Comments on 'The Exit! The Exit!'

Comments on 'The Exit! The Exit!' - Renita- I sat there in the tiny tunnels, staring at the wall. Adventure was racing through my veins, and I wanted to get out. "No, I can't leave... Carlene said it be safe down here..." I told myself...But it wasn't enough. ~ _Does it ever end??_ I thought to myself, still walking down the tunnel. It felt like forever since I left the spot where Carlene and I had stopped. It was hard to manuver in the tunnel, with the ceiling jutting down in different places, and roots criss-crossing the pathway. It was a neverending walk...it was never going to end! Finally the tunnel turned upward, and I could start to see light filtering in. I stoped when the tunnel went straight up, clouds visible through the exit. I looked for foot support, but there was none. I put a paw on the wall, and for some reason it felt like wood, like the inside of a tree... I crouched down, deciding to jump to get out of the tunnel. With a powerfull push, I lunged up out of the hole. Fresh air.....And no ground beneath me! 2008-07-05T04:01:38Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/36259 Comment on The Exit! The Exit! <p>“an neverending” -> “a neverending” <br />“ligh” -> “light” <br />“stoped” -> “stopped” <br />That being said, there is some good descriptive text here, and it sets the mood very well.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36259?basename=76381 2008-07-05T04:01:38Z Robotech_Master http://ficlets.com/authors/robotech