Comments on 'To Rebuild A Man (2)'"Traitor?" My mouth stumbled and fell over the word like Dick Van Dyke over an ottoman. My mind raced nowhere at a million miles an hour, desperately searching for any valid register in my brain associated with identity, with _self_.
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I was suddenly aware that I was throwing up and managed to turn my head in time to save the man's suit. "It's an intriguing feeling, isn't it, Mr. Pritchard? Looking with such intent, with such _need_ for an answer."
"Fuck you," I spat.
The man chuckled. "Skipping denial and going straight to anger, eh, Mr. Pritchard? I like your style. We'll be at acceptance before you know it." I lunged at him, my arms outstretched, my hands longing to crush his trachea and snap his neck.
The next thing I knew I was on the ground, the remnants of 50,000 volts coursing through my veins. He stood over me, taser in hand. "Let's hope, for your sake Mr. Pritchard, that you reach bargaining as quickly as you arrived at anger. Patience is not one of my finer qualities."2008-05-21T17:42:13Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/29581Comment on To Rebuild A Man (2)<p>Again, great piece, I love the way you are moving the store forward.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29581?basename=638602008-05-21T17:42:13ZKevMullinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/kevmullinsComment on To Rebuild A Man (2)<p>I wasn’t sure about the cursing, so I figured I’d go with better safe than sorry, at least with the f-bomb. Thanks for the comment and the rating!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29581?basename=612612008-05-09T22:47:33Zkaellinn18http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18Comment on To Rebuild A Man (2)<p>I’m digging this little story. Feels like you’re actually going somewhere rather than just putting small scenes together.</p>
<p>As an aside, is one curse word really grounds for marking something mature? I’m very curious as I usually have my characters curse in my writing, and having to mark it mature every time seems a little… wrong.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29581?basename=612532008-05-09T22:29:50ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21