Comments on 'Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...'Susan placed the yellow pad of Post-it notes on the desk. She pulled three sheets off the top and placed the tip of her Bic pen on the paper. "This is foolish," she thought, "I can't rehearse it - it has to sound natural."
Hands trembling, she tossed the Post-It notes aside and dialed Jeff's number. It rang four times before he answered.
"Hello?"
"Hi, Jeff!"
"Susan? "
"Yes, how are you?"
"Don't call back," Jeff said, hanging up the phone.
Sobbing, she dropped to the wooden floor of her room. Tear soaked makeup dripped down her cheeks like dirty raindrops as she rose to her feet and hit redial.
"What do you want from me, Susan?" Jeff asked.
"I love you, Jeff! Don't do this!"
"Susan, please stop."
"Stop what, Jeff?! I love you - you bastard!" she screamed into the phone before smashing it against the wall.
She stepped into the kitchen, grabbed her car keys, and slammed the front door as hard as she could. "If Jeff won't have me, then I want to die," she said as she put her car in reverse.2007-11-26T22:25:46Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/14036Comment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Ah yes, the Borderline personality. Susan’s feelings of power mixed with insecurities would likely justify that diagnosis, though her MMPI is more consistent that of Paranoid Personality Disorder (PPD).</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=253412007-11-26T22:25:46ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>I bet you Jeff is married! And Susan, well, she sounds like Borderline Personality Disorder. Fun piece.</p>
<p>LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=252992007-11-26T17:32:52ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Wow. That’s harsh. Stupid Jeff…</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=250472007-11-25T16:33:28ZLone Writerhttp://ficlets.com/authors/solopenComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Impressively realistic. I started having flashbacks to my horrible angst ridden break-up.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=249162007-11-25T02:25:36ZKasumiRosehttp://ficlets.com/authors/kasumiroseComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>true love, how sweet!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=248052007-11-24T21:32:26ZBring Out Your Inner Emo Kid <3http://ficlets.com/authors/cappygrl95Comment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Holy crack! One minute it’s calm, writing a post-it note. Two seconds later she’s this psycho crazy ex-girlfriend speeding off to wreak psycho crzy havoc. One of those things were all you can do is stare, shocked, wondering when did it get this intense…. and laugh. So I did.<br />Read the sequels as well. Me likey.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=246192007-11-23T17:00:06ZTarmaiehttp://ficlets.com/authors/tarmaieComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Thanks for all the comments. I liked your comment so much, Kermitgorf, that I made it the title of the sequel…</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=245002007-11-22T13:24:32ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Awesome job. Poor Susan …<strong>tear</strong></p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=244752007-11-22T02:31:38Zflute faeriehttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_6061Comment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p> HAHAHHAHA ! This should not be funny, but I love how very pathetic this character is. I’m a pretty sympathetic person…within reason. She’s hilarious. Did you write this without laughing?</p>
<p>I’m sorry. That sounds rude to the poor, lovesick girl. Ode to Drama Queen, how you make me chortle!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=244552007-11-22T01:31:00ZStorykeeper of Faehttp://ficlets.com/authors/smileComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>very nice, yet sad. ‘secially because it happens all the time… 5*’s</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=244012007-11-21T19:54:34Z.:band baby:.http://ficlets.com/authors/bandbabyComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>so sad need some happy stories</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=243732007-11-21T18:29:01ZMrJhttp://ficlets.com/authors/unlimitedsmiles9Comment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>No problem, Luisa – I wasn’t offended. <br />This site offers an opportunity to playfully experiment with your writing style, gaining feedback regarding what works / doesn’t. I appreciate your comments. When I first joined ficlets, it was Howie Amourscow whose writing I “took a shine” to… I’d recommend checking out his repertoire / library of silver-tongued belles-lettres._ I see that you just joined – I recommend you read as much as you write. Thanks for reading mine! Thanks, Yoda</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=243492007-11-21T13:16:09ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>By the way, I hope I didn’t come off as rude in that… rereading that, I realized that the “plain, realistic” bit could be quite insulting! Sorry. I just meant that it’s more like a real thought instead of a flowery, intricate passage. I tend towards the latter… :D But I <em>did</em> like it!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=243112007-11-21T01:16:23ZLuisa Rosehttp://ficlets.com/authors/luisa_roseComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Nice work! It moves a little too quickly, but then again, it <em>is</em> a ficlet! :) Besides, I know that my style is slower-paced and more descriptive than most, while you clearly prefer a plain, realistic perspective. I like it a lot! Four out of five stars.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=243092007-11-21T01:14:14ZLuisa Rosehttp://ficlets.com/authors/luisa_roseComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Very real…almost too real for me. *shudder. None the less, great entry. As usual.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=240732007-11-19T19:55:51ZSaint Chuckhttp://ficlets.com/authors/chuck_theloveComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Thanks – had to submit something in honor of Sain’t Chuck’s ficlet challenge. Not sure it’s my best, but I gave it a fair try! : )</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=240292007-11-19T13:09:18ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Good job.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=240222007-11-19T11:09:51ZJenuniquehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jenuniqueComment on Post-It Note Challenge: If Jeff Won't Have Me...<p>Dang, she’s got it bad for jeff, ahh unrequitted love, been there done that, better results tho than susan.<br />Once again a great read from you. 10stars</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14036?basename=239962007-11-19T03:59:28ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorf