Comments on 'Substitution'_And it doesn't come in by the lungs. That's what they see, all but the dear, desperate man next to you who writhes and chews his gag as he watches. The others see it in the air because that's the only way a monkeybrain can perceive it._
_It needles in through the pores and moves between skin and muscle like a skinner's knife, until it finds ten thousand tiny amorphous blobs running through your flesh; it looked like gas and felt like fishhooks and now it becomes sparks running electrochemical wires, ecstatically leaping the gaps 'tween the nerves._
_And your brain isn't supposed to feel pain, but it's like someone set off a blasting cap in the brainmeat of your limbic system. You feel it in your nose, a head full of static, the world goes bright white. Your skin slicks with fear-panic animal sweat and your bladder looses. The others hear your soul exit as a scream; only your dear, helpless man sees it hover over your body momentarily--a long-tailed bird the density and hue of coming rain in a distant sky._2008-03-31T16:14:57Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/14013Comment on Substitution<p>I love the way you write. It’s almost poetic.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14013?basename=532252008-03-31T16:14:57ZAlexa ♥http://ficlets.com/authors/alexa1018Comment on Substitution<p>Amazing stuff, <strong>Howie</strong>. Your imagination is both magnificent and frightening.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14013?basename=239662007-11-18T23:18:38ZNickhttp://ficlets.com/authors/white1975Comment on Substitution<p>This is exactly what a possession must feel like. I love how it’s circular, and how it begins and ends with the image of the “dear, desperate man,” Simon, watching in horror as his beloved becomes Lilith’s plaything. Well done.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14013?basename=239332007-11-18T20:38:02ZAna Cristinahttp://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78