The 13 Year-Old's posted comments

  1. On Unaware:

    posted 4 months ago

    Some grammatical errors were present, but I liked it.

  2. On Home:

    posted 4 months ago

    Yay Ficlets! #1!!

  3. On Rejected:

    posted 4 months ago

    lol. Owned.

  4. On Reversed Concentration:

    posted 4 months ago

    Nice, I like it. Very discriptive and tells a lot about the character of the person.

  5. On Yo mama Jokes Part 5:

    posted 4 months ago

    Yo mama so fat people jog around her for exercise

    I like that one the most.

  6. On Futures:

    posted 4 months ago

    Nice story. I enjoyed reading it. The only part I didn’t like was the part where you wrote,

    What am I good at? Well, let me think, Ms. Brunne. According to my mother, I’m good at styling hair. According to my father, I’m good at screwing things up. I guess that means I can either be a hairstylist or a screw up.

    “I don’t know,” I mumble, instead.

    I dont think the instead part is necessary because the reader already knows it’s and aside.

  7. On Ghosts:

    posted 10 months ago

    I dunno, just sequeling what the dude before me wrote.

  8. On Just an Idea that Spurred into a 12 Year Old:

    posted 11 months ago

    Thanks, oh and dont feel discriminated, Your cool enough and young ‘nuf to be in the club.

  9. On Just an Idea that Spurred into a 12 Year Old:

    posted 11 months ago

    Wow, this was my first ficlet and 139 people have looked at it and i have 4 1/2 stars!
    Awesome!

  10. On Report #8:

    posted 11 months ago

    I tried to edit it, and apparently that didn’t work. Thanks though, Jonas didn’t seem to happy with it, which i thought was a bit cruel because he spoke of my mistakes so well, but hey, thanks.

  11. On Report #7:

    posted 11 months ago

    I made a story earlier than this, copy and pasted it cause I thought it would make a good sequel.
    ~
    Good job!

  12. On Some Kind of Story I Suddenly wanted to write (Author of 'Just an Idea that Spurred into a Twelve Year Old):

    posted 11 months ago

    No, it is…. I must have been drunk when I wrote it… wait…....

  13. On Some Kind of Story I Suddenly wanted to write (Author of 'Just an Idea that Spurred into a Twelve Year Old):

    posted 11 months ago

    This story was complete crap…. I’m gunna have to change my Screen name…

  14. On No One Goes Out Alone:

    posted 11 months ago

    Remember to put quotes around speech
    (they look like this “blah blah blah”)

  15. On Halloween Spooks:

    posted 11 months ago

    Good job One timer. I liked how you portrayed the end, can’t wait to see what happens when the girl see’s he’s alive.

  16. On Haunted House (Halloween Special):

    posted 11 months ago

    Lol. Kermitgorf… Might have been me. So funny to watch the faces on the little kids when you take their candy, (i give it back though.)

  17. On Just an Idea that Spurred into a 12 Year Old:

    posted 11 months ago

    Thanks.
    Seems like Some of the cool writers are 12.

  18. On Haunted House (Halloween Special):

    posted 11 months ago

    It’s cool to write a sequel on it.

  19. On Haunted House (Halloween Special):

    posted 11 months ago

    Let me know how my story was.

  20. On *Ist it better to write in 1st or 3rd person?*:

    posted 11 months ago

    Thanks Dr. Lew.

    Third person omnificient? Man, I need to pay attention in english

  21. On How could we possibly run out?:

    posted 11 months ago

    Sentance structure.

    Don’t suddenly say something and spend a whole paragrapgh describing the scene.

    Describe it, then have a character talk.

  22. On The illuminist:

    posted 11 months ago

    Oh nvm. I see it

  23. On The illuminist:

    posted 11 months ago

    Where do you see ‘Redemption”?

  24. On The Tree of Hope:

    posted 11 months ago

    No idea. I’ll think of it while I’m going along.

  25. On *Ist it better to write in 1st or 3rd person?*:

    posted 11 months ago

    Cool beans Mask By The Moon.

  26. On Ancient Children:

    posted 11 months ago

    Not trying to drag you down, buddy. There’s no such thing as Litterally Correct. It’s all how you author chooses it to be.

    Awesome writing… (and i wish i could have changed that 3stars to a 4 )1/2

  27. On The illuminist:

    posted 11 months ago

    Thanks dude. I’m not really trying my best here. It’s just a nice little website to discuss wrighting tips and practicing grammer, so It’s just a nice place to have fun with. I’ll have to write something serious some time though and see what you guys think.

  28. On *Ist it better to write in 1st or 3rd person?*:

    posted 11 months ago

    Cool to see the young are taking over.

    I’ve never really tried that, I don’t like to skip around a bunch with the POV, but from taking 3rd person to 1st person… I’ll have to try that some time, thanks artistsrunwild.

  29. On *Ist it better to write in 1st or 3rd person?*:

    posted 11 months ago

    Yeah, good point man, I personally find that 3rd person feels better as it makes the book more broad. (plus it really fits good when you have your main character for it) but its hard to write with, ive come stumped in my books when i write in 3rd person.

    1st person is easier to write with, but it makes the book seem a bit less proffessional and your opions are limited to what you want other characters to feel.

  30. On The illuminist:

    posted 11 months ago

    Someone respond to my writing, its helping me with my writing, so if you please.

  31. On They Don't Come Out at Night:

    posted 11 months ago

    Why did you like to write you so much? Plz respond. (im only 12)

  32. On The illuminist:

    posted 11 months ago

    Well, It’s part of a book that im going to write, I just like to use Ficlet as a way to practice and such. But the being is an alien, to long to have to explain all of it, guess you’ll just have to read the book when it comes out. (and im only 12)

  33. On One rabbit to rule them all:

    posted 11 months ago

    Freaking awesome.

  34. On You tell me:

    posted 11 months ago

    first off, remember to click on mature but to help your writing, (correct me if im wrong because im only 12) i would say that It’s ok to just say “said” after or before speech its ok to spice it up a bit using words like demanded, but dont make it a hobby

  35. On Ancient Children:

    posted 11 months ago

    I guess that was pretty cool. But, correct me if im wrong (I am only 12), that you shouldn’t really use the words that estimate.
    example: (taken from your story)
    “The remaining couple hundred kids continued talking” I probably would have wrote, either, the rest of the kids (unproffesional) or, “The other kids.”
    Not trying to be mean, just trying to help. and as i said, correct me if im wrong.

    but all in all, i liked your story, i could see that as a novel. keep up the good work!

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