I raised an eyebrow at Young. He never gives me money, he's cheaper than hell. _Meh...might as well._ I slipped the ten into my wallet, I really wasn't in the mood for a yogurt. I stepped out anyway, I might as well make room for the free time that I have. I walked across the shopping center and went into a nice little Italian place that has great pizza for pretty cheap. I go there a lot, the cashier is real nice to me. So is her daughter, she real cute, she looks great in blue. It was a real bright place and it had a nice n' clean feeling to it. I sat down in a comfortable chair at the long bar near the counter close to the cashier's stand. A lot of other girls and people from my school hang here. Just as a saw a couple of girls looking at me, I heard a gunshot comnig from the other side of the shopping center. 2008-05-16T06:38:40Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/28250 <p>Great job of putting some adolescent fantasies into the story. Still get the feeling this story would have been better if our man character was a girl.<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28250?basename=62673 2008-05-16T06:38:40Z PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA) http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunk <p>Ooh, a nice job setting our boy in a peaceful, clean environment&#8230;then ripping him back to the brutal reality with which he is more accustomed. The last sentence in paragraph three was a bit off, I thought.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28250?basename=58385 2008-04-24T14:36:04Z THX 0477 http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477