Comments on 'Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]'Eric waved to his diving partner, pointing in the direction of the underwater cave. His partner, Lazaro Bravo, was twenty meters downstream, carried by a current that Eric would use to glide in slowly behind.
In the distance Lazaro's light flickered out. Eric touched the button on his transducer, his voice crackling into an electric wave. "Lazaro? Where's your light?"
"¡Dios mío!" he answered. "Won't believe it, muchacho. Won't need light here. Is amazing!"
The current accelerated. At first it was dark - a dull mixture of rocks and sand, but then the siphon pulled him down deep into a light brighter than the mid-day sun.
He got his bearings and looked around for Lazaro who waved in slow motion. "¡Aqui esta!"
Eric put his hand over his eyes, shielding them from the light below. Above him the cave's mouth was twisted into an evil grin. To each side were boundless silver sands cascading against luminous fields of crystalline stalagmites.
"Amazing!" Lazaro said.
"Yes," Eric said, "but how do we get out?"2008-04-22T20:12:38Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/27393Comment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Excellent story, greatly described. I loved the line <em>the cave’s mouth was twisted in an evil grin.</em></p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=580662008-04-22T20:12:38Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>I like how you managed to fit in a little Espanol. Nice touch.. Good descriptoins, per the challenge. Nice Job. Muy bien!!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=568742008-04-16T17:45:31ZApostrophe http://ficlets.com/authors/murphyrose27Comment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Really good descriptions!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=560472008-04-13T21:56:27Zhowhardlifeishttp://ficlets.com/authors/dinasahmComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Nice. Very nice. Love the descriptions!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=559562008-04-13T14:15:43ZCapital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)http://ficlets.com/authors/capital_w_writerComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Totally agree with every thing above. =) Very good descritptions.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=559222008-04-13T00:26:27Z.:band baby:.http://ficlets.com/authors/bandbabyComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Very cool, a fabulous description and a nice plot twist!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=559072008-04-13T00:07:01ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Nice discription! Colors! hehe!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=557902008-04-12T14:59:56ZBlusparrowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/blusparrowComment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Fascinating and magical with just a hint of, “Oops, we may have goofed a bit.” <br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=557832008-04-12T14:05:21ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Wow, sounds like a beautiful cave. I like all your colorful descriptions, and how you added a problem at the end. Oh, and another thing: I wrote a poem once and named it underwater world. It’s a good title ;p</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=557702008-04-12T13:21:44Zflute faeriehttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_6061Comment on Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]<p>Wow. I really like this and hope you write a sequel!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/27393?basename=557692008-04-12T13:18:58ZLone Writerhttp://ficlets.com/authors/solopen