Tad Winslow's posted comments

  1. On About as Thinly Concealed as Katy Perry's Lesbianism:

    posted 11 days ago

    As well as a thought title as I have ever seen. Gripping action.

  2. On WINNERS OF 200something CHALLENGE!:

    posted about 1 month ago

    This challenge inspired me, thanks for a great challenge and congratulations to the winners.

  3. On "Stay Steady, Folks, We're Experiencing Some Air Turbulence.":

    posted 2 months ago

    Excellent story stovo. I fly frequently but will never feel comfortable during turbulance. I like how you make the passengers (and readers) feel uneasy through the captains mistake. And the way you reveal the condition of the weather and the reason to worry with dialogue is skillful and crafty.

  4. On Evil Rising:

    posted 2 months ago

    dun dun duuuunnn. lol. Firstly, congrats on publishing your book and your success as a writer. Much respect. And hopefully much more to come. This story is certainly well crafted and leading to something evil and spooky. I’ve added you in my contacts and hope to read more of your work in the future.

  5. On A Soldier Shooting Shadows:

    posted 2 months ago

    It’s disgusting, I know. But the really disturbing thing is that people are dehumanized like this everyday. If anyone wants me to mark this as mature I will.

  6. On 200something CHALLENGE!:

    posted 2 months ago

    Cool challenge—I enjoyed writing in that format. 200, and counting, is impressive, way to go.

  7. On Party:

    posted 2 months ago

    lol, has this site been loading slow for anyone else lately?! I got really click happy, or click frustrated, sorry. Maybe you can get most popular : )

  8. On Party:

    posted 2 months ago

    good vocabulary. I can see what Krulltar meant about switching paragraphs, but it doesn’t matter, it works just as well the way it is.

  9. On Party:

    posted 2 months ago

    good vocabulary. I can see what Krulltar meant about switching paragraphs, but it doesn’t matter, it works just as well the way it is.

  10. On Party:

    posted 2 months ago

    good vocabulary. I can see what Krulltar meant about switching paragraphs, but it doesn’t matter, it works just as well the way it is.

  11. On Party:

    posted 2 months ago

    good vocabulary. I can see what Krulltar meant about switching paragraphs, but it doesn’t matter, it works just as well the way it is.

  12. On He Stepped Into the White Light:

    posted 2 months ago

    Totally cool out of body experience, totally cool story. Where shall it go from here?

  13. On Rapt audience:

    posted 2 months ago

    well written continuation. I enjoyed the footsteps of the voice walking away at the end, it gives me the sense that this thing is more substantial than just a voice and possibly more powerful, even though we can’t actually see it, we hear it’s heavy body hoof away.

  14. On In case you were wondering ...:

    posted 2 months ago

    lol, I like all of the made up words, especially an ula amount of time. How long is that exactly? Lots of imagination coursing through this one. I must be going now, I have to get my quiznids reruffled, chiao! lol

  15. On Excuse me?:

    posted 2 months ago

    The originality in your voice is shining through. Some of the descriptions work better than others. I liked the one about the sun setting like it wasn’t invited to the conversation.

  16. On goodbye:

    posted 2 months ago

    Pathetic way to get most popular. Maybe you should try to write something with skill and depth next time.

  17. On Journey:

    posted 2 months ago

    This could easily get really wacky, though I promise I will write it with as much skill and care as possible.

  18. On One Wish [I AM... Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    I like the, “I am set adrift in the sea of your indifference” line. I’ve filled the sea of indifference before and on the other end of the spectrum I’ve swam in it, so that line really got to me.

  19. On Blimpy and the Butterball Baby (Silly Story Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    I refuse to feel guilty about this story, and I refuse to apologize. It’s meant to make the reader hate the character telling the story and possibly laugh at the absurdity. There’s a difference between the characters a writer comes up with and the writer himself/herself. I in no way condone the actions of the awful people I sometimes write about, but to blame me for possibly making someone commit suicide is ridiculous and rude.

  20. On Journey:

    posted 2 months ago

    wow, big changes happening here, a new direction. I like it, I think it adds to the prospect of imagination. Really cool how the tiny robin can transform to protect addison, great idea.

  21. On Bird:

    posted 2 months ago

    I really like how you entice us to read on. This fits really well in the story. Good job.

  22. On The Painting(Paint a Picture Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    the ending is excellent. This is a very good story told with thick description. An impasto work of words.

  23. On Humble Salvation:

    posted 2 months ago

    “The setting sun sends its fingers…”—amazing. It’s going to be really, really, tough to top this effort, THX.

  24. On Unexpected [paint a picture challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    hahahahaha, thx—the toothless fiasco he says. I got the impression that she was a gothic chick becuase of the black hair that shone deep purple in the light and red shoes. And then I was thoroughly thrown for a loop and just as thoroughly repulsed at the ‘french fry fiasco’ at the end. But still it’s pure description done well.

  25. On Paint a picture challenge:

    posted 2 months ago

    ooooooo, neat challenge. I’m all in as soon as I think of something clever! I’ll make myself enter tomorrow 4 sure.

  26. On Enter the Brigands:

    posted 2 months ago

    Im glad it did pop up again, yoda. I never would have read it! Far too funny, and lol about how you signed ur comments master yoda last year. A good ficlet you have written <—-(yoda speak).

  27. On The Exiliration Of Travel :

    posted 2 months ago

    I told you I would read it. Toldya so. Ah, Scotland, cool destination. One of my dreams is to visit the Highlands. Have you ever been for reals? Neat idea for a series—I always worry about having enough steam to write series’. By placing it in a foriegn country you put yourself in a great position for endless amounts of pictures and inspiration, a nice solid setting to tap into. Seems like a smart way to start a series. Good luck.

  28. On I am a Thinker (Freedom's Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    very emotional poem. I wonder how true it is? Good job.

  29. On Insert Pen Name Here's Random Quiz: Answers:

    posted 2 months ago

    Also, there’d be lots of diabetic birds…

  30. On Insert Pen Name Here's Random Quiz: Answers:

    posted 2 months ago

    hmmm… interesting comment about the gummy worms, Insert Pen Name Here. That would add to the fun but not the flavor sadly.

  31. On Stella Star and the Great Ape Escape:

    posted 2 months ago

    ha ha kermitgorf, very funny and yes, campy, but that is what makes it so good.

  32. On Room 227 :

    posted 2 months ago

    Good set up for a sequel. Lots of avenues wait to be explored.

  33. On Cole's Idiom on the Road:

    posted 2 months ago

    well crafted story here. Great opening paragraph. Your talent is showing in this one.

  34. On Like That of A God:

    posted 2 months ago

    Ok THX, I killed my “darling’s” in the first few sentences—hard to do but you were right, I had to see past my subjective view to do it. Thanks.

  35. On Jonas Part 45: The Girls Room:

    posted 2 months ago

    Very intricate conversation you crafted here. I love the ending, gives a perfect sense of movement, or like moving on, like a chapter end in a book. Really great read.

  36. On Lame Clown (Make Me Laugh Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    hahahahahaha, really really great and funny ficlet.

  37. On Getting High:

    posted 2 months ago

    wowsers, I’ve gotta go cool down. Sweetness! The only high I’ve ever gotten is off of pixy sticks and thats my story and I’m sticking to it!! lol

  38. On Evelyn's Victory Garden:

    posted 2 months ago

    Beautiful elegant read, lush if i may say. I can smell the fresh plantae! And the pic is mesmerizing, very lovely.

  39. On Ludwig Maximus' Speech: The Corporation, Inc.:

    posted 2 months ago

    Initially, when the pic loaded and hit me first before I read a single sentence I laughed. But after I read the story I now see the masked man in the suit with less of a chuckle and more of an onslaught of corporate America images, globalization and the thought that we may be living in the country of the enemy. Chilling stuff.

  40. On Honorable Intentions:

    posted 2 months ago

    “Oh, just shut it before my eardrums commit suicide.” Where do you get this stuff?? And I approve of your use of the dash—it’s my favorite tool available in the english language. Awesome story, well done.

  41. On Finding Yesterday:

    posted 2 months ago

    kind of depressing tale. Though it’s not explained I feel like she missed a whole day just watching tv and then suddenly it was wednesday. I liked the descriptions in this story, nothing much really happens except a small freak out, but it’s told well. lol

  42. On Viva La Movement!:

    posted 2 months ago

    disgusting, but funny in a south park kind of way. I think that before you write anything you should mark it mature just in case. I liked the description of how his voice cracked. I almost threw up at the chunk of corn part.

  43. On Almost Caught:

    posted 2 months ago

    Cop killers to be precise celestic, even worse (of a crime that is). Nice KG! I havn’t read a mature story from you in a while. I like how the girl was rushed away half naked and still high, funny in a wow what loser she is kind of way.

  44. On (Hear Ye Hear Ye Challenge) Alien Invasion:

    posted 2 months ago

    I agree with the above comments about the 1950’s feel, accurate government figures for the era and sci fi feel all working together to make this story special—or piece of a story that is. Anyone up for a sequel??

  45. On Just Dreaming:

    posted 2 months ago

    “He looks at me like an old man would look at the doors of heaven.”—Excellent!

  46. On Life Span of a Dog:

    posted 2 months ago

    Yup, I sure do too. I love dogs! btw, Go Celtics!!

  47. On Papers and Scenes:

    posted 2 months ago

    what a terrible movie, and sadly one that plays out all over the world every day. Abuse is universal, I think you can reach a lot of people with that theme. Good melancholy descriptions.

  48. On What if...:

    posted 2 months ago

    I like how you described bernard with emotional words like vulnerable and sincere, lending to the overall feeling of an emotional interaction.

  49. On Oops:

    posted 2 months ago

    Dante’s Inferno is excellent, and immensly creepy-cool. The 9th layer of hell is the coolest description I’ve probably ever read. Your story was very visible to me, I could picture clearly where they were and what they were doing, so in that sense it’s a victory. And yes, I think you can write.

  50. On Hope Don't, But I Do:

    posted 2 months ago

    I really like the narrator’s voice in this one, very matter-of-fact. And you wrote it in the character’s true voice with grammar flubs and all which adds more dimensions to that character.

  51. On A Part Of Addison:

    posted 2 months ago

    Oh no, I can’t accept that comment blusparrow, but I really can’t talk smack until the Celtics make it to the eastern conference finals. Well, yes I can, boo pistons, GO CELTICS. lol

  52. On A Part Of Addison:

    posted 2 months ago

    Well, the crow has always been a part of addison, but he hasn’t been totally aware of that (as Never Explain eluded to), I think what I was hinting at is that he is finally beginning to understand his relationship with the crow and himself and how it is a communicative tool to interact with the scarecrow—that is yet to be fully developed however.

  53. On And yet, it's not quite over...:

    posted 2 months ago

    Another well written expedition into your imagination via the vehicle of your unique voice.

  54. On My Plywood Guardian:

    posted 2 months ago

    Great continuation Never Explain, I’m honored you wrote two ficlets on the theme of Clayton’s evil ways! I love that he is hung up as the new scarecrow, that’s just about the only job a corpse can get nowadays and it doesn’t pay well, lol.

  55. On Intent to Murder:

    posted 2 months ago

    Yeah, I think tense switch and point of view switch is an intical part of alot of books. It works to reveal more than what one character sees, like a behind the scenes all access pass type deal.

  56. On Spare a brother?:

    posted 2 months ago

    wow!!!! Im impressed. This is wonderful, uh, in a totally nasty way. Wonderful writing I mean. Can’t wait to read more of your work! fav line: Those memories roiled up from the darkness of his imagination like bile.
    Kickass, dude.

  57. On Intent to Murder:

    posted 2 months ago

    You’re Welcome!

  58. On Karen by Night:

    posted 2 months ago

    Your descriptions are so on point, at times, I felt like I was watching a movie. No foolin. The click clack of the footfalls gave me the distinct impression of an empty department store—which added to the spying like feel of listening in on a conversation. Nice one there Melia.

  59. On Morning:

    posted 2 months ago

    I liked the interaction between clayton and addison—really its the first human to human verbal contact this whole series! I like how you paint clayton as not having the paternal instinct, very true to the character I had envisioned as well.

  60. On Morning:

    posted 2 months ago

    Ok, I got the note, it’s my turn. Hold on to your top hats gentlemen…

  61. On The Ultimate Showdown, Live, in your Living Room,Coming this Fall,Don't be the Only One on your Block to Miss it!:

    posted 2 months ago

    I’m speech..uh…typeless (except for that).

  62. On !00th Ficlet Challenge. (Silly Story):

    posted 2 months ago

    This is my kind of challenge! Excellent idea. I might not get to it tonight, as it is creeping close to tomorrow morning right now and I’m tired—I need a well rested mind for seriously silly writing, but I’m definately going to enter. lol, good work Brebelles.

  63. On An Unremarkable Factory:

    posted 2 months ago

    I’d also like to thank you for dropping the ficlet.com hint to me close to nine months ago, I’ve been writing here ever since. Did Gilbert Arenas’s blogging victory over you last year resonate at all? If it helps, and I know its ancient history by now, but if the best blog was rated by talent and not by people who don’t know what real writing even looks like—you would have smoked the competition.

  64. On "This Is Just To Say..." [The Apology Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    wow 400, you are awesome! I absolutely forgot to enter this challenge after my excited comment, I don’t really know how that happened, I must have been on snooze control one late night—sleep walking and ficleting maybe? Way to go winners and those honorably mentioned!

  65. On On Being Wil Wheaton (Tad's Pen Name Challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    The views thing happened to me too on one of mine, melia. I was so proud I had alot of views and then one day it went down to like 7—heartbreaking I know.

  66. On (Your Pen Name Here) CHALLENGE:

    posted 2 months ago

    The results will be posted in a sequel to this challenge very shortly, within the next hour or so.

  67. On the Penguin Perp and the Live Gorilla (Pure Randomness continued):

    posted 2 months ago

    No really, I appologize. I’m easily entertained. So sorry. lol.

  68. On Slow Cough and Sputter:

    posted 2 months ago

    So I’m waiting for all of these characters in their safe little worlds to play bumber cars with the paths of their lives. Is that the intention? That’s the only explanation I can come up with for all of these seemingly disjointed stories. I’m enjoying it, so keep on writin em!

  69. On Cole's Novelty:

    posted 2 months ago

    And the character depth deepens. The enchanting thoughts of a person who can find enjoyment in his work. Very nice to read from the previous ficlet to this one. The density of the narration is being lifted word by word and thus revealing more as it goes. I’m just admiring, don’t mind me…

  70. On Pretty Things:

    posted 2 months ago

    I had to read this slower than normal becuase of the consistent complexity in the narration—which is to say it is chock full of good, dense writing. Do I detect a change of pace from your normal voice? Are you trying a new style? On to the next one…

  71. On What In the World is it All About??:

    posted 2 months ago

    haha…yes! So glad you took on the randomness. This is fun to read, and 1940’s suessical tunes kermitgorf? brush off your mantle piece cuz you’ve won the most out-of-left-field-trophy for 2008. Also, I don’t know what you were thinking, Tears of Pheonix, but I’m thinking epic series with this randomness.

  72. On The Most Random Day Ever:

    posted 2 months ago

    You didn’t walk, or crawl, or sidle, or hop. you sashayed lol. I LOVE that word. This is too irresistable I must try my hand at a sequel this very minute. Excellent imagination! Just the kind of craziness I like, written very well I might add.

  73. On I:

    posted 2 months ago

    Nice poem. It has a mysterious ending that makes me unsure. The body of it is very understandable though. And I found the tiny size of the title as a challenge in itself just to click on it lol. This picture is a popular one, it seems to pop up now and again and inspire someone, glad it inspired you.

  74. On Ultimate showdown! of ultimate destany:

    posted 2 months ago

    This should be a feature ficlet. It’s got imagination going 4 it big time.

  75. On Credits:

    posted 2 months ago

    Why thankyou, I fall under the category of everyone on ficlets. Keep it up, I’ll be checking in on your stories.

  76. On Ultimate showdonwn 2:

    posted 2 months ago

    Good use of rhyme dark, and it tells a story. Sweet.

  77. On Ultimate showdown! of ultimate destany:

    posted 2 months ago

    Excellent adventure happening here. I like lots of action!

  78. On The Royal Beauty:

    posted 2 months ago

    I even gave the main character a totally different name if that helps my case ( I hope).

  79. On The Royal Beauty:

    posted 2 months ago

    In no way did I mean the main character to be depicted as you Kermitgorf. I wrote this before I read Dark’s story and it turns out that he actually used your pen name as a character. I meant it as a fictional character. Please forgive me, im innocent I swear!

  80. On my story...:

    posted 2 months ago

    Hey Dark. I did a sequel after Kermitgorf’s sequel. I laughed at the interaction between you and Kermitgorf in this story especially when you kicked down his door and demanded he do you a favor, very funny and cool.

  81. On A Diamond From the Sky:

    posted 2 months ago

    Oh, duh, should have looked at the prequel over there (blushing he he).

  82. On A Diamond From the Sky:

    posted 2 months ago

    woo hoo, KG is back! In honor of the occasion I believe I shall sequel. And btw, did this idea come up because of a recent trip to the movies? Cuz I just went and got a full dosage of Indiana Jones 4 in the previews. Ahh, good ol summer blockbusters.

  83. On Ode To Ficlets:

    posted 2 months ago

    Awesome take on the NBA’s marketing phrase—where amazing happens. Is that what inspired you? Really cool N.E. Go Celts!

  84. On A Day of Pens&Feathers (Insert Pen Name Here) Challenge:

    posted 2 months ago

    Extreme sweetness (In the adorable confectioner sugar way). This has literary qualities such as the description of climbing the tree and the intellectualism she shares with herself when not bogging others down with her heavy ideas. What I meant by literary qualities is that this defies genre—it’s its own. Piano Man by the Joel man is the song I envisioned.

  85. On The Babe of the Band (Band Baby!!! Name challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    Well put together story and descriptions. I liked the emerald eyes line. Strong entry, way to go Bartimaeus.

  86. On (Your Pen Name Here) CHALLENGE:

    posted 2 months ago

    How about… instead of an apartment complex the series could be set up like a reality tv show. All of the ficlet authors live together before the cameras on national tv—in a mansion somewhere sweet. The series could belong to everyone on ficlets. I’m sure chaos and hilarity would ensue. Sound cooler? I might just make this thing happen.

  87. On Nobody Ate the Plums [The Apology Challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    This works as a parody of the famous poem and as a parody of resident evil simultaneously. Although a bit funny (i.e. life is too delicious) in the beginning you finish with some excellent prose and leave me feeling like I just read an excerpt from a highly successful debut author. A rousing round of applause indeed.

  88. On The Scarecrow Speaks!:

    posted 2 months ago

    The dude sleeping on the floor just missed one hell of a show.

  89. On Abah, Father of Illusions:

    posted 2 months ago

    Im flat out impressed by this explanation. It’s deep and thought provoking, something you can sink your teeth into…lets see can I think of one more cliche. I don’t mean to be so unoriginal with this comment. I wish to express how cool this story is but I think you used up all of the good writing so let me just say that it rocks.

  90. On Scarecrow Says:

    posted 2 months ago

    Nice stovo, glad you’re interested enough to write in our series. There are some really sweet lines here and unlike the last one you wrote in our series (lol) it maintains the feel of the moment.

  91. On Child's Play:

    posted 2 months ago

    ok, that explains how he can still be speaking to him without being in the car. Bravo. The suspense is building. He cursed vividly.—I laughed at that line.
    I’m likeing this very much. It’s ridiculous of course, but imagination is an important asset for a writer and you’ve got plenty.

  92. On Sky Cow:

    posted 2 months ago

    omg that is hilarious! What an imagination you have. I’m always down for free milk, but the cows would have to fly low and hover, becuase at goose cruising altitude the wind would spray the milk everywhere. No gps could help at that point. I can’t believe I just considered that rationally…lol.

  93. On Naked Male Insecurity:

    posted 2 months ago

    This is a very funny story you all are penning, nice installment here Ana. I’m going back to read from the start.

  94. On Journal of the Disheartened Hero [OTOC diary challenge]:

    posted 2 months ago

    ...sweeping pebbles in the face of a landslide.—really expresses hopelessness in a powerful way. Deep story here, THX0477, very easy to soak into the moment and the very moodlike atmosphere you constructed.

  95. On 078-05-1120:

    posted 2 months ago

    I like the word glutted to describe the clouds, and the duet of information and description and how it dances together without stepping on eachothers toes. Sorry, I haven’t had any coffee yet. Depending on what the guy ultimately wants with this persons identity will show us how original the story is. I have a feeling he’s in the backseat right now, suspense! Good Job.

  96. On He's Actually a Pretty Amiable Fellow:

    posted 2 months ago

    lol ahahha… hey, a kittie! You really took the scare out of scarecrow stovo.

  97. On Scarecrow's Offer:

    posted 2 months ago

    I changed it so that the barn wasn’t falling—mainly becasue I didn’t have the space to save the cats. And I’ve grown fond of those cats!

  98. On That Girl. You Know, the One in the Mirror:

    posted 2 months ago

    I mean, wow. lol, I’m really impressed. Love the energy!

  99. On That Girl. You Know, the One in the Mirror:

    posted 2 months ago

    She’s… rawer.YEAH she is. Love that line. Love this ficlet. It reminds me of the way Stephen King hits you and hits you with energy on a singular topic. I really love this. Bravo.

  100. On (Your Pen Name Here) CHALLENGE:

    posted 2 months ago

    WOAH. I’m honored by the entries and comments. Nearly brings a tear to mine eye… ahem, not really, but it makes my heart sing for sure. I promise to do a thorough job of judging all of these entries and I’m pondering an epic ficlet that includes all of the people here in a rambunctious Apartment complex… maybe it could be a series that belongs to all that entered or was written of in this challenge. Sound like a cool idea? Let me know… THANKYOU!

  101. On Being Kermitgorf (Tad's pen name challenge):

    posted 2 months ago

    Maybe the people here are more like you than those in real life, KG. That’s Y we think ur da coolest. lol about the pet frog User 8538.

  102. On Stories :Take You Away:

    posted 2 months ago

    I’m really upset that that comment is crossed out. My mistake, as usual (I’ll never get used to that).

  103. On Stories :Take You Away:

    posted 2 months ago

    I believe reading is the sixth sense beacuase it makes you experience all 5 of the senses in a different way than they were intended - through memory. And that memory is powerful enough to make you salivate over the mere description of biting into a sour lemon. That is the power of the written word - persuasion. It really is incredible. Kudos KG.

  104. On The Way It Had To be:

    posted 2 months ago

    Thank the powers that be that we (among others) stopped that genocide.

  105. On The Way It Had To be:

    posted 2 months ago

    Nicely done KG.

  106. On The Way It Had To be:

    posted 2 months ago

    Funny, I finished with this and I felt so smart like, “I’m going to write about how this was Hitler…” and then I read the comments. Dream crushed. lol. Sad, actually, that Hitler is such a covered topic. I wish infamy was dead, for real. What a disgusting totalitarian.

  107. On A cloud of Happyness:

    posted 2 months ago

    Happyness makes more sense, English is such a difficult biaatch sometimes, excuse my portugese. This is a cute story. I like how the dialogue is text—that’s original. I just got my cell phone bill and my trexts are out of control, lol. A few grammar issues in the first paragraph but I’ll leave that up to your teacher to wrinkle her brow over.

  108. On Mmmmmm...:

    posted 2 months ago

    ooooooo, I absolutely agree w/ that challenge idea BARomero (Hint Hint).

  109. On A Blimp With No Teeth:

    posted 2 months ago

    I know you didn’t mean my real dad, just the character, but still… lol

  110. On A Blimp With No Teeth:

    posted 2 months ago

    hahahahahahaha A. Muse Morrington. I’m telling my dad to read your comment right now, lol.

  111. On Mmmmmm...:

    posted 2 months ago

    Ha ha ha ha. I hope you didn’t lick the foil top in public or get caught by your co-workers for real, but I like that ending. Fantastic description. I can see how this could be taken offensively if you continued with the sensual theme, but you did a fine job of holding back on the reigns, its perfect.

  112. On 'Appiness:

    posted 2 months ago

    At first I didn’t know what you were going for with the accent, I thought humor, but after I finished I felt that the accent applied depth to a very wise character. It read like an interview—now, like jeopardy, I’m constructing the question from the answer and trying to figure it out that way. This has more potential than you might have given yourself credit for. It’s original, I like it.

  113. On Well Isn't that Nice? {Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Thanks Kells! You know I’m your fan regardless.

  114. On "This Is Just To Say..." [The Apology Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Wonderful challenge. I love that poem, its so concise and simple. I’m entering as soon as I can type it.

  115. On All CherryPop's Fault:

    posted 3 months ago

    oh yea, and I learned a new word—ichor. Thanks.

  116. On All CherryPop's Fault:

    posted 3 months ago

    Your writing is like McDonalds—I get it and eat it up fast and Im lovin it.

  117. On Goose Bumps:

    posted 3 months ago

    going for casual, but landing somewhere near Squeaksville.

    Very cool and funny line.

  118. On Vroom, Vroom.:

    posted 3 months ago

    great picture you found. I like the car theme staying consistent and the mini-van symbolizing the new start to the cycle. hmmm another way to end it could be a hearst, but I like the neat circle you made starting with a baby and ending with a baby. What other endings did u come up with?

  119. On Winter [JP's Smell Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    holy…. you are brilliant. I love it.

  120. On THX 0477 No Fear [challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    ha ha ha! Classic. I have a question for THX0477—do you have a ferret and is s/he named Dweezil? This rocked, it’s alot of fun to read.

  121. On Self Knows Self:

    posted 3 months ago

    I think it’s funny (ha ha) to question yourself outloud “yes?” and answer “you know.” why even ask. I’m assuming this person is as eccentric as a neon tie.

  122. On Never Explain: Plays Well With Others:

    posted 3 months ago

    I like, “tried and not true…” The funny thing is that I just started a series with Never Explain, I know that isn’t surprising. I picture him sitting at his computer juggling an entire barnum and bailey’s circus in one hand, (gorillas, tigers, trapese artists, clowns and all) and writing ficlets with his free hand.

  123. On Open Mic Night:

    posted 3 months ago

    I loved reading this. I’ve been to a few poetry reads lately and you’re right about the typical characters you see there, be they performing on stage with shakey hands or sighing in the crowd with a liqour drink in hand and a cynical sneer. I liked the realization that she was becoming very drunk, and the ending gave a positive twist and made me feel like there was some hope for her.

  124. On Mrs. Robinson's Turn:

    posted 3 months ago

    I like the change of view point from the youngin to the oldin, it gives the whole story, both sides, 360 degrees. Lord knows I’ll still be in high vigor by then, but I probably won’t be barking up any 30 yr old’s tree by then either, if you will. I know my limitations. Good read, thanks.

  125. On wytherwings [(Your Pen Name Here) Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    I too really liked singing as a way to describe non stop clicking—to a writer that’s music to their ears. Wonderful last line. Thanks for the story.

  126. On Howhardlifeis, Her Day:

    posted 3 months ago

    Light and upbeat and sugary all around, lol. I do like that the protagonist’s (aka Howhardlifeis’s) life actually isn’t so hard in this story. Very positive and fun, thanks blusparrow.

  127. On More Ways Than One [Your Pen Name Here challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Wow you really got into More Ways Than One’s head with this story. Very unique direction and narration compared to the other stories, especially the whole referring to ‘oneself’ in the third person part. Thankyou for entering in my challenge.

  128. On A Hectic Mom Moment:

    posted 3 months ago

    I started laughing at ‘here’s what really happened.’ You know that that candy is strategically placed at a childs eye level too! There’s no winning.

  129. On You Can't Keep a Good Vamp Down:

    posted 3 months ago

    The big paragraph at the top read smoothly with descriptions galore, I really like how you describe things. You have to check out this book called ‘You Suck’ by Christopher Moore. It’s a satire about vampires (get the title? lol) that I think is right up your alley of interest. It has all the cool vampire night stalker stuff of the monster variety, but I swear it’ll make you laugh 1,000 times along the way.

  130. On Brush N' Dry:

    posted 3 months ago

    don’t mind the crossout, my mistake.

  131. On Brush N' Dry:

    posted 3 months ago

    I could picture a few people in my life who over react about small things and freak the hell out of me just like Emily did - only to make obvious statements. My mother likes to gasp like she was witnessing bloody murder if I drive by an open parking space - so I slam on the brakes thinking I’m about to hit someone only to be terribly annoyed. lol, anyway that part of the story about the curly hair and being relieved was funny to me.

  132. On "Why Mrs. Robinson I Do Believe You're Trying To Seduce Me":

    posted 3 months ago

    The title got me chuckling—it’s so innocent and proper sounding.

  133. On Mirror, Mirror{Elsha's Mirror Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    Kerm, you’ve got a broad scope with your ficlets, a real variety. You’re the ficleting equivalent of a baskin robbins—so many different flavors. I just read a story of yours that documented a mischevious monkey and then clicked on this. All I can say is whoa. The opposite spectrums fried my cerebrum. Excellent dark story here, incredibly pathetic and depressing character.

  134. On A Nice Dance to a Different Tune:

    posted 3 months ago

    crafted very thoughtfully. I enjoyed reading this story, it makes the reader feel a certain way, vivid emotions coursing in this one. Personally I pittied them both but by the end I felt my anxiety for them dissolve a bit. The soul blending in the wall line is fantastic.

  135. On One Lost Bikini Top [Lena's 50th ficlet challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    hahaha, excellent. I liked the description of the gaggle of girls following in his wake. Sharp story telling, and who knows, maybe not being a good flirt is just what he’s looking for in a girl.

  136. On i dont call this living.:

    posted 3 months ago

    Interesting perspective to look upon food from animals as filling up on their misery. Nice use of language here, I also enjoyed the flow, and I also agree with Mistress Elsha Hawk—I’d change fowl to foul. I get why you spelled it like that, it matches the theme of animals we make food of. Still I’d rework that small detail.

  137. On Tastes Terrible, But It Gets The Job Done:

    posted 3 months ago

    that comment was ill, Howie. Nice story, very funny and well written, engaging. You used dialogue to show us a few things—most memorably the size of the ego of the guy glikking down the bad wine came through loud and clear.

  138. On Surfing Lessons:

    posted 3 months ago

    funny ficlet. Alot is bubbling beneath the surface, bubbling in a bath of teenage hormones.lol

  139. On On Being Wil Wheaton (Tad's Pen Name Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I hope wil sees this, reads it and approves. You’ve got a good nose for the right words.

  140. On the truth about uselessness [(Your Pen Name Here) Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Very witty last line. I enjoyed the journey from useless to useful. I have a feeling you hit the nail on the head at least when it comes to uselessness really being a double agent, lol. Great read, thankyou for entering, taking a risk and delving into the made up details of the one we know as uselessness.

  141. On A Day in the Life Of Celestic23:

    posted 3 months ago

    I sense some truth perhaps mingling with the fiction in this one. I’m positive the under eye baggage is more to the consequence of staying up late and not so much one’s age giving in to gravity. And if she is your sister then it’s totally cool to rip on eachother from time to time, that’s what siblings do. Thanks for entering Kermitgorf, always a pleasure. Fam Guy is totally superior btw.

  142. On Saint Chuck (Your Pen Name Here Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I love the way the teacher’s massive hair followed after her head turned. lol, I can relate to saint chucks haste to break away from school and write what he wants and not what the assignments dictate. And you used one of my all time fav words : Sidled. Great job, thanks for entering my challenge.

  143. On The Everyday THX 0477 [Pen Name Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    lol, THX0477 and perfection mesh in a very cartoon way here —makes me want to clean my apartment and maybe pick up some groceries in hopes that my mornings will be likewise to THX’s. Some superb lines here as well as well crafted images. Thanks for entering the challenge!

  144. On The Oder of LoA( Flute Faeries Nice Comment Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    Kudos for resisting to award yourself Kermitgorf (and giving me some of the glory instead). For your selfless valor and steadfast penning of our grand marshalls words and demeanor I vote that you recieve the lengthy comment of ‘thanks for the pickme up’ award.

  145. On Breaking Heart (64k Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    lol, Capital W bought the t-shirt. I think I have the travel mug kicking around in my pantry. Yes, I agree with the others, this is true to the teenage life. And hey, they say write what you know. It looks like you know that bit of good advice, continue to follow it, I like when ya do.

  146. On The Number 3, Dale Pays a Visit (Conversations With Dead People Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I don’t watch NASCAR or any form of racing and even I know who Dale was—The Intimidator. He’s the type of guy who you always want on your side. That’s probably why he works so well as a gaurdian angel. nice story.

  147. On Being Kermitgorf (Tad's pen name challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    I knew Kermitgorf was going to be ficletized sooner than later! lol. cool story—I also enjoyed Stovohobo as the pet cat, nice creativity.

    Nothing against you, Stovohobo, of course—it’s the first non human characterization of a ficleter (in this challenge) so it’s cool. Way to go Celestic23.

  148. On Life As Melia [(Your Pen Name Here) Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Yep, that’s our Melia alright. No real Vamps or Ghoulies makes Melia want to write em to life. Very funny, I imagined this as a spoof on star trek with melia in the captains seat, even though the vessel was more like a submarine/time machine.

  149. On Around the House with ThroatWolf:

    posted 3 months ago

    I love the imagination aspect. This is a classy write up of throatwolf. I appreciate how your story brims with respect without boiling over—almost subtle until it hits you that this entire ficlet is one of the greatest compliments a writer could ever hope for.

  150. On Life As Melia [(Your Pen Name Here) Challenge]:

    posted 3 months ago

    Ha ha ha, excellent!

  151. On There's No Business Like Monkey Business {MBTM Challenge}:

    posted 3 months ago

    hehehehaha, funny—nicley delivered hilarity. Creative too.

  152. On On Being Wil Wheaton (Tad's Pen Name Challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    ...”as if some invisible someone was pressing down on them.”—Great line! Very nice slice of life. Thanks for entering in the challenge.

  153. On Getaway:

    posted 3 months ago

    darn cross out strikes again, oops.

  154. On Getaway:

    posted 3 months ago

    Strange that this is my first comment on one of your stories in a long time - but what jumped out at me was the variation in the length of your sentences. The switch from short to long and a paragraph being one sentence made the structure aesthetically (asthetically? I can’t spell) pleasing. The affects of her condition - seeing the skyline with her eyes was a well described invitation to her world.

  155. On Survival of the Deadest:

    posted 3 months ago

    so nice to see you on the most active list. Well deserved attention.

  156. On Not Loud Enough (64k ficlet challenge):

    posted 3 months ago

    good use of the limited space. Even small and quiet it says alot.

  157. On Kermitgorf Sports challenge Winners:

    posted 4 months ago

    Woo Hooo, thankyou thankyou Kermigorf! What an honor to be awarded twice. That just made my week.

  158. On All in her head...?:

    posted 4 months ago

    Just how BIG is this person’s house? So much time to think of the coldness of long hallways, heck, my whole apartment is one hallway!! I do enjoy the suspense—it kept me engaged and motivated thorugh to the end. I’d like to know just how RICH this mother* is before I start to empathise with her fear.

    But I must say that I do connect with the non-sleeping part.
  159. On Our Acceptance Speech:

    posted 4 months ago

    Woaaaahhh. I’m so proud of the creators and memebers that contribute to ficlets. This is a wonderful site for writers, I hope WE win! I’ll keep trying my best to make sure.

  160. On The Conversation:

    posted 4 months ago

    Really neat way to tell a story, I concur with all of the above praise. This is incredibly relatable!

  161. On Just Looking:

    posted 5 months ago

    “the wet streets and blaring sirens fading away…”

    That’s my favorite line. Good description and very sad premise. I would like to see this continued because I feel the hope for redemption, even if it’s only the opportunity to explain yourself from beyond the grave.

  162. On Random Poem :

    posted 5 months ago

    This wont do
    I dont want to
    Feel unglued

    There is a lot of energy in this poem, especially in the pace with the rhymes coming back to back. I really liked the lines above.

  163. On Pied à Terre ~ Six Word Memoir:

    posted 5 months ago

    I like the ‘forever jet lagged’—becasue it hints that she’ll never return not becasue she chose to live or be somewhere else, but that she is dead.

  164. On Cat vs. Mouse:

    posted 5 months ago

    I like the idea of weeping in the mind. I don’t think there is another animal that cries, with tears, like humans.

  165. On The Superhero Obituaries:

    posted 5 months ago

    Wreckless’s “power” is… was hilarious. Very entertaining ficlet.

  166. On No Great Why:

    posted 5 months ago

    why?... just messing, I suppose if you stop to ask why you must then ask, “Am I truly siezing the day?” and then a snowball of sidetrack thinking tanks all productivity. good one, Saint Chuck.

  167. On At least for a moment, the Hawk cares...:

    posted 5 months ago

    Wow. Fantastic expansion, I am so happy you sequeled this, you really added a well written perspective. Nice writing and metaphors of your own.

  168. On Rude and Crude Valentine Message:

    posted 5 months ago

    and she’s late for class, double burn. Ouch. Good read.

  169. On To a Beautiful Boy (Six Word Memoir Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    sooo many different ways to take this. So I won’t commit on it being cute, it could mean anything and nothing at all to do with cute.

  170. On 7.2:

    posted 5 months ago

    ficletize—lol, I like that

  171. On 7.2:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yeah Melia! Featured, alright. Terriffying account.

  172. On One Last Smoke:

    posted 5 months ago

    Obama and his parliaments.

  173. On Life Is Not An Action To Give Up On:

    posted 5 months ago

    or dusty gray eyes… I mean, not gray dusty eyes.

  174. On An Open Letter to stylorouge:

    posted 5 months ago

    hahahahaha clown porn. If stephen King wrote porn scripts…

  175. On Return of the Son of An Open Letter to stylorouge:

    posted 5 months ago

    You officially made me puke. Virtually. Funny stuff.

  176. On Will Work For Air:

    posted 5 months ago

    the gestures of the characters were great.

  177. On The Vampirate (The Pirate Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    fiery honey—really sweet metaphor.

  178. On Good Luck, Daniel:

    posted 5 months ago

    funny stuff and a cool story.

  179. On Disbelief:

    posted 5 months ago

    Great dialogue. Solid contribution.

  180. On Life Is Not An Action To Give Up On:

    posted 5 months ago

    What I mean by sentences that should be one is this: If you took the sentences, “Her eyes wandered aimlessly landing on the nearest thing in sight. Her face was pale and her eyes were a dusty gray.” Notice that in these back to back sentences you use the word eyes twice. But they are the same eyes. why not kill two birds with one stone, for example.

    Her gray, dusty eyes wandered aimlessly landing on the nearest thing in sight.

    I hope I’m being helpful and not coming off as a know it all.

  181. On Life Is Not An Action To Give Up On:

    posted 5 months ago

    The descriptions are good. The flow could be better, particularly combining sentences that should be one. In the process I think you’ll find that the descriptions will work better with your voice and certain unnecessary words will unclutter. There are some great lines here like the mustering of a blink line and the description of her pale face and gray eyes.

  182. On My Other Half:

    posted 5 months ago

    tuesdays is double nickels and you can have this dime piece.

  183. On The Chasm:

    posted 5 months ago

    Intense descriptions. Difficult to comprehend on a first read, but going slowly I was able to pick up some really good images.

  184. On Achieving Nirvana:

    posted 5 months ago

    I think this met the challenge perfectly.

  185. On Hypnosis [six word challenge]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Ditto Nouvelle Bardot and THX 0477. Funny, and perhaps exploitative on the part of the hypnotist?

  186. On Candle Burning Bright:

    posted 5 months ago

    The setup here is one that deals with time, going back and forth, which is a great way to structure a story. I want to read more, even though it seems to end in tragedy I’m hoping there’s some sunshine in store too. Good start.

  187. On First Fight :

    posted 5 months ago

    The last line really sums up the entire ficlet. Great metaphor for their friendship. Great finish to the ficlet. I like the easy flow of your writing, and how well ‘spoken’ your writing voice is.

  188. On City on fire:

    posted 5 months ago

    I like the scenary of the thick clouds glowing overt the city.

  189. On Six Word Memoirs CHALLENGE:

    posted 5 months ago

    Ernest Hemmingway :

    “For sale: baby shoes, never used.”

  190. On Six Word Memoirs CHALLENGE:

    posted 5 months ago

    Minimalism can be very rich. Less is more and that old chestnut. Superb challenge. Have you read Hemmingway’s 6 word story? He says it was the greatest story he ever wrote.

  191. On My Other Half:

    posted 5 months ago

    lol

  192. On Well now what?:

    posted 5 months ago

    haha I laughed at the emphasising points part, especially the potato chip crunch. I see that you’re trying some more dialogue, very authentic sounding characters.

  193. On Small potatoes:

    posted 5 months ago

    good imagination. original idea—a mundane happening leading to an apocalypse, I don’t see that one often… let’s face it, never have I seen that idea employed.

  194. On The Mostly Unknown By Most Race Of The Active Authors Is Over!! And The Winner Is..:

    posted 5 months ago

    wow 2,000 comments is a highly commendable goal and achievment whether any one wins or loses. Just reaching that plateau is sweet. Congrats THX.

    OTOC—could you tell me what it means to be on the Active Author list? Is it the top 5 authors with the most submissions/ficlets/comments that make the list?

  195. On Six Word Monster:

    posted 5 months ago

    What stovohobo said.

  196. On Now, when Was the Last Time You've Had a Good 'Ol Stovohobo Challenge?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Pizza and Jaywalking, now that’s livin on the wild side woo hoo. Fun challenge.

  197. On Now, when Was the Last Time You've Had a Good 'Ol Stovohobo Challenge?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Internet = no fair. I will stump you yet.

  198. On The Face (Melia's Scary Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    This gave me chills. really good stuff. If I were to critique to make it better, for me the ending was perfect without day four. because of the nature of ficlets there’s not enough space to elaborate or even explain what happened to Maria. For me the creepy climax was the end of day 3—literal chills.
    and then day four was bordering on funny and confusing.

  199. On World War lll (Six Word Memoir Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    I’d assume not HB2, though the idea of nuking anything is downright disturbing. Be nice to the mice. lol, that could be a catchy chant if mice ever go on strike.

  200. On A Warm Welcome:

    posted 5 months ago

    arms akimbo—hehe, great description.
    Good dialogue, very funny. Traded two of my best guns for her was my fav part.lol

  201. On For Shannon (6 word memoirs challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    Mushy? Why yes, yes it is :) Is even better for the six word challenge (I Think)! Not to diminish the very sweet six words for your daughter. Were you trying to meet the requirements with those last six words or was it coincidence?

  202. On World War lll (Six Word Memoir Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    Thankyou C. Fracture.

  203. On World War lll (Six Word Memoir Challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    What is the correct possessive form of cockroach? Is it cockroach’s, cockroaches, or cockroache’s? Thanks.

  204. On It Happens. (six word challenge):

    posted 5 months ago

    hahaha—that’s funny on multiple levels.

  205. On Sanctuary:

    posted 5 months ago

    Excellent writing. Well balanced descriptions. My head became a battleground for the thunderous thuds that the droplets made as they fell upon the skylight.—my favorite line. It gives more than just a sense of sound, it also gives a glimpse of the miniature world that that sound creates, in the mind.

  206. On Call me...[Six Word Memoirs CHALLENGE]:

    posted 5 months ago

    haha, I too wanted to be a superhero! No joke. Never has 8 years of school gone by so fast. Thankfully you didn’t add a clock to your story. School for me was looking at the clock all day. Dr. Awesome—too good.

  207. On New Perfection:

    posted 5 months ago

    Like a great, flesh-colored beast his hand seemed to be creeping through the narrow stretch of grass separating us.

    I agree with kermitgorf, great lines in this overall great story.

  208. On {Six Word Memoir} What I would be, what I am:

    posted 5 months ago

    Creative.

  209. On Elizabeth's night at the movies :

    posted 5 months ago

    Very romantic. You’ve got a love streak going, an apt love streak, Valentines day is just around the corner.

  210. On To Love A Person :

    posted 5 months ago

    Before I knew it I was done reading and that was the worst part! Very true, the nature of love stripped down to reveal it’s inner heartbeat. Ummm that was cheesy, but you get my drift. Loved it.

  211. On The Shortest Ever Love Story [Six Words Memoir Challenge]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Could you edit this down a little, The descriptions are a bit heavy handed…Just messin.

  212. On The Shortest Ever Love Story [Six Words Memoir Challenge]:

    posted 5 months ago

    Very good six word story, concise—but that goes without typing.

  213. On Life Was Normal:

    posted 5 months ago

    You sure know how to pack in a lifetime without making the space feel cluttered. Good story of life and love, and regrets that no one is spared in any relationship I think.

  214. On Eppy and the Red Ball:

    posted 5 months ago

    Great title, and great pic. I love dogs, even though I was attacked by a German Shepard when I was a kid, this one looks chubby and amiable. lol Good story, I really wish I had a dog, but I have to wait for my lease to expire, darn it.

  215. On Angelica and the Snow Angel:

    posted 5 months ago

    Beautiful ending.

  216. On E. Bunny & H.Dumpty Detective Agency{HobobeardBob's Inhuman Detective Challenge}:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yeah, I agree with funny for sure. You’re a pop culture writer if I ever knew one.

  217. On Bennett's Gift:

    posted 5 months ago

    The jury is still out on if I agree with THX or One Time, becasue, Kermitgorf, you have a record for mixing it up when it comes to romantic genders. maybe if you cleared the air on that point it would make the story more understandable. Give some more about the alterior motives for getting the dog or lack thereof (besides the fact th