Comments on 'Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)'I hate closing time. That last call for all those who have nowhere to go and nothing to lose. I used to pity them, staring morosely into the bottom of a beer stein as if scrying the future from the froth.
Now I was one of them. I flipped a coin, watching how the light caught it as it spun in the air.
“C’mon buddy, you need to get out of here. Bar's closed.”
I looked up at the earnest young man in front of me, probably using tips to pay his way through college. He didn’t have that jaundiced look that the lifers get after pedaling alcohol for half their lives to frat boys and alcoholics.
“How much have you ever lost with the toss of a coin?” I asked, holding the coin up in the air. A quarter.
“Okay dude, I think you’ve had enough to drink,” Mr. Earnest replied. “Just take a cab home and sleep it off.”
I smiled slightly. “Would you ever bet everything? Imagine, an entire fortune resting on the outcome of a single statistical probability.”
Getting up, I tossed the coin to him. “Keep the change.”2007-10-20T21:02:43Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/11585Comment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>a very nice idea, what inspired you to write about a quarter in this way??...I wonder</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=188312007-10-20T21:02:43ZBlossom Ruoqenhttp://ficlets.com/authors/stainedglasstearsComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>This was a great ficlet! I really enjoyed this story. It made me think, what would Mr. Earnest do with that quarter and that idea planted in his head?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=180202007-10-16T22:36:42ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>Absolutely superb! What’s so excellent is what isn’t said. Everyone knows what the bar looks like, the smell, what both were wearing, etc. I can see it in my mind as if I were there witnessing it.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=180152007-10-16T22:09:03ZStonerhttp://ficlets.com/authors/stonerComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>Bet heads. It’s more than 90% likely.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=179882007-10-16T21:09:27ZAlexa ♥http://ficlets.com/authors/alexa1018Comment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>Awesome terse/ tense /philisophical dialouge, I like the how coin was central throughout even up to the end. Great job. One Of my favorite of your ficlets!!!!! You really did a fantastic job with this challenge.<br />~<br />The style was film noirish. My compliments to you on this ficlet.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=179852007-10-16T21:06:18ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>lol “keep the change” very nice =]</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=179832007-10-16T21:04:21ZOne Time, One Chancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/one_chanceComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>Mr. Earnest. sweet. Doesn’t it all boil down to a single statistical probability?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=179792007-10-16T21:01:59Zm8ryxhttp://ficlets.com/authors/m8ryxComment on Closing Time (Challenge: Mundane Object)<p>Fabulous! Love the scrying the future from the froth line. And overall, nicely philosophical in a compact setting.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/11585?basename=179692007-10-16T20:38:01ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477