Comments on 'Movements Beyond Human Control'Feeling the churnings of my mind descend to a lower organ, I slipped into the restroom and deposited myself in a stall. My head in my hands, I tried desperately to control my breathing and my bowels. Words echoed through my mind, the accusation of a dying man.
"_You are part of the establishment. You are the man. For generations, people will curse and loathe your bloated existence. Now is the time to break free or be forever damned to association with the waste laid by your generation, your...kind._"
That's when it started, life, the movement and everything. There was really no turning back at that point. One decision, and my life went careening along its inevitable path.
My gut began its own movement, and I had to twirl clumsily inside the stall. Sweat came freely on my forehead despite the coldness of the porcelain I was gripping.
And right there, staring down the still waters of this throne of humiliation, I knew. I knew I wouldn't have had it any other way. Long live the movement.2008-05-16T16:11:45Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/30507Comment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>Great insight and an interesting read! As always, very very awesome! Have a great weekend and thanks for contributing the sequel. I need to read the Stella Star series & see what krazy stuff’s goin’ on there now…. Change of pace…</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=627642008-05-16T16:11:45ZYodaOnCrackhttp://ficlets.com/authors/yodaoncrackComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>Have to side with Blusparrow on this one. Even without the weight of a megalomaniacal corporation on my shoulders, I’ve suffered the same gut wrenching response when accosted by such an awful experience (and just this week even).</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=624842008-05-15T14:45:31Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>Oh please, HighOnPoker and PyroPunk 51 I am sorry to say but you guys are wusses. If you were in situation of the guy in the story you would of done the same. Long live the movement, I like that line. It just puts his decision down firm.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623342008-05-14T21:37:21ZBlusparrowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/blusparrowComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>Odd path for this story to take, but I do find toilet humor to be, uh… humorous. I do think that by not capitalizing The Movement in your final paragraph that you kind of left open the possibility for a sequel that strays wildly from the original with a living, breathing movement escaping its porcelain captor to overthrow the Corporation, Inc.<br />Five stars for the toilet humor.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623332008-05-14T21:33:36ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>Um, that was just sick, in every sense of the word. Definite points for…creativity.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623102008-05-14T19:44:11ZHighOnPokerhttp://ficlets.com/authors/highonpokerComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>I can recall being in the position of having to make the switch from sitting to hovering over a stall toilet, and I gotta admit you captured and described the scene really well. Very nice.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623052008-05-14T19:17:54ZJMSquirehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jmsquireComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>A very human way of responding to the stress of resisting the vile corporation. I love the detail about the accusation of a dying man.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623032008-05-14T19:04:35Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Movements Beyond Human Control<p>The duality of Movement was a bit too much.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30507?basename=623022008-05-14T19:03:42ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunk