate's challenge]:

posted 7 months ago

Ha ha. Thanks, dunno why I put that.
On Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge):

posted 7 months ago

It’s intense, but you don’t really feel for the characters so much. Well, I didn’t, at least. It would have been better if you knew the characters, and liked them.
On Adrien and the Nurse:

posted 8 months ago

You know what, Stovohobo? You suck. You keep pumping out brilliant stories, and all of mine are horrible. I am jealous.
Good job, as always.
On Alright:

posted 8 months ago

She obviously has a thing for guys with blue eyes. And I’m predicting that Ty’s gonna be there.
On Get Over it, Susan:

posted 8 months ago

Sucks to be Jeff, too.
On Hiding with her :

posted 8 months ago

Ha. And a lot can happen while waiting, I suppose. Good job.
On She:

posted 8 months ago

I liked that. The ending was unexpected (and maybe that’s a bit sad in itself), the flow of the whole story was smooth and brillliant, and I simply liked it. Good job!
On Short & Sweet.:

posted 8 months ago

Ha. That’s lovely. Truly lovely.
On PHOBIA CHALLENGE WINNERS!:

posted 8 months ago

Wow. The first time I sign on in forever and I have a note telling me I got first place in a challenge. Thank you. Very, very much.
On Mother's Always Right:

posted 9 months ago

Of course he doesn’t mean that. It is a bit out of character for him, but I’m assuming that it’s stress-related. After all, it’s not often you’re running away with an ‘evil villian.’
On Deep Sleep:

posted 9 months ago

Ha. Brilliant. The Tornado strikes again.
On Who is this Ficleteer?:

posted 9 months ago

And if One Time, One Chance mysteriously stops writing…well, we’ll know, won’t we? Mua ha ha ha.
On Just Take a Picture:

posted 9 months ago

Wow, I really like this. The way it starts, the nod to photographic memory, the ending. Really nice.
On The Artists These Days Are Not What You Think:

posted 9 months ago

Wow. That was pretty harsh right there.
I don’t know, it leaves openings for a story, but it would need to pick up quite a bit for it to be good.
On The Red Sox Suck:

posted 9 months ago

I don’t know. The beginning was a bit sad-ish, kind of a melencholy tone in there. But the last sentance just made it funny and brought up the mood a lot. Good job. It’s Lovely.
On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

posted 9 months ago

I must say, I’m impressed by the number of people that have entered. Good challenge idea, YodaOnCrack. You should win a prize…and do this every year.
On !yzarC eM llaC elpoeP emoS:

posted 9 months ago

This=lovely. Towards the end I could actually read it without having to think about it.
On Fritz and Zooey: In Which Zooey Discovers the Identity of the Guy in the Red Pants:

posted 9 months ago

I can’t believe I’ve been so totally absent minded for the past ten days that I did not realize that these were here. Argh. Well, that’s ok. It was a nice treat now. I just want another one, please. I love them. XD
On What, You Expected A Happy Ending? (pt. 2):

posted 9 months ago

There is something totally beautiful about this. I can’t really say what, and people probably think I’m crazy for saying it, but it’s true. Ok, for me it’s true. I love the blatant tossing away of the usual Happy Ending. Funny, cynical… Lovely.
On Officially:

posted 9 months ago

*poppycock. Darn inability to edit comments.
On Officially:

posted 9 months ago

It is random. And my Words of the Week vary quite a bit. I drove my father crazy after I read Mary Poppins and poppeycock was the WotW.
On Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion:

posted 9 months ago

The story is good enough, but I don’t quite understand what lead her to say no. Simply the loss of a charm? All of her doubts? Earlier on the phone she’d seemed happy…So I think you should add more.
On TheSunshine Let In:

posted 9 months ago

Hm. It’s a bit confusing. I’m hoping that you’ll sequel it, perhaps, and give us a bigger picture. But I like the closing of the sunroof signifying the end of the ‘sunlight’ as it were.
On Blake and me, trying to fly, sooo much fun.:

posted 9 months ago

Ha. An angel afraid of heights.
On Diaspora's Leukophobia:

posted 9 months ago

I almost wrote my ficlet on that, so as soon as I saw the title I was horribly curious on where you were going to go with it. I really like they tie in of the supernatural fear-finding place. Lovely.
On When A Bell Rings:

posted 9 months ago

The picture is slightly creepy, I think. Reminds me of Dr. Who. But the story is lovely. I didn’t get that he was an angel until the very end, and I loved that.
On The Song of the Pitchforked Children:

posted 9 months ago

One thing, though. Rereading it, I found this inconsistancy: you use the word frigid and later say that she shivered “though it wasn’t cold.” Still, great job.
On The Song of the Pitchforked Children:

posted 9 months ago

Creepy. Good job. The poem really adds to it. I imagine it being sung by little children, like the creepiness in Ring Around the Rosies when you see a bunch of kids singing it for the first time after you’ve found out what it mean.
On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

posted 9 months ago

I just have a question that I’ve looked over and am surprised that no one has asked yet: do you continue it to 2000 characters only if you win, or simply to enter?
On YodaOnCrack Halloween Challenge:

posted 9 months ago

I figure it’s about time for me to enter. I’ll work on one right now! Great challenge idea, by the way. And many great entries
On fresh start a new day:

posted 9 months ago

And IheartSoccer x10, just spell out Sex. Putting something other and an ‘e’ in there isn’t magically going to change the word that it is or the word that you intended it to be. Immature prat.
On Journal of the Lost:

posted 9 months ago

Hm. Very good, I think. I’m just wondering about your character. When I first read it, I took it to be male and that he had companions. When I read it again, the character was still male (in my head) but was alone. Very curious to see where this is going.

Good job.
On fresh start a new day:

posted 9 months ago

I’m also getting pretty sick of the ‘ruined the series’ ones. soccerISmyLIFE could start writing again back at Lips, the story that LovedandAlone picked up. So either stop reading it, or stop commenting. Please. Because you also seem to forget that LovedandAlone is a person, and her writing isn’t horrible.
On fresh start a new day:

posted 9 months ago

I’ve been reading these, and while I’m not sure if they are the greatest in style or writing, I really wish the whole ‘you series ruiner, they’re 13!!!!!!!’ would just stop. That’s bull. It’s quite obvious that LovedandAlone simply took the general idea of the previous story and then changed it to a story of her own. No, LovedandAlone’s character ARE NOT 13. She’s writing differently. All of the ranting and ravings is getting extreme.
On Wednesday's Find:

posted 10 months ago

Ugh. I need another.
On A Curse Upon You:

posted 10 months ago

I’d really like to see another of these. I love them.
On The End:

posted 10 months ago

Eh. It’s good. It just ties up too neatly in the end. He had a baby at the age of 18, yet he still manages to go to college and become a lawyer? Too far fetched.
On Hot Pink Umbrella:

posted 10 months ago

Wow. That was pretty evil of you, right there.
On Captain Obvious Wins An Award: The Stupidest God-brother on the Planet:

posted 10 months ago

Ha. I love these.
On No Place in Perfection:

posted 10 months ago

Is it really allowed to write a sequel for a challenge started ficlet? I wasn’t really thinking about it…hm. Maybe.
On No Place in Perfection:

posted 10 months ago

Not overtly dramatic. Not my best, I don’t think. But it’s got the conflicting emotions, the unrequited love…And let me tell you: it is hard to fit a meat into a tragic love story!
On The "Make Me Hungry for Teen Drama Contest" Contest! {Yeah Write's first ever!!}:

posted 10 months ago

Ha! I love this idea. So I entered. Good job! I haven’t been able to come up with a challenge yet.
On Giving In:

posted 10 months ago

Ha. I don’t comment a lot, but I do read all of these, and they’re all very good!
On ******100th ficlet Challange!******:

posted 10 months ago

So do we chose one of them in the list and write a story about them?
On Just Another Day at the Office:

posted 10 months ago

No, not what I had planned. But I didn’t actually have a sequel planned at all, just a few character. So I think I’ll go with it. Good job!
On Pissed Off Deity:

posted 10 months ago

Ha, I realized that I stole the ‘by all means’ from you. I do that a lot without realizing it, take words that I just heard/read/even wrote myself and use them. And often it looks stupid. Like here. Whoops.
On Pissed Off Deity:

posted 10 months ago

I have a loose plan for it. But by all means, I’d be honored to have you sequel it.
On Hopefully this title will catch your attention.Part 3.:

posted 10 months ago

Ha. Served her right. Lovely, by the way.
On Oh NO!:

posted 10 months ago

Ugh. She’s totally faking it, ‘cause she’s a bitch.
On Score:

posted 10 months ago

Score? Really? ‘cause this entire time she’s been talking to him likey ou would talk to a four year old. And you don’t date four year olds…Still good, though.
On Playing Dummy:

posted 10 months ago

I’m horribly interested to see where you take it. Or, rather, where you and Stovohobo take it.
On (Genre: Comedy) Cheerleader Chear Leeder's Accident:

posted 10 months ago

Now you know why I don’t write comedy. ‘cause I suck at it.
On Why Oh Why:

posted 10 months ago

ACK! From the bottom. Sorry ‘bout that.
On Why Oh Why:

posted 10 months ago

The fourth and third line from the top don’t flow as well as the rest, I don’t think, but the last two lines….I loved how it ended.
On Cedar High School - Part One:

posted 10 months ago

I agree. I’m curious to see where the story goes (that’s one of the things l like about beginnings, it can go anywhere), but I wasn’t drawn in. I bet as the story goes on, it get’s much better, though. Good job.
On High School Hell:

posted 10 months ago

Songs:
Start of Something New
Get’cha Head in the Game
Bop to the Top
Breaking Free

All from High School Musical. Ha ha ha.
On High School Hell:

posted 10 months ago

I’ve been wanting to do this for a really long time, I just couldn’t think of a song or story.
Personally I’m not a fan of High School Musical, but I thought it would be fun to incorperate the songs into something, it only because I couldn’t think of anything else. I know it’s really horrible, but whatever.
On The Stories of Claire and Andrew: Fear Defines You:

posted 10 months ago

I think that that episode that she’s talking about is from The Twilight Zone. Ha, I love that show! And these stories.
On The Pipe:

posted 11 months ago

Please, someone, feel free to take any of my ficlets somewhere. A sequel for this might be nice.
On The Caretaker's Catacombs:

posted 11 months ago

I went to the catacombs in Paris while I was there. I was awesome. And freaky. Wow. That was an amazing experience. Everyone who visits Paris should go to the catacombs.
On AAAICOF Notice:

posted 11 months ago

Yes, yes. I’m joining as well. Can we write up citations? Ha ha ha.
On AAAICOF Notice:

posted 11 months ago

Hmm…Interesting.
On The Dumbwaiter Incident:

posted 11 months ago

I don’t know quite how to describe what’s happening between them, but I love it. How clearly they are fighting one another, and how they just pretend that they aren’t. I love this!
On The almost death of Mr. wiggles:

posted 11 months ago

It’s good, especially the end, but the flow between this one and the last is a bit choppy. How did she change from following to threatening them? And where did Mr. Wiggles come from?
On Entry 18:

posted 11 months ago

Wow. That’s so amazing. I now have to look for all of my ficlets on Google. Ha! I’m on Google!!!
On Hollow Eyes:

posted 11 months ago

I’m glad to see that he isn’t dead. That’s good.
On Breathless:

posted 11 months ago

Ha! Wow. A psychic. Or something. Still, awesome! I would love to hear more.
On To Become a Peacock:

posted 11 months ago

Yeah, I don’t get it much either. I guess it’s the simulated ‘deep’ quality that comes about when you’ve not had enough sleep all week. Ah well.
On Midnight Masquerade:

posted 11 months ago

I totally agree.

OooooOoooOooo0Oooo…ooh.
On Revelations:

posted 11 months ago

um…what? What happened? I am very curious.
On Turning Around:

posted 11 months ago

I like it. More, please.
On Fritz and Zooey: 5:55:

posted 11 months ago

Is Mr. Williamson going to end up being Ms. Williamson? Because I can totally see kittens happening, and Fritz and Zooey completely freaking out.
On Fin's Story: Part Four:

posted 11 months ago

Ughh…I still have to put in Bridge and Marco. They are the last ones, though, and at the end I’ll have a brief recap. Don’t worry!!
On June's Story:

posted 11 months ago

No, me neither. Florence’s was the longest ‘cause she’s my favorite. June’s just….meh. June.
On Of Butcher Knives, Cement Blocks, and Subtle Death Threats:

posted 11 months ago

Ha, this is lovely. It’s interesting that they are trying so hard to kill each other, but it makes for a great story. Bravo!
On Florence's Story: Part Six:

posted 11 months ago

It’s good. I’m interested in where you’ll take Florence’s story. I was going to end it here and go one with the next few orphans and the whole Oliver and the Diary plot, but I like this too!
On Cold Rain:

posted 11 months ago

Woah. Good villain idea. Mask Face. Sweet.
And poor Grasshopper’s in for it now. Sucker!
On Hoping for Glory:

posted 11 months ago

Woah, dark. I guessed something like that was doing to happen as soon as I read the first couple of sentances. But it was still really…profound.
Oh, and you could always hit the ‘Edit’ button.
On Ignored:

posted 11 months ago

This is just a story, right? Because you really get the emotions across. You don’t seriously mean this, right? ‘cause you’re a great writer!
On Tell Me or Its Over!:

posted 11 months ago

Maybe because she was sick of waiting for him, and was going to break up with him because the relationship wasn’t going anywhere, so if he asked her she wouldn’t have to.
On Fritz and Zooey: Paying With Nickels:

posted 11 months ago

Yay! They are back! I am soo happy! I love these.
On Brass Eagle and the Escape From the Notorious Furry Bond Fanatic:

posted 11 months ago

Ha ha ha! I love the use of Bond references here, and that’s always been my favorite.
On A "Wasted" Night:

posted 11 months ago

Aw. I still feel a bit bad for Jeremy. I mean, he’s obviously being a jerk right now, but still. He was used.

But I still say that Logan rocks. Go him.
On Cinderellis in the Club:

posted 11 months ago

Ha. Very sentimental. It’s good, though. I’m really hoping to hear more from it.
On "Hop to Me...":

posted 11 months ago

Oooh. Suspense.
On That Kiss:

posted 11 months ago

No, sequel. Because the prequel would be sad because you’d know what was coming. I want there to be a nasty break up with Sasha! That would, you know, end up good in the end for both of them…ha.
On Unbelievably Cruel:

posted 11 months ago

Thanks for the title, blueyedwonder! It was originally going to be Jake, but that was too predictable, and when you said that….Well, I just had to do it!
On Bound for Engalnd:

posted 11 months ago

There is no such thing as nifty. Snifty is the new nifty. You should adopt it. I’d be the one that started a whole change of word. But seriously- snifty is the new nifty. Oh, and this story is snifty.
On Honorable Mention:

posted 11 months ago

Awww. I’m…honored.
On The Winner Of Stovohobo's "Ficlet the Meaningless Number, Challenge the Second" Challenge Is...:

posted 11 months ago

Actually, that was just an excuse. I didn’t vote because I forgot. But looking back now I’m not sure which I would choose.
On The Winner Of Stovohobo's "Ficlet the Meaningless Number, Challenge the Second" Challenge Is...:

posted 11 months ago

Whoops. I didn’t vote. But that’s because I didn’t know who I would vote for, and I entered. So that wouldn’t really be fair, would it? Eh, I dunno.
On You can fly!:

posted 11 months ago

Ha. I wonder just how you’re an angel if you have parents and a little sister and stuff. Adopted, maybe? I’m really interested in where you’re taking this.
On Kings Are Supposed to be Treated Like Kings:

posted 11 months ago

Maybe the seven levels of sword play don’t always work…

Ha ha, I love these.
On C'mon, Kid:

posted 11 months ago

Maybe I should’ve matured it for the profanity, but I think that just about everyone’s heard that word, it’s not too bad, and it’s only one. So too bad.
On The Whole Truth, The Total Truth, And Nothing But The Truth:

posted 11 months ago

Wow. I love how you could the previous story and made it into something new. I hope to hear a lot from this line of story, it looks like it’s going to be lovely!
On Weather Appreciation 303:

posted 11 months ago

It was a good idea. I’m interested in seeing where you go with it. And the titles, by my opinion, and wonderful!
On Sleep Well:

posted 11 months ago

See I’m not really sure quite yet. It would be an interesting twist if it were an evil diary, but that would be too Harry Potter-ish. So probably, yes.
On The Joys of Ice Cream:

posted 11 months ago

Heh, lovely idea. Texas has been really cool this year, though, hasn’t it? And green. Really green as far as Texas goes. But still, good job.
On "Tell Me a Story About Secrets!" Part II:

posted 11 months ago

Rather cruel stop right there. But you have me wondering. I like the idea of having the story being told from father to daughter. It leaves a lot open.
On The Girl in the Surf:

posted 11 months ago

I really enjoyed it. It flowed so well, was sad but managed to be amazingly beautiful as well. I don’t know if it would be so great without the picture, but with it…it’s a masterpiece. Good job.
On Worth a shot, no less.:

posted 11 months ago

I think having plaid ink would be awesome. But I don’t know how you would prevent the colors from running…
On First Kiss:

posted 11 months ago

Heh, yeah. I got the idea from Back to the Future where his mom kisses him. Ha ha ha.
On Insanity - It's not just for crazy people anymore:

posted 11 months ago

I like it all. Just don’t get one bit- sitting down to pee.
On The Memoir of a Fat Camp Counselor:

posted 11 months ago

Ha ha ha ha. Great way to start the camp- inhaling a chocolate bar. Good rolemodel they got there, eh?
On The Task:

posted 11 months ago

Wow. These stories are amazing, can’t wait for the next one.

If it’s long enough in the end, I suggest you make a book out of it.
On One Day in Alphaville...:

posted 11 months ago

I read this three or four times wondering what it was and if it was some inside joke that only [pens&feathers] got. Then I read the tags and felt stupid. Good job though!
On Phone Call:

posted 11 months ago

There, she has a name. Tada!
On Challenge- On the Starship:

posted 11 months ago

Heh, I tried to make it as serious as I could with the words given, but I was stuck with platypus at the end and didn’t know what to do with it. I probably won’t win, but that was a great challenge, Stovohobo, and I had fun.
On Ficlet Nirvana, aka, what the ***'s wrong with her head?!:

posted 11 months ago

Wow. That was hard for me. I backspaced so many times without thinking about it, so I went back and redid what I’d fixed. And I realized that I only put three *’s. What word is that, I wonder?
On Forgiven Or Forgotten?:

posted 11 months ago

Yeah…ok. I see this pitiful attempt of yours to make me like Blair again. I see it….but I still haven’t forgiven her. She needs to be given some hell at school before I forgive her.
Good job, though.
On The Vibrant Blue:

posted 11 months ago

Very well done. Hoping that you continue on the story, waiting for more.
On Recognized:

posted 11 months ago

Ha! Thank you so much for saying that. I was waiting for someone to realize that we didn’t know what her name was, but no one had!

In truth, I just don’t know what name to give her. Maybe I’ll think of something, maybe not.
On Fiery Intentions.:

posted 11 months ago

You have me interested in why he’s going to the top, and, as ever, your discriptions are amazing.

It’s possible that it’s because this has always gotten to me (how I hate allergy medicine commercials for it!), but you had my eyes watering as I read.

Good job.
On The Shark:

posted 11 months ago

Heh, very good. I certainly wasn’t expecting that, but it all ran very smoothly. Good job!
On We Need To Talk:

posted 11 months ago

Beh. I don’t feel bad for Blair, tears or anything. She knew what she was getting into.

As for Logan- he made a mistake from the beginning, but it wasn’t particularly his fault. Boys are kinda…stupid. It was all Blair’s doing.
On Kick Him Where It Hurts:

posted 11 months ago

Yeah, I mean good job for her.

I feel bad for Jeremy though. It’s not his fault.
On Ladies and Gentlemen, We Have now reached Cruising Altitude in Hell:

posted 11 months ago

The oxygen masks don’t have anything to do with turbulance, partysprinkles. They fall when the air pressure in the cabin changes.

But great story.
On Nighty-Night Lars:

posted 11 months ago

Oh sad. I liked the dog….meh. Good job, though!
On "The last time":

posted 11 months ago

Wow. Intense. And leaving a ton of questions unanswered. I would say write a sequel, or prequel, but unless you have one planned, I don’t think you should write one just for the sake of writing one. The unanswered questions…suit it, I guess. I don’t know. Good job, though.
On The Lower Level Dungeons:

posted 11 months ago

Wow. These are, like, a million times better than anything I’ve ever written. Thanks for putting a link to the first one, by the way. I’ve probably skipped a million good series ‘cause I hate going back and back and back. I’m stealing the idea.
On The Underwater Expedition:

posted 11 months ago

I when I actually clicked on this I thought it said ‘Underwear Expedition.’ In my defence, I’m really bored. But anyway, I’m glad it was underwater instead. Good job.
On The Great Dinosaur Census:

posted 11 months ago

Ha. I am amused. Good job! THUMBS UP!
On But Why Does She Cry?:

posted 11 months ago

Hmm.. Interesting. I like them, and I would like to hear more.
On The Turn:

posted 11 months ago

I sense a plot, and payback. Mua ha ha ha.
Keep ‘em coming.
On Hal's Diner (or: Lust And Theft, part the second):

posted 11 months ago

Ha, I love the use of the line from The Princess Bride. I love that movie.
On Fritz and Zooey: Mr. Ziggy Stardust:

posted 11 months ago

You’ve inspired me. I suddenly feel the urge to run out and buy a pair of red pants.
On I Need *YOUR* Personal Advice!!!!:

posted 11 months ago

Oh, and I applaud you on being able to describe puking after being on a roller coaster so eloquently.
On I Need *YOUR* Personal Advice!!!!:

posted 11 months ago

I didn’t like roller coasters much until I went to Six Flags with my friends and they dragged me onto all of them. Now I love them. But I’ve never had your problem. I suggest you go light on the food before hand. Good luck!
On For Me To Know:

posted 11 months ago

Oooh. Interesting turn…Do you just sit there and invent ideas for people like me to get addicted to?
On The Plan:

posted 11 months ago

I am interested. Plan on another sequel?
On Pass it On:

posted 11 months ago

You have me hooked. Sequel soon please!!
On Made of Stone:

posted 11 months ago

I like it…It’s sad, but comforting.
On Hurt:

posted 11 months ago

sigh I knew she’d ruin it….you still got me hooked, though.
On "Grown-Ups Aren't Supposed to Cry":

posted 11 months ago

Oh that’s horrible. Very sad. Good writing, but very sad.
On She's Got It, I Don't:

posted 11 months ago

wow, that one surprised me…but I still like Ty…meh, she’s gonna ruin it. things always get ruined. Still, good job, you have me very interested.
On Fritz and Zooey: Surfin' Safari:

posted 12 months ago

Yay! Another warm and fuzzy feeling. I sooo less than three these.
<3
On One iPhone to Rule Them All…:

posted 12 months ago

You’re wrong. It isn’t Apple that’s taking over the world, watch the news and the people of the world and you’ll see the real truth.

Starbucks.
On Fritz and Zooey: Two Pots of Coffee:

posted 12 months ago

I like these stories. They are very nice and make me feel warm and fuzzy inside. Thank you. THUMBS UP!
On I Saw you Again:

posted 12 months ago

Oh. That’s really sad. I didn’t like that ending. But it’s really good anyway. THUMBS UP!
On Detention Part Two:

posted 12 months ago

That was evil of you! Hurrrrry up, I want another one. You have me hooked.
On The Blueprint:

posted 12 months ago

I really like these. They have me hooked, really good how you took the first idea and just went with it, turning it into the story.

The only thing I don’t like is that you stopped capitalizing it. It went from The Pulse to the pulse. Less…big.
On Garbage, the Other White Meat:

posted 12 months ago

I like McDonalds…but good poem!
On Walking.:

posted about 1 year ago

I don’t know if I like it, even. But whatever. Hope someone else does.
On Prison, maybe.:

posted about 1 year ago

It basically sucks. But I was bored. So there.

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