Comments on 'Slow Cough and Sputter'Guiding the old Ford like it was a part of him, Dennis Yunker idled out of the parking lot and on to Main Street. It might as well have been a part of him after 40 years of grocery runs and Sunday church. Make that 39 years of church. Dennis hadn't been since Maude's death.
Excepting Maude, the only thing that'd been with Dennis longer than the truck was the double-barrel shotgun in the rack behind his head. It was a trusted, faithful companion, not that he'd named it. He always said only narcissists and sociopaths name weapons. The truck's name was Sue, not that he admitted that to anyone.
Dennis and his truck both coughed and sputtered up Main. The gun stayed silent. There's a time and a place. Now was a time for watching and waiting. Close as he was to death, Dennis had no trouble being patient. His course was slow but determined. He would achieve his ends as surely as water flows downhill.
For the time being, there was a lunch buffet at Sizzler calling his name. And he hated to be rude.2008-06-12T16:19:59Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/29368Comment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>Those last two lines made me laugh out loud, scaring my cat. Just thought you should know. :p</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=702472008-06-12T16:19:59ZAna Cristinahttp://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78Comment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>I’m looking forward to seeing how you have all of your characters cross paths. I can tell it is going to be quite interesting.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=661592008-05-29T18:14:16ZHunting Beautyhttp://ficlets.com/authors/missourigirlComment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>Another character, eh? Something tells me they aren’t all going to mix well.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=632722008-05-19T01:21:40Zkaellinn18http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18Comment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>I like the way the gun has a name but the truck doesn’t.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=624622008-05-15T14:12:24ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>I somehow missed this one originally. I like the detail that only narcissists and sociopaths name their guns.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=612572008-05-09T22:42:40Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>I’m figureing they are connected, in perhaps some past or future crime?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=609932008-05-08T18:38:36ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>I think Dennis may be one of my neighbors. :D I am absloutely loving your descriptions. It really helps to get to know the characters before tossing us head first into the action. I have lost that patience. At least for now. <br />.<br />I am running out of “excellent” adjectives for you, so this time I’ll go with…. Outstanding!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=605962008-05-06T10:40:11ZJenuniquehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jenuniqueComment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>Yes, for Tad and anyone who reads these after him, the characters will all eventually collide. I promise. Would I lead you astray? No! Perish the thought. The possible connection should be clear in just two more ficlets, not that I know when exactly I’ll get to them. If anyone wants to blindly toss in another occupant to this small town, feel free. I’ll at least try to work them in.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=603752008-05-05T00:46:36ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Slow Cough and Sputter<p>So I’m waiting for all of these characters in their safe little worlds to play bumber cars with the paths of their lives. Is that the intention? That’s the only explanation I can come up with for all of these seemingly disjointed stories. I’m enjoying it, so keep on writin em!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29368?basename=603712008-05-05T00:41:34ZTad Winslowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/tjd