Comments on 'Sending A Message'“Good evening Mr. Lawson,” the bust of a man spoke to me through the television. “I will assume that you know who I am, or rather, who I work for.” The man’s face was torn and ravaged, as if it were hastily assembled from scraps of burlap and clay. Eyes black as coffee somehow looked directly into me from the screen.
“We know that you have taken the position at GlobTrak, and are very disappointed.” A chill ran down my spine, a million tiny bumps exploding beneath my skin. My very soul trying to escape. “I’m here to offer you an opportunity that I… we, don’t think you'll want to pass up.”
He took a long, meaningful drag off of a cigarette. Cavernous lines formed around his lips as they wrapped the butt. “We can’t offer the same compensation package that GlobTrak has, but we are willing to offer you something you may enjoy even more.”
The man’s face disappeared, replaced by an image of Nick asleep in his crib. “A chance to save your son’s life.”
"Phil?" Angela called from downstairs, "dinner's ready."2008-06-23T01:31:07Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/29983Comment on Sending A Message<p>That’s a downright menacing tape. The line about the lack of compensation package and its aftermath especially. You turned up the dial, now I’m ready to tune in to the rest of this series!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29983?basename=731862008-06-23T01:31:07Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Sending A Message<p>I enjoyed that. Sinister mega corporation successfully added to the story!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29983?basename=681842008-06-05T13:01:48ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Sending A Message<p>Enjoying this a lot. Loving the sinister edge to the corporations that you’re giving. Keep it up!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29983?basename=632642008-05-19T00:48:32ZJLaughterhttp://ficlets.com/authors/jlaughterComment on Sending A Message<p>I really like the direction you guys have taken this story. This sort of collaboration is exactly what I was looking forward to in joining Ficlets.</p>
<p>I think maintaining different styles on a “fun” piece like this one benefits the entire work so I put together a sequel with a bit of the tone I used. We all have a different voice in telling this tale and I think it’s working out great.</p>
<p>Keep up the good work fellas!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29983?basename=614822008-05-11T01:02:30ZSteve Fairweatherhttp://ficlets.com/authors/fairweather12Comment on Sending A Message<p>Nice one. I really like the sense of menace that you have added very neatly, both externally and internally to our character. Great work!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/29983?basename=614032008-05-10T16:48:12ZRidcully Calverthttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_joon