Ficlets | Ridcully Calvert's posted comments

On A Bit of the Old Ultra Violence(sentence challenge):

posted 14 days ago

Well done, Serb. That was very entertaining. And a bit of mindless violence is always welcome :-D

On Scars and Memories:

posted 14 days ago

I liked your poem
It made me think of childhood
I remembered things

On Lies On Trees:

posted 17 days ago

A very interesting idea, from a very striking photograph.

Well picked!

On A Certain Pattern:

posted 18 days ago

Very arbitrary, but entertaining nevertheless.

On Give Me Those Twenty Seconds Back:

posted 18 days ago

Goodness me, this little series just gets more entertaining by the episode.

Excellent description of the old lady’s humps :-D

On Two's A Crowd:

posted 24 days ago

Haha out loud for this one, and a definite loud giggle for BARomero’s contribution :-D

FIVE STARS from me too

On Parasitosis Dream [Weirdest Dream Challenge]:

posted 26 days ago

Haha, this must be a meme or something – because I have had a very similar dream.

On I Love Children (Diabolically Villainous Challenge):

posted 2 months ago

This reminds of a great poem called “The Lesson”

It’s too long to post here, but check http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/the-lesson/

for the full thing.

We had it as a poem to study in Grade 9, which was a few decades ago :-)

Oh, good times

LoA

On The Mask of the Jester [Villain Challenge]:

posted 2 months ago

Mmmm.. This clown is scary. Also seems quite determined

On Superhero Obituaries - Average Woman: "Not too Hot, Not too Cold, Just Right":

posted 2 months ago

Hilarious. Poor Emily Doe, what is she to do? Well, and her half-brother or sister, of course.

On Superhero Obituaries - Gay Superhero "The Eternal Flame":

posted 2 months ago

And Richard Gere! Brilliant.

On Superhero Obituaries - Gay Superhero "The Eternal Flame":

posted 2 months ago

LOL. This is too funny. You made me giggle like one of his conquests :-D

On Diabolically Villainous Challenge:

posted 2 months ago

I played. Sorry, I violated the rule on the mature thing a bit. My story is not mature, really, but it does have some unpleasant associations.

Very nice challenge, BTW

On Chat-room predator [Diabolically Villainous Challenge]:

posted 2 months ago

This is a bit of a play on an online character called bloodninja, who is a bit of a bastard. Google him if you want to know more.
Just know that he is a really horrible character.
Of course, he does not really exist. Bloodninja ripped off a bunch of chats done by the [sarcasm]delightful[/sarcasm] characters over at fugly.com.

Oh yes, that link and what you will find should you google bloodninja is why this post is marked as mature

On Banking:

posted 2 months ago

It’s a nice narrative, full of suspense, but it feels a bit rushed to me.

Maybe something that should be across two ficlets?

On About as Thinly Concealed as Katy Perry's Lesbianism:

posted 2 months ago

OK Stovo, I have added a sequel. I can’t seem to be as imaginative as you on titles, but I promise to try as hard as I can :-D

On 200 Ficlets....Maybe a Soundtrack Challenge!!!:

posted 2 months ago

This is a tough one, but looks like fun. I suppose that it is like poetry in a way, except that you are trying to express yourself with someone else’s words – which is never easy.

Props for one that has made me think. If I can cook one up, I might come back and sequel :-D

On How Far We've Come {Life Soundtrack Challenge}:

posted 2 months ago

I liked the idea of angelic voices. I think that there were voices when I was born, but I would like to imagine that they were robots or something, and not the doctor saying “Gawd! look at this ugly child! Who is going to tell the mother?” :-D

On My Neverland Found [Make Someone's Day Challenge Redux]:

posted 2 months ago

I like the whimsical tone of all three ficlets.
And the “come, child” seems natural to me, and adds a funny extra, almost sinister dimension to it.

On My Neverland Revisted (Make Someone's Day Challenge- Six Feet Under The Stars Sequel):

posted 2 months ago

A great sequel. Now to see where THX took it…

On The Baroness's Request:

posted 2 months ago

I really enjoyed the hauteur thar you put into the baroness’ voice

Most entertaining
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On Ode to the common cold:

posted 2 months ago

@John – Yup, me and the whole family have all got a cold at the moment. I thought that I would try and express my views on it

On 'Til Kingdom Come:

posted 2 months ago

Like all of your other work, this immediately immerses you in a world that is perhaps alien, but beautifully realised.

Your opening paragraph is gold

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On Make Someone's Day Challenge:

posted 2 months ago

That is a really cool idea for a challenge, John. I can see in all of your work that you put a lot of effort into it, and it shows!

You are fast becoming a pillar of this virtual community.

On About as Thinly Concealed as Katy Perry's Lesbianism:

posted 2 months ago

And I really like the animal names, nice touch

On About as Thinly Concealed as Katy Perry's Lesbianism:

posted 2 months ago

Well done, Stovo. In addition to keeping the suspense going nicely, and sketching the loss of a team member very well, you had me headed off to Wikipedia to find out who on earth Katy Perry is!

On Experimental Ficlet No.25:

posted 2 months ago

That is really cool, TBS. Currently my favourite in the entire chain.

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On The Raveners Are Coming! The Raveners Are Coming!:

posted 2 months ago

I sequelled a view from the other side :-D

On The Raveners Are Coming! The Raveners Are Coming!:

posted 2 months ago

I have sequelled a view from the other camp :-D

On The Raveners Are Coming! The Raveners Are Coming!:

posted 3 months ago

That’s really cool Stovo. My first thought about the raveners was also some sort of ultra elite black ops team or something, so we are definintely on the same page here.

On Courtroom drama {Great Supporting Character Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

Now there is a scene that I for one would rather not witness :-)

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On Welcome to Life Challenge:

posted 3 months ago

This is quite the challenge. It would be easy to trot out some email forward cheap sentimentality, but I will sit and think and see if I can come up with something genuine.

No guarantees, though :)

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On The Adventures of P.T. Agonist and...Enemies?:

posted 3 months ago

Hehe, I like the metamorphosis as well. It’s a pity, though, because I liked the thought of special Ed blundering about and spoiling things.
Sidebar: Get ahold of a copy of the song “Special” by a comedian called Stephen Lynch – really funny stuff, and the character described makes me thing of Special Ed here, pre-cure, of course.
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On New Friends for Adventure:

posted 3 months ago

This one made me smile. It keeps the wacky feeling established by Fyora

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On Ode to the cathode ray tube:

posted 3 months ago

I do not think that I could ever be a good poet, mostly because I don’t take myself seriously enough

So here is something arbitrary that spawned out of a book I am reading at the moment. Not directly, but through the idea of sub light space travel.

Which, of course, we have been doing for at least a century

On Experimental Ficlet No. 14:

posted 3 months ago

Hmmmm, that is interesting…

On Damned if you do, and double damned if you don't:

posted 3 months ago

@john – I have taken the reference out completely, as it did not really fit.
As to the raveners – I have some ideas, but thought that I see what someone else would come up with :-)

On Dark League [League of Awesomeness 2075 Or Beyond Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

I really liked the slo-mo which then sped up with the blow.

It sort of reminded me of that scene in Galdiator where they are standing in the dark corridor, and then the door opens and things get really heavy…

Nice job, but sorry, I won’t join the Dark League – they look like a bunch of sissie s

LoA 4evah!

On Experimental Ficlet No 11:

posted 3 months ago

Thanks MBTM.

Likes his crack, yoda does…

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On The Fall of Wal-Mart (LoA 2075+ Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

I found this very enthralling, Stovo.
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But now where is ai gohing to baai ma kookys? Oh noes!

On Hostage Situation:

posted 3 months ago

I really enjoyed this one, Stovo. So much that I have tacked my own sequel on at the end of John’s.
Hope that I didn’t spoil your plans for Griggs :-D
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On Negotiate My Arse:

posted 3 months ago

I liked the milieu so much that I have added a sequel.

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On Negotiate My Arse:

posted 3 months ago

Well done, I enjoyed this as much as the previous one by Stovo.

On Experimental Ficlet No. 1:

posted 3 months ago

This is fun Stovo. My one was number eleven.

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On Petition To Have John Perkins Legally Declared Awesome. Sign It Or Your Cat Will Get Fleas.:

posted 3 months ago

I always find myself liking the stuff that John writes, and some of his comments have had me in hysterics.

So I definitely second your motion.

Arbitrating some awesomeness in John’s general direction

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[Ridcully Calvert: Supreme Vice Arbiter of Awesomeness]

On Love and Loss (Unexpected Twist challenge):

posted 3 months ago

This is a really good entry.

Gives new meaning to the phrase “Twisted Sister”

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On Ma Meeshka Mow Skwoz [Sing-Song Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

The song did not really mean much to me, but I liked the picture that you painted of the insane asylum – it definitely has that institutional feel. In my mind’s eye I could see the yucky green walls.

Well done.

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On Marauder Metallurgy:

posted 3 months ago

Now that is quite chilling – what could they mean by “processed”?
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On Marauders' Roundup:

posted 3 months ago

Ah, now it gets interesting. I wonder what they use for fuel? [nod, wink]

On Marauder of the Heart:

posted 3 months ago

Oh, I just twigged that our hero is female. Slow on the uptake, me :-D

SO that makes the Mata Hari reference a bit earlier more sensible as well.

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On Marauder's Mission:

posted 3 months ago

Haha, just his type. Now how is our hero going to handle that?

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On Marauder Boot Camp:

posted 3 months ago

I like the idea of a mother robot – or did he used to be human and change to a robot?

Anyway, a fun series – I saw your latest installment way on the other end, worked my way back and am now reading through them sequentially.

On The Willy Wonka Challenge:

posted 3 months ago

Wow, that is quite the challenge. Like the others here, I will have to submit it to my rumination queue, to see if anything pops up.

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On Sing-Song Challenge!:

posted 3 months ago

Nice idea for a challenge.

I have added my own creation.

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On After the Before he Cheats (Sing-Song Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Haha, I thought it was the other Carrie – you know, the one soaked in blood at the prom.

But Carrie Underwood is just as entertaining, if not quite as bloody.

Nice one!
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On The Wisdom Of A Child (Unconventional Zen Master Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Great one, TBS. I enjoyed the different religions bickering.

On Absence of Memory (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

That was quite a cool twist. I like the sisterly kiss and all.

On Discovery and Confession or Vice Versa {Unexpected Twist Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

Your story is well written, well formatted and the dialogue reads well.

But the twist confuses me a bit: How does the chief know that agent #0 is a double agent?

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On Blaze of Glory (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Ok, that’s cool. Somehow I thought that he was crying for them cos they did not make it.

On The Ballad of Limpy McPhanger [Epic Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Wow THX, you hit the spot with this one. The moral is an oft repeated one in folk tales, but you told it very well.

And the weird name somehow gives it an appeal. To me it rhymes with danger :-)

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On The Ballad of Limpy McPhanger [Epic Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Wow THX, you hit the spot with this one. The moral is an oft repeated one in folk tales, but you told it very well.

And the weird name somehow gives it an appeal. To me it rhymes with danger :-)

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On Heaven Without Hamburgers(An Epic Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Hehe, that was great. Very Poe-like, somehow I can hear him squawking “Nervermore” from downstairs

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On Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes:

posted 3 months ago

Wow Stovo, you really have a talent. “peeled him like an orange, revealing the bruised and ugly fruit underneath”

That juxtaposition of sweet, sunny orange actually being bruised fruit works exceptionally well.

Lovely, poetic stuff – and packed into such a small volume, too!

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On What I Learned That Summer.:

posted 3 months ago

Really nice one, I enjoyed it.

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On Like a Box Of Chocolates (unexpected twist challenge):

posted 3 months ago

OMG, I am laughing out load on this one.

Those chicks man, you just can’t trust them. What are they going to try and take over next?

On My boyfriend caught me...:

posted 3 months ago

Hehe, I enjoyed the twist in the end. My mind was somewhere else entirely (In the gutter, maybe :-D )

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On Blaze of Glory (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

I loved the ficlet. But why was dad crying, did the girls not survive?

@TMJY – Which people were stationed in Canada during the Vietnam war? Was your dad catching draft dodging hippies?

On Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

OK, now that was a very good read – I loved the progression of colour, the twist in each ficlet and this extra meta-twist at the end.

Really a superb entry into the challenge.

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On Locked Out:

posted 3 months ago

I liked this one. Nice understated humorous twist. And the dialogue was definitely from the top drawer, I found it flowed very smoothly and believably

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On The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

I liked the idea. I thought that the telling of it was a bit rough, you might want to change the last paragraph to be a bit more obvious.

It looks like you got stuck on that 1024 char limit.

Well done, nevertheless.

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On Summertime Memories (unexpected twist challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Umm, I meant “The prize for the most inane yet hilarious comment goes to”

I’m not hung over right now, promise!

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On Summertime Memories (unexpected twist challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Great entry, I had a good giggle at it.

I once opened the door hung-over, bleary eyed and shirtless to a little family of Jehova’s witnesses. That was a trip, they flung a pamphlet at me and got out of there :-D

T the prize for the most inane yet hilarious goes to Trifalmadorian_Mighty-Joe Young.

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On Ring {John's Unexpected Twist Challenge}:

posted 3 months ago

Really cool twist. That was most unexpected.

[still giggling]

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On Bad Day(Unexpected Twist Challenge):

posted 3 months ago

Wow, that is an amazingly gross twist. Completely unexpected, and so well done!

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On Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

That is really cool. Sort of has a “Throw momma from the train” kind of feeling, but only after you’ve read the whole thing. Well done!

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On Unexpected Twist Challenge [Results Posted]:

posted 3 months ago

Really cool challenge John.

I enjoyed this one. My entry was influenced by my [ahem] recent experiences.

LOL and LOA!

On Circling the Prey:

posted 3 months ago

Wow, that is some very cool psychedelic story telling.

I like…

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On The long hunt [Supporting characters challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

@pyro – Thanks! I just learned something knew. I thought that deer meant any sort of antelope.

O well, I guess that I do have the excuse that english is my second language :-D

On Instructions Not Included:

posted 3 months ago

Sequel done

On Hell of an Apartment:

posted 3 months ago

This is a really cool idea. I just read it in reverse from J_P’s sequel at the end, and it was great from the start. Excellent little series!

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On Hell of an Idea:

posted 3 months ago

Very funny story. I like the image of the demon impatiently tapping its middle horn – that was a nice touch

On Hell of a Lease:

posted 3 months ago

I really enjoyed the demon reaching into a puff of smoke. Good entry! Now I am going to have to go and read the prequel to see what is happening here.

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On A Tale of Two Sisters [Great Supporting Character(s) Challenge]:

posted 3 months ago

Interesting entry. I like the image of “predictable ripple of heads turning”

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On Instructions Not Included:

posted 3 months ago

Hehe. Good one, John. It gave me a chuckle to have poor Phil struggle to control his new-found nanobots.

I’ll perculate some ideas for a day or so and see what turns up for a sequel

On HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered:

posted 3 months ago

A very nice post-mortem for the death scene in the previous one.

I like the guilt in the shower, I found it very believable.

Another good entry, I look forward to the next instalment

On HIS Screams Will Shake the Heavens:

posted 3 months ago

The idea of the evil god as a corporeal entity is a bit disturbing. Imagine it there hiding in the hotel room during the day, or something.
Again, a superb entry.

On The goon gets on my nerves:

posted 3 months ago

Thanks John. He doesn’t have to die, you know. Its up to you what he does with him, seeing as it is your instalment up next :-D

On HIS Hunger is Unceasing:

posted 3 months ago

Very strong, gripping images.

“This wouldn’t take long… it never did. They would recognize him and that was it. It made him irresistible.”

That is some fantastic, taught, tense writing. Well done!

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On HIS Pain a Song Forever:

posted 3 months ago

Very cool second installment.

On HIS Songs of Suffering:

posted 3 months ago

Hmmm.. I really like this start, a really awesome place to go from.

I like dark and disturbing (in my fiction, not my life :-D ) so I will definitely be keeping tabs on this one.

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On The goon gets on my nerves:

posted 3 months ago

Aaw crap, I thought that they were two different places :-(

Gonna try to unpublish this one, then do another along the same lines.

On Into Hiding:

posted 4 months ago

I added a sequel. A bit uninspiring in itself, but I hope I left you something interesting to build on in the next chapter :-D

On Why I Eat Brains:

posted 4 months ago

Nice twist on the zombie theme. Interesting to have the zombie yearn for its original self.

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On No More Heroes:

posted 4 months ago

This was really superb. The somber tone of voice set against the complete idocy of the described heroes and villains had me in stitches.

Oh yes, and the possum being left for dead was a great idea.

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On Backhand Fury: uselessness' PRECISE MANEUVERS Challenge:

posted 4 months ago

Wow THX, your powers of description are truly awesome. This is a great piece of ficleteering.

@John – Your capacity for off the wall and tasteless humour continues to supply me with giggles :-D

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On Zombie Revolution:

posted 4 months ago

The zombie Karl Marx – what a picture!

I thought that this was a very good zombie story, a bit whimsical and very imaginative

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On Into Hiding:

posted 4 months ago

I like this, John. Now that Jen is gone I am actually quite glad, maybe she was a bit too much of a complication and split the narrative a bit.

Now we can focus on our hero, and his mission

On Unexplained feelings of guilt:

posted 4 months ago

I am going to leave this one right here for now. Anyone that is interested, please sequel…

What did our protagonist do?

On Page 8:

posted 4 months ago

I just had to chime in and add page 12…

On Ask the Wonderball:

posted 4 months ago

I thought that this was very good. And congrats on being featured!

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On Page 16:

posted 4 months ago

This looked like so much fun that I had to join in

On Genius Unbounded: Out-of-Order Challenge:

posted 4 months ago

Woof, that is a heavy one. I liked it :-D

On Never Trust A Big Butt And A Smile:

posted 4 months ago

Phew, I finally managed to think of and implement a sequel. Hope that it is not too out there :-D

On The old mime [make me laugh challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

Now you reallty have me chuckling – I saw that episode of A_C, and comparing Mikey to a 5 year old is dead-on

Hehehe (still chuckling)...

On Trying to sneak it in [Challenge by Numbers]:

posted 4 months ago

Let’s hope the poor guy is not on E – that is supposed to make you thirsty enough to drink 18 bottles of water :-D

I also like how you told us that it was an 18 wheeler by the number that passed the curb, and not outright.

All in all very pleasant story, if a bit whimsical

On Magical Story Of Three (THX's Number Challenge):

posted 4 months ago

Interesting item. I was once in a triumvirate of friends and it ended very badly for me, so I don’t really like groups of three.

I tend to have large amorphous groups of friends that cross-pollinate, or not :-D

On It Doesn't Help if there are Airplanes:

posted 4 months ago

Very otherworldy and interesting – It did not make me laugh (although the moat got a smile :-D ) but instead it made me start thinking of sequels…

On Never Trust A Big Butt And A Smile:

posted 4 months ago

Nice one John. I really enjoyed the last three episodes.
Way to go with the action parts, they are really good!
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On The Comprehensive (Compressed) Guide to Middle School Life, No. 1: Introduction:

posted 4 months ago

And now I had to be reminded of my onion smell. Thanks a lot :-)

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On True Story:

posted 4 months ago

Love those radioactive gerbil turds, that is quite an image.

On I'm Dealing With Morons:

posted 4 months ago

I like! Echoing THX, you have done a really good job here of combining the narrative flow with good details from previous episodes – that bit about the login fits in with the action perfectly.

On Caught!:

posted 4 months ago

Hmmmm… I am inclined to agree John. I have rewritten the paragraphs concerned, hopefully they flow better now.

On The old mime [make me laugh challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

This is my favourite of these stories thus far – the mixture of pathos and humour was superb

On Thief in The Night [make me laugh challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

I liked the detail of the wet and itchy ski mask. The little discomforts always stick.

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On Adrenaline Junkies:

posted 4 months ago

The image of bloody and mangled yet smiling old folks stumbling out of a race car definitely had me chuckling. Nice one!

LoA

On Beta Testing:

posted 4 months ago

I finally got around to sequelling at the far end, hope it is not too far off the wall.

On Stick the Landing:

posted 4 months ago

I have finally written a sequel, hope you like it :-D

On The Man Behind The Window:

posted 4 months ago

This is very good. It reminds me of a song by an Afrikaans South African artist that has been covered by almost every other Afrikaans artist, called “Lisa’s piano”, and deals with the same issue – hearing music tinkling out and being entranced by it.

I agree with the other commentators, the imagery is just beautiful

On I Believe In Yesterday:

posted 4 months ago

This is really excellent. It is the first time that I have encountered idea of a body snatcher falling in love with its host, and very well told. Just wow!

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On Stick the Landing:

posted 4 months ago

Very nice, Steve. I like the understated humor, the idea that working for a super villain comany will expose you to violence at some point, and the Obliterator Ray is great.

I should have a sequel ready by tomorrow some time, I need to have a bit of a think first as to what is going to happen on the way to the volcano base, or in it.

On Beta Testing:

posted 4 months ago

Very nice entry, keeps the action moving nicely

On Bed Time Story [Make Me Laugh Challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

Haha, that gave me a chuckle. Nicely put together, and I think everyone has had that feeling of complete numb exhaustion.

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On No More Tequila For Me:

posted 4 months ago

I just found this, and really enjoyed it. What a vivid picture you paint!

I really like how the banging into things gets explained by a combination of still being drunk and being in someone else’s apartment

On Up to Spec:

posted 4 months ago

Very nice. Now I am going to have to rack my brain for a suitable follow up – should have something by tomorrow. Good night, all :-D

On Checking Out the Competition:

posted 4 months ago

I quite like this – it is a nice opportunity for our protagonist to take charge, so lets see where it goes…

On Random Answers (Random Quiz):

posted 4 months ago

Another Tuba player. Congrats! We are a rare breed :)

(Mostly because of the size of lungs required to power that big brass behemoth)

On Answers to Random Quiz:

posted 4 months ago

Eating ants and paper! That gave me a good giggle :-)

On NEW QUIZ!!!:

posted 4 months ago

Yup, agree with TBS, I could not resist either. Nice questions :-)

On Icon Clash (Make Me Laugh Challenge):

posted 4 months ago

It definitely gave me a chuckle. Very cool concept. Was someone maybe watching BG on the computer and then the screensaver came on?

On Serious Misgivings [Make Me Laugh Challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

A great concept, and very well executed. It certainly had me laughing.

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On Incentives:

posted 4 months ago

Oh yes, and such an awesome choice of car – a LeSabre fits perfectly

On Incentives:

posted 4 months ago

I really liked this one. A nice natural close to the family angle, and a nice lead-in for the action to come…

On It Wasn't Funny [Make Me Laugh Challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

A really great entry, it certainly made me laugh out loud.

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On The Hardest Part II:

posted 4 months ago

Very nicely done.

It feels just right to move Angela and Nick to the in-laws for now, maybe to appear later?

Superb entries, both of them.

On The Hardest Part:

posted 4 months ago

A very well done tense narrative. I loved it!

On A Very Star Wars Wedding Reception:

posted 4 months ago

A great ending to a very entertaining series.

Well done!

On Star Wars: Oil and Cigars:

posted 4 months ago

Hehe, a fun start to the wrap-up of the story

Typical of Borat not to know that he was evil, well placed, that.

On Star Wars: The Return of the Leia:

posted 4 months ago

Crazy and zany – very entertaining. Indy and Han together is a great idea.

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On Confessions:

posted 4 months ago

Great concept, and your dialogue is superb.

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On He's Gone:

posted 4 months ago

Very good sequel to the original. It seems to keep the same mood, and develops teh story line nicely. Well done!

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On Threats and Delegates:

posted 4 months ago

Great addition, and it adds lots more potential for other developments on the home front.

The bit about Angela’s kidnapping four years ago is genius

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On Star Wars: An HBO Commercial Break:

posted 4 months ago

OMG, that is the funniest side-bar ever. Especially because Entourage is, like, my favourite show!

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On Star Wars: Battle To End All Wars (Part One):

posted 4 months ago

Wonderful detail! I love the idea of “The Beguiler”. Really top-notch stuff.

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On Venting [Realization Challenge]:

posted 4 months ago

This is a cute story, it gave me a chuckle.

Nicely done

LoA

On Make Me Laugh Challenge:

posted 4 months ago

Nice idea for a challenge. I also find that intentionally being funny is sometimes much harder than it coming spontaneously.

But I suppose that is the writer’s eternal challenge: Selling something that you might not be feeling at that point.

Pontification over, I have added a stand-up routine entry.

On Star Wars: Counseling Couch:

posted 4 months ago

Is she the shrink from the Supranos? Seems to have the same tone… Most entertaining :-)

On Star Wars: Let's Get Ready To Rumble!:

posted 4 months ago

Haha, I LOL’ed at this one.

So if Newman is Lucifer, does that mean that Jerry Seinfeld is Jesus?

On Star Wars: Holy Flying Jehovah, Batman!:

posted 4 months ago

Great action, and very entertainingly packaged. Most awesome!

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On Please Parody Challenge!:

posted 4 months ago

Hehe, nice idea. I added a brief entry for “Time is on your side”, about the frog prince :-D

On Star Wars: A Heart To Heart:

posted 4 months ago

A more serious entry, but with the tone of subdued hilarity still in there.

I have added a sequel, which may be a bit too arbitrary, so use it, don’t use it :-D

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On Sending A Message:

posted 4 months ago

Nice one. I really like the sense of menace that you have added very neatly, both externally and internally to our character. Great work!

On Star Wars: A Head Start:

posted 4 months ago

Well spotted, THX. I missed that on the first read. I would love to sequel this, but unfortunately it is now bed time for me. I really look forward to seeing where this story is in about 24 hours or so :-D

On Stars Wars: Fully Loaded:

posted 4 months ago

I agree with THX. They just keep on improving

On Star Wars: A Powerful Obsession:

posted 4 months ago

I am very impressed that you are able to keep the humorous momentum, and also build in some tension.

Most impressive

LoA

On Star Wars: Dates and Dominos:

posted 4 months ago

“her playing it loose” – what a line.

I am really enjoying this series

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On Paying The Price:

posted 4 months ago

Love it! A great continuation on the story.

On The Same Old Life:

posted 4 months ago

Ooh, I liked this. Nice addition to the story line.

On No More Lies:

posted 5 months ago

Ooh, good start to a story. This is just aching for a prequel or a sequel.

On temp. job:

posted 5 months ago

Very noir – I liked it!

On Star Wars: Aboard The Millennium Falcon:

posted 5 months ago

OK, I just had to sequel this. It is done…

On Star Wars: Aboard The Millennium Falcon:

posted 5 months ago

Absolutely awesome! Jesus supplying support, Yoda having the booze speak for him, it’s all happening here!

LoA

On Star Wars: A New Pilot:

posted 5 months ago

A super entertaining series, I can’t wait to see where it ends up

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On Alien:

posted 5 months ago

A very entertaining ficlet, with a solid gold last line.

What happens next?

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On What's The Big Idea?:

posted 5 months ago

I liked it. Fun and light

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On Order Now:

posted 5 months ago

Great sequel. I liked it.

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On The Remarkable Yo-Yo:

posted 5 months ago

I really liked this. Very otherworldly

On Off to the Body Bank:

posted 5 months ago

Nice one. I like how the accident becomes both less and more important at the same time in the final paragraph.

On Out of the Ashes:

posted 5 months ago

An intriguing start. I wonder who They are?

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On Twilight Challange(140) {CLICK THE BUTTON!!! DOOO ITTTT!!!!}:

posted 5 months ago

I have no clue about the books, but I have added my entry into the challenge. I turned it into a bit of a pun :-D

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On Daemonic Device [BARomero's nameless challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Ding ding, we have a winner!

IT is indeed a lawnmower. An electric one, hence the smell of ozone :-D

On Daemonic Device [BARomero's nameless challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Hehe. Close Melia, but no cigar. You are on the right track, though

On Daemonic Device [BARomero's nameless challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Thanks Melia.

You might as well guess in the comments, then everyone can join in the fun

On Page 16:

posted 5 months ago

Great writing, and I like the idea of writing a series of ficlets like those choose your own adventure books.

I wonder if whoever writes pages 22 and 23 will remember the choices on offer here?

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On What is the Challenge?:

posted 5 months ago

Nice idea. I have also had a try at describing something.

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On He's Coming With Me:

posted 5 months ago

Very interesting series – just read it from the font, and very enjoyable.

I wonder who the boy actually is? You keep on surprising, so I am sure that it will not be the obvious choice.

LoA

On Dr. Stanley's Dixie Chopper:

posted 5 months ago

Great entry! Is the boy in the background in the photo holding up a beer?

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On Bye, Bye Love:

posted 5 months ago

Very fun series.

And I love the tag. I am going to have to come up with a ficlet now that I can also tag with “homosexual overtones”

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On Eyes Raised, Expectations Lowered:

posted 5 months ago

Great ficlet. A wonderful comment on modern society – Ray Kroc sure got around the world fast!

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On The Kite and the Sunken City:

posted 5 months ago

Wow – you took a picture quite far. What a flight of imagination – a sunken city and all!

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On Don't Get Defensive Challenge Winners [Wow, what a lame, unimaginative title]:

posted 5 months ago

Yay! Thanks THX. I am happy that you liked my contribution.

It was a great challenge, and lots of fun to write.

LoA

On Trade Secrets:

posted 5 months ago

I really liked this. You have opened up a very interesting opportunity for future ficlets…

On The sacrificial victim:

posted 5 months ago

Well spotted Tarmaie, I fixed it.

On It Was Completely Our Fault (One More Word Challenge):

posted 5 months ago

Great entry! This one really made me LOL. Imagine a world without clowns… how sad ;-D

On Electric Triangles In Conversation (One More Word Challenge):

posted 5 months ago

Hehe, the idea made me chuckle.

On Big Trouble, Big Lies [One More Word Challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Nicely done. I found the dialog between brother and sister very convincing.

On How to Irritate Your Wife [One More Word Writing Challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Really good entry – I liked the twist ending.

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On One More Word Writing Challenge:

posted 5 months ago

I like the idea of this challenge.

I have cast my ember in the fire, but it came out very dark. So dark, in fact, that I have had to mark it as mature.

Oh well, comme ci, comme ca

On Mrs. Robinson's Turn:

posted 5 months ago

This does a very good job of fleshing out the caricature fom KG’s story and engendering sympathy for her. very good!

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On Color perception is a matter of geography:

posted 5 months ago

I liked this. Short yet entertaining. I got here through the Kevin tag – is that a pic of him by any chance ? :-)

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On PAY NO ATTENTION TO THE FICLETEER BEHIND THE CURTAIN!!! (Flute Faerie's Nice Things Challenge):

posted 5 months ago

I found your entry well presented and fun. I wonder, though, was R_M’s medal a purple heart ? :-D

LoA

On So Many to Pick From! (Flute Faerie's Niceness Challenge):

posted 5 months ago

Your entry stood out in this challenge, because of the nice formatting!

A minor thing, but presentation does make a difference. Nice going!

THX – was that pun intentional? (5 points if it was :-D )
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On Trying to be NICE! [flute faerie's Comment Challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

blush Thanks THX!

On Computer Tech with Paranoid Personality Disorder (PPD) [The Don't Get Defensive Challenge]:

posted 5 months ago

Very nice entry. It could be fun to sequel as well…

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On Stupid Smile:

posted 5 months ago

Poetry is not really my bag (funny how there are never enough aliens in it :-D )

But I felt the emotion in this one. Well done!

LoA

On Tyler - Mind-Bottling Powerths!:

posted 5 months ago

I like the bit of rage. Is the power affecting his mind, maybe?

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On Inhuman:

posted 5 months ago

Cool. I would most likely have had one of those plasmid men grow out of his chest, but that would have sent the story down a completely different track.

Nice way to keep the action moving and on track

On Tyler -- Chest Pains:

posted 5 months ago

This is very nice. I am reading from the front, so I wonder what is on his chest?

On Tyler -- Magazine Pages:

posted 5 months ago

Very well done. My favourite bit is the cubicle having a “general sense of use” I find the image of the little cubicle getting a dist smear here, a food stain there to gain some character from many nights of hunkered down living to be very powerful.

LoA

On Go Time:

posted 5 months ago

I had given it five stars, but it did not come through. Hmmmm… Let’s try again

On Go Time:

posted 5 months ago

This did not really make sense on its own, but once I read the prequel it all came together very well. I wonder what is going to happen next?

On "It's Right Here." (Don't Get Defensive Challenge):

posted 5 months ago

I like the way this seems to plunge you right into the action, and builds suspense all of the way through.
LoA

On Into the Harem, Pt. 4:

posted 6 months ago

Hmmm… A very dark and well written story.

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On KETCHUP ATTACKING (a flower named jacoby):

posted 6 months ago

Hmmm… a bit too bizarre for my tastes. I like that you managed to work Rod Stewart into it, though :-)

On Zoulag grabs a hold:

posted 6 months ago

OK, I have posted a new version of the story. I think this one is more interesting than my last attempt

On Putting Things Off in Mirror Land [Elsha's Mirror Challenge]:

posted 6 months ago

I like this ficlet, the writing is ismple yet powerful. Elisha did say that she wanted sequels, and I can already think of one or two things that the box could be for…hmmm, I might just come back to this one

On Condom Conundrum:

posted 6 months ago

Great story. I think that any man that has ever gone to buy a box of connies can definitely empathise with our protagonist. What was the inspiration for this one?

On Zoulag grabs a hold:

posted 6 months ago

Hmmmm.. I tend to agree with you BARomero – the sparkle has left. I am going to give it some though and then do a rewrite, and shake things up a bit

On The Oldest Profession (The Ronco Genre Blender Challenge):

posted 6 months ago

Now that was really excellent. A good challenge idea, and taken to the next level by a very good piece of writing.

Wonderful!

LoA

On We're Going to Need a Bigger Axe:

posted 6 months ago

I enjoyed that. It seems zombies are popping up all over the show. Is that a portent of some sort?

Nice story

LoA

On Doomed Montague:

posted 6 months ago

I am busy with a sequel for this, and from some dark place the following opening paragraph bubbled up:

Bella comes walking out hesitantly, her hairy feet brushing fragments of mortar left over from previous engagements in the corridor. She moves quite daintily for a 7-foot mountain gorilla.

I have junked it, but thought that you guys might appreciate the insight into my creative process ;-)

On Doomed Montague:

posted 6 months ago

Loved it, and looking forward to writing another sequel. What fun!

LoA

On Inside the house:

posted 6 months ago

Hehe, I LOLed at that comment CMTKOF. No they don’t carry flame throwers down here, although I think that they might have in the 80’s :-)

On She Just Hates Busses:

posted 6 months ago

I enjoyed that. I thought that you captured that fear of germs precisely. Who hasn’t had an occasion where a fluey person used the tap at the sink before you, or someone sneezes down the back of your neck, and you just want to squirm and scream?

Well done!

On The Don't Get Defensive Challenge:

posted 6 months ago

My goodness, 3000 comments sure beats my current count of 106 :-D

Congrats, and look out for my sequel – I have an idea that could be fun

On And then it gets really strange (jokes!):

posted 6 months ago

I am just kidding around with this version of the story :-D

I am going to re-post it with a proper ending.

On Intelligently Undead:

posted 6 months ago

I really enjoyed this ficlet, and then the sequel started getting out of hand… oh noes!

On The Time Capsule (2):

posted 6 months ago

I loved the names, Darth Kirk – wonderful

On Intelligently Undead:

posted 6 months ago

Loved it, wonderful idea and could be a fun start to a whole series.

On (Alternate Movie Ending) Challenge:

posted 6 months ago

Ooh, great idea. I will definitely wade in in a few hour’s time when my worday is done :-)

On [Challenge] Baby Names:

posted 6 months ago

Baromero – She was 3 kg and 49 cm at birth. That is 6.6 lbs and 19.3 inches for our non-metric friends.

On Cheering Up the New Girl:

posted 6 months ago

Ooh – I have not read the prequel yet but this looks interesting…

On Salvation or Something Else:

posted 6 months ago

I like the idea of the gun seeking out our protagonist – most interesting. I wonder whether it will start talking to him a la Tolkien?

LoA

On A Choice Presented:

posted 6 months ago

definitely an intriguing series.

On The Cat in the Pack:

posted 6 months ago

I could not help myself, this story is such fun that I have added a sequel to this one

On [Challenge] Baby Names:

posted 6 months ago

Oh yes, in case you are interested, she is a beautiful healthy little girl and mom and baby are doing well.

On [Challenge] Baby Names:

posted 6 months ago

Thanks everyone. The challenge is over now, as Isabella Anne Calvert was born at 07:53 GMT this morning, 2 April

Special mention goes to Bartimaeus with “Lyla”, BARomero with “A Comic Shop Owner Expecting His First Child…” and emma jo_234 with “Abigail, Her Father’s Joy”. 5 Calvert points to each of you

My pick for the win is Pickle by Ana Cristina – you get 10 Calvert points

Thanks everyone, that was great!

Also, if you still want to contribute, go right ahead, this is Ficlets after all.

On On the brink of death:

posted 6 months ago

I hope that you don’t mind me joining in, I have posted a sequel

On Off to Mars... again:

posted 6 months ago

Ooh an interesting twist – they sure are going to get into trouble for this one!

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On Complicated:

posted 6 months ago

I love the sci-fi noir feel of it, the narration is very entertaining

On Hope?:

posted 6 months ago

Awesome entry, I love the Russian bits, extremely well done

On The Arvians Attack:

posted 6 months ago

Love it – this view of the enemy makes the story achieve a higher level of tension immediately.
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On Sergeant Fritz Amers:

posted 6 months ago

A good story – I have just zipped through the last 4 ficlets at high speed. Very gripping

On Lyla :

posted 6 months ago

That is a great entry into the challenge. Thanks a lot for both the good writing and an interesting name contender.

LoA

On Abigail, Her Father's Joy:

posted 6 months ago

Wow, that is a very mature and beautiful piece of writing for your, or in fact for any age.

Nice one, and a good name. Thanks!

On Skye's the limit:

posted 6 mont