Comments on 'Snowfall'Nina looked down from the 65th floor. The first snow of the year covered buildings, the walkways connecting them, and the empty streets below.
Nina probed the apartment until she found her granddaughter.
_Arina,_ Nina psyked, _look at the snow!_ Nina flashed her the view through the polyglass.
_It just sits there,_ Arina replied. _It looks boring._
Nina smiled sadly. Arina had never been outside and never would, but with no war to fight, nobody would ever take her from her father the way she'd been taken from her mother. At least they had that.
Her son called from the doorway. "Mom? Are you ready to go?"
"In a minute," Nina said.
"We have to go," he said, gently. "The ceremony starts in an hour."
The snow began to fall again. It looked just like the ashes that fell on Minsk the last time Nina (or anyone still alive) had breathed unfiltered air.
"It's silly," she said.
"You're a hero. It's about time they recognized that."
She flashed on Arina.
"I already have all the recognition I need."2008-03-12T10:16:29Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/14779Comment on Snowfall<p>And, before I forget, I just love the term “psyked”. I don’t think I’ve seen that one before. I may have to borrow that the next time I write a ficlet with telepaths in it.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=477282008-03-12T10:16:29ZCapital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)http://ficlets.com/authors/capital_w_writerComment on Snowfall<p>Wow. Just seriously wow. It always amazes me what people can pack into a mere 1,024 characters. A great read.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=477272008-03-12T10:14:54ZCapital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)http://ficlets.com/authors/capital_w_writerComment on Snowfall<p>Vaguely heading in the direction of <em>Accelerando</em>-style civilization.<br />Maybe cyberpunk is getting outdated.<br />Techpunk? Infopunk? Need something catchy.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=377142008-01-31T16:49:37ZWhite Hathttp://ficlets.com/authors/whitehatComment on Snowfall<p>Really good. The details and that world created unfolds to the reader with each word.<br />5stars</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=334812008-01-09T03:54:53ZLiving In Wonder Land ♠http://ficlets.com/authors/livin_in_wonder_landComment on Snowfall<p>Really damn good! And nice picture too… Formatted well too for an easy read. Great work!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=265182007-12-04T03:38:52ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Snowfall<p>i love the black and white picture , it really sets the mood for your ficlet<br />your great keep writing!!!<br />mecca</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=263162007-12-02T23:23:42ZLuvShortee1http://ficlets.com/authors/mecca_since_day_1Comment on Snowfall<p>It’s a nice description of the value of family.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=263102007-12-02T22:56:16ZTerminushttp://ficlets.com/authors/riggsComment on Snowfall<p>Wow…futuristic, in a way…sounds sorta like the plot of a movie my best friend and I made once. And the picture is perfect.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=260562007-12-01T17:08:59Zsomeday_93http://ficlets.com/authors/someday_93Comment on Snowfall<p>Great idea, reminds me of something Kurt Vonnegut Jr. might scribe—I’ve wondered if war is truly the answer to ending war, and unless I’m mistaken this world you’ve created is one that has achieved peace through war…? Thought provoking.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=259862007-12-01T01:41:54ZTad Winslowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/tjdComment on Snowfall<p>Really enjoyed it! It took me a second reading to catch what was going on, but I’m pretty sure that was my fault for trying to read something at three am. Not yours.</p>
<p>Good job! Glad your wrote another little piece of fiction :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=259162007-11-30T18:10:27Zpie_is_goodhttp://ficlets.com/authors/pie_is_goodComment on Snowfall<p>I’m not familiar with The Fifteenth, so I’m curious about this world. Nice use of the picture!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=257812007-11-29T19:26:49ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on Snowfall<p>I wanted to write something in the same universe as The Fifteenth, and I had this character, Nina, in mind, but I didn’t know where to start, so I hit the inspiration link.</p>
<p>When I saw this picture, I thought, “Hey, what if the won the war, but poisoned the planet? How would that feel?”</p>
<p>There’s a lot more that I didn’t put in her, backstory about Nina and her mother, but that’s beyond the scope of a ficlet, I think.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=257332007-11-29T05:52:04ZWil Wheatonhttp://ficlets.com/authors/wilwheatonComment on Snowfall<p>Clearly written – great example here of how to write descriptions without overusing adjectives / overdoing it…</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256452007-11-28T12:56:36ZMaddawghttp://ficlets.com/authors/maddawgComment on Snowfall<p>Thanks, everyone. Ficlets won’t let me post comments, so if this goes through, I’ll add more later.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256352007-11-28T04:35:23ZWil Wheatonhttp://ficlets.com/authors/wilwheatonComment on Snowfall<p>I’d be very interested in reading more from these characters and this world. Looking forward to the sequels/prequels that will come from this.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256252007-11-28T03:44:05ZVikihttp://ficlets.com/authors/vikiComment on Snowfall<p>The snow-as-ash reminds me of Carmac McCarthy’s “The Road”. Very eerie imagery. I’m also reminded of Charleton Heston in the “Omega Man”, living in a high rise building fighting zombies.</p>
<p>Very nice.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256242007-11-28T03:43:08ZMRayhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mrayComment on Snowfall<p>Futuristic holocaust survivor-ish. Like the worst of our history repeated itself far into the future. Amazing what you can dream up just from looking at a picture. Very cool Wil.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256232007-11-28T03:33:01ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Snowfall<p>Excellent ficlet. I love the way the world slowly unfolds into a science-fiction atmosphere. Splendid.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/14779?basename=256222007-11-28T03:13:29ZNickhttp://ficlets.com/authors/white1975