Comments on 'Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)'Watching her car fade into the distance I walk around to the back door of the house. Opening the door, I catch a whiff of her perfume and pain swells inside of me. Memories—sudden and forceful—cause me to drop the empty bottle of cognac I had finished while waiting for her to leave.
I walk slowly down the hall to the master bedroom. Glaring at pictures on the wall I know I am no longer in. _All these years I’ve been your ashtray. Not today,_ I think to myself as I push through the bedroom door.
After tying the rope around the ceiling fan and positioning the chair, I write the note for her to find along with my silhouette.
Standing on the chair I count down the hours:
_There's just 5 hours left until you find me dead_
_There's just 4 hours left until you find me dead_
_There's just 3 hours left until you find me dead_
_There's just 2 hours left until you find me dead_
_There's 1 more hour and then you will find me dead_
_There's just..._
I hear her car pull into the drive and kick away the chair.2008-06-02T02:29:39Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/30800Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p> LOVEE THIS !!<br />its sad..<br /> GREAAT JOB .</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=670942008-06-02T02:29:39ZYou Know You Love Mee!http://ficlets.com/authors/user_7963Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>Amazing job. Wonderful job on portraying a deep and dramatic feeling. I agree this definitley deserves to be on the most popular.<br />I will watch the video.=]=]=]=]</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=669422008-06-01T16:59:17ZNissakithttp://ficlets.com/authors/nerissaComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>wow. that’s deep. that is tragic, this does deserve to be on most popular. Amazing job!!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=667802008-05-31T19:55:40ZMore Than Meets The Eyeshttp://ficlets.com/authors/cappygrl95Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>@Blusparrow, thanks. Not sure how it got up here. One day it had like 70 views, then the next it was at like 400. I think it was a glitch in the system or something.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=664802008-05-30T21:16:25ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>Wow! That is very tragic and really good! I am speechless other than that! Congrats on geting most popular!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=664672008-05-30T21:06:23ZBlusparrowhttp://ficlets.com/authors/blusparrowComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>And people say I need help. Nice job on a gruesome ficlet. Welcome to the dark side.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=659842008-05-29T01:45:38ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>very tragic.. the images flash in my mind it is so well written , i’ll check out the video for sure.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=658652008-05-28T20:50:32ZKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>John, I listened and watched the video, and I was surprised!</p>
<p>I actually liked it!</p>
<p>And that ficlet…</p>
<p>It’s great.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=658532008-05-28T20:36:17ZOrangeOreoshttp://ficlets.com/authors/orangeoreosComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>@PyroPunk, thanks for pointing that out. Surprised nobody, including myself, caught that sooner.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=657142008-05-28T12:58:27ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>John it should be “your ashtray” and not “you’re <br />ashtray” <br />Nice one.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=657102008-05-28T07:56:42ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>Thank you all for the kind words. I’m glad you liked it.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=630552008-05-18T05:22:10ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>wow. that was good. i.. i’m at a loss for words honestly.<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=630142008-05-17T22:26:30Z.:band baby:.http://ficlets.com/authors/bandbabyComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>I love it!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=629802008-05-17T19:02:59ZI LOVE FRANK IERO AND WILLIAM BECKETT!!!http://ficlets.com/authors/manic_panicComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>i like the dark and dramatic feel of this. very nice job capturing the emotions. really like it!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=629552008-05-17T13:38:48Z`espressotherapy.http://ficlets.com/authors/emuhleeComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>Sometimes the “not so fun” ones are the most powerful and this is definitely powerful. Dark and dramatic. Painful and complete. Wonderful job! <br />.<br />Also, one of the best made fan videos I’ve seen. Glad it wasn’t a multitude of spliced photos :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=629422008-05-17T10:22:57ZJenuniquehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jenuniqueComment on Pink Cigarette (song lyrics challenge)<p>This is a ficlet I had wanted to write before this challenge, so it’s not exactly what you were looking for. It’s not quite “fun.” I hope you still like it. All of the italics are lyrics from the song “Pink Cigarette” by Mr. Bungle. I’ve always loved this song. It reminds me of a David Lynch movie for some reason.</p>
<p>You can see a fan created video for the song here:<br />http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TwWQYg7aS5o</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/30800?basename=629302008-05-17T05:52:02ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21