Comments on 'Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]'When it got to the point that time no longer mattered, there were only two of us left.
There was thirty of us on the first day, just after the tunnel had collapsed, back when we had still had light. Murder and justice had taken the lives of six of us on that day. Searching for a way out had claimed seven in the few days after. The ten who refused to survive off the dead didn't last much longer than a week.
When the last light went out we were down to 7.
Charlie and Hank had passed away while we had all slept, their voices didn't join in the song of waking and we stumbled over their bodies in the darkness. Sam, Jones, and Peter all took their own lives, slicing their throats one by one with the same hatchet, gurgled screams resonating through the tunnels was the last we heard from them.
In the darkness there was just the two of us, the new kid and myself. We were dead, we just refused to admit it. We sat back to back, and we told stories to each other till the calming sleep of death finally took us away.2008-06-22T06:20:27Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/35027Comment on Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]<p>Very cool. Morbidly fun, and a cool twist on the challenge.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35027?basename=729232008-06-22T06:20:27ZJohn Perkinshttp://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21Comment on Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]<p>Yeah deffinately the creepiest tale. How yoy describe each of their demise and the setting.. esp the ending.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35027?basename=728852008-06-22T02:27:00ZSKermitgorfhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kermitgorfComment on Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]<p>In your second to last paragraph, the phrase “there voices” should read “their voices.” <br />This was an excellent read. I loved especially the denial of the last two, refusing to accept that they’ve died. Awesome entry.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35027?basename=727602008-06-21T16:20:31ZAna Cristinahttp://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78Comment on Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]<p>I agree with THX ’s comment. The closing paragraph really was an inventive way of working with ‘dead men tell tales’.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35027?basename=727512008-06-21T14:55:42Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspaceComment on Deep in the mine [The Dead Tell Tales Challenge]<p>Disturbing and chilling situation you’ve set up, and then an excellent twist on the challenge of ‘dead men tell tales’. Really inventive.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35027?basename=727492008-06-21T14:52:19ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477