Comments on 'Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)'I entered the semi-dark red and yellow tent. The smell of popcorn smacked me in the face along with the cheering of hundreds of people. My white and blue sequined leotard was riding up and I pulled it out behind the stands, before walking to the third ring.
I climbed the tall skinny ladder, testing each rung with my slippered foot. The top platform swayed slightly under my weight, but I countered unthinking.
The spotlight suddenly blinded me and I waved to the now invisible crowd. I blinked and suddenly this moment froze. I had seen this before, the man in the red hat, the elephant bowing, the popcorn spilling, but when?
The bar was swinging towards me, I turned to catch it. The moment was gone. I focused, my hand finding the right point just off center. My legs tensed, I jumped and reached to secure my other hand on the bar. Something wasn't right. It slipped.
My body swung to the height of the arc, my stomach now in my toes with the speed. On the downward, I let go. The net winded me, my ribs stinging.2008-08-07T21:09:06Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/38253Comment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>Very well written. I enjoyed the initial impressions of the tent as well.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=851952008-08-07T21:09:06Zkwatzhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kwatzComment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>thanks everybody! Maybe the trapeze artist’s mouth was dry before he leaped?? LOL ! I doubt he would even think of temperature during his act… :) I just ran out of room to add them!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=826302008-07-24T16:59:07ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawkComment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>My favorite part was the combination sensory attack in the beginning with smell and sound combining with a physical sensation effect. Bonus points for three senses in one moment, even if you did leave out two senses, though I hardly think temperature counts as an omission.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=826132008-07-24T14:24:20ZTHX 0477http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477Comment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>i really like it ir remindfs me of the trapese scene in wings of desire</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=825662008-07-24T03:28:15ZMighty-Joe Younghttp://ficlets.com/authors/user_8969Comment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>I really enjoyed reading this, good luck with the challenge. Though I don’t think you need it.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=825432008-07-24T01:09:50ZRainDancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/raindanceComment on Trapeze Artist (Use your senses challenge)<p>I left out taste and temperature, but added in Deja-Vu!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/38253?basename=825182008-07-24T00:44:17ZMistress Elsha Hawkhttp://ficlets.com/authors/mistress_elsha_hawk