PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s posted comments

  1. On Two Old Friends [MP Challenge]:

    posted 4 days ago

    Is THX slipping? I saw not one, but two typos in this piece. First is should be gait and not gate if I’m correct, and it should be “The bouzouki player” and not “played”.

  2. On A word from the letter P:

    posted 19 days ago

    impressive, now for your next challenge write a ficlet without the letter p.

  3. On My life in six words - P addition:

    posted 19 days ago

    maybe without the apostrophe?

  4. On New Trick:

    posted 20 days ago

    i wish i could do that!!

  5. On Ma Vie Dans Six Mots:

    posted 20 days ago

    i always laugh about sad things, what can i say i have a sick sense of humor.

  6. On Bagman: Hurting:

    posted 20 days ago

    wonder where you’re taking our intrepid anti-hero. can’t wait for the sequel.

  7. On Unison:

    posted 21 days ago

    very cool continuation here, i suppose Natalie has gotten over her first fright and is now enjoying the experience wit the wizard!

  8. On I challenge you! Write your life in six words.:

    posted 25 days ago

    i did it with no filler words!

  9. On Mr. Smithers!!:

    posted 26 days ago

    i always wondered what cats were saying

  10. On New Voices:

    posted 26 days ago

    nice cliffhanger!

  11. On Easily Impressed:

    posted 27 days ago

    oh noes where is this all heading? ... and no sequel in sight.

  12. On Prove It:

    posted 27 days ago

    wait, can he or can’t he control it?

  13. On One Good Reason:

    posted 27 days ago

    the little old lady’s quip made me laugh

  14. On Why, No, I'm not God. Don't Be Ridiculous! :

    posted 27 days ago

    quite a jump from his cigarettes burning faster or slower to elevators exploding. cool though

  15. On Dangerously Light:

    posted 27 days ago

    curiouser and curiouser as Alice would say!

  16. On Control Himself:

    posted 27 days ago

    i keep wondering whether Natalie has special powers too.

  17. On The Error of His Ways:

    posted 27 days ago

    great work ana, letting her “fall out of the sky”

  18. On Hysteria:

    posted 27 days ago

    poor guy.

  19. On Finally Noticed:

    posted 27 days ago

    must have been quite a shock with all the papers and pens flying about.

  20. On In Midair:

    posted 27 days ago

    I’m just thinking: If it was Sunday then it explains why there was no traffic and no cops on the road. ;-)

  21. On Oddity:

    posted 27 days ago

    now this is getting interesting.

  22. On Something Amiss:

    posted 27 days ago

    avian violence – nice word choice

  23. On Glowing:

    posted 27 days ago

    wonder whether he’ll finally notice?

  24. On The Tables Are Turned:

    posted 27 days ago

    i like the paint peeling and unpeeling

  25. On What Did I Tell You?:

    posted 27 days ago

    cool. love makes things better!

  26. On Easy on the Sauce:

    posted 27 days ago

    good continuation.

  27. On One of Those Days :

    posted 27 days ago

    good start!

  28. On Samantha's Doubt:

    posted 27 days ago

    aaaw it’s finished? where are the sequels???

  29. On Miss Delacourt's "Accident":

    posted 27 days ago

    still catching up with this series. good one.

  30. On cheese (infamous beginnings challenge):

    posted about 1 month ago

    ficlets is still not very healthy. I think i posted twice but the first post appeared last. I marked the other one draft. thanks for the 5.2899765 stars.

  31. On The Man in Black:

    posted about 1 month ago

    ooooh. my villain turned out to be the butler who managed to find the real killer. gripping stuff.

  32. On FaLlin Asleeeps in Bio (Spam Challenge):

    posted about 1 month ago

    brilliant it made no sense to me whatsoever!

  33. On Won Beelllion Doollars(spam challenge):

    posted about 1 month ago

    i like the word “sealicked” i’m going to used it now every time i need to use selected!

  34. On Teh Attack of teh Grammer-Abusers [Spam Challenge]:

    posted about 1 month ago

    great work NM. I can just imagine it. 5 stars since the rating system is still stuffed

  35. On Use Your Senses [Challenge; RESULTS]:

    posted about 1 month ago

    Thank you kwatz. Only logged on to ficlets today – been too busy.

  36. On $250 An Hour (Spam Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    i like your psychiatrist! thanks for entereing

  37. On Left No Kin (spam challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    my spam filter usually stops these! But occasionally my email address goes out all by itself and wins lotteries in countries I never heard of. Very funny Elsha!

  38. On Sex, Ghosts and Piano lessons.(Save yoour love AKA Spam Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    I thought this might be right up your alley MJY and as usual you did not disappoint – 5stars (since the rating system is still stuffed)

  39. On I Feel More Like I Do Now Then When I First Got Here (Spam Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    This challenge is producing some cool stuff. Thanks ALRO613 for entering!

  40. On Teh Tail of teh Frogs und teh Humanity und teh Congo Line to Infinity [Spam Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    5 stars. That was a very sad frog story but written so funnily that I giggled all the way through.

  41. On Peripheral Evil: Part 34 (Getting Into Character):

    posted 2 months ago

    can’t wait for a sequel Jen or MJY

  42. On Peripheral Evil: Part 33 The Wise Men Get a Clue:

    posted 2 months ago

    the comments are funnier than the story!!

  43. On Death Remembers His First Assignment:

    posted 2 months ago

    This series reminds me of Terry Pratchet. Missing: Death presumed er… missing

  44. On Use Your Senses [Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    i think i got them all!

  45. On The Teddy-bear of Doom Attacks!:

    posted 2 months ago

    A good sequel. I was expecting you to wake up from a nightmare.

  46. On Diabolically Villainous Challenge:

    posted 2 months ago

    g2 I’m sorry, I wanted to keep it clean, but in the end I had to put a mature sticker on it.

  47. On Diabolically Villainous Challenge:

    posted 2 months ago

    g2 I’m sorry, I wanted to keep it clean, but in the end I had to put a mature sticker on it.

  48. On Peripheral Evil Part 25 (A Pint Of Guiness):

    posted 2 months ago

    I honestly can’t see where you are going with this.

  49. On My cousin was in a coma from being shot in iraq or you decide who the real villian is.(Diabolically Villainous Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    Beautifully written. The villain seems to be the doctors?

  50. On I Love Children (Diabolically Villainous Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    I can relate to this on some level at least. Really enjoyed the kids flicking boogers at each other.

  51. On Diabolically Villainous Challenge:

    posted 2 months ago

    I noticed so far all entries are men. Lets see whether someone can come op with a diabolically villainous female!

  52. On The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    The pastor sounds like a hypocritical sleazebag. Very well written!

  53. On The Mask of the Jester [Villain Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    Not quite Pennywise the clown but still scary.

  54. On Chat-room predator [Diabolically Villainous Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    bloodninja “rawks”. He reminds me of this little cybersex episode. https://www.elsop.com/wrc/humor/cybersex.htm

  55. On That Voice (DVC):

    posted 2 months ago

    All villains have to start somewhere!

  56. On The Scent of Fear:

    posted 2 months ago

    The missing spaces threw me a bit, but not enough to not give it 5 stars. The last line shows the beasts malice.

  57. On Riley [Diabolically Villainous Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    I also like the “strawberries and fear” line although at the moment I can’t stand anything that even smells pink. This will definitely make a good horror story.

  58. On Diabolically Villainous Challenge: Give Me the Night:

    posted 2 months ago

    it’s his nature. I don’t find that too diabolical. Good descriptions though.

  59. On Mors (Diabolical Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    Very short and not so sweet. Operations you say, cool.

  60. On (Diabolically Villainous Challenge) Like Father, Like Son:

    posted 2 months ago

    The dad is definitely an a**hole, but the kid is catching on quickly.

  61. On League Of Awesomeness 2075 Or Beyond Challenge.:

    posted 2 months ago

    Entry done. Went completely masonic on this one. Hope you like it!

  62. On The Pale Man:

    posted 2 months ago

    What a surprise. This did not at go the way I thought. Good sequel though. Have to think about this one.

  63. On The Record Read: 2778 AD:

    posted 2 months ago

    I had a similar idea running through my head but the concept just would not gel nicely. Good work.

  64. On LoA Saves the Planet! (2075 challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    makes me wonder who the 6 LoA members were.

  65. On League of Awesomness 2075- The longest sequel:

    posted 2 months ago

    ficlet 2 is funny as well!

    http://ficlets.com/stories/2

  66. On Arnst Smells A Winner:

    posted 2 months ago

    Brilliant, Ana! I liked the way the Arnst associates smells with emotions.

  67. On Peripheral Evil Part 22 (His Name is Natty Bumppo):

    posted 2 months ago

    I’m still busy catching up with this series. I find Trafal’s thought processes very difficult to follow though.

  68. On The Tail of a Pungent Puppy [I Smell A Winner Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    That was funny. I bet they took the dog.

  69. On The Olafactorial Games [I Smell a Winner Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    I was envisioning an opera-like performance. Brilliantly told.

  70. On Pie Contest ((I Smell a Winner Challenge)):

    posted 2 months ago

    “pie with not too much rat in it please” Monty Python
    Loved the story

  71. On Hall of Fame [Part 2] ((2075 or Beyond Challenge)):

    posted 2 months ago

    The internet was banned? oh the horror…

  72. On Perkins Always Dies Twice or Kevin Lawver must die.:

    posted 2 months ago

    TMJ Thanks for incorporating my homeless bum comment. This was really funny.

  73. On The Sexy Mistress Elsha Claims a Gorf.:

    posted 2 months ago

    Kermit is lucky he lasted till ficlet 3. I got killed off before this even started.

  74. On Mistress Elsha the sexy assassin.:

    posted 2 months ago

    Hm, makes me wonder what happened to me.

  75. On Mistress Elsha Always Gets Her Man.(Loa 2075 challenge.):

    posted 2 months ago

    This is freaky. very good start

  76. On Peripheral Evil Part 6 (The Grail Eyes):

    posted 2 months ago

    creepy stuff. just catching up on this one

  77. On Lord Windham's Last Word:

    posted 2 months ago

    this is getting juicy!

  78. On Fright and Flight:

    posted 2 months ago

    Feel free to sequel

  79. On Petition To Have John Perkins Legally Declared Awesome. Sign It Or Your Cat Will Get Fleas.:

    posted 3 months ago

    Oh and it’s probably also why his profile picture is a very stylistic image of a boy. A picture of the real JP would scare the bejesus out of us. ;-) No offense JP.

  80. On Petition To Have John Perkins Legally Declared Awesome. Sign It Or Your Cat Will Get Fleas.:

    posted 3 months ago

    I think JP is a homeless bum who lives on a dirty mattress in some hole where he has squirreled away a laptop with a wireless connection. And all he does all day is ficletting. That’s apart from sneaking to the internet café and begging for some coffee off a passing stranger or squeal at the owner because his connection is slow. It’s the only explanation I have for how he is able to read all stories, comment and write some of his own. All that’s definitely awesome! Thusly I’m signing this petition.

  81. On League Of Awesomeness 2075 Or Beyond Challenge.:

    posted 3 months ago

    Sounds just odd enough to beget many sequels. Lets see what my demented brain can come up with.

  82. On Unconventional Zen Master Challenge:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thanks JP, I did not forget, just got very busy with more important things… Off I am to do some judging – should not take very long

  83. On Twisted Results Continued:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thank you for creating a “most twists” category and making me the winner. I must say Everybody’s Envy was worthy to be named the winner.

  84. On Twisted Results:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thanks for the second prize; But in the humor category? I meant my entry completely seriously. Husband battery is no laughing matter!

  85. On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

    posted 3 months ago

    looks like you have some work to do!

  86. On The Scavenger Hunt Challenge!:

    posted 3 months ago

    looks like you will have your work cut out for you, grading all these!

  87. On A Sunset Moment [Perfect Moment Ruined Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    at least they are outside!

  88. On What did you just say? [Perfect Moment Ruined Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    ouch. poor guy

  89. On Conclusion/Beginning: The Meaning of Freedom [egnellahC sdrawkcaB]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Awesome backwards series. If I could have given you more than 5 points I would have.

  90. On Chimerism.(The Others Chapter 9):

    posted 3 months ago

    what a way to hijack a series!

  91. On The Wisdom Of A Child (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    right back to square one. very funny twist.

  92. On Kinobi's Quest [Unconvential Zen Master Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I like it. It’s definitely unconventional.

  93. On The Quadrille:

    posted 3 months ago

    “enjoyed watching watching couples” should have only one “watching”

  94. On Siren Song:

    posted 3 months ago

    I enjoyed the double meaning of the title.

  95. On REACTr: Building the Perfect Beast:

    posted 3 months ago

    that’s some shit-hot nano

  96. On Damn the Frozen Nuclear Torpedoes! [Scavenger Hunt Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Good job on hiding those clues. I think I managed to pick out about 3.

  97. On The Dragon:

    posted 3 months ago

    He certainly knows a way to a woman’s heart.

  98. On The Great Guru of the East [UcZMC]:

    posted 3 months ago

    that was funny. Thank you for entering.

  99. On Bring In The Next [Unconventional Zen Master Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Definitely unconventional. Zen maybe not, but a good twist nonetheless.

  100. On Ignorance Is Worse Than Racism!:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ah, yes don’t I know that feeling. Try asking someone to find Namibia on a map!

  101. On Different Teachings:

    posted 3 months ago

    this is good, keep going.

  102. On A Mouth of Fire [Unconventional Zen Master Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    thanks for entering. I was waiting for this challenge to pick up speed.

  103. On What I Learned That Summer.:

    posted 3 months ago

    I was actually swapping between human and dog for a while until the name came up and the concentration camp twist was well executed.

  104. On Reaching:

    posted 3 months ago

    I also thought you kept with the feel of the series. The psychic link is an interesting twist.

  105. On Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I looked at the list of entries and saw “The last grenade” just following yours and I sort of had a hunch this would go this way. Good twist though, although grenades and bombs only have countdown times in movies.

  106. On Land of Confusion: Codename Patience:

    posted 3 months ago

    sweet fancy moses, I forgot about that one. Brilliant description.

  107. On Land of Confusion: Codename Say What?:

    posted 3 months ago

    Am I missing something or did he get back really fast?

  108. On Can't Be Pleased:

    posted 3 months ago

    A pyromaniac fireman demi-god sounds like a fun character to play with.

  109. On Goki StepsOut:

    posted 3 months ago

    that took a different turn than expected. Slight edit: “over see” should be one word.

  110. On Keep Calm and Carry On:

    posted 3 months ago

    pyromania rules!

  111. On Divine Wind [Twisted History Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    The world would be different today if that had happened. For one WW II could have taken a completed different turn. BTW: still waiting for your entry in my Zen Master challenge.

  112. On Everything he ever wished for. ( Friday October 13, 1307 -The Last day of the knight templar) Twisted history challenge:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ah, what would we do without magic!

  113. On Rescue Ring:

    posted 3 months ago

    Kermit is right, you are just about the only one that can get one-sided phone speak just right, so you can guess what the other person is saying. And no typos this time either. Well done!

  114. On The Life of the Ultra -Super Rich:

    posted 3 months ago

    Gay? Can’t be!

  115. On Sweet Child of Mine (Sing Song Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Beautiful. Is it just me or a there are a lot a wedding-type ficlets around lately?

  116. On Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    If the telepath is sufficiently advanced, maybe not. Thanks for pointing out the error. Corrected and nirvana regained.

  117. On REACTr: The Broken Maiden:

    posted 3 months ago

    military grade nono. now it gets interesting!

  118. On Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Thanks Jen for posting. This series gave me goosebumps. And you are right, genealogy is addictive.

  119. On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ok, I finished my dark honeymoon series. Each ficlet contains a twist, with a double twist at the end! Hope you like it.

  120. On The Appartment:

    posted 3 months ago

    “Once the tear ceased” should be plural. Great work otherwise!

  121. On No Place Like Home (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Thank you John, that twist gave me goosebumps.

  122. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 15:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thank you very much. This series definitely brightened my day.

  123. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 13:

    posted 3 months ago

    LOL at hawt, in an animé-foxmorph-webbrowsery kind of way

  124. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 8:

    posted 3 months ago

    love the cron job!

  125. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 7:

    posted 3 months ago

    Wow, this echoes exactly the book I’m reading right now. The myths of innovation – one of the chapters is Best ideas don’t always win

  126. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 6:

    posted 3 months ago

    I think humans are stupid when they play with their retractable cup-holders.

  127. On Birth of the Firefox, Part 4:

    posted 3 months ago

    That is one smart programmer!

  128. On A Trip to the Doctor [UTC]:

    posted 3 months ago

    This feels like a very young female assassin. The twist was cool.

  129. On Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    That was some twist. The story has a cool carefree feel until the end.

  130. On Like a Box Of Chocolates (unexpected twist challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    That was weird. The first paragraph needs a little editing though. I had difficulty reading and understanding it.

  131. On My boyfriend caught me...:

    posted 3 months ago

    I didn’t expect that, I thought she was ficleting!

  132. On Blaze of Glory (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    This ficlet feels as if it was written by a teenager. Maybe that was the intention? Cool twist.

  133. On The Feinting Doll:

    posted 3 months ago

    Nice pun in the title!

  134. On Waiting, Hoping, Dreaming, Wishing:

    posted 3 months ago

    Boys, they never call! I think you missed a single “I” in “I wonder if phase you.”. It’s not apparent because the line breaks there. Otherwise very well written and as Ana pointed out the repetition really lets you feel the longing.

  135. On Bagman: Pandemonium:

    posted 3 months ago

    No, John, I think Louise is jacked in doing everything remotely. Sort of like a guardian angel. Only Benny is there in person.

  136. On Bagman: Cerberus3:

    posted 3 months ago

    Cerberus is one of my favorite dogs. Brilliant work in mixing mythology and future.

  137. On The Only Friend He Has (Great Supporting Characters Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Well done John, I think the alcoholic dad came across nicely, I didn’t get a real feeling bout mom though. Tony is cool, alltough he doesn’t talk much.

  138. On Locked Out:

    posted 3 months ago

    Cute little twist, but it fits with the character.

  139. On Vivid Dreams (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    You gave away the twist in the title. I was a little disappointed. Your dialogue is solid though.

  140. On A Loaded Question [Ana's Scavenger Hunt Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    The clues are very well hidden.

  141. On Birth of the Firefox:

    posted 3 months ago

    I thought programmers liked cold pizza!

  142. On At Least He's Cute (Scavenger Hunt Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Let me try!
    1.) 1972
    2.) Skooter
    3.) Florence, Alabama
    4.) Wendy
    5.) Livin my life
    6.) The Reaper, Blue Oyster Cult (or maybe Grave Digger, The Curse of Jacques?)
    7.) 3
    8.) Lulu
    9.) psychology
    10.) You got me stumped on this one

  143. On A Fantastical Adventure (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    You make the characters seem so real.

  144. On Cleanup {Scavenger Hunt Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    @John I had a very sexy maths teacher!

  145. On Cleanup {Scavenger Hunt Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    6) I like listening to Rammstein (clue to the title of the song)
    7) 7 is my favorite number
    8) My sister’s nickname for me. Finding it is left as an exercise to the reader.
    9) John’s right again.
    10) JMSquire picked the correct TV show. Black Books is freaking funny!

  146. On Cleanup {Scavenger Hunt Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    1) John figured out my birth year 1969.
    2) My first pet (as a married man) was Kaytee, a cat.
    3) I was born in Namibia (that may give you a clue to the city)
    4) Best friend = Leander
    5) I cheated on the book title since it is in my profile, but it sort-of is a quote from the book. I think John might enjoy reading it.

  147. On Ashland (Twisted Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I’m with John and THX on this one. I have no clue what the twist is supposed to mean? But well written otherwise.

  148. On Unexpected Meeting:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thats boys for you, when girls are at their most vulnerable bam...

  149. On Overreacting ((Unexpected Twist)):

    posted 3 months ago

    I’m with THX on the ouch and yeeks.
    ~ makes subscript text (subscript), ^ makes superscript text (superscript) and + makes underline (underline)

  150. On That Bastitch Dr. Seuss [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Brilliant Dr. Seuss parody. You have outdone yourself THX.

  151. On REACTr: Put'n the "Dick" in "Detective":

    posted 3 months ago

    Yay, finally a car with a real personality!

  152. On Cleanup {Scavenger Hunt Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ok, I cheated, but if you look at my profile you might still get it.

  153. On Meeting the Limnade:

    posted 3 months ago

    Wow, not quite what I had in mind but beautifully written, I have to think on how to sequel this.

  154. On Official Business in a Treehouse [Scavenger Hunt Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    What makes it so difficult is that there are a lot of references in there that can be interpreted either way. Good job on confusing everybody, THX.

  155. On War Cry: A Burning Within :

    posted 3 months ago

    I don’t think putting up united resistance would have helped them much.

  156. On Bagman: Feathery Hammer:

    posted 3 months ago

    I have a feeling this is going to get ugly!

  157. On A Toast From Afar:

    posted 3 months ago

    You write “Master Jones” once. I like the evil master and stupid sidekick.

  158. On The Knowing:

    posted 3 months ago

    It’s going down. Great addition.

  159. On The CIA Created the Green River Killer(Twisted History Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    What I find interesting is that you are the second person to do a “Hitler” piece. Well written.

  160. On The Anticlimax:

    posted 3 months ago

    Please wait another million years. Definitely anticlimactic.

  161. On Nobody Gets Hurt (Twisted History Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Laughed out loud at the “frank and beans” haven’t heard that expression in ages.

  162. On Anne's Resolve [Twisted History Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    King Henry IX I presume? Good descriptions.

  163. On Enola Gay {Twisted History Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    I just started with the idea that the bomb did not explode and then tried to image what the Japanese would do with an undetonated bomb.

  164. On Summertime Memories (unexpected twist challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    The best antidote against Jehovah’s Witnesses is to invite them in and discuss religion. Very funny, I did not expect the ending and I had to hold myself back from skipping to it.

  165. On Twisted History Challenge:

    posted 3 months ago

    congrats, lets see what my twisted mind can come up with.

  166. On All in a few seconds [Twisted History Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Nooo, you killed Arthur (or did he kill himself?). Very funny.

  167. On Ring {John's Unexpected Twist Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    No, it’s not autobiographical. Just something that happened this weekend, that made me think how it probably goes in some marriages.

  168. On Nobody Expects It (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition!! Very funny

  169. On So Many Variables, So Few Guns:

    posted 3 months ago

    great addition to this series.

  170. On Portrait [Paint a Picture Challenge!]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Wow, Ana, I didn’t expect a poem! I liked the lines “in whose dark cupboards are hidden
    moth-eaten songs and secrets.”
    Sounds like my brain! Thanks for entering!

  171. On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Entered. Not my original idea but I hope it has the desired effect.

  172. On This Seat Taken?:

    posted 3 months ago

    That was sad. What a waste of a good martini!

  173. On Only Slightly Delusional:

    posted 3 months ago

    This is one confused woman!

  174. On Small(Paint a Picture Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Thank you entering. I like the repetitive grass theme.

  175. On No More Daylight:

    posted 3 months ago

    John, you have a penchant for turning something beautiful into something dark and violent.

  176. On Daylight And Shadows:

    posted 3 months ago

    you captured humanities’ duality beautifully

  177. On The Wedgie Patrol:

    posted 3 months ago

    ouch wedgies

  178. On 10 hours left:

    posted 3 months ago

    this is freaky, i just left the comment on the previous ficlet about moths to a candle and then I read this one, it’s as if I had read your mind

  179. On 11 hours left:

    posted 3 months ago

    like moths to a candle.

  180. On That Butterfly in Chaos Theory:

    posted 3 months ago

    I liked the image of “thoughts like butterflies” and relating that to the butterfly theory is sheer brilliance.

  181. On Morning realization (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    To tell you the truth the second paragraph almost gives it away, but then again I have two kids and know how my wife felt during her pregnancy. Good job

  182. On Teen Sensation (supporting characters challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Brilliant setting, the mention of the drivers name just to get the beautician “hot under the collar” was quite clever.

  183. On Not All Questions Have Answers (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    WTH? that question truly has no answer!

  184. On Zen Master Trent (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    this one gave me goosebumps.

  185. On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Great challenge. I’ll probably enter, have to think of something cool first!

  186. On Wishes (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Groundhog day here we come!

  187. On White Patent Shoes [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Interesting that the shoes would make a noise! Good twist!

  188. On An 'Act' Of Desperation:

    posted 3 months ago

    Another twist. I like it. Great work there.

  189. On A Walk In The Park:

    posted 3 months ago

    That was one way it could have gone. Nice twist!

  190. On Find Me:

    posted 3 months ago

    I must say I’ve never thrown a book under my bed. Well except p.rn. mags ;-)

  191. On The Crane Wife 3 [Sing-Song Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thats heavy. I would have hoped for her to escape in some way!

  192. On Exotic Creature Inspiration [Sing-Song Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    That was funny. Great dialogue.

  193. On Unconventional Zen Master Challenge:

    posted 3 months ago

    @JmSquire I’m open, let it rip, just remember to mark the entries as mature if it gets too heavy ;-)
    I entered my own challenge for illustrative purposes and as a tribute.

  194. On Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    It’s amazing what images love can put into your head. Thanks for entering.

  195. On Charcoal Drawings [paint a picture challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thank you for entering. This may not be a picture for your living room, but it has the “girl with the three matches” feel about it. Well told.

  196. On An Impossible Room (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Lets see whether this leads to where I suspect it’s going.

  197. On The Stairwell to Nowhere (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I like the set-up. Lets see where the stairs take our intrepid explorer.

  198. On End of the Nightmare:

    posted 3 months ago

    I see the story is finished anyway! Aaaaaw, I was getting to enjoy the monthly stirrings!

  199. On Becoming InHuman:

    posted 3 months ago

    If the serum had worked, the story would be finished!

  200. On Watched in Horror :

    posted 3 months ago

    I have a feeling the world is not going to miss the two graverobbers!

  201. On Inhuman:

    posted 3 months ago

    I wonder whether you wanted to continue the first paragraph? It ends with a single “I” and no double quote! Great job, building suspense.

  202. On Something Inhuman:

    posted 3 months ago

    double submit. I wish the programmers would fix that!!

  203. On A Dreary Day at Bedlam:

    posted 3 months ago

    a million ants tap-dancing, pure genius description of rain on a tin roof.

  204. On The Religious Observations of a Common Canine:

    posted 3 months ago

    Hilarious! ceiling cat is the highest being

  205. On The cat becomes the mouse.(The Long Patrol Chapter 3):

    posted 3 months ago

    Cool, with sound effects!

  206. On Killing from the catbird seat. (The Long Patrol Chapter 2):

    posted 3 months ago

    The view from the other side. Nice dialogue.

  207. On Night Patrol (Long Patrol Chapter 1):

    posted 3 months ago

    interesting concept, couple patrol. Well written.

  208. On Drs. Jekyll and Franenstein:

    posted 3 months ago

    I think the title is missing a “k”. And the sentence “I have weird visions, I change in the night, but the full moons’ light,” needs some looking at. The “but” does not seem to fit.

  209. On Unit 753:

    posted 3 months ago

    Your story as very methodical feel, great work.

  210. On Dr. Proto:

    posted 3 months ago

    A mad scientist doctor that looks like a late night horror host. Cool!

  211. On The Moon Was Full:

    posted 3 months ago

    Blood, a dead girl and a mysterious doctor, this is getting interesting!

  212. On Daddy's Home Part IV:

    posted 3 months ago

    I didn’t find the ending abrupt. Death can ruin the rest of your life, you know! 5 stars for the whole series!

  213. On Dates:

    posted 3 months ago

    really freaky!

  214. On Melanie Ventures Alone:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ah yes, colour. nicely done!

  215. On The Tomb:

    posted 3 months ago

    ominous!

  216. On What was happening to me?:

    posted 3 months ago

    The word “eviscerated” just fits into this story like a hand in glove!

  217. On Baited Breath:

    posted 3 months ago

    Good job in portraying the two bumbling grave robbers.

  218. On War Protests!:

    posted 3 months ago

    The third paragraph does not follow the second nicely. Maybe that’s why I found the dialogue hard to follow. It’s good otherwise though.

  219. On Interruption:

    posted 3 months ago

    Enthralling! The “curious glint in her green eyes” intrigues me.

  220. On Wing Man: Great Supporting Characters Challenge:

    posted 3 months ago

    Isn’t it funny how men (drunk or sober) always think that women are into them even when they try their damndest to get rid of them.

  221. On Lunch at the Diner:

    posted 3 months ago

    Talking flies? what next? Nice dialogue!

  222. On Rats and Angels:

    posted 3 months ago

    @Ana. everything that THX writes is worth reading! He is truly a “Grand Awesome Marshal” of words.

  223. On On the Classification of Common Rodentia:

    posted 3 months ago

    Enjoyed the dog-cat interaction. Excellent.

  224. On Contemplations on the Infinite:

    posted 3 months ago

    I think my cats are doing this! Oh and it’s “infinite” and nor “infinate”

  225. On A Trace of Remorse:

    posted 3 months ago

    not your usual vampire story. I like it.

  226. On The Black Well of Memory:

    posted 3 months ago

    great sequel.

  227. On Courtroom drama {Great Supporting Character Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    oh and
    3) obtain a book on unusual cocktail recepies and attempt to concoct them using only gin, water and a slice of lemon (or if not available a slice of tomato juice), drink while enjoying the subtle humor of MP and A&O

  228. On Courtroom drama {Great Supporting Character Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    For those of you who don’t under stand the references to Monty Python or Asterix and Obelix or measures of alcohol, it’s high time you get “edumacated”. Your task for this weekend (or indeed the next month or so) is to:
    1) obtain any (or all) copies of Many Pythons movies and watch them one after the other.
    2) obtain as many copies as possible of Asterix and Obelix (they are available in English) and read them before you go to bed.

  229. On Graverobbers:

    posted 3 months ago

    Brilliant how worked in Boris Karloff and Mary Shelley.

  230. On Graverobbers:

    posted 3 months ago

    oops, double submit there!

  231. On It Must Be the Wine:

    posted 3 months ago

    That is creepy!

  232. On Origins:

    posted 3 months ago

    The twist at the end gave me goosebumps. Brilliant!

  233. On Greed and Glory:

    posted 3 months ago

    Oh, I didn’t expect that.

  234. On An Offering:

    posted 3 months ago

    Simply love the vividness of your images.

  235. On Ethan Jr.'s Night Out.:

    posted 3 months ago

    Skeet, you are a master at dialogue. Maybe, just to make it a little more real it should be “He boke by dose”? Very funny!

  236. On Ethan Hangs with Melanie :

    posted 3 months ago

    Nice dialogue.

  237. On The VIP Lounge:

    posted 3 months ago

    What tune was the cellphone playing?
    What was the cocktail waitress wearing?
    What make of cigarette?
    It’s these kind of descriptions that make the difference between a great story and an ok story. Keep going, you are getting better.

  238. On Club Sparkle:

    posted 3 months ago

    The dialogue is just as I would imagine a VIP bouncer would talk to his “charge”. Good work there Sarah. (5 stars for this one)

  239. On Ready To Roll :

    posted 3 months ago

    I agree with trifal, your story is rather flat, it does not have any similies, metaphors, adjectives, adverbs or even interesting colour names. Try writing about midnight blue, eggshell, crimson etc. It gives the pictures more depth and lets the reader imagine things better.

  240. On Eragrin Nirvana [civilization challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I like the picture you paint. Very regal.

  241. On Pyro punks and Sailor Emo's Juliet and Romeo:

    posted 3 months ago

    Laughed at the ending. The second line does not scan nicely though. Let’s see what Sailor Emo JMSquire or invisibility_disability come up with.

  242. On Ready To Roll :

    posted 3 months ago

    looks like you double submitted this one. Maybe just mark it as “draft” and you can revive and rewrite it later if you feel like it.

  243. On Night Out On The Town:

    posted 3 months ago

    I agree with trifal, his reads very choppy and doesn’t flow nicely. I suggest you insert a couple of commas instead of fullstops.

  244. On The Rich and the Spoiled:

    posted 3 months ago

    Nice one, Skeet, I think you nailed the spoilt rich-kid character.

  245. On Mr.Meirdar.:

    posted 3 months ago

    heavy stuff, but well written.

  246. On The Peculiar and Delicate Bone Structure of Birds:

    posted 3 months ago

    The picture you paint is very descriptive. I like your writing style.

  247. On Great Supporting Character(s) Challenge (The Big 250):

    posted 3 months ago

    Entered a pythonesque courtroom drama, inspired in part by
    http://www.latimes.com/news/local/la-me-kozinski12-2008jun12,0,6220192.story

    Hope you like it.

  248. On Great Supporting Character(s) Challenge (The Big 250):

    posted 3 months ago

    @trifal I’ll take that as a personal challenge.

  249. On Healing Paul{The Great Supporting Character Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Sounds like a bad plan. Very believable characters.

  250. On The long hunt [Supporting characters challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    just a small little correction: “deer” don’t live in Africa! I would use the word “buck”

  251. On Rutaffo, the Super Ref [Great Supporting Character Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I had to laugh a the “Marxist exceptions”. Brilliant descriptions!

  252. On Great Supporting Character(s) Challenge (The Big 250):

    posted 3 months ago

    Congrats on 250. Hmm, have to think about that one. I’m not good with characters.

  253. On A Tale of Two Sisters [Great Supporting Character(s) Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I know what Katherine is feeling. I can already see this ending badly ;-)

  254. On WonderEmily:

    posted 3 months ago

    things are getting clearer and more confusing.

  255. On Alex in Wonderland - Part 34:

    posted 3 months ago

    That was one very amusing series. Brought back so many memories. Thanks you guys!

  256. On Hell of a Lease:

    posted 3 months ago

    The legalese seems a bit too simple. I know the 1024 limit, but maybe you can still make it more “real”?

  257. On Hell of an Idea:

    posted 3 months ago

    Hilarious!

  258. On Hell of an Apartment:

    posted