Comments on 'Alex in Wonderland - Part 17'How was Krystal going to explain this to her superiors? Her first assignment out of the academy and not only had she lost her targets, but she'd lost her cool too.
On top of that, she had chips and red sauce in places she didn't care to mention and a crowd of onlookers... how embarrassing.
She stood slowly, depressing a button on the cuff of her sleeve. "This is Red Queen to Cheshire Cat... come in Cheshire Cat."
"Cheshire Cat to Red Queen, go ahead."
"We have a situation forming. Looks like it's four _travelers_ instead of one. Three females and a male. The lead female has had training, she might be pro."
"Copy Red Queen."
"There's been an altercation, I've been made. Lost sight of targets. Need clean up."
"Copy clean up. Reacquire targets and stay out of sight. Cheshire Cat out."
_The Mad Hatter is going to be pissed!_ Krystal thought.
"Like, what is your malfunction, psycho?" the waitress said, finally getting up.
"Can it, sister!" Krystal replied as she pushed her back down and walked away.2008-06-06T18:29:50Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/33318Comment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p>Good job of bringing in the code names and moving the story way forward. The addition of another time traveler is great, especially one who seems to be on the lookout for Alex.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=685422008-06-06T18:29:50ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p>Good catch on “require” vs “reacquire” all. BTW , I’m out of space kaellinn. :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=684862008-06-06T13:58:13ZKevMullinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/kevmullinsComment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p>Alice code names. Brilliant. The story is making more sense now! Oh and possibly it should be “reacquire” instead of “Require”</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=684782008-06-06T13:24:25ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p>Some edits: 1) “<em>Reaquire</em> targets and stay out of sight…” 2) I believe the typical insult was “What is your <em>major</em> malfunction,” a la Full Metal Jacket (even though the movie didn’t come out until 1987, but this is Ficlets!). If you’re having space issues, drop something else instead of the major. That is required! I’m loving this series.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=684772008-06-06T13:06:42Zkaellinn18http://ficlets.com/authors/kaellinn18Comment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p>Honestly, the idea to use <em>Alice in Wonderland</em> references never crossed my mind until you brought it up… <em>duh!</em><br />Your turn! :)<br />Can’t wait to see what you do with this.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=684732008-06-06T12:50:35ZKevMullinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/kevmullinsComment on Alex in Wonderland - Part 17<p><sub>whew</sub> Glad you did that. (And I am still laughing!) Love where you took it! Codenames!! Yes, definitely a _wonder_ful touch.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33318?basename=684702008-06-06T12:43:48ZJenuniquehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jenunique