It was a normal day for him: wake up, think of Leda, make an offering to Demeter, milk the cows, think of Leda, hoe his fields, think of Leda, water his fields... But sadly, it didn't end normally. His irrigation ditch was clogged up by something. Frustrated, he hiked up to the stream. Leda's body lay in the water. Her pale, smooth neck was nicked and there was a gaping slice of flesh missing in her chest. But none of it had any blood or scabs surrounding it, Leda could have been posing for a still life...except she was dead. His throat tight, he caressed her cold cheek. He knew what bloodless wounds meant. A god had heartlessly sliced her open like an animal. Blindly, he stumbled back to his farm, and into his house. Leda dead...no, it couldn't be. _Leda, Leda_, taunted a soft voice in his head. He clumsily lit a small pyre and threw some incense over it. _O, Demeter, please save Leda's poor soul. And please, please, O Great Goddess, tell me who did this and why Leda...Why Leda?_ 2007-10-13T00:42:17Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/10460 <p>mmk thx. :]</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=17274 2007-10-13T00:42:17Z blueyedwonder http://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonder <p>Honestly, this reads a bit awkward but there is something here I like. Do not ever say &#8220;sorry&#8221; for what you&#8217;ve written though&#8230; I just think the descriptions need work. Instead of adjectives, try using metaphors and similes. (i.e. &#8211; instead of their was a cut in her heart, how about her heart bled like milk spills from an open bottle) &#8211; these are tried and true description techniques. Again, I really like this &#8211; just trying to help with your descriptions.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=16531 2007-10-08T23:57:19Z YodaOnCrack http://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrack <p>no, no&#8230;sorry, should probably revise this&#8230;but acantheus loves leda, and since acantheus is a landowner, the god(dess) he respects most is demeter, goddess of the grain.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=15287 2007-10-01T02:24:21Z blueyedwonder http://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonder <p>I&#8217;m not big on the Greek myths but liked the whole piece ficlet to ficlet. Question is Leda a goddess or a Landowner? Was unsure why Demeter was thinking of Leda, praying to her or worrying she would come down hard on him. Not that it matters she is dead but can&#8217;t cross the river Styx, yes?</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=15276 2007-10-01T02:03:56Z cainegreene http://ficlets.com/authors/cainegreene <p>Nooo Not Leda&#8230; thts tragic.. the writing was gripping well done! The use of <em>italics</em> enhanced the story.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=15060 2007-09-29T21:47:19Z SKermitgorf http://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorf <p>I like it. A bit simplistic, or maybe I&#8217;m in a pissy mood. I&#8217;ll rate it another day perhaps.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/10460?basename=15059 2007-09-29T21:47:10Z THX 0477 http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477