Comments on 'Mmmmmm...'I looked at it carefully, suspiciously even. I've never tried this before. I'm unsure what my reaction will be. Will I like it? Will it disgust me? Will it be worth the price I paid?
Warily, I open my mouth. My eyes close and I begin to pass judgment on the first taste.
I've never felt such smoothness on my tongue. I immediately swirl it around and breathe deep. It slides and glides over my taste buds like a sensuous lover. As I slowly savour, the rich flavour infiltrates every crevice, every hidden corner of my mouth before slipping down my throat. It leaves a satisfying coolness behind like an echo. I shiver and offer up a slight smile and a satisfied, "Mmmmmm" to no one in particular, before taking more.
Another bite. Another burst of near-ecstasy. Another shiver.
I want more. I need more. So smooth. So rich.
But all too soon the little cup is empty and I'm resigned to licking the little foil top, wishing to lap up every molecule of that delicious chocolate pudding.2008-05-05T14:47:14Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/28545Comment on Mmmmmm...<p>Now you’re making me race to the kitchen for some fondue and strawberries. This ficlet just made me…hungry! Lovely job.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=604272008-05-05T14:47:14ZNightMaidenhttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_7538Comment on Mmmmmm...<p>i love pudding and licking the top cover, you captured a soothing moment of eating pleasure.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=602742008-05-04T04:13:29ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Ok well I admit I cheated and read the last line first…but great story, I love the descriptions. If I hadn’t cheated I really would have been rather confused.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=592612008-04-28T06:16:11ZSaint Chuckhttp://ficlets.com/authors/chuck_theloveComment on Mmmmmm...<p>You had me duped. Having read your other stories, my mind wasn’t thinking of ordinary foods. Great payoff!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=592582008-04-28T03:05:58Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Mmmmmm...<p>hahahahha.<br />brilliant descriptions and such<br />=]</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=591842008-04-28T00:18:10ZOne Time, One Chancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/one_chanceComment on Mmmmmm...<p>chocolate pudding</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=591442008-04-27T20:01:23ZWriter4Life00njhttp://ficlets.com/authors/writer4life00njjComment on Mmmmmm...<p>i love it! I think it was some kind of beverage at first, like coffee. and i like the challenge idea too</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=590902008-04-27T15:12:57Zwytherwingshttp://ficlets.com/authors/wytherwingsComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Go for it with sequels, I say :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=590522008-04-27T05:32:37ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Mmmmmm...<p>ooooooo, I absolutely agree w/ that challenge idea BARomero (Hint Hint).</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=590502008-04-27T05:19:24ZTad Winslowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/tjdComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Haha! I had thought ice cream all the way, and then when you mentioned that you were considering mature tagging, I read it again. Brilliant (and totally hot)! Makes me think of this sneezing video (which also might not be suitable for minors)<br />.<br />http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E61_oa3kb2o<br />.<br />Describing an object or event in detail without saying what it is, and then letting your readers guess it, might be a good idea for a challenge.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=589142008-04-26T17:22:07ZBARomerohttp://ficlets.com/authors/baromeroComment on Mmmmmm...<p>I love it – awesome. Congrats!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=587662008-04-26T00:28:24ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Mmmmmm...<p>No I was at home by myself. Eatin’ pudding. And lickin’ the lid. And it was gooooood. :)<br />Actually, it was a flavour I’ve never had before which is why I was reluctant to try it. I fear the unknown.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=587182008-04-25T22:00:28ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Mmmmmm...<p>No I was at home by myself. Eatin’ pudding. And lickin’ the lid. And it was gooooood.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=587172008-04-25T21:59:33ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Ha ha ha ha. I hope you didn’t lick the foil top in public or get caught by your co-workers for real, but I like that ending. Fantastic description. I can see how this could be taken offensively if you continued with the sensual theme, but you did a fine job of holding back on the reigns, its perfect.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=587122008-04-25T21:54:20ZTad Winslowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/tjdComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Ha, that payoff in the last sentence is great. I wish I hadn’t read the comments though so I could have really been surprised.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586802008-04-25T20:10:33ZAna Cristinahttp://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78Comment on Mmmmmm...<p>A logical assumption THX . I, however, am not much of an ice cream fan, but you couldn’t know that so yeah, good guess :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586362008-04-25T18:52:38ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Mmmmmm...<p>No, I thought the sensual lover line was funny and not over the line or anything. Great description, though I was thinking Ben and Jerry’s ice cream as the culprit.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586332008-04-25T18:46:49ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Mmmmmm...<p>Hehe. Hookah. :)<br />I debated the mature tag too, so if anyone’s offended, I’ll put it on there. I wasn’t sure.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586282008-04-25T18:36:11ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/meliaComment on Mmmmmm...<p>Wow, that was AWESOME . I was like “hookah? ice cream? air?”</p>
<p>You’re amazing with the details, Melia!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586172008-04-25T18:23:50ZValley Fey/Pinprickhttp://ficlets.com/authors/imandynan0Comment on Mmmmmm...<p>Well this ficlet came out a whole lot different than I had intended when I started it. For the record, I wanted to try my hand at describing something in as much detail as possible and then see if you guys could guess what I was describing.</p>
<p>I had pudding with my lunch today so I went with that. But the ficlet went in a weird direction and I couldn’t resist the payoff at the end :) Anyway. Just a bit of silliness.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/28545?basename=586102008-04-25T18:14:36ZMeliahttp://ficlets.com/authors/melia