Comments on 'And Then You Had Dinner'Dinner was excellent, though my stomach felt a little unsettled. At least, I thought it must, for it kept making odd noises even though it didn't feel bad. If anything, quite the opposite. I felt a sort of warm, satisfied fullness that I couldn't remember having felt for quite some time.
But I was in for a shock when the I got the check. "Why was I charged $50 for…'Appetizer: Waitress'?"
"That's how much it'll cost to train a new one," my waitress explained. She sighed. "A real pity, too. Cindy Lou was one of our best. But I'm sure you had your money's worth."
I didn't understand, but there was that feeling of satisfaction that few other meals had ever brought me, and it wasn't as if $50 was a large sum of money to me, with what I make in a year. If that was all it cost, then so be it. It was worth it.
I returned to my hotel, went to bed, and had very pleasant dreams involving my first waitress—the one who had disappeared.
It was good that I slept well, for the next morning I was in for a shock.2008-03-31T14:45:53Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/16010Comment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>I’m intrigued.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=531622008-03-31T14:45:53ZAlexa ♥http://ficlets.com/authors/alexa1018Comment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>alright. I’m off to read the sequel…<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=522492008-03-28T15:32:07ZFlute Loop<33http://ficlets.com/authors/sashaComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>This is a cool series. I can’t believe he ate her!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=518482008-03-26T23:21:58Zflute faeriehttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_6061Comment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>yeh, this is a good hook,, but I hope the parents didnt find out about how much his appetizer was…!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=515012008-03-25T16:40:09ZNissakithttp://ficlets.com/authors/nerissaComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>so.. eating waitresses is a common occurance. that’s like.. whoa. =]<br />omg. the gender comment above creeped me out. this had better not be a girl!XP</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=513892008-03-25T02:57:42ZOne Time, One Chancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/one_chanceComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>All right, I’ll confess.</p>
<p>When I was writing the original sequel, and all its followons, I somehow missed the line about ”’rents” in the original. In fact I only noticed it a couple of days ago. Oops.</p>
<p>If necessary, I suppose I could simply write <em>another</em> prequel ficlet in which he’s a young adult stockbroker, and confuse everyone even more. But I decided to just play it as it lay.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=512832008-03-24T22:15:13ZThroat Wolfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/throatwolfComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>Wait a second, I thought this was a teenager!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=511922008-03-24T15:48:45ZStorykeeper of Faehttp://ficlets.com/authors/smileComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>yes kermit, he ate her…. At least that is what I got.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=509962008-03-23T16:12:12ZBlusparrowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/blusparrowComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>Did he like eat her???</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=509502008-03-23T02:43:20ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>Because I didn’t proofread well enough. Fixed.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=506682008-03-22T03:28:03ZThroat Wolfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/throatwolfComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>Very interested to see where it goes, but why does the waiter bring the check and the waitress answer the question?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=506652008-03-22T03:21:33Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>Who says I have anything planned? Maybe I’m just leaving a good hook for someone else to continue it.</p>
<p>(Geez, I can’t write <em>everything</em> by myself here. If I were going to do that I’d go somewhere like writing.com where I didn’t have the length limitations.)</p>
<p>As to the gender of the narrator, well, there’s certainly room for people to take it either way. :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=284992007-12-16T16:49:04ZThroat Wolfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/throatwolfComment on And Then You Had Dinner<p>I’m really looking forward to what you have planned to shock the narrator the next morning.<br />I’ve just realized though, that I don’t know the gender of the narrator?<br />So far, that’s my only complaint. :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/16010?basename=284972007-12-16T16:32:55ZFyora Cartaganhttp://ficlets.com/authors/fyoramacragge