I think the thing that works best with this ficlet is the repitition. In particular, the final paragraph works well, as well as the way you end and begin the story with a sentence about the door.
I’m a recent college graduate (small cheer) . In my spare time- what little there is of it- I like to write stuffs. Sometimes I might write stuffs here. There is no guarantee on the quality.
I like all kinds of stories, especially if they are bizarre. I’m rather fond of magical realism and young adult stories.
I would love feedback on my stories: where I went wrong, where I went right, etc. I would love it even more if someone was inspired enough to make a prequel/sequel to my stories.
Caveat: I’m weird. Therefore I write weird things.
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