Pockets' posted comments

  1. On The Car of Clocks:

    posted about 1 year ago

    Quite so. I have a soft spot in my heart for rebelling against superfascists that try to remove thinkers.

  2. On The Car of Clocks:

    posted about 1 year ago

    Wow. You veritably escaped from the storytrap I set. I thought the sequel writer would be forced into the ‘government coup to destroy all radical thinkers’ story, but you’ve managed to escape and make something exceedingly interesting.

    Good job.

  3. On On His Hands:

    posted about 1 year ago

    Yay, another chance to make use of those ambiguous statements! I got to use the holding of the future for my sequel this time!

    This story is a good example of the mind filling in certain blanks not described. By use of a few choice words, the author describes the scene thoroughly enough to get the point across without wasting space.

    Good stuff.

  4. On Time Froze When Our Lips Touched.:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I love stories like this that use phrases that could mean so many things. The freezing of time can be literal or figurative. I decided upon the literal approach in my sequel, just to stir things up a bit.

  5. On Jack and Dave:

    posted about 1 year ago

    Nope, sorry, got this nick as a result of a conversation about hair. Don’t play the drums.

  6. On A Girl Called Jack:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I love it. It leaves loads open for sequels, hints to a lot more, and tells you huge amounts about the character without explicitly telling you. Your usage of first person narrative was especially appealing. Keep up the good work!

  7. On "Sorry, We Don't Have an Email Address":

    posted about 1 year ago

    I liked the tip of the hat to Scrooge, but there seems to be a predominating use of the word ‘said’. It seemed a bit… bland, although I did enjoy the concept.

  8. On no clue:

    posted about 1 year ago

    This isn’t even a sequel. Stop spamming.

  9. On ficlets.com does not allow to remove *my own* 'ficlet'!:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I’d say that you should just go to ‘edit story’ and change it to draft form and erase the entirety of the story. That’s the closest I can think of.

    This also shows why we need a forum.

  10. On The Announcement:

    posted about 1 year ago

    Excellent twist! Adds a good deal of drama, and, most importantly, a conflict. Just randomly getting a time machine wouldn’t do much if he had nothing to do with it, but this? This is excellent. Great job!

  11. On Heart Breaker:

    posted about 1 year ago

    The only bad stuff I could find was a mixup between telepathy and telekinesis, and a lack of a superpowered catfight. Otherwise it was excellent. Keep up the good work!

  12. On The realization:

    posted about 1 year ago

    You started three paragraphs in a row with ‘he’. Spice up your story by playing around with sentence structure.
    Also, the last sentence was very intriguing. Way to make life easier for the sequel writers.

  13. On Healthy food:

    posted about 1 year ago

    From what I’ve seen, sequels aren’t necessarily direct sequels on this site. I’ve seen settings visited from other points of view. Perhaps the hospital rooms after various people eat these sandwiches, or a confrontation between father and daughter over being accepted in society.

    It’s just limited by your own creativity, really. The way you approach the problem. And I’d also remind you that the site isn’t limited to sequels. A prequel about the developers of the sandwich could be interesting, no?

  14. On Global Aurora:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I like this concept. An excess of energy causing problems. It was fun to work with when I wrote my sequel because you can think of all the possibilities of excess energy and both its application and storage. I particularly liked the idea of opposite polarity lighting to waste energy. My only quip would be that you didn’t leave any sort of hint as to the problem. It’s left to the reader/sequel writer to make something up, mostly out of the blue. If you had stated an effect of the problem, it’d rock.

  15. On Prepare To Evacuate Soul:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I like it. The slowing time can be interpreted as just an author’s tool, or something unnatural actually occurring(which I made use of in my sequel). There’s a lot open for sequels, especially the Betty Smith bit, and it’s well-written, with the dialogue appropriate to the setting and characters.
    Good show, mate!

  16. On How to Buy a Time Machine:

    posted about 1 year ago

    I liked how the character has lots of issues time travel could resolve. I wish I could have gotten further into that in the sequel I wrote, but alas, thwarted by the character limit.

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