Comments on 'Doubt'I let myself be immersed in his mind. Particular thoughts did not stand out to me... it was mainly overall love and devotion, which his emotions were already displaying- they were rolling off of him in deep waves, hitting me with extreme emotional force. I gave a small gasp as the power of his love hit me with ever-shocking dedication. I reacted strongly, kissing him passionately. This increased his passion, making his emotions and thoughts even sharper, making me react stronger... and so it continued.
Until I felt a small change. A small second-guessing, a feeling of unworthiness. It was a tiny emotion for only a second, but I was so sensative to Davincent's feelings and thoughts that it ruined the mood for me instantly.
"What's wrong?" I asked, pulling away from him.
As soon as I asked I heard him think it.
_I'm wondering when you'll realized how much better than me you are._
I let out an angry growl, "You mean the world to me."
I felt his doubt hit me like a thousand stones.
"Stop that," I hissed.2008-05-25T21:13:50Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/29353Comment on Doubt<p>oh this is like really well written. It’s amazing! totally and completely!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29353?basename=650472008-05-25T21:13:50Zhowhardlifeishttp://ficlets.com/authors/dinasahm