Comments on 'The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)'I felt the sweat trickle down my back. It was hot here in the bushes, but my anger was hotter.
Soon I saw them, the pastor and his wife, coming out to their new sauna room. They claimed they won it on a game show, but that was as false as his puritan life.
Soon the steam filled the little box and I approached, unnoticed.
I pictured my daughter's tear streaked face as she used the psychologist's dolls to demonstrate what that _Pastor_ had done to her.
I slammed the door open and evicted them from the sauna at gun point, both in their swimwear. I told them to quietly enter their house.
Once inside, the _Pastor_ tried to talk me down. "You are troubled, Caleb. God knows whatever you're going through, and.."
"Bedroom! Now!"
"Take whatever you want! Shoot us! It's all just things of this world." The wife was well-schooled.
"I'm not going to give you the satisfaction of death, no. Undress, woman! On the bed!"
"What?!"
"An eye for an eye, Pastor. Your sanctity of marriage for my daughter's virginity."2008-08-10T06:05:52Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/37852Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>I gasped at the end of this ficlet. What a bum! The pastor, I mean. This is awesomely written.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=858352008-08-10T06:05:52ZNightMaidenhttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_7538Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>Great last sentence!</p>
<p>Makes you think the father’s the villain at first, but it turns out the pastor isn’t at all what he wants you to think…</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=830442008-07-29T01:11:45ZOrangeOreoshttp://ficlets.com/authors/orangeoreosComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>The pastor sounds like a hypocritical sleazebag. Very well written!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=818972008-07-21T20:04:40ZPyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/pyropunkComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>Very good..<br />I especially like the father’s name: Caleb—very fitting considering the biblical reference here: i don’t know if that was intentional…</p>
<p>for those unfamiliar with that story, Joshua and Caleb, sons of Moses, were told by God that they would enter the Promise Land because they had “wholeheartedly followed God.” They had full faith and belief in God that He could defeat all of their enemies once they went into the Promised Land to conquer and possess it.</p>
<p>Awesome story!!!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=817392008-07-21T13:19:17ZALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫http://ficlets.com/authors/alro613Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>Incredible. I like your villain’s pastor facade. And the form of revenge; quite fitting. Nicely done.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=816652008-07-21T01:06:42ZRainDancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/raindanceComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>Incredible. I like that the villain covers up his life of evil with the whole pastor facade. I liked the form of revenge, too. Nicely done.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=816642008-07-21T01:06:03ZRainDancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/raindanceComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>cause i couldnt say shiaznihg</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=815252008-07-20T09:11:40ZMighty-Joe Younghttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_8969Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>oh my god elsha you have to quit hanging out with me fuct this rocks this is the shot</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=815242008-07-20T08:22:35ZMighty-Joe Younghttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_8969Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>Oh, this doesn’t need a sequel. This is powerful enough for one ficlet.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=815102008-07-20T02:09:37ZAna Cristinahttp://ficlets.com/authors/asimon78Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>sequel? :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=815052008-07-20T01:34:28ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>wow that was very unexpected. I can;t wait to read your sequel.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=815022008-07-20T01:20:00Zxxpinkislife23http://ficlets.com/authors/xxpinkislife23Comment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>hm…Who’s the villain? I only have to believe that it’s the Pastor, because the father has redeeming qualities. A reason. The challenge states that it must be fully evil. So I’m guessing it’s the pastor.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=814982008-07-20T00:57:25ZMask By The Moonhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mbtmComment on The Sanctity of Marriage (Diabolical Villain Challenge)<p>When I first started this, I thought it might have been from the mother’s POV . I just sensed some motherly-instinctive going on. But I think I like it better being the father taking revenge. All in all a tense, well-portrayed story. I’m really hating this pastor.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/37852?basename=814802008-07-20T00:10:24Z[ wall.doll ]http://ficlets.com/authors/mimi_dreams