She was seventeen years old the night she watch that man die. Seventeen years of thinking summed up in the hollow vision of a dead junkies eyes. &quot;What are you lookin at?&quot; She told a priest on the bus that had been eyeing her fishnet stocking and the pretty little clasp of garter that was making an appearance out from under the snake skin mini. As the building rushed by she couldn't help but imagine all the things her mom must have hoped she would become. &quot;Stupid bitch you'll never amount to shit.&quot; Rang in her ears as she became a naked nine year old girl, hymen-less crying in her papa's room. The bus stopped and the not so &quot;Pretty Woman&quot; Flo Jo'ed down the sidewalk in stiletto heels, with the mocking still playing till she banged on the door. He handed her the red balloon that would silence her papa, reverse, or at least dilute his prophecy and melt away the unbeautiful from her galaxy. She stood and dropped her clothes on the floor, before turning to the man in the room. &quot;Tell me I am beautiful&quot; 2008-07-12T14:51:55Z http://ficlets.com/feed/story/36639 <p>I forgot to comment last night: <br />I wrote a sequel. Hope it doesn&#8217;t completely suck.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36639?basename=79198 2008-07-12T14:51:55Z RainDance http://ficlets.com/authors/raindance <p>Oh, I really liked this. I feel like I need to sequel. Give me a bit of time to think of something.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36639?basename=79102 2008-07-12T02:54:43Z RainDance http://ficlets.com/authors/raindance <p>Another very <em>real</em> sequel that works on its own but also describes a secondary character and the effects of the event. Terrific final line, for a second I thought the priest was gonna get some.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36639?basename=77787 2008-07-08T22:55:13Z thebetweenspace http://ficlets.com/authors/thebetweenspace <p>i meant to say watch that man die. lol it felt more ike heroin to me than watched. oh my to the gods so know i am a cross between john waters and t monk. if there is destiny let it take me now it must be a good day to die.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36639?basename=77581 2008-07-08T06:16:11Z Mighty-Joe Young http://ficlets.com/authors/user_8969 <p>Nice. I love that you did the same thing I did by taking a secondary character and showing the effects of what happened. It&#8217;s a very truthful series of events.<br />I really enjoy your writing, as you come up with completely off-the-wall stuff that reminds me of one of my high school buddies. And I suppose I could ask you to pay more attention to grammar, but it&#8217;d be like asking Thelonius Monk to stick to the melody. So, five stars for the mood and overall brilliance of the piece, non-conforming as it is.</p> http://ficlets.com/stories/36639?basename=77577 2008-07-08T06:07:38Z John Perkins http://ficlets.com/authors/johnperkins21