She sits alone in her room on her bed, many things going on in her head. She hears her momma screaming, she see's herself bleeding. Daddy's always abusing, while she's amusing. The abuse he gives, she wishes she wouldn't live. She wishes for death and as she prays, that the nightmare would stop today. She see's bruise that won't fade., along with memoires that won't go away. She hears footstep's and tell's him to go away, it's the police don't be afraid. We are here to help you out, so if you would unlock this door now. She walks carefuly over to the door, and she hear's more. The police are yelling and there are gun shoots, They were caught. She runs and walks out the window onto the roof, and off she jumps,she went poof. She was gone, so long. Her momma found her, and blamed it on her father. She killed herself for no reason, because it was that season. Were she was abusing herself it was a dream, and her daddy was never really mean 2008-03-24T22:15:38Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/24902 <p>Excellent!!!!!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=51284 2008-03-24T22:15:38Z I LOVE FRANK IERO AND WILLIAM BECKETT!!! http://ficlets.com/authors/manic_panic <p>Very strong stuff. I love your poems.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49633 2008-03-18T19:25:18Z flute faerie http://ficlets.com/authors/user_6061 <p>Wow. Very powerful images. Excellent work!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49476 2008-03-18T02:44:13Z Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus) http://ficlets.com/authors/capital_w_writer <p>i like it! very suspenseful until the end, which i like too.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49366 2008-03-18T00:31:33Z Jayme Meiram http://ficlets.com/authors/roodles <p>Bah to apostrophes! Bah! I say!<br />Look! Apostrophes!<br />&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;&#8217;<br />Lol, sorry. I&#8217;m done now.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49298 2008-03-17T21:37:44Z Lone Writer http://ficlets.com/authors/solopen <p>Very dark, but with a twist, a happy ending. I would say there are a few forced rhymes like with abusing and amusing, and yes a few places where apostrophes shouldn&#8217;t be.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49273 2008-03-17T20:13:20Z thebetweenspace http://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspace <p>Good job, although you don&#8217;t need an apostrophe (&#8216;) at the end of verbs. Only use them in contractions and to show possession with nouns and pronouns.<br />OK, grammar lesson over! :)<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49270 2008-03-17T20:02:36Z Ana Cristina http://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78 <p>wow. excellent twist at the end. such an air of mystery and darkness in your poems. very nice.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49267 2008-03-17T19:59:18Z `crayola. http://ficlets.com/authors/nectarine <p>Awww, so very sad. I like the end the best. It flows very well and Disturbed Youth is right. I wish I could write poems like that! All of mine are hideously sappy love poems written to a guy that dosn&#8217;t even know he id being written about. LOL <br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49259 2008-03-17T19:54:56Z Lone Writer http://ficlets.com/authors/solopen <p>This was nice and dark some sentence would need some working on but besides that it was a nice creepy feel to it that makes it work out well</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49255 2008-03-17T19:53:50Z Scary Thing I Aint Dead Yet http://ficlets.com/authors/nickledimenickle <p>btw scratch out the last two, my computer wasnt working.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49241 2008-03-17T19:42:03Z Disturbed Youth http://ficlets.com/authors/gothica <p>i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49239 2008-03-17T19:41:08Z Disturbed Youth http://ficlets.com/authors/gothica <p>i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49238 2008-03-17T19:41:04Z Disturbed Youth http://ficlets.com/authors/gothica <p>i liiike you definitely have got a hold on dark mystery and creepiness which is a specialty among me and my friends. niiiice! :)</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/24902?basename=49237 2008-03-17T19:40:42Z Disturbed Youth http://ficlets.com/authors/gothica