In surprisingly quiet fashion, Gordo trudged through the swamp. Humidity what it was, he was trudging through the air nearly as much. His thick eyebrows knitted together. His uneven, misaligned eyes scanned the moonlit scene. All romanticizing aside, it was an ugly world. But Gordo already knew that. He'd known that from the day his momma left him on a brothel's doorstep. He'd known that every time some other kid left the orphanage, and he stayed behind. He'd known that with every averted gaze and whispered slur. But there were pretty things, and Gordo liked pretty things. That's why he was out on such a night, half damp from fetid swamp water and half damp from sweat. A pretty thing was missing. A pretty thing was lost in this ugly place. A snapping twig, and a slosh of muck bespoke a presence of one unfamiliar to this backwoods place. Unfamiliar was likely pretty. Pretty things didn't belong here. Pretty things couldn't survive here. And Gordo liked pretty things. 2008-05-29T18:07:54Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/28740 <p>This ficlet is very captivating to me. I had to read it slower than most of the ficlets, which means you did a good job with all of the descriptions of what&#8217;s going through his mind and where he is. Even who he is for that matter. I can&#8217;t wait to see where the rest of this series goes.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=66157 2008-05-29T18:07:54Z Hunting Beauty http://ficlets.com/authors/missourigirl <p>I&#8217;m starting this series from the beginning. I like this introduction very much. Gordo seems like he could become a very conflicted character, and I&#8217;m interested to see what you do with him. One typo, though. I think it should be &#8221;...bespoke <em>a</em> presence&#8230;&#8221;</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=63267 2008-05-19T01:11:15Z kaellinn18 http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18 <p>the scene description gave me the shivers.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=62455 2008-05-15T14:03:54Z PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA) http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunk <p>Im reminded of frankestein monster for some reason., I backtracked here to read from the start, can&#8217;t believe i didnt catch this series from the beginning b4 now.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=60990 2008-05-08T18:28:40Z SKermitgorf http://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorf <p>Love this, and I admit, I started at the back and worked my way here. (Also admitting that I cheated in the comment challenge, skipping commenting until I got to this one. :D)</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=60594 2008-05-06T10:27:12Z Jenunique http://ficlets.com/authors/jenunique <p>I had to read this slower than normal becuase of the consistent complexity in the narration&#8212;which is to say it is chock full of good, dense writing. Do I detect a change of pace from your normal voice? Are you trying a new style? On to the next one&#8230;</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=60361 2008-05-05T00:30:40Z Tad Winslow http://ficlets.com/authors/tjd <p>Wow, I loved the contrast. I am very interested in finding out where this goes.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=59790 2008-05-01T17:19:59Z Laine P. Grey http://ficlets.com/authors/lainegrey <p><em>Unfamiliar was likely pretty</em>. I feel like difficult times are ahead for poor Gordo. Will he be a victim or a monster, with all he&#8217;s been through. Very dark character. You almost feel sorry for him.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=59249 2008-04-28T02:35:05Z thebetweenspace http://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspace <p>I liked the mood of this piece, foreboding though it is. I find myself both sympathizing with and fearing Gordo. One of your more interesting characters.<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=59197 2008-04-28T00:48:31Z Ana Cristina http://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78 <p>I like the descriptiveness. I usually don&#8217;t get into such stories, but I kind of liked this one. I like your style of writing.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/28740?basename=59185 2008-04-28T00:19:31Z Artist_Girl http://ficlets.com/authors/artist_girl