Comments on 'Zombie Proletariats'"We've got to get out of the suburbs," I told my very pregnant wife as I escorted her to the car. Thankfully the vehicle was still in the driveway.
A mob of undead bearded housewives was forming in the cul-de-sac. One of them spotted us and the group began to lumber forward.
"What's causing all these zombies?" asked a worried Nicole.
"The specter of communism," I said grimly. "The only safe place is as far from the city as possible."
We stepped in a wide circle around the inflating corpse of the Zombie Karl Marx that had fallen from the trellis. It was swelling to the size of a small shed and suddenly burst as we passed, like a huge gory water balloon. Sprinkler-drenched chunks of stomach and kidney rained on us from across the lawn.
"When doing yard work on a hot summer day," Nicole observed, "it's important not to get dehydrated." She was always looking out for the hired help.
We got in the car and I threw it in reverse, plowing through the crowd of approaching Zombie Karl Marxes before heading out.2008-06-17T02:24:09Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/33343Comment on Zombie Proletariats<p>I loved <em>the specter of communism</em>.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=713122008-06-17T02:24:09Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>I’ll probably keep it going, I’ve just been on a Ficlets break for a couple days, getting caught up with some other stuff. :-) Keep checking back here!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=699452008-06-11T15:44:35Zuselessnesshttp://ficlets.com/authors/uselessnessComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>The sequels must continue! I’m a little disappointed that there hasn’t been another one in a while. What’s going to happen next?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=697392008-06-10T22:26:39ZHunting Beautyhttp://ficlets.com/authors/missourigirlComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>I agree with THX . It rocked!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=687492008-06-07T13:49:32ZHunting Beautyhttp://ficlets.com/authors/missourigirlComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>Must have worked, cause I thought it plain rocked. Then again, I’m a big, unruly, overactive, pedantic fan of superfluous, rambling, idiosyncratic adjectives.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=686442008-06-06T23:46:30ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Zombie Proletariats<p>There, does that read better?<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=685782008-06-06T19:49:59Zuselessnesshttp://ficlets.com/authors/uselessnessComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>Good points, I forced myself to write those sentences hoping they might add to the humor… but you’re right, they are confusing. I’ll see if I can clean ‘em up. Thanks!<br />LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=685712008-06-06T19:34:22Zuselessnesshttp://ficlets.com/authors/uselessnessComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>I’d agree with John Perkins. I think it has too many adjectives that confuse the reader. I only say that, of course, because I can’t really find any other flaws – so good job.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=685642008-06-06T19:20:51ZStovohobohttp://ficlets.com/authors/stovohoboComment on Zombie Proletariats<p>Another excellent entry to a very surreal series. One note though. The phrase “the inflating corpse of the once-landscaping fallen Zombie Karl Marx,” feels a little forced. I think it’s the “once-landscaping” part that really messes it up for me. Not sure it’s needed.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=685622008-06-06T19:19:11ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Zombie Proletariats<p>awesome series. an allegory it seems..The specter of communism. love well told zombie stories. this is one of the best.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/33343?basename=685222008-06-06T17:33:30ZBernerOberlandhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mercutio1027