*MIDDLE-CLASS AMERICAN FAMILY DIES OF BIOLOGICAL WARFARE ATTACK* 2 days ago, the Dawson family was found dead in their house, which had been set on fire, presumably to dispose of the bodies, which are being used as evidence. Mrs. Kristen Dawson, husband Edgar, and children Sam and Jen were all lying in a macabre circle. Their head had been partially sliced open, their feet broken and bound in the Chinese fashion, their eyes cut out, as well as many other gruesome details. However, these cuts were relatively bloodless-the family had been dead before being injured. As traces of anthrax had been found in the air vents, it has been determined that anthrax was the cause of death. Why? Nobody knows. Oriental neighbors, the Wang family, are widely suspected due to the bound feet. However, no case has been filed against them. Wang Lung chuckled and smiled. _Of course not_, he thought. Then he reached for the phone. &quot;Governer? Yes, it's Wang...let's do it again tonight, it's great publicity for the newspaper.&quot; 2007-09-29T02:39:06Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/10360 <p>I like the opening and i agree with everyone about the segue but i thought it was mostly clear<br />concise is the right word with the damn word limit lol</p> <p>I like the <em>macabre circle</em> bit<br />creepy</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14937 2007-09-29T02:39:06Z artistsrunwild http://ficlets.com/authors/artistsrunwild <p>Nice opener, and some true gory / gruesome stuff (as Alexa pointed out) &#8211; I&#8217;ve always believed that man&#8217;s inexplicable inhumanity towards his fellow man (as THX 0577 pointed out) is the scariest junk / material out there. Well done!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14697 2007-09-27T23:42:40Z YodaOnCrack http://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrack <p>i know, i had to cut out a bunch of official jargon <em>and</em> the switch to wang&#8217;s actions. maybe i hsould have extended it to two ficlets&#8230;</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14692 2007-09-27T23:32:28Z blueyedwonder http://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonder <p>Some really gross stuff happening here.<br />~<br /> THX was right about the newspaper vs Wang&#8217;s actions.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14682 2007-09-27T22:38:37Z Alexa ♥ http://ficlets.com/authors/alexa1018 <p>Not a bad idea. Sometimes man&#8217;s inhumanity towards his fellow man can be far more horrific than any imagined monster or malevolent force, as evidenced by this theme recurring in zombie movies (check it out, really, next time you watch one&#8212;some live guy will always be a jerk and put others in danger). Main critique would be the &#8216;newspaper&#8217; section not sounded official enough, and then the quick jump to Wang&#8217;s actions and stuff.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14670 2007-09-27T22:10:04Z THX 0477 http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477 <p>ackkkkk stupid strikethrough.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14657 2007-09-27T20:59:13Z blueyedwonder http://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonder <p>I know, this doesn&#8217;t really fit horror&#8230;</p> <p>Just so you know, i&#8217;m not sick and disgusting&#8230;all those things have been on NCIS episodes, except for the bound feet, that&#8217;s from english class because we&#8217;re studying The Good Earth-<del>also, hence the name Wang Lung. And I have long believed that sooner or later, the government will become corrupt due to some sick reason</del>-like publicity, for instance. So that&#8217;s my excuse for not writing traditional horror.</p> <p>:D</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10360?basename=14656 2007-09-27T20:59:02Z blueyedwonder http://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonder