Comments on 'A Girl Called Jack'This much I know: I was six years old the day I murdered my infant brother. Most of the rest is a haze of smeared memories; disconnected thoughts. Bits and pieces of a history I cannot stitch together into a whole. I don't even know for sure which parts are real and which ones aren't.
But I know that I murdered him. I know this because my mother spent the rest of her life making sure I never forgot it. Never made the mistake of thinking that maybe it was just a simple accident. And I know that I was six years old because on his headstone, on that part where it says when you were born and when you died, it says that he died in 1981.
Dad calls it _the incident_. That is, if he ever talks about it at all, which he almost never does. Mom, she chipped her elbow in _the incident_, when she fell down with David.
For a long time, I thought Mom's chipped elbow was why she wouldn't pick me up and hold me anymore.
My name is Jessica. But you can call me Jack. Everyone else does.2007-05-23T00:31:54Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/2060Comment on A Girl Called Jack<p>Really makes you want to read more…Nice work.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=21022007-05-23T00:31:54ZSaint Chuckhttp://ficlets.com/authors/chuck_theloveComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>The only thing that I would want to know is how Jack killed her brother.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=20582007-05-22T02:03:03ZAmasterhttp://ficlets.com/authors/amasterComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>nice! yes great opening and also nice ending.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=19152007-05-16T00:44:46Zkhepahttp://ficlets.com/authors/khepaComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>Well done. Great opening and grabs the readers interest from the start.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=19072007-05-15T23:04:45ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>Wow! Great voice and strong character!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=18942007-05-15T20:55:48ZRosehttp://ficlets.com/authors/rhi_roseComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>Simply amazing.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=18852007-05-15T09:45:58ZKamalanihttp://ficlets.com/authors/jonthysellComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>It’s really good! I love how you say she doesn’t remember anything but her mom never lets her forget that she killed her brother. Nice work!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=17742007-05-10T14:41:35ZMissJonas1492http://ficlets.com/authors/princesssisterComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>Intriguing work.</p>
<p>S.J.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=11262007-04-16T01:44:35ZSJHundak/S.J.Willinghttp://ficlets.com/authors/sjhundakComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>This is actually pretty close to the opening of a novel I was once upon a time working on (this is the heavily abbreviated first chapter). I have most of the rest of the story mapped out in my head, but I thought I’d see where others might take it, just out of curiosity. Hope folks have fun with it. :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=11252007-04-16T01:23:16ZW.J. Kocik, Jr.http://ficlets.com/authors/wjkocikjrComment on A Girl Called Jack<p>I love it. It leaves loads open for sequels, hints to a lot more, and tells you huge amounts about the character without explicitly telling you. Your usage of first person narrative was especially appealing. Keep up the good work!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/2060?basename=11242007-04-16T01:21:11ZPocketshttp://ficlets.com/authors/pockets