Comments on 'A Strange Feeling' A woman complacently but sorrowfully handed over the wrapped bundle in her arms to the waiting officials. An obvious look of regret hung around her head like the cigarette smoke that whispered from one official's mouth. The two officials shook hands with the woman, and departed in a large, official-looking truck with the bundle. The engine roared, and it took off. Inside the truck it was gray and cold. The vehicle jolted every time a tire struck one of the many potholes, and the doors at the back clanged together as if they were about to fly open at any time. The bundle whimpered and struggled. The two officials paid no attention. …… I opened my eyes. I had fallen asleep walking in the grassland; the stars and moon were showing up above. It was the first time I'd seen them - Rade had a smog that blanketed the city day and night. This was also the first time I'd dreamed in - forever? I couldn't remember a time when I slept with the strange feeling. I shook my head and resumed walking. 2008-05-05T00:12:16Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/29278 Comment on A Strange Feeling <p>Cool dream! I wonder if that was from his childhood. ooo foreshadowing, nice.<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29278?basename=60358 2008-05-05T00:12:16Z Blusparrow http://ficlets.com/authors/blusparrow Comment on A Strange Feeling <p>By the way, I love how you are openly foreshadowing what is to come. Thanks for going by what we talked about, it&#8217;s a great plan. Oh! I also just sequelled this!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29278?basename=60344 2008-05-04T23:13:30Z Never Explain http://ficlets.com/authors/user_4153 Comment on A Strange Feeling <p>Missed one third person line in the second to last paragraph, but still an effective and emotion-laden ficlet. Really horrific feel to the first part there, very tragic.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29278?basename=60234 2008-05-03T23:59:39Z THX 0477 http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477 Comment on A Strange Feeling <p>Crap &#8211; I think I forgot to keep it that way last time, too. And, like last time, you saved my butt&#8230;</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29278?basename=60223 2008-05-03T21:53:48Z Stovohobo http://ficlets.com/authors/stovohobo Comment on A Strange Feeling <p>Isn&#8217;t it supposed to be in first person? Just wondering, it&#8217;ll be a little bit before I sequel.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29278?basename=60217 2008-05-03T20:14:56Z Never Explain http://ficlets.com/authors/user_4153