John opened his eyes again and found himself lying on a cot in a small log cabin. He glanced over and saw a woman leaning over a heat stove. John sits up as the woman turns around. &quot;Oh, don't move darlin, you took a nasty fall. Lay back down.&quot; She lays John back and puts a warm cloth on his head. She stares down at John. &quot;Do I know you?&quot; &quot;I'm not sure, but I don't think so. Please excuse me for staring. You just look......&quot; John looked down at his clothes, the same clothes he wore to work. Then he noticed a picture on the wall. He approached it. &quot;Ah, now you see.&quot; The woman said. John stared at the picture. A family photo that looked like it was from the 1800s. It was the woman in the room, her husband, a girl his age, and... &quot;No way.&quot; John said. There was John, dressed in old fashioned clothes and smiling at the camera. 2008-05-10T06:07:59Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/29962 <p>Overall, I like it. Conversation is a bit confusing (for me anyway.. You&#8217;ll find me saying that a lot.. don&#8217;t take it personally.)</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29962?basename=61351 2008-05-10T06:07:59Z Jenunique http://ficlets.com/authors/jenunique <p>mixing tenses is my greatest folly as a writer, and I apologize</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29962?basename=61347 2008-05-10T05:03:32Z Matthew Brown http://ficlets.com/authors/matthewbrown <p>Interesting premise. I&#8217;d be interested to see the angle the story takes from here.</p> <p>If you don&#8217;t mind a little constructive criticism: Try not to mix tenses. The first two sentences are in past tense while the rest is in present tense. Keeping it the same will help with flow.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29962?basename=61245 2008-05-09T22:14:23Z kaellinn18 http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18 <p>kewl story.. It keeps you guessing till the end. Sequel you must!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/29962?basename=61237 2008-05-09T21:57:18Z Apostrophe http://ficlets.com/authors/murphyrose27