Ficlets

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On Car Snob [Secret Agent Challenge]:

posted 24 days ago

To paraphrase something I once read from Sean Connery in an interview: “I hated that James Bond fellow; always wanted to kill him.” :)

On Lost in the Woods:

posted 4 months ago

Very nice. I like this better than your last travel-oriented ficlet. It has more definition, less equivocation. I wonder at this person’s “friends” though… what a bunch of jerks! They’re lucky it’s “just” fog and not some unseasonably horrible blizzard like what hit those poor hikers on Mount Rainier the other day. :(

On The Cryptic, Unpredictable Wonderball:

posted 4 months ago

Hmm. This is the kind of silly thing people love to do in horror movies. “No, I’ll be all right.” Then a shadow moves and everything is not all right. I’ve always liked the sound of, “No, I’ll be all right, but let me borrow your pistol.”

On The Wonderball's Message:

posted 4 months ago

Until now I had been reading through these stories with pleasant interest; now I got a chill.

On Ask the Wonderball:

posted 4 months ago

Heh. So much for the answers being numbers. Don’t you hate it when your magic toys suddenly stop following the rules told you by the nice Chinese gentleman who sold them to you? :)

On One Princess in Amber:

posted 4 months ago

I guess the title didn’t give enough of a hint, or not enough people read Roger Zelazny anymore. See his Amber Chronicles for information about the princes and princesses of Amber, who are eternally youthful and extraordinarily difficult to kill even when you’re trying very hard.

On Networks Without Tongue:

posted 4 months ago

Quite enjoyable! I had a bit of trouble with the names because they’re so similar. Like JMSquire and THX 04777 I liked the tongue line, but I also laughed at, “Danny, she’s a cartoon.”

On Footprints 2: The Quickening:

posted 4 months ago

My sequel to the well-known “Footprints” poem.

On Caldera:

posted 4 months ago

Quite brilliant. I particularly like the description, “My throat runs deeper than my bones …”

On Escape From Sirius II:

posted 4 months ago

I love the definition of “modified for light combat”.

On The Last Window:

posted 4 months ago

You’re right that it’s a bit ambiguous, but I didn’t want to use the word “window” again right before the end: I wanted people to remember it from the first line and the title. If you have a suggestion, I’m very happy to entertain it.

On Revealations:

posted 4 months ago

This is great! It gave me a really big smile. The description of the ground changing and the voices of hell burbling from his throat is extremely vivid.

On Jerry is a God:

posted 4 months ago

Awesome. Meeting Jesus on 49th Street is a priceless image!

On It's Always the Person You Least Expect:

posted 4 months ago

Incompetent? Nonsense! Not having an idea is a fine reason, but you’re not incompetent. :) Thank you for the encouraging comment!

On Beta Testing:

posted 4 months ago

Why keep her alive? Perhaps she’s the mad scientist behind the nanoswarm, or provided the theoretical knowledge to make it happen without knowing what the real mad scientists were up to.

I had a bit of trouble with “toxic tires” and had to reread it several times before I figured out what you meant. Might want to have a look at it.

Keep up the hard work! :)

On It's Always the Person You Least Expect:

posted 4 months ago

Inspired by a reveal in one of William Barton’s books, The Transmigration of Souls, regarding the nature of God, which I found amusing.

On Ludwig Maximus' Speech: The Corporation, Inc.:

posted 4 months ago

Actually, I was about to say this one wasn’t up to Commander Aslög’s standards: it read more like background notes for yourself than a prequel. I wish you luck as you develop this scenario: I’ve very much enjoyed reading about the Corporation, Incorporated!

On Original Chromatic Drawing:

posted 4 months ago

It took me a minute to parse the OCD gag, but when I did it negated the only critique I was going to make. ;)

On Unique Business Card:

posted 4 months ago

Damn it; I knew that name was familiar for a reason. I hate when I do that sort of thing unintentionally: it feels like stealing.

As for what office sluts dress like, I imagine them in black skirts that are long enough to look conservative, but topped with something shiny and clingy like satin or silk that not only displays curves but shows too much chest: either because it’s fastened with buttons (too small and too far apart) or because the neckline is a bit too “clever”.