Comments on ' You Kidding Me?'

Comments on ' You Kidding Me?' _See that's exactly why we are breaking up! She's way too clingy and obsessed with my overall life! Hey, I know, I am going to ask Alex out to the Spring Fling next week! She go with me for sure._ "Hey Alex, I have to ask you a question." I paused. "Next week is the Spring Fling and I was wondering if you don't already have a date, maybe you could go with me?" _She hadn't said anything for two seconds but it felt like a lifetime. I could feel my face getting hot and my back getting all sweaty._ "Of course, I'll go with you. I'll meet you in the front of the school at 7:45. See you then!" She walked away. _She was so amazing. I can't wait for next Thursday. I wonder if Chloe got a date. Probably not!_ I started walking outside, we had football practice and it started in 5 minutes. _Hey, who was that blonde talking to Adrian. Oh no! You've got to be kidding me, Chloe? No way!_ 2008-04-16T22:14:23Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/27720 Comment on You Kidding Me? <p>I tried editing it, but I really don’t know what “my dialogue is stiff though” means. Any ideas?</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/27720?basename=56947 2008-04-16T22:14:23Z Nissakit http://ficlets.com/authors/nerissa Comment on You Kidding Me? <p>Not a bad job of getting across a combination of stream-of-consciousness and story points. Dialog is a little stiff though.<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/27720?basename=56839 2008-04-16T14:04:09Z THX 0477 http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477