Comments on 'The Hardest Part II'“You’re sorry? What the fuck!? Sorry? Those assholes fucking kidnapped me!” she screamed; face beet red, the color of a poor ginger kid who was left in the sun for too long. Tears flew from her eyes as if there were a bomb scare in her ocular glands. “What… what have you done…” her fists fell limply upon my chest as she collapsed into my arms.
“I really thought it would be different this time. They’ve unionized and everything.”
“Unionized? And that makes it better? Have you ever seen a Scorsese movie? How is that better?” Her tears bled through my shirt; her pain dripping down my chest.
“Well, it does get worse. BioWeps wants me to go to work for them. And they’ve threatened Nick if I don’t.” She pushed me back with such sudden force, that I stumbled back until the wall saved my fall. “I had no idea this would… or could happen.”
“You fix this NOW! Until then I’m taking Nick and we’re going to my parent’s.” She grabbed her Cosmo and walked upstairs. “Phil. I can’t go through that again. I just can’t."2008-06-23T01:42:40Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/30348Comment on The Hardest Part II<p>I loved this line as a sort of justification for his actions, considering it’s an evil corporation and all the crud he’s gotten himself into: <em>“I really thought it would be different this time. They’ve unionized and everything.”</em> Great way of getting the family out of the way for the time being.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30348?basename=731932008-06-23T01:42:40Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on The Hardest Part II<p>Very nicely done.</p>
<p>It feels just right to move Angela and Nick to the in-laws for now, maybe to appear later?</p>
<p>Superb entries, both of them.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30348?basename=621112008-05-13T20:06:43ZRidcully Calverthttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_joonComment on The Hardest Part II<p>I agree with you 100%, thanks to this we avoid painting ourselves into a corner by focusing too much on the family side of things.</p>
<p>Angela’s reaction feels very real and Phil seems quite genuine as well.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30348?basename=620342008-05-13T13:23:45ZSteve Fairweatherhttp://ficlets.com/authors/fairweather12Comment on The Hardest Part II<p>I thought telling Angela was the most difficult part of the story up until this point, so it took me two ficlets to do. And I still had to cut it shorter than I wanted. I suppose Phil could follow her up the stairs or something, but that’s for you guys to decide. <br />I think the humor that you guys have been infusing is great, and I felt it would be easier to do if we removed the familial threat, but that’s what collaborations are for.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30348?basename=620102008-05-13T06:30:47ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21