The room sparsely furnished, a thin mattress on a makeshift cot sits only inches from an uneven wooden table for one. A metal folding chair, as tilted as the table and slowly rusting away, is pushed to the corner. Cloudy water drips from the kitchenette's sink of scuffed stainless steel. Around rows of saintly icons, dingy walls peek in on the humble scene, the gaunt man kneeling in the middle of the floor. He faces the bed, putting his feet beneath the table. His head is bowed, hiding his sunken eyes in reverent shadow. Shallow breaths ushering forth a whispered prayer shudder through his frail frame. A shirt as pale and worn as his skin clings about him, stuck to skin which is stuck to bone, all damp with the perspiration of a fervent summer day. His hands work around one another, grinding out salvation between bony fingers. The setting sun sends its fingers, _les doigts de Dieu_, through a greasy window. Touched, he smiles. With a smile on cracked lips, he dies and slumps forward to salvation. 2008-06-21T01:51:25Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/30998 <p>Geez, this is good; this was touching, definately felt the heartstrings tighten a bit. I don&#8217;t see how you couldn&#8217;t paint that and hang it in a gallery somewhere. You never have failed to disappoint.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=72598 2008-06-21T01:51:25Z g2 (la pianista irlandesa) http://ficlets.com/authors/spanishpiano701 <p>This was stunning. It conveyed so much in such a small space. It&#8217;s hard to pick a favorite line, but this one comes mighty close: _A shirt as pale and worn as his skin clings about him, stuck to skin which is stuck to bone, all damp with the perspiration of a fervent summer day. _</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=71344 2008-06-17T05:01:10Z Ana Cristina http://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78 <p>Beautiful!</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=67975 2008-06-04T19:02:40Z Jenunique http://ficlets.com/authors/jenunique <p>&#8220;The setting sun sends its fingers&#8230;&#8221;&#8212;amazing. It&#8217;s going to be really, really, tough to top this effort, THX .</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=63560 2008-05-20T06:24:18Z Tad Winslow http://ficlets.com/authors/tjd <p>A shirt as pale and worn as his skin clings about him&lt; imagery is as about as descriptive as can be,always inpressed with your range of writing.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=63459 2008-05-19T22:59:00Z SKermitgorf http://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorf <p>Amazing as always! Can&#8217;t get better imagery than that.<br />LoA</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=63382 2008-05-19T20:23:40Z paper flowers http://ficlets.com/authors/paper_flowers <p> WOW . Gave me goosebumps. I wonder how long it will be before he is found? 23 years?</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=63310 2008-05-19T05:34:31Z PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA) http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunk <p>As many people have stated on your various Ficlets, you write imagery beautifully. This was a wonderfully described scene.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/30998?basename=63285 2008-05-19T01:53:57Z kaellinn18 http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18