Comments on 'HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered'The first long rays of morning sun broke through gaps of curtains, to race across the hotel floor and onto Jo's face. He jerked awake, rapping his head against the wall.
"Fuck!"
A well muscled arm shot up, hand grabbing the back of his head. No damage. _Mother fucker... still alive._ He was nude and cold, still lying in the corner against the wall.
Slowly he got up and stretched. No sign of the horrors that took place last night. Not the suicide attempt, the murder, nothing. _It took care of that._
No one would remember anything. Not the limo driver, the club patrons, the hotel staff, nobody. It would be as if the man simply fell off the face of the earth.
_Poor bastard._ A flood of memories filled Jo's mind. He still smelled him on his skin.
Jo made the shower as hot as he could stand, yet no amount of scrubbing could erase the stains from his soul. No amount of water could cover up his cries. He pounded a fist into the wall, dropped his head against it and sobbed.
_Next time, I'll die for good._2008-06-08T20:32:32Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/33212Comment on HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered<p>A very nice post-mortem for the death scene in the previous one.</p>
<p>I like the guilt in the shower, I found it very believable.</p>
<p>Another good entry, I look forward to the next instalment</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33212?basename=691102008-06-08T20:32:32ZRidcully Calverthttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_joonComment on HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered<p>I like this horror story.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33212?basename=684402008-06-06T06:10:07ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered<p>Thanks Jon… Ficlets are like candy coated, crack cocaine sprinkled, hot buttered popcorn with ice cold beer, LOL !<br />Seriously, this writing stuff in new to me (aside from boring technical writing for work) and I’m on a writer’s high.<br />The horror stuff is different for me too. I more like the hard Sci-fi pieces. Just trying to play with a few styles and push my comfort level.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33212?basename=683512008-06-05T23:43:04ZKevMullinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/kevmullinsComment on HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered<p>Cool stuff, man. Horror’s not my thing, but I’m enjoying the series you have going. You’re really showing a lot of versatility on here, between the Mobius Strip, the 80’s string and this one. Keep going!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33212?basename=683432008-06-05T23:12:05ZJLaughterhttp://ficlets.com/authors/jlaughterComment on HIS Prayers Will Go Unanswered<p>Good follow up. Very nice first line.<br />You used “died” in the last line. Should be “die.” Also, I’d switch to “still lying in the corner.”</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33212?basename=682712008-06-05T19:38:32ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21