kells' posted comments

  1. On Ostentatious, Isn't It? ((Twilight Challenge)):

    posted 5 months ago

    Haha, too funny. I can imagine these two chatting, slipping on their ugly-but-trendy purses as they head out for a day of shopping and sipping outrageously expensive caramel macchiatos (with skim milk and sugar-free syrup, of course).

    The only critique I have is to watch your grammar. Try to avoid using ‘net slang (OMFG!) during a story, and also using so many exclamation points during narration. Maybe they’re just personal tastes of mine, but I wouldn’t recommend it for storytelling.

  2. On Never Enough Time:

    posted 5 months ago

    Aw, how awful would that be?

    Great job! I love how you change the use of your adjectives from the dream, emphasizing warmth and comfort, to reality by switching to cold, dark descriptions.

    Poor widow.

  3. On Taxidermy:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hahaha, how morbid!

    Too funnny.

  4. On Rainbows:

    posted 5 months ago

    I do not feel red right now, but I do like the concept of this series (if that’s what you can call it.)

    I can’t wait to see the other colours! =)

  5. On Among the Earth:

    posted 5 months ago

    Pretty! =)

    I love how this story makes you feel so much at peace; you really do get a sense of that connection the narrator feels.

  6. On Walkin':

    posted 5 months ago

    ooh, exciting! Are they in Roswell? ;)

    Poor Charles.

    I’d love to hear more of his story!

  7. On Chasing the Secret:

    posted 5 months ago

    Hm, I wasn’t really sure where I was going with this. I purposely left it vague enough so that people could add to it, but hopefully it’s enough to stand alone. I dunno. It’s late, but I was in the mood to write.

  8. On Boundary:

    posted 5 months ago

    Gorgeous! I love how you don’t need any sort of backstory, or need to know what’s going on. Few words are spoken, but you know everything that you need to get an idea of what’s going on, and you can fill in the blanks yourself if you want.

    And the details are fantastic! Somehow in-depth, but not purple and overbearing.

    fantastic <3

  9. On Disease:

    posted 5 months ago

    Yeah, I agree with THX, there’s some funny wording going on, you may need to check that out. Besides that, though, this sounds really intriguing! Is this the beginning of a longer story, or just a one-shot?

  10. On Her Hair was the Color of Wheat Straw:

    posted 5 months ago

    Fantastic! I never would have thought of such a cool ficlet from that kind of picture! Major props for creativity.

  11. On Cosmic Demotion:

    posted 5 months ago

    you WIN AT LIFE. This made me laugh!

    I like the ~*cliffhanger at the end, haha. I wonder what dastardly plan Pluto will come up with?

  12. On Well, Didn't Your Mother Ever Tell You to Eat Your Words?:

    posted 5 months ago

    Awww, pretty! I love your metaphors and the way you make the words tangible. Your descriptions are lovely =)

  13. On chasing a ghost:

    posted 5 months ago

    I don’t know what it is about your story, but I really love it! great job.

  14. On bright:

    posted 5 months ago

    Gorgeous! I was trying to use that photograph, but couldn’t come up with anything half as good as that.

    I love how it’s so minimal, and yet you can draw so much of a scene from just those few lines.

  15. On Nice Things (Flute Faerie's 1000th):

    posted 5 months ago

    Ummmmm I love you a whole lot. I just saw this, and I think I just squeed inside. Or almost cried. Or something.

    Thank you so much <3

  16. On Dreams Of Terror :

    posted 5 months ago

    Oh good lord, I think I’d cry if I had that kinid of nightmare!

  17. On The Mysterious Case of the Invisible Strawberries:

    posted 6 months ago

    This made me laugh – a lot! Good luck with the contest! =D

  18. On Vroom, Vroom.:

    posted 6 months ago

    I could think of a number of different ways to end this, and I wasn’t sure which way was best.

    Just trying to stretch myself and get back in the writing groove.

  19. On The Way That Jack Died:

    posted 6 months ago

    I’m pretty sure this would be considered ‘cruel and unusual punishment’...! It looks as if he’s being executed in a prison or such, but something tells me this isn’t the case. I’d be really interested to hear the story behind this horrible death!

  20. On Orange Salvation:

    posted 6 months ago

    Wow, that last paragraph really was a twist! I had begun to imagine something along the lines that she had been kidnapped/imprisoned…what a surprise!

    The imagery is wonderful, though – gorgeous descriptions, and the metaphors and all that are fantastic.

    I’d love to read some sort of backstory on this =)

  21. On Parasite:

    posted 6 months ago

    Gorgeous! You don’t often hear pregnancy described in this sort of matter ;)

  22. On Days Like These:

    posted 6 months ago

    Hehe, cute! Days like these are so rough.

  23. On The Smelly Challenge! Its Challenge time!:

    posted 6 months ago

    Entry number two! =)

    [my first contest entry! woo!]

  24. On Daffodils:

    posted 7 months ago

    Gorgeous. You manage to pack so much emotion into just a handful of moments!

  25. On Leaving:

    posted 7 months ago

    The other day, my train of thought lead me to try and imagine what I’d do in this situation, although I couldn’t possibly know…hopefully I’ll never have to find out.

    Anyway, more dialogue practice. I purposely left the story gaping, in hopes that someone will feel the urge to tack on more, but if I don’t get a response soon, I’ll keep going. Hope you enjoy!

    While I know there’s nothing explicitly said, I thought I’d mark it mature for what’s implied.

  26. On Equal Rights for all Undead:

    posted 7 months ago

    That made me laugh. A lot!

    Too funny. Zombies do need their love!

  27. On Who could be that indecisive?:

    posted 8 months ago

    Ahh, working in the restaurant/retail line is always lame. I work at a coffee place, and the other night a lady came in and asked what the difference between a latte and a cappuccino was. I explained that they’re the same thing, except that cappuccinos have a lot more foam (1/3 foam, 1/3 steamed milk, 1/3 espresso, while a latte is 2/3 steamed milk and 1/3 espresso). So she orders the cappuccino…then wants a refund because it has too much foam. =|

    people are just nuts!

  28. On Brendon Urie:

    posted 8 months ago

    Too bad the guys from Panic(!) are total jerks and refuse to visit with fans =|

    (and no, I’m not being overdramatic, I had a friend who went to try and talk to Ryan after a show, and he literally crossed the street, walked a ways, and then came back to the same side just to avoid talking to her!)

    cute poem, though =)

  29. On Six-word memoir, response:

    posted 8 months ago

    I agree with Kevin – that’s perfect! I feel bad for anyone who enters this after you…haha.

  30. On ....Must Come Down [2/2]:

    posted 8 months ago

    Mm, I’m actually trying to work on that. Especially for these tiny drabbles, I always find it hard to come up with a story and dialogue that can fit into such a tiny space. I’ve gotten into a rut of just doing small narrations/descriptions! Hopefully you’ll be seeing more dialogue in the future.

  31. On My Other Half:

    posted 8 months ago

    It’s always the quiet ones….

  32. On Mary Jane's Last Dance:

    posted 8 months ago

    Aww, that was bittersweet. Makes you wonder – why is she leaving? Where is she going?

    I like all the details! Not too overpowering, just enough little tidbits to give you something easily imaginable.

  33. On My Other Half:

    posted 8 months ago

    I know. That’s why I added in that last bit of explanation, because I was afraid it would be interpreted that way. I almost wrote it like that, but alas, that is another ficlet for another day. =)

  34. On All in Blue:

    posted 8 months ago

    Fantastic! The imagery is amazing, I can see the scene my mind. Not to mention how easily it is to identify with the narrator.

    Gorgeous work. <3

  35. On My Other Half:

    posted 8 months ago

    While I don’t have a best friend fitting this description, I really do believe this. I honestly don’t think your soulmate has to be your boyfriend/girlfriend.

    I hope this makes sense, what I was trying to convey. =)

  36. On The Last One You'd Ever Suspect of Setting the Fire:

    posted 8 months ago

    Fantastic! This sounds like it would be a great into to a novel – I’d be curious to see who he was – why wouldn’t anyone suspect him? And why did he do it?

    [PS you win at life for having the Survivor quote in your profile!]

  37. On 'Normal Is So YESTERDAY!'s Time Challenge!:

    posted 8 months ago

    And such is the point of this ‘definition,’ so to speak. Just to sit there and make you think, have your mind go in circles =)

  38. On Take me Home Please!:

    posted 8 months ago

    Too true. If only more people knew about the horrible conditions that puppy farms produce for their inhabitants. =|

  39. On Hunger ATTACK!:

    posted 8 months ago

    that made me laugh. a lot. =D

  40. On The Miller's Daughter:

    posted 8 months ago

    Gorgeous intro; I’d love to read the rest of this piece =)

  41. On Date ficlet:

    posted 8 months ago

    Hey, this looks like a cute start, but I have to say, it felt kind of rushed. My suggestion might be to break it up into two ficlets, so you could have more space to develop the ‘before’ and ‘results’ half.

  42. On Trapped:

    posted 8 months ago

    This was just a 10 minute quickie between classes, purposely not giving myself time to overthink it or anything…I just wanted to see what I could write out without planning and that sort of thing. So please, while I’d love to hear your thoughts and critiques, don’t be too harsh on grammar and that sort of thing. <3

  43. On Style For You (!!!):

    posted 8 months ago

    Haha, this series is so made of win! Too true.

    I shouldn’t have read this in the university library, though, cause everyone’s kind of looking at me like I’m crazy…laughing out loud is not a good thing. =|

    can’t wait to see if there’s more!

  44. On The Suicide Dog:

    posted 8 months ago

    I really like this – I hope there’s more! You really can see this as a dog’s mentality – the total loyalty towards the master and everything. I thought that line about ‘no tail to wag’ was really witty and insightful! =)

  45. On secret, tree, parents, grown:

    posted 8 months ago

    Wow, creepy. It reminds me of the old school fairy tales! Great job. =)

  46. On ur grammar suks:

    posted 8 months ago

    Catie, you’re scaring me! =O

  47. On My Own Personnal Freedom:

    posted 8 months ago

    Gorgeous! And I agree, this really looks like it could be setup for a larger story.

  48. On New Customer:

    posted 8 months ago

    more than ok, fantastic!

    Descriptions are lovely, and you can really understand how the character’s feeling!

  49. On Would You Like Your Tarot Read?:

    posted 8 months ago

    [By the by, I do in fact know what a Zamboni is. I threw it in there for humour value, but I’m just saying this now before someone tries to point it out to me.]

  50. On 1/18/08;; "The Phrase That Pays":

    posted 8 months ago

    mmm, I love that song. <3

    What a sad little story! I know how the narrator feels, though.

  51. On Release:

    posted 8 months ago

    Yeah, I agree. It was kind of abrupt because of the limit. I wrestled with it for a while, and then I had to go to class. I might clean it up later, or write it as a sequel instead, if I ever get around to it…the story didn’t really go as I wanted it to. :/

    ah well. thanks for the comment though! <3

  52. On The Empty Black Room:

    posted 8 months ago

    Oooh, mysterious! I’d love to hear more of this story, find out what’s going on. =)

  53. On Giving up :

    posted 8 months ago

    so short, but yet you managed to convey so much into it. Fantastic! =)

  54. On A picture's worth a thousand words, but what about foam?:

    posted 8 months ago

    Sorry this one’s so awkward, I had trouble keeping it in the size limit. :/

  55. On Painting You Pictures:

    posted 9 months ago

    That was just…wow. Amazing. You managed to get so much meaning into such a tiny drabble!

  56. On My Name is Larry:

    posted 9 months ago

    Too cute! It definitely made me smile. =)

  57. On How we became cool:

    posted 9 months ago

    I really like this, the tone. The style’s fantastic; I love how use just enough slang so that you can easily get a feel of the character and see what he’s like, while still making it easy to read.

    It’s so easy to identify with the narrator and understand what he’s going through. The ending is a real twist, too.

    The only real critique I could have is that the ending is kind of confusing. Who’s easy? Why was He so nasty [‘now bury him’].

    Great work!

  58. On There aren't just flowers in the garden:

    posted 9 months ago

    Kermitgorf: haha, not by a long shot! Just a hobby, as much as I’d like to do it professionally.

    Thank you so much, all your comments mean so much to me! <3

  59. On I Think I Lyke Hym...:

    posted 9 months ago

    Ah, dilemmas, dilemmas. Great poem, your illustration of the big problem lots of people face couldn’t have been more accurate!

  60. On Magic:

    posted 9 months ago

    Very cynical and jaded, but it works. I like the style! =D

    I’m sorry if this is a true event, though.

  61. On Fairy Hats:

    posted 9 months ago

    Aww, too cute. I can easily imagine the little girl. =)

  62. On Live:

    posted 9 months ago

    Genius. <3

  63. On A dog's life:

    posted 9 months ago

    hilarious! I like seeing it from the dog’s perspective, I can totally imagine this scene. You really have to wonder how our canine friends think of us…haha.

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