Comments on 'Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}'_Ring_
Black… Soft velvety black… The daylight fades and the darkness envelopes and smothers me with a cashmere caress. My arms still pulsate with purifying pain but my legs ooze into puddles of foamy sluggishness. The image of my beautiful, creamy bride, her face still tarnished by that black smudge, wobbles and reddens as if seen through burgundy jelly. Gray gravity tugs at me and I surrender to the incessant groping. On the warm floor, between the specks of brown renewal, I curl up into a foetal position, close my exhausted eyes and await sweet, silver salvation.
_Rin…_
The operator picks up the telephone before it can complete a fourth chime: "_Psychic Hotline_ you are speaking to Lynda. Why are you hurting yourself and your bride?"
The voice on the other end is soothing and reassuring: "Miss Arthrope, my name is Allen Foster and I work for _TelePath Incorporated_. We have received word of your um… talent. To make sure, we have created a test, which you just passed. How would you like to work for us?"2008-06-28T09:10:13Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/35105Comment on Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}<p>OK, now that was a very good read – I loved the progression of colour, the twist in each ficlet and this extra meta-twist at the end.</p>
<p>Really a superb entry into the challenge.</p>
<p>LoA</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35105?basename=745922008-06-28T09:10:13ZRidcully Calverthttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_joonComment on Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}<p>If the telepath is sufficiently advanced, maybe not. Thanks for pointing out the error. Corrected and nirvana regained.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35105?basename=732292008-06-23T05:40:42ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}<p>Interesting third installment… One question, if Lynda picked up that he was hurting himself and his bride, couldn’t she also have picked up the intentions behind his test? In the last paragraph there’s a typo. “To make sure, <strong>we</strong> have created a test”</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/35105?basename=730592008-06-22T20:57:54Zthebetweenspacehttp://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspace