Comments on 'Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)'The wind felt great rushing through my hair. My tie flickered wildly over my right shoulder as the wind whipped me. My suit jacket bellowed out behind me, damn close to flying off.
I saw my reflection in the windows. Moving fast. Everybody watching. Poor bastards, stuck inside on a beautiful day like this.
_Almost there!_ I thought. _Finally._
I took another glance back at the reflection and loosened my tie, letting the wind take it.
A smile spread across my face. A pure smile. Not forced. First one in years. I glanced back at my reflection and adjusted my sunglasses.
I heard my cell ringing over the roaring. I pulled it out of my pocket and sent it the way of my tie without even looking at who it was. Who gives a damn anyway?
_Won't be needing it anymore..._
I closed my eyes and enjoyed the rush of the air on my skin. It massaged my face. Felt wonderful...all alone out here.
Everybody watched me me fly.
Free.
I hit the pavement hard. Dead. Sixty-three stories. Gotta go out big. From the roof, baby!2008-07-01T19:19:11Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/35001Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I also thought he was driving with the top down… Great twist!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=753332008-07-01T19:19:11Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>ya.. the lead up to the final smack was awesome.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=743622008-06-27T17:20:42ZALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫http://ficlets.com/authors/alro613Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I was with Ana on this one. I thought he was driving along in a convertible. Could just imagine the goofy grin guys get when the top is down… ;D Then <em> WHAM !</em> (Literally.) Great, magnificent, job!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=729782008-06-22T15:33:18ZJenuniquehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jenuniqueComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I have to agree with JLaughter, even though I saw the ending coming… extremely well written and paced. A great read.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=729662008-06-22T14:59:54ZKevMullinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/kevmullinsComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I kind of guessed, but not until right before the big reveal, but it was still a very well done twist. And the ending was fantastic. Like JM, I loved the last line.<br />Thanks for entering.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=729142008-06-22T06:11:29ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>Great twist, really incredible use of wording too. The last line is a killer, <em>“From the roof, baby!”</em> , almost made me snicker despite the graveness of the suicide.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=728742008-06-22T01:32:18ZJMSquirehttp://ficlets.com/authors/jmsquireComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I bounced from flying, to cruising in a convertible, to falling, not really sure until the end. So gruesome!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=728732008-06-22T01:28:02ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>That was some twist. The story has a cool carefree feel until the end.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=727262008-06-21T12:22:49ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I’ve been watching a lot of superhero cartoons lately, so all along I was picturing a guy just learning how to fly cruising along beside a passenger jet. Decent twist to it, I thought and very well written.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=727212008-06-21T12:07:09ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>don’t let them talk you out of it ben. Death comes to us all but only some men truly fly out of tall buildings.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=727072008-06-21T10:01:47ZMighty-Joe Younghttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_8969Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I did NOT see it coming. I was rooting for the guy, thinking yeah, man, hit the beach. Take a break. Feeling jealous, until the end. <em>Wow…</em></p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=726702008-06-21T05:29:55Z♠Ana Cristina♥http://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78Comment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>I hate to say I saw it coming, but I did. Either way, the wording is fantastic, very surreal and free-spirited.<br />Love this: ”...sent [the phone] the way of my tie without even looking at who it was. Who gives a damn anyway?” <br />I want to enter this challenge, but I’ve been running dry on ideas. Bagman is taking all my brainpower!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=726682008-06-21T05:23:24ZJLaughterhttp://ficlets.com/authors/jlaughterComment on Everybody's Envy (Unexpected Twist Challenge)<p>Before anybody gets concerned…I like my job and this not autobiographical yearning…just a dark idea I had inspired by the Animatrix.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35001?basename=726672008-06-21T05:18:11ZBrowncoatbenhttp://ficlets.com/authors/browncoatben